Hagure Yuusha no Aesthetica:Volume 7 Chapter 1 - Revision history

50.90.114.241: /* Part 15 */

2015-06-03T12:31:00Z

Part 15

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	She continued to be embraced by Akatsuki for a while.		She continued to be embraced by Akatsuki for a while.

	Chikage had stopped crying, and regained the ~~controll~~ of her breathing. Then slowly looked up.		Chikage had stopped crying, and regained the control of her breathing. Then slowly looked up.

	"But Akatsuki, still ....."		"But Akatsuki, still ....."
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	An unrestrained sweet voice that only a woman could absolutely raise.		An unrestrained sweet voice that only a woman could absolutely raise.

	===Part 16===		===Part 16===

Talmain: /* Part 9 */ grammar and wording

2014-06-29T17:18:02Z

Part 9: grammar and wording

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Talmain: /* Part 8 */

2014-06-29T17:00:54Z

Part 8

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	Akatsuki appearance caused them to break out into laughter.		Akatsuki's appearance caused them to break out into laughter.

	It was a ~~awhile~~ before they were able to change to other topics.		It was a a while before they were able to change to other topics.

	The heavy atmosphere a little while ago ~~disappear~~ without a trace. The small room was now brimming with a bright and festive atmosphere.		The heavy atmosphere a little while ago disappeared without a trace. The small room was now brimming with a bright and festive atmosphere.

	"Hehe......that was really funny."		"Hehe......that was really funny."
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	At the same time Miu said so she pulled on the neckline of her pajamas, gently fanning herself.		At the same time Miu said so she pulled on the neckline of her pajamas, gently fanning herself.

	Maybe she got a little too excited and laughed too much, Miu's body felt hot like she was in an oven. However, it seemed excessive for her body temperature to be this high from just that.		Maybe she got a little too excited and laughed too much, since Miu's body felt hot like she was in an oven. However, it seemed excessive for her body temperature to be this high from just that.

	Moreover.		Moreover.
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	Chikage uncovered the mystery behind the aroma.		Chikage uncovered the mystery behind the aroma.

	"They sell this all over the special autonomous region to help with stress. After all, there are a lot of people who found it painful being summoned to a different world. Furthermore when they get back they are forced to live on the artificial island just adding to their stress. There are so many goodies I obtained for relaxation and stress, some of which also have an added magical effects. This too is one of them."		"They sell this all over the special autonomous region to help with stress. After all, there are a lot of people who found it painful being summoned to a different world. Furthermore when they get back they are forced to live on the artificial island just adding to their stress. There are so many goodies I obtained for relaxation and stress, some of which also have added magical effects. This too is one of them."

	"So ......"		"So ......"

69.115.6.239 at 20:37, 9 June 2014

2014-06-09T20:37:33Z

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Joegargery: /* Part 8 */ some lines were double that were edited then left in - my bad

2014-06-09T06:01:05Z

Part 8: some lines were double that were edited then left in - my bad

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	~~After~~ Akatsuki ~~appeared~~ they ~~laughed for awhile~~.		Akatsuki appearance caused them to break out into laughter.

			It was a awhile before they were able to change to other topics.

	~~Before they changed to other topics~~.		The heavy atmosphere a little while ago disappear without a trace. The small room was now brimming with a bright and festive atmosphere.

			"Hehe......that was really funny."

	~~The heavy atmosphere a little while ago in~~ the ~~room was gone leaving only a festive one~~.		At the same time Miu said so she pulled on the neckline of her pajamas, gently fanning herself.

	~~"Ha ha ha......that was really funny."~~		Maybe she got a little too excited and laughed too much, Miu's body felt hot like she was in an oven. However, it seemed way to excessive for her body temperature to be this high from just that.

	~~At the same time Miu pulled on the neckline of her pajamas, gently fanning herself.~~

	Maybe she got a little too excited and laughed too much, as Miu's body felt ~~slightly~~ hot like she was in ~~the~~ oven. ~~Just from that~~ her body temperature ~~seemed~~ to be ~~too~~ high.

	Moreover.		Moreover.

	...... Strange ...... Why ~~do I~~ feel as though I'm floating? ......		...... Strange ...... Why does it feel as though I'm floating......?

	The excitement must be from all these uplifting feelings.		The excitement must be from all these uplifting feelings.
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	Happy from the bottom of her heart, Listy tightly hugged the uniform handed to her.		Happy from the bottom of her heart, Listy tightly hugged the uniform handed to her.

	~~"Only Ousawa Akatsuki's uniform wasn't given out. Will you be giving his uniform to him? "~~		"After that, all I have to do is hand Ousawa Akatsuki his uniform. Because of special exceptions, he was already given the new model of AD. Can you give him the uniform tomorrow?"

	"After that, all I have to do is hand Ousawa Akatsuki his uniform. Because of special exceptions, he was already given the new model of AD. Can you give ~~it to~~ him tomorrow?"

	"Not a problem.....Thank you Haruka-san."		"Not a problem.....Thank you Haruka-san."
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	"That......"		"That......"

	~~Listy also put together or it was refused with a calm smile when asking it by eyes.~~		When she went to ask if she should put hers away along with the other two, the look in Listy's eyes told her 'don't'! However Listy refused with a gentle smile as she shook her head. Apparently she was very happy to get an uniform, and it seemed like she wanted to embrace it for a while longer.

	When she went to ask if she should put hers away along with the other two, the look in Listy's eyes told her 'don't'! ~~She~~ refused with a gentle smile as she shook her head. Apparently she was very happy to get an AD, and it seemed like she wanted to embrace it for a while.

	So Miu consented with a nod, and returned to where she was sitting again.		So Miu consented with a nod, and returned to where she was sitting again.

Talmain: /* Part 8 */ grammar and wording fixes... a couple of sentences near the end were really confusing...

2014-06-09T04:19:30Z

Part 8: grammar and wording fixes... a couple of sentences near the end were really confusing...

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	Listy also put together or it was refused with a calm smile when asking it by eyes.		Listy also put together or it was refused with a calm smile when asking it by eyes.

	When she went to ask if she should put hers away along with the other two, the look in Listy's eyes told her 'don't'! She refused with a gentle smile as she shook her head. Apparently she was very happy to get an AD, and it seemed ~~likeshe~~ wanted to embrace it for a while.		When she went to ask if she should put hers away along with the other two, the look in Listy's eyes told her 'don't'! She refused with a gentle smile as she shook her head. Apparently she was very happy to get an AD, and it seemed like she wanted to embrace it for a while.

	So Miu consented with a nod, and returned to where she was sitting again.		So Miu consented with a nod, and returned to where she was sitting again.

Talmain: /* Part 8 */ grammar and wording fixes... a couple of sentences near the end were really confusing...

2014-06-09T04:17:01Z

Part 8: grammar and wording fixes... a couple of sentences near the end were really confusing...

Bakapervert: /* Part 10 */

2014-06-06T04:34:40Z

Part 10

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	But, Kuzuha sat straddled on top of her making it impossible for her to run away.		But, Kuzuha sat straddled on top of her making it impossible for her to run away.

	"I just want to recover my height you ~~stoke~~ from me. You had better be good for a little while and stop resisting. If not every time we run into each other, either in school or privately, I'll going to call you "Oppai-san"!"		"I just want to recover my height you stole from me. You had better be good for a little while and stop resisting. If not every time we run into each other, either in school or privately, I'll going to call you "Oppai-san"!"

	"Awful, your going too far to make fun of someone else's body! You absolutely can't call me Oppai-san, otherwise I'm going to cry!"		"Awful, your going too far to make fun of someone else's body! You absolutely can't call me Oppai-san, otherwise I'm going to cry!"
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	The moment Miu began to cried out, suddenly a knock came at the door.		The moment Miu began to cried out, suddenly a knock came at the door.

	"Hey, just a moment ago did someone mention "cry"?		"Hey, just a moment ago did someone mention "cry"?"

	"Uwaaaaa! No, no, nobody said such a thing. You must have got it wrong!"		"Uwaaaaa! No, no, nobody said such a thing. You must have got it wrong!"
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	However, Miu is a bit tipsy herself, and urgently she needs to find a way to shake off . But she doesn't have the power in her hands and feet to push her off. Plus with her chest being rubbed by Kuzuha, left her even more powerless.		However, Miu is a bit tipsy herself, and urgently she needs to find a way to shake off . But she doesn't have the power in her hands and feet to push her off. Plus with her chest being rubbed by Kuzuha, left her even more powerless.

	"Listy-san, Haruka-~~san！~~ Stop staring over there, and come and help me!"		"Listy-san, Haruka-san! Stop staring over there, and come and help me!"

	Listy was still sitting here rocking back and forth, suddenly lifted up her head.		Listy was still sitting here rocking back and forth, suddenly lifted up her head.
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	"My best regards-- Kudzu."		"My best regards-- Kudzu."

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Talmain: /* Part 7 */ wording and grammar fixes (wow this was a long section!)

2014-06-02T04:03:19Z

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Talmain: /* Part 6 */ wording and grammar fixes

2014-06-02T03:26:07Z

Part 6: wording and grammar fixes

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	Akatsuki never attempted to open the door, leaving Listy in the hallway ~~without any~~ underwear on. She ~~was now forced~~ to go back to the room where Chikage and the others were waiting.		Akatsuki never attempted to open the door, leaving Listy in the hallway sans underwear. She had no choice but to go back to the room where Chikage and the others were waiting.

	"Lets go Miu-chan."		"Lets go Miu-chan."
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	"Er, umm......no problem."		"Er, umm......no problem."

	Miu nodded with a solemn expression, ~~she also~~ cleared throat a few times "Ehem".		Miu nodded with a solemn expression, and cleared throat a few times "Ehem".

	"Oh, keep you waiting ~"		"Oh, sorry to keep you waiting ~"

	Regaining her composure Miu ~~had~~ spoke while coming inside.		Regaining her composure, Miu spoke while coming inside.

	"----------"		"----------"
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	"Oh, welcome back. We waited for you guys."		"Oh, welcome back. We waited for you guys."

	Chikage said so while greeting them with a smile. She had on a combination of a camisole and frayed hot pants. This is apparently what Chikage wears when she goes to bed.		Chikage said so while greeting them with a smile. She had on a combination of a camisole and frayed hot pants. This was apparently what Chikage wears when she goes to bed.

	Next to her Kuzuha had on ~~their~~ pajamas, and Haruka had on her JPN Babel uniform next to her.		Next to her Kuzuha had on her pajamas, and Haruka had on her JPN Babel uniform next to her.

	"Did something happen just now? I heard a terrible scream."		"Did something happen just now? I heard a terrible scream."
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	"I think I heard Ousawa Akatsuki's name -- by any chance did that man do something?"		"I think I heard Ousawa Akatsuki's name -- by any chance did that man do something?"

	"No, no, it was nothing....... really ~~its~~ true."		"No, no, it was nothing....... really it's true."

	Miu flailed her hands around as she responded to their questions, trying to attract all their attention to herself.		Miu flailed her hands around as she responded to their questions, trying to attract all of their attention to herself.

	"Look, I got you guys some drinks. Everyone must be thirsty, right?"		"Look, I got you guys some drinks. Everyone must be thirsty, right?"
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	"......"		"......"

	She pretend as nothing ~~has~~ happened as she nonchalantly opened her underwear drawer.		She pretend as if nothing had happened as she nonchalantly opened her underwear drawer.

	After she grabbed a pair of panties she ~~rapidity roll~~ it into a ball, and pushed the drawer closed.		After she grabbed a pair of panties she rapidly rolled it into a ball, and pushed the drawer closed.

	"-- Oh no, I prepared snacks but I forgot to bring the tray up."		"-- Oh no, I prepared snacks but I forgot to bring the tray up."
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	So ......		So ......

	"Oh - that's unfortunate Miu-chan - I can ~~got~~ get it for you - no really - I will do it - I don't mind at all -"		"Oh - that's unfortunate Miu-chan - I can go get it for you - no really - I will do it - I don't mind at all -"

	Listy completed the lines they prepared in one breath without stopping for punctuation. Then she immediately left the room.		Listy completed the lines they prepared in one breath without stopping for punctuation. Then she immediately left the room.

	As soon as the door closed behind her she quickly put on underwear, and sighed after finally being able to relax a little. She then picked up the snack tray they left in the hallway.		As soon as the door closed behind her she quickly put on the newly acquired underwear, and sighed after finally being able to relax a little. She then picked up the snack tray they left in the hallway.

	......One, two, three ......		......One, two, three ......

	To not make it ~~not~~ look unnatural she calculated in her mind how much time it would take to go the first floor, and head back to the room -–		To not make it look unnatural she calculated in her mind how much time it would take to go the first floor, and head back to the room -–

	"Found it. This is it, right Miu-chan?"		"Found it. This is it, right Miu-chan?"
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	.......Whew, I somehow got through it.		.......Whew, I somehow got through it.

	She now clearly felt the softness of the fabric around her legs, but around her butt she didn't have similar feeling. ~~This~~ couldn't ~~put~~ aside ~~this~~ lingering feeling as she her chest tighten.		She now clearly felt the softness of the fabric around her legs, but around her butt she didn't have a similar feeling. She couldn't set aside a lingering feeling as she felt her chest tighten.

	"......Huh?"		"......Huh?"

	~~She suddenly frowned,~~ Chikage ~~next to her quietly~~ remarked. Listy noticed ~~she~~ was looking at the hem of Akatsuki's shirt, ~~that~~ she was wearing instead pajamas, and her new a pair of underwear was partly visible.		Chikage remarked. Listy frowned. She noticed Chikage was looking at the hem of Akatsuki's shirt, which she was wearing instead of pajamas, and that her new pair of underwear was partly visible.

	.......She has really sharp eyes... ...!		.......She has really sharp eyes... ...!
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	"Wow......this is delicious. Is this a new item they have at the convenience store?"		"Wow......this is delicious. Is this a new item they have at the convenience store?"

	Chikage did not mention the change, instead she ~~change to~~ a entirely different topic.		Chikage did not mention the change, instead she talked about a entirely different topic.

	She definitely noticed -- and likely to have imagined many things.		She definitely noticed -- and was likely to have imagined many things.

	Listy was thankful from the bottom of her heart for Chikage's consideration.		Listy was thankful from the bottom of her heart for Chikage's consideration.

	So -- in her heart she ~~hope~~ that these kind of pleasant ~~conversation~~ could go on forever. She thought of how good it would of been if that ~~was~~ possible.		So -- in her heart she hoped that these kind of pleasant conversations could go on forever. She thought of how good it would have been if that were possible.

	"----"		"----"
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	"...... Please listen to me."		"...... Please listen to me."

	A quiet......but yet powerful tone she called out to attract everybody's attention.		In a quiet......but yet powerful tone she called out to attract everybody's attention.

	Waiting until they all focused on her, Listy looked at the three Chikage, Kuzuha, and Haruka.		Waiting until they all focused on her, Listy looked at the three: Chikage, Kuzuha, and Haruka.

	And then asked a question.		And then asked a question.

	"A little while ago, I asked you three something and wanted you to think about when I left the room -- Did all three of you come up with an answer yet?"		"A little while ago, I asked you three something and wanted you to think about when I left the room -- Did all three of you come up with an answer yet?"

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	At the same time Miu pulled on the neckline of her pajamas, gently fanning herself.		At the same time Miu pulled on the neckline of her pajamas, gently fanning herself.

	Maybe she got a little too excited and laughed to much, Miu's body slightly hot like she was in the oven. ~~But just~~ from that her body temperature ~~seems~~ to be too high.		Maybe she got a little too excited and laughed too much, as Miu's body felt slightly hot like she was in the oven. Just from that her body temperature seemed to be too high.

	Moreover.		Moreover.

	...... Strange ...... ~~why~~ do I feel as though I'm floating ......		...... Strange ...... Why do I feel as though I'm floating? ......

	The excitement must be from all these uplifting feelings.		The excitement must be from all these uplifting feelings.
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	Suddenly, a sweet fragrance filled the room.		Suddenly, a sweet fragrance filled the room.

	The phytoncide aroma of flowers settled in the air, ~~in addition it~~ had an exceptionally calming effect on the mind.		The phytoncide aroma of flowers settled in the air, which had an exceptionally calming effect on the mind.

	"Oh, I brought a small bottle of essential oils over today, ~~it's~~ aroma is good for relaxation.		"Oh, I brought a small bottle of essential oils over today, its aroma is good for relaxation.

	Chikage uncovered the mystery behind the aroma.		Chikage uncovered the mystery behind the aroma.

	"They sell this all over the special autonomous region to help with stress. After all, there are a lot of people who ~~that~~ found it painful being summoned to a different world. Furthermore when they get back they forced to live on the artificial island just adding to their stress. There are so many goodies I obtained for relaxation and stress, some of ~~them~~ also have an added effect ~~of magic in it~~. This too is one of them."		"They sell this all over the special autonomous region to help with stress. After all, there are a lot of people who found it painful being summoned to a different world. Furthermore when they get back they are forced to live on the artificial island just adding to their stress. There are so many goodies I obtained for relaxation and stress, some of which also have an added magical effect. This too is one of them."

	"So ......"		"So ......"
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	It was a delightful aroma, but .....		It was a delightful aroma, but .....

	.......~~the room~~ feels like ~~its~~ getting hotter fast......ah.		.......it feels like it's getting hotter fast......ah.

	Miu untied her pajamas first and second ~~button~~ to let the cool air in~~. Then~~ fanned her chest with the slack, pulling it back and forth.		Miu untied her pajamas' first and second buttons to let the cool air in, then fanned her chest with the slack, pulling it back and forth.

	The air came in contact with her flushed body.		The air came in contact with her flushed body.
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	Rather than a feeling like a cooling breeze, it was more like a pleasant tickle.		Rather than a feeling like a cooling breeze, it was more like a pleasant tickle.

	When Miu looked up, she suddenly noticed Listy, Kuzuha, ~~also~~ Haruka were similarly cooling themselves off with their hands or the hems of their pajamas. ~~Out of everyone~~ Haruka's attire ~~gives~~ the impression that she would be ~~particularly hot~~.		When Miu looked up, she suddenly noticed that Listy, Kuzuha, and Haruka were all similarly cooling themselves off with their hands or the hems of their pajamas. Haruka's attire gave the impression that she would be the most uncomfortable.

	"Umm Haruka-san, did you not bring pajamas?"		"Umm Haruka-san, did you not bring pajamas?"
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	"Eh? Amazing......how did you do that?"		"Eh? Amazing......how did you do that?"

	That was the first time Listy saw an AD transform like that, and unable to hide her inner curiosity.		That was the first time Listy saw an AD transform like that, and she was unable to hide her inner curiosity.

	"This is the newly designed school uniform woven from telepathic ~~stones~~ fibers. It functions ~~similar~~ to our ADs, which can ~~materializes~~ our weapons, since they are made out of the same material. Before I was able to transform my uniform or gym clothes to my combat clothes but...... "		"This is the newly designed school uniform woven from telepathic stone fibers. It functions similarly to our ADs, which can materialize our weapons, since they are made out of the same material. Before I was able to transform my uniform or gym clothes to my combat clothes but...... "

	Haruka was explaining the technology of this world.		Haruka was explaining the technology of this world.

	"Depending on the user's personality traits the AD automatically changes into the most appropriate weapon for the user. ~~Applying the~~ function of the uniforms it now is possible to changed into a wide variety of clothing to suit the time and place......"		"Depending on the user's personality traits the AD automatically changes into the most appropriate weapon for the user. By applying this function to the uniforms it now is possible to changed into a wide variety of clothing to suit the time and place......"

	"Oh...... It sounds fairly convenient."		"Oh...... It sounds fairly convenient."
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	Chikage said.		Chikage said.

	"If I remember correctly, at the end of spring break it's time for the new term ~~starts~~. So we should get them then?"		"If I remember correctly, at the end of spring break it will be time for the new term to start. So we should get them then?"

	"That is the schedule. However, today I have brought everyone's new uniforms and AD. Do you want to try it out?"		"That is the schedule. However, today I have brought everyone's new uniforms and ADs. Do you want to try it out?"

	"I appreciate the thought, but......"		"I appreciate the thought, but......"
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	Kuzuha had a somewhat complicated expression.		Kuzuha had a somewhat complicated expression.

	"I was skipped ahead. The uniforms have to be custom-made for my size......I wonder if it will be all right "		"I was skipped ahead. The uniforms have to be custom-made for my size......I wonder if it will be all right."

	"That's not a problem either."		"That's not a problem either."
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	Haruka smiled.		Haruka smiled.

	"Just a moment ago I explained how the new uniform ~~automatic~~ changes to the user's individual characteristics. Of course that also includes size. Probably the only drawback is ~~it's~~ durability. Every time you change the telepathic stone fibers wear down."		"Just a moment ago I explained how the new uniform automatically changes to the user's individual characteristics. Of course that also includes size. Probably the only drawback is its durability. Every time you change the telepathic stone fibers wear down."

	While saying that Haruka took out the sets of the uniforms and ADs from her knapsack.		While saying that Haruka took out the sets of the uniforms and ADs from her knapsack.
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	"Eh.....there's one for me?"		"Eh.....there's one for me?"

	Listy with rounded eyes, ~~surprised~~.		Listy responded with rounded eyes, showing her surprise.

	"Yes. It is only natural...... since from now on, you are going a fellow companion."		"Yes. It is only natural...... since from now on, you are going to be a fellow companion."

	Haruka said with a smile.		Haruka said with a smile.
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	Happy from the bottom of her heart, Listy tightly hugged the uniform handed to her.		Happy from the bottom of her heart, Listy tightly hugged the uniform handed to her.

	"Only Ousawa Akatsuki ~~uniforms didn~~'t ~~walk~~ out. ~~He has made a new AD,~~ you~~'ll~~ be uniform ~~given~~ to him? "		"Only Ousawa Akatsuki's uniform wasn't given out. Will you be giving his uniform to him? "

	"After that, all I have to do is hand Ousawa Akatsuki his uniform. Because special exceptions, he was already given the new model of AD ~~of the new model~~. Can you ~~can~~ give it to him tomorrow?"		"After that, all I have to do is hand Ousawa Akatsuki his uniform. Because of special exceptions, he was already given the new model of AD. Can you give it to him tomorrow?"

	"Not a problem.....Thank you Haruka-san."		"Not a problem.....Thank you Haruka-san."
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	Listy also put together or it was refused with a calm smile when asking it by eyes.		Listy also put together or it was refused with a calm smile when asking it by eyes.

	When she went to ask if she should put hers ~~together also~~, the look in Listy's eyes told her don't! ~~Nevertheless she~~ refused with a gentle smile as she ~~shock~~ her head. Apparently very happy to get ~~one~~, it ~~seems she~~ wanted to embrace it for a while.		When she went to ask if she should put hers away along with the other two, the look in Listy's eyes told her 'don't'! She refused with a gentle smile as she shook her head. Apparently she was very happy to get an AD, and it seemed likeshe wanted to embrace it for a while.

	So Miu consented with a nod, and returned to where she was sitting again.		So Miu consented with a nod, and returned to where she was sitting again.

	===Part 9===		===Part 9===