Hidan no Aria:Volume10 Chapter4 - Revision history

Rxls at 04:23, 28 June 2018

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	== 4th Ammo - Three Roads of Immorality -Three Outs- ==		== 4th Ammo: Three Roads of Immorality -Three Outs- ==

Royaloyalz: Some edits to help improve the flow of sentences, if any are not satisfied with it, please inform me in my talk

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Some edits to help improve the flow of sentences, if any are not satisfied with it, please inform me in my talk

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	"-Onii-chan. Haven't I dutifully kept our promise?"		"-Onii-chan. Haven't I dutifully kept our promise?"

	Right I was about to throw the dolls away, Kaname painstakingly smiled and asked me this.		Right as I was about to throw the dolls away, Kaname painstakingly smiled and asked me this.

	"Hmm?"		"Hmm?"
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	Kaname continued to stare at me, her face not having so much as twitched the entire time.		Kaname continued to stare at me, her face not having so much as twitched the entire time.

	"You know me, I've been quite friendly with my classmates. Haven't killed a one. Don't worry, Onii-chan."		"You know me, I've been quite friendly with my classmates. Haven't killed a single one. Don't worry, Onii-chan."

	"Isn't that obvious?"		"Isn't that obvious?"
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	"I'll always love Onii-chan, and Onii-chan will also love me. Our mutual love will last for all eternity."		"I'll always love Onii-chan, and Onii-chan will also love me. Our mutual love will last for all eternity."

	Her subtle gaze seemed to aimed at the bag with the dolls.		Her subtle gaze seemed to be aimed at the bag with the dolls.

	Laughing lightly, she gently stroked her wounded hand.		Laughing lightly, she gently stroked her wounded hand.
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	"So um, this body part. What if, for example, it were something like hair?"		"So um, this body part. What if, for example, it were something like hair?"

	"Hair? Hmm. Well, for hair like yours, let me. Perhaps imagine it as having grown two extra arms, or maybe wings; that sort of image. The greater your ability to picture it in your mind, the better. A more conventional method might be to look at pictures of an angel or Buddha and practice that way."		"Hair? Hmm. Well, for hair like yours, let me see. Perhaps imagine it as having grown two extra arms, or maybe wings; that sort of image. The greater your ability to picture it in your mind, the better. A more conventional method might be to look at pictures of an angel or Buddha and practice that way."

	"I, I see. In that case, I shouldn't have any problems imagining it. I just need to remember either Riko or Hilda, which should be plenty."		"I, I see. In that case, I shouldn't have any problems imagining it. I just need to remember either Riko or Hilda, which should be plenty."
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	It's not like pranks like these were all that uncommon; I, myself, had done similar things when younger...but still, the sheer number of distortions was definitely out of the ordinary.		It's not like pranks like these were all that uncommon; I, myself, had done similar things when younger...but still, the sheer number of distortions was definitely out of the ordinary.

	Approximately 50 different places had been twisted beyond repair...it was no ordinary mind that responsible for this.		Approximately 50 different places had been twisted beyond repair...it was no ordinary mind that was responsible for this.

	"..."		"..."
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	I knelt down on a single knee, and touched the cement floor.		I knelt down on a single knee, and touched the cement floor.

	The floor was clearly irregular...strike that; rather, the floor itself was, for the most part, as expected, ~~but~~ had clearly ~~had~~ been left scored in places.		The floor was clearly irregular...strike that; rather, the floor itself was, for the most part, as expected, had clearly been left scored in places.

	Though my immediate thought was that some sort of tool had left these scars, I don't think that's the case.		Though my immediate thought was that some sort of tool had left these scars, I don't think that's the case.

Winlex at 07:39, 20 July 2013

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	Taking me, whose mind had flooded completely with white, out of the optional-classes building.		Taking me, whose mind had flooded completely with white, out of the optional-classes building.

			<noinclude>

			==Translator's Notes and References==
	<references />		<references />
	~~<noinclude>~~
	{{Hidan no Aria Nav\|prev=Hidan no Aria:Volume10_Chapter3\|next=Hidan no Aria:Volume10_Chapter5}}		{{Hidan no Aria Nav\|prev=Hidan no Aria:Volume10_Chapter3\|next=Hidan no Aria:Volume10_Chapter5}}
	</noinclude>		</noinclude>

Jazzen at 13:59, 13 July 2013

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	Because of this, she'd quickly become a hated individual. Besides SSR, Sempai had no place to call home, truly a solitary and lonely existence.		Because of this, she'd quickly become a hated individual. Besides SSR, Sempai had no place to call home, truly a solitary and lonely existence.

	"-Then, let's call it a day, Kanzaki. Ever since Tohyama arrived, you've been completely distracted, to the point that I can no longer see a thing. Even if I've been able to grasp your alpha waves using your sigma rhythms as a base, there's no way to recover from that minimal mu curve. Simply put, this is the condition of one who is ~~otherwise~~ pre-occupied." <ref>Did that make not an ounce of sense to you? Good, me ~~either~~.</ref>		"-Then, let's call it a day, Kanzaki. Ever since Tohyama arrived, you've been completely distracted, to the point that I can no longer see a thing. Even if I've been able to grasp your alpha waves using your sigma rhythms as a base, there's no way to recover from that minimal mu curve. Simply put, this is otherwise the condition of one who is pre-occupied." <ref>Did that make not an ounce of sense to you? Good, me neither.</ref>

	"No! That, that... NO! NO WAY!"		"No! That, that... NO! NO WAY!"

Zuruumi: Title

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			== 4th Ammo - Three Roads of Immorality -Three Outs- ==


	After school the following day-		After school the following day-

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	Just the bag itself was terrifying enough, but that didn't stop Kaname from handing it to me, her expression exclaiming "Open it! Open it!"		Just the bag itself was terrifying enough, but that didn't stop Kaname from handing it to me, her expression exclaiming "Open it! Open it!"

	Without any other choice, I ripped the heart sticker sealing the bag closed (which sticker, I should note, also seemed to be handmade), and ''kacha'' ''kacha'' pulled out what was contained within.		Without any other choice, I ripped the heart sticker sealing the bag closed (which the sticker, I should note, also seemed to be handmade), and ''kacha'' ''kacha'' pulled out what was contained within.

	"..."		"..."
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	"I'll always love Onii-chan, and Onii-chan will also love me. Our mutual love will last for all eternity."		"I'll always love Onii-chan, and Onii-chan will also love me. Our mutual love will last for all eternity."

	Her subtle gaze seemed to aimed at bag with the dolls.		Her subtle gaze seemed to aimed at the bag with the dolls.

	Laughing lightly, she gently stroked her wounded hand.		Laughing lightly, she gently stroked her wounded hand.
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	She extended her pale white fingers, resting her hand on Aria's head.		She extended her pale white fingers, resting her hand on Aria's head.

	As if able to see me, Sempai turned those pale blue eyes whose pupils could be clearly seen to face me.		As if able to see me, Sempai turned those pale blue eyes whose pupils could be clearly seen to face me. <!-- from the way this sentence is written it sounds like she was unable to see kinji even when facing him or the other way around-->

	"Uh. I'm a second year, Tohyama, a classmate of Kanzaki Aria over there."		"Uh. I'm a second year, Tohyama, a classmate of Kanzaki Aria over there."
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	Look, you. Would it kill you not to sit in the lotus position with a skirt on?		Look, you. Would it kill you not to sit in the lotus position with a skirt on?

	The scenery underneath that short skirt was thankfully hidden by ~~shadow~~, but if weren't for that backlighting, I'd have already struck out.		The scenery underneath that short skirt was thankfully hidden by shadows, but if weren't for that backlighting, I'd have already struck out.

	"Pay attention. Focus your mind."		"Pay attention. Focus your mind."
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	Here where I stood, below my feet, beneath my shadow, something was strange.		Here where I stood, below my feet, beneath my shadow, something was strange.

	I knelt down on a single ~~need~~, and touched the cement floor.		I knelt down on a single knee, and touched the cement floor.

	The floor was clearly irregular...strike that; rather, the floor itself was, for the most part, as expected, but had clearly had been left scored in places.		The floor was clearly irregular...strike that; rather, the floor itself was, for the most part, as expected, but had clearly had been left scored in places.
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	Hence my desperate attempts to avoid her messages at all costs. Can't you take a hint, Watson?		Hence my desperate attempts to avoid her messages at all costs. Can't you take a hint, Watson?

	What made things worse was the nigh-obsessed attitude she seemed to take towards these things. Ever since she'd realized that I'd been ignoring her messages, she'd tried every method imaginable to stubbornly force me to come. Take this time, for example, where she'd intentionally paired up her invitation with a matter of actual ~~import~~.		What made things worse was the nigh-obsessed attitude she seemed to take towards these things. Ever since she'd realized that I'd been ignoring her messages, she'd tried every method imaginable to stubbornly force me to come. Take this time, for example, where she'd intentionally paired up her invitation with a matter of actual importance.

	In just such a manner, I'd found myself coerced into attending some five, six "rehabilitation" sessions.		In just such a manner, I'd found myself coerced into attending some five, six "rehabilitation" sessions.
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	(On another note...when I look carefully...she really is a girl, isn't she?)		(On another note...when I look carefully...she really is a girl, isn't she?)

	The slender lines of her legs give off a healthy feeling; for them to always be hidden pants really is a shame.		The slender lines of her legs give off a healthy feeling; for them to always be hidden by pants really is a shame.

	"...What do you think you're staring at, Tohyama? Oh wait! No, never mind, it's ok! Look to your heart's content. I am, after all, a girl. There's no way I can allow something this small to throw me off. I know even if you normally don't show it, deep down, you're still fond of me."		"...What do you think you're staring at, Tohyama? Oh wait! No, never mind, it's ok! Look to your heart's content. I am, after all, a girl. There's no way I can allow something this small to throw me off. I know even if you normally don't show it, deep down, you're still fond of me."
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	And then, as if steeling her resolve, she took one final step forward.		And then, as if steeling her resolve, she took one final step forward.

	Finally, her shoes made contact with mines, or rather, could even be said to be slightly atop mine.		Finally, her shoes made contact with mines, or rather, could even be said to be slightly atop of mine.

	"..."		"..."
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	From that warm and gentle smile, belying the terrible misunderstanding that lay behind it, shone the kindness of that heart as wide as the ocean, openly accepting the two who had tasted of the forbidden fruit.		From that warm and gentle smile, belying the terrible misunderstanding that lay behind it, shone the kindness of that heart as wide as the ocean, openly accepting the two who had tasted of the forbidden fruit.

	Not that he was able to ~~complete~~ hide his shock, his fingers trembling.		Not that he was able to completely hide his shock, his fingers trembling.

	Within my mind, I saw Tohyama-ryuou's complete and utter destruction, whom, with nowhere left to retreat, could only bow his head and accept defeat.		Within my mind, I saw Tohyama-ryuou's complete and utter destruction, whom, with nowhere left to retreat, could only bow his head and accept defeat.

Kemm: check http://www.wordreference.com/iten/mezzo and http://www.wordreference.com/iten/meza

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check http://www.wordreference.com/iten/mezzo and http://www.wordreference.com/iten/meza

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	Unlike the sexy, mature ambiance of Riko and Shirayuki, Watson felt more like a young girl...which for some reason, only served to make her seem all the cuter. Consequently,		Unlike the sexy, mature ambiance of Riko and Shirayuki, Watson felt more like a young girl...which for some reason, only served to make her seem all the cuter. Consequently,

	I embraced Watson, having entered into ~~Meza~~ Hysteria-		I embraced Watson, having entered into Mezza Hysteria-

	Which, though mild, was yet indisputably Hysteria Mode.		Which, though mild, was yet indisputably Hysteria Mode.

Hiyono: Updated name for Meza Hysteria.

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Updated name for Meza Hysteria.

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	Unlike the sexy, mature ambiance of Riko and Shirayuki, Watson felt more like a young girl...which for some reason, only served to make her seem all the cuter. Consequently,		Unlike the sexy, mature ambiance of Riko and Shirayuki, Watson felt more like a young girl...which for some reason, only served to make her seem all the cuter. Consequently,

	I embraced Watson, having entered into ~~a mild form of~~ Hysteria ~~Mode~~-		I embraced Watson, having entered into Meza Hysteria-

	Which, though mild, was yet indisputably Hysteria Mode.		Which, though mild, was yet indisputably Hysteria Mode.

Hiyono at 17:29, 15 February 2013

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Hiyono at 05:26, 15 February 2013

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	Attached to the right hand of the Kinji doll is a "Kaname doll".		Attached to the right hand of the Kinji doll is a "Kaname doll".

	The hands of the two dolls are connected by a red string, tying them together, as if to say, "No matter who tries, no matter what happens, nothing will ever separate them". [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Red_string_of_fate]		The hands of the two dolls are connected by a red string, tying them together, as if to say, "No matter who tries, no matter what happens, nothing will ever separate them". <ref>[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Red_string_of_fate Red string of fate]</ref>

	"Onii-chan, do you like it?"		"Onii-chan, do you like it?"
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	And that Aria has just told me...that Kaname might really be my sister.		And that Aria has just told me...that Kaname might really be my sister.

	"With that said, however, the relationship between you and Kana seems different from that of you and Kaname. I'm not quite sure how to explain this clearly, but...if I was to make an analogy, if I were to draw the relationship between you and Kana, you two would be one large and one small version of the same shape, similar, but not identical." [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Similarity_(geometry)]		"With that said, however, the relationship between you and Kana seems different from that of you and Kaname. I'm not quite sure how to explain this clearly, but...if I was to make an analogy, if I were to draw the relationship between you and Kana, you two would be one large and one small version of the same shape, similar, but not identical." <ref>[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Similarity_(geometry) Similarity]</ref>

	Mm...I think I more or less understand.		Mm...I think I more or less understand.
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	It's possible it was because, as rumored, "that kind" of mind was predominant among Butei High students. However, the more likely explanation was simply that, as compared to the "well-rounded" nature preferred among normal students, "excellence in a specific expertise" gave a Butei High student the better chance of becoming a truly top-quality Butei. As a result, placing emphasis where emphasis was due had naturally given rise to the current way of things.		It's possible it was because, as rumored, "that kind" of mind was predominant among Butei High students. However, the more likely explanation was simply that, as compared to the "well-rounded" nature preferred among normal students, "excellence in a specific expertise" gave a Butei High student the better chance of becoming a truly top-quality Butei. As a result, placing emphasis where emphasis was due had naturally given rise to the current way of things.

	This being the case, one who was immersed in the Butei High curriculum for the entirety of their three years became quite the abnormal person, making such training a one-way trip. As an example, take Aria or Reki. While both are top-rated Buteis, put either of them to work in a normal company as OLs [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Office_lady], and they'd surely make a mess of things.		This being the case, one who was immersed in the Butei High curriculum for the entirety of their three years became quite the abnormal person, making such training a one-way trip. As an example, take Aria or Reki. While both are top-rated Buteis, put either of them to work in a normal company as OLs <ref>[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Office_lady Office lady]</ref>, and they'd surely make a mess of things.

	Thus, it was for the sake of growing up as a normal adult that I so desperately wanted to switch schools.		Thus, it was for the sake of growing up as a normal adult that I so desperately wanted to switch schools.
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	In his hands were copper plates used for etching; it seemed he'd been asked by the art teacher to help carry things?		In his hands were copper plates used for etching; it seemed he'd been asked by the art teacher to help carry things?

	Having caught sight of Shiranui, Watson instinctively covered her chest, which, unlike Aria, was only flat by reason of having been bound by a sarashi. [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sarashi]		Having caught sight of Shiranui, Watson instinctively covered her chest, which, unlike Aria, was only flat by reason of having been bound by a sarashi. <ref>[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sarashi Sarashi]</ref>

	With the way she was dressed, a glance was all it would take for anyone to realize that she'd only just put on her clothes, and in a hurry at that.		With the way she was dressed, a glance was all it would take for anyone to realize that she'd only just put on her clothes, and in a hurry at that.

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	Seeing the slivers lying atop the floor, I guessed this to have occurred quite recently.		Seeing the slivers lying atop the floor, I guessed this to have occurred quite recently.

	It probably happened sometime between when Aria and I kissed to when she had left- repeatedly and endlessly gripping - and scoring - the cement with their hands.		It probably happened sometime between when Aria and I kissed and when she had left- repeatedly and endlessly gripping - and scoring - the cement with their hands.

	(Wait...is this writing? Letters, it looks like.)		(Wait...is this writing? Letters, it looks like.)
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	Even if we look at S-ranked Buteis, there are only 712 of them in the entire world.		Even if we look at S-ranked Buteis, there are only 712 of them in the entire world.

	"An S-ranked Butei can singlehandedly deal with a company of soldiers. An R-rank, on the other hand, can fight an entire 'battalion'. If it's small enough, then just one of these individuals could suppress an entire country."<ref>According to Wikipedia, a company consists of anywhere from 80-250 soldiers, whereas a battalion can range from 300-1200.</ref>		"An S-ranked Butei can singlehandedly deal with a company of soldiers. An R-rank, on the other hand, can fight an entire ''battalion''. If it's small enough, then just one of these individuals could suppress an entire country."<ref>According to Wikipedia, a company consists of anywhere from 80-250 soldiers, whereas a battalion can range from 300-1200.</ref>

	"My God. Next time, pass on sharing all the gory details, please. I more or less understand what kind of nightmarish existence GIII is now. This is ridiculous...how can someone like that even exist?"		"My God. Next time, pass on sharing all the gory details, please. I more or less understand what kind of nightmarish existence GIII is now. This is ridiculous...how can someone like that even exist?"
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	"Zero? Is GIII not a success?"		"Zero? Is GIII not a success?"

	"Well, at first he was most definitely considered a success. Even at an institution like Los Alamos, his rate of learning was such that it was only a matter of time before the positions of teacher and student between him and staff had swapped. When it comes to athletic ability, though unofficial, I've heard he's broken countless Olympic records. The clincher is- he did all this while only a teenager."		"Well, at first he was most definitely considered a success. Even at an institution like Los Alamos, his rate of learning was such that it was only a matter of time before the positions of teacher and student between him and the staff had swapped. When it comes to athletic ability, though unofficial, I've heard he's broken countless Olympic records. The clincher is- he did all this while only a teenager."

	"Then isn't that a huge success? He even became the personal bodyguard for the President, an elite among elites."		"Then isn't that a huge success? He even became the personal bodyguard for the President, an elite among elites."
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	"Ahem. The setting for today's 'play' is this: I'm a female club manager, and you're a member of the selfsame club. The scenario as well as the script are recorded in the notebook."		"Ahem. The setting for today's 'play' is this: I'm a female club manager, and you're a member of the selfsame club. The scenario as well as the script are recorded in the notebook."

	"Aren't you going way overboard with this? And please, for the love of God, say the full name -'role play'; 'play' sounds weird."<ref>I probably don't need to explain this, but in case you didn't catch the subtext: They're engaged in role plays, etc. and so Kinji feels there's a sexual connotation to Watson's usage of the term "play".</ref>		"Aren't you going way overboard with this? And please, for the love of God, say the full name - 'role play'; 'play' sounds weird."<ref>I probably don't need to explain this, but in case you didn't catch the subtext: They're engaged in role plays, etc. and so Kinji feels there's a sexual connotation to Watson's usage of the term "play".</ref>

	My protest seemed to go in one ear and out the other.		My protest seemed to go in one ear and out the other.
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	Finally hearing the words I'd been waiting for, I turned my head - as if playing Red Light, Green Light - to see Watson, dressed up like a girl in her sailor uniform.		Finally hearing the words I'd been waiting for, I turned my head - as if playing Red Light, Green Light - to see Watson, dressed up like a girl in her sailor uniform.

	Although, to be accurate, she was a girl to begin with, so the ''real'' "dress-up" is when she pretends to be a normally. Sadly, the opposite impression seems well engraved into my mind.		Although, to be accurate, she was a girl to begin with, so the ''real'' "dress-up" is when she pretends to be a guy normally. Sadly, the opposite impression seems well engraved into my mind.

	(On another note...when I look carefully...she really is a girl, isn't she?)		(On another note...when I look carefully...she really is a girl, isn't she?)