Horizon:Kimitoasamade 1A Chapter 1 - Revision history

86.52.29.66: Fixed one or two typos. Still unsure if line 575 was edited correctly.

2015-12-09T23:30:53Z

Fixed one or two typos. Still unsure if line 575 was edited correctly.

← Older revision		Revision as of 23:30, 9 December 2015
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	“C-c-c-c-cal-cal-cal-calm d-d-d-d-dow-dow-dow-down!”		“C-c-c-c-cal-cal-cal-calm d-d-d-d-dow-dow-dow-down!”

	“I don’t think I’ve ever ~~hear~~ someone so flustered! …Oh, no! I tore my tights! Look!”		“I don’t think I’ve ever heard someone so flustered! …Oh, no! I tore my tights! Look!”

	“Are you ''trying'' to fill us with impure thoughts!?”		“Are you ''trying'' to fill us with impure thoughts!?”
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	“Heh heh heh. This is only a sword manifestation being distracted by a wolf. No matter how powerful it is, it’s simple at the most basic level. And if you want to swing all those swords around so much, stop trying to fuck the empty air see how it feels for yourself!”		“Heh heh heh. This is only a sword manifestation being distracted by a wolf. No matter how powerful it is, it’s simple at the most basic level. And if you want to swing all those swords around so much, stop trying to fuck the empty air, see how it feels for yourself!”

	Kimi laughed.		Kimi laughed.

205.197.242.174: Typo and tried to make truly's placement less awkward

2015-12-08T01:12:58Z

Typo and tried to make truly's placement less awkward

← Older revision		Revision as of 01:12, 8 December 2015
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	It was flying, but…		It was flying, but…

	“How foolish. You’re just an adorable little child. You were only just born and ~~known~~ nothing of the world.”		“How foolish. You’re just an adorable little child. You were only just born and know nothing of the world.”

	As she danced, Kimi spun around and dodged every last one of the wind swords, causing those blades to collide with each other.		As she danced, Kimi spun around and dodged every last one of the wind swords, causing those blades to collide with each other.
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	“—————!!”		“—————!!”

	Wind appeared in ~~truly~~ every direction and swept across the deck.		Wind truly appeared in every direction and swept across the deck.

Js06: Created page with "==Chapter 1: High Altitude Performer== thumb ''The wind blows ''As they simply remain together ''Without gathering '''Point Allocation (Ons..."

2015-12-06T00:49:13Z

Created page with "==Chapter 1: High Altitude Performer== thumb ''The wind blows ''As they simply remain together ''Without gathering '''Point Allocation (Ons..."

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