Horizon:Volume 1 Prologue - Revision history

Muton at 01:54, 13 February 2015

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	She stared out towards Shinagawa.		She stared out towards Shinagawa.

	Though she remained silent and unmoving, things moved around her. It was an armada of deck cleaning equipment, made up of mops and brushes. Though no-one was holding these tools, they moved by themselves scrubbing away at the deck.		Though she remained silent and unmoving, things moved around her. It was an armada of deck cleaning equipment, made up of mops and brushes. Though no one was holding these tools, they moved by themselves scrubbing away at the deck.

	“Have you been cleaning all day? That must’ve been hard work. Also, is it really alright if you aren’t on the bridge?”		“Have you been cleaning all day? That must’ve been hard work. Also, is it really alright if you aren’t on the bridge?”

Muton at 20:13, 12 February 2015

2015-02-12T20:13:08Z

Muton: Combining and shifting edits.

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Combining and shifting edits.

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Txtracer at 09:10, 6 December 2014

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	In response, Toori crooked his neck to the side and turned to face Oriotorai with a smile.		In response, Toori crooked his neck to the side and turned to face Oriotorai with a smile.

	“Huh? Sensei, what’s wrong? That’s one hell of a face you’re making. Was there something that happened which you don’t like? ...Ahh, I get it, Sensei was lectured in a reprimanding manner by the President or the King for eating with a force as if getting married to the beef without even talking to anyone when we went to the barbecue shop at the end of the spring holiday, right? You can’t do that, Sensei. Flipping fried ~~things　with~~ your chopsticks and shoving them directly into your mouth isn’t what karuta’s about. At least add some salt. Also, don’t eat such a mountain of cake for dessert; try vegetables once in a while.”		“Huh? Sensei, what’s wrong? That’s one hell of a face you’re making. Was there something that happened which you don’t like? ...Ahh, I get it, Sensei was lectured in a reprimanding manner by the President or the King for eating with a force as if getting married to the beef without even talking to anyone when we went to the barbecue shop at the end of the spring holiday, right? You can’t do that, Sensei. Flipping fried things with your chopsticks and shoving them directly into your mouth isn’t what karuta’s about. At least add some salt. Also, don’t eat such a mountain of cake for dessert; try vegetables once in a while.”

	Everyone reared back, preparing to evade the coming mayhem. Standing in front of them, Oriotorai spoke.		Everyone reared back, preparing to evade the coming mayhem. Standing in front of them, Oriotorai spoke.

Txtracer: final batch this pass

2014-12-06T09:01:39Z

final batch this pass

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Txtracer: a couple of rewordings

2014-12-06T08:00:36Z

a couple of rewordings

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	“Then, who from our class should be the pitcher side? ...But well, being technohexen and of an irregular race like you and Nai-chan, going outside is more troublesome. Nai-chan thinks that they’re also doing their work.		“Then, who from our class should be the pitcher side? ...But well, being technohexen and of an irregular race like you and Nai-chan, going outside is more troublesome. Nai-chan thinks that they’re also doing their work.

	"Masa-yan said it was pretty terrible. These Gods of War are one of the models of Tres’ brand ‘San Mercado’, but their ~~techniques~~ are ~~too naive~~ so the Drive threads are of K.P.A. ~~Italia~~ make. All they have is their pride, so they’re stuck guarding most of Musashi’s circuit of the eastern countries. Tres España are going bankrupt.”		"Masa-yan said it was pretty terrible. These Gods of War are one of the models of Tres’ brand ‘San Mercado’, but their technological skills are lacking so the Drive threads are of K.P.A. Italian make. All they have is their pride, so they’re stuck guarding most of Musashi’s circuit of the eastern countries. Tres España are going bankrupt.”

	“‘San Mercado’...A lot of their parts are really aggressive and primitive, from the Reconquista times. That’s why they’re in this situation. It’s being said that K.P.A. Italia’s Pope-Chancellor was going to come all the way here to have Mikawa make a new Logismoi Oplo. Things must be heating up at the border between Mikawa and P.A. Oda, since Mikawa has a connection with that nation which has half-seceded from the Testament Union.“		“‘San Mercado’...A lot of their parts are really aggressive and primitive, from the Reconquista times. That’s why they’re in this situation. It’s being said that K.P.A. Italia’s Pope-Chancellor was going to come all the way here to have Mikawa make a new Logismoi Oplo. Things must be heating up at the border between Mikawa and P.A. Oda, since Mikawa has a connection with that nation which has half-seceded from the Testament Union.“
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	“Logismoi Oplo?” Naito muttered softly. Seeing her look downwards, Naruze said this:		“Logismoi Oplo?” Naito muttered softly. Seeing her look downwards, Naruze said this:

	“It’s a type of Divine Armament. They’re city-destruction class personal-armaments. There are eight armaments that take the ~~records~~ of the seven deadly sins as their motifs. In the shadows, their wielders are called the ‘Eight Dragon Kings’. Ten years ago when Mikawa made a formal alliance with P.A. Oda, they were distributed amongst the countries affiliated with the Testament other than P.A. Oda, so Mikawa could show that they had no intention of rebelling against the Testament Union.		“It’s a type of Divine Armament. They’re city-destruction class personal armaments. There are eight armaments that take the historical concepts of the seven deadly sins as their motifs. In the shadows, their wielders are called the ‘Eight Dragon Kings’. Ten years ago when Mikawa made a formal alliance with P.A. Oda, they were distributed amongst the countries affiliated with the Testament other than P.A. Oda so Mikawa could show that they had no intention of rebelling against the Testament Union.

	“...I wonder what the real situation is. The raw materials for the construction of the Logismoi Oplo are, like the rumours say, probably a human’s—”		“...I wonder what the real situation is. The raw materials for the construction of the Logismoi Oplo are, like the rumours say, probably a human’s—”

Txtracer: Margot and Naruze’s attack, Sakai and Musashi’s chat

2014-12-02T07:58:23Z

Margot and Naruze’s attack, Sakai and Musashi’s chat

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Txtracer: Tomo's attack through crossing from Tama

2014-12-01T06:17:04Z

Tomo's attack through crossing from Tama

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Txtracer: up to Tomo's turn to attack

2014-11-29T07:25:00Z

up to Tomo's turn to attack

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Txtracer: next batch

2014-11-24T06:01:18Z

next batch

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	But in the center of the town a store stayed open, utterly still in this bustle of activity.		But in the center of the town a store stayed open, utterly still in this bustle of activity.

	It was a ~~cafe~~ on the second starboard ship, tucked into an alley near the center-point of Tama’s surface.		It was a café on the second starboard ship, tucked into an alley near the center-point of Tama’s surface.

	Two signs were set up in front of the bakery. One had the words “shopkeeper making a delivery”, and the other had the words “open for business”.		Two signs were set up in front of the bakery. One had the words “shopkeeper making a delivery”, and the other had the words “open for business”.
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	“Aerial-use models that don’t have feet. Just like the battle-hungry Tres España. Even though we don’t even think about trying to leave Musashi, they’re showing us how much their fingers’re itching for the trigger…it’s the worst. I wonder if I’ll do some research on the pilots and have them star in our school’s Manga Research Club’s homo-manga. Tres España’ll always be the receiver…!”		“Aerial-use models that don’t have feet. Just like the battle-hungry Tres España. Even though we don’t even think about trying to leave Musashi, they’re showing us how much their fingers’re itching for the trigger…it’s the worst. I wonder if I’ll do some research on the pilots and have them star in our school’s Manga Research Club’s homo-manga. Tres España’ll always be the receiver…!”

	“Then, who from our class should be the pitcher side? …But well, being ~~technohexen~~ and of an irregular race like you and Nai-chan, going outside is more troublesome. Nai-chan thinks that they’re also doing their work.		“Then, who from our class should be the pitcher side? …But well, being Technohexen and of an irregular race like you and Nai-chan, going outside is more troublesome. Nai-chan thinks that they’re also doing their work.

	“Masa-yan said it was pretty terrible. These gods of war are one of the models of Tres’ brand ‘San Mercado’, but their technological skills are lacking so the drive threads are K.P.A. Italian made. All they have is their pride, so they’re stuck guarding most of Musashi’s circuit of the eastern countries. Tres España are going bankrupt.”		“Masa-yan said it was pretty terrible. These gods of war are one of the models of Tres’ brand ‘San Mercado’, but their technological skills are lacking so the drive threads are K.P.A. Italian made. All they have is their pride, so they’re stuck guarding most of Musashi’s circuit of the eastern countries. Tres España are going bankrupt.”
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	“Hey…! Don’t make so much noise and hurt the ship…!”		“Hey…! Don’t make so much noise and hurt the ship…!”

	~~“Gacchan~~, Taizou-chan from engineering is being simply unreasonable.”		“Ga-chan, Taizou-chan from engineering is being simply unreasonable.”

	“Your tendency to just give up is simply splendid, Naito. You couldn’t care less about the threats from the higher up.”		“Your tendency to just give up is simply splendid, Naito. You couldn’t care less about the threats from the higher up.”
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	That was where the white haired automaton, P-01s, stood.		That was where the white haired automaton, P-01s, stood.

	She was wearing the ~~cafe’s~~ apron, controlling two brooms with gravity control so as to clean the storefront. She nodded her head towards the female shopkeeper’s calls which came from within the shop; but her eyes were distant, looking towards Shinagawa.		She was wearing the café’s apron, controlling two brooms with gravity control so as to clean the storefront. She nodded her head towards the female shopkeeper’s calls which came from within the shop; but her eyes were distant, looking towards Shinagawa.

	“Waaah,” a group of desperate battle-cries could be heard from the direction P-01s was facing.		“Waaah,” a group of desperate battle-cries could be heard from the direction P-01s was facing.

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	The din continued to move, and from the point of view of the watchmen, who kept watch for danger from every ship, the source of the sound was traveling from the starboard of Okutama to the second starboard ship — Tama.		The din continued to move, and from the point of view of the watchmen, who kept watch for danger from every ship, the source of the sound was traveling from the starboard of Okutama to the second starboard ship — Tama.

	Because of this, the residents of the deck on the port-side heaved a sigh of relief and started to prepare for the afternoon’s work, and the residents of the third starboard ship — Takao gave three cheers from the front edge of the deck, where they could be seen by the people of the second starboard ship — Tama.		Because of this, the residents of the deck on the port side heaved a sigh of relief and started to prepare for the afternoon’s work; and the residents of the third starboard ship — Takao — gave three cheers from the front edge of the deck where they could be seen by the people of the second starboard ship — Tama.

	Seeing this, Tama’s residents were firing curse and attack spells, attempting to hit the people shouting ‘Banzai!’ on Takao.		Seeing this, Tama’s residents were firing curse and attack spells attempting to hit the people shouting ‘Banzai!’ on Takao.

	“We’re screwed!”		“We’re screwed!”

	With these simple thoughts in mind, the shopkeepers boarded up the entrances to their stores, closing the shutters in an effort to protect the shops. Depending on the shop in question, there were some protective barriers that had been erected using an spell.		With these simple thoughts in mind the shopkeepers boarded up the entrances to their stores, closing the shutters in an effort to protect the shops. Depending on the shop in question, there were some protective barriers that had been erected using a spell.

	Though all this was going on, a section of the shopping district remained open.		Though all this was going on, a section of the shopping district remained open.
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	“Well, we played around like this too. In fact, so did the generation before us. If this continues to happen, it’ll be Musashi’s prided tradition!”		“Well, we played around like this too. In fact, so did the generation before us. If this continues to happen, it’ll be Musashi’s prided tradition!”

	Thinking this, the shopowners gathered. They hid their invoices away in the darkest ~~corner~~ of the deepest ~~counter~~, dealing with the coming problems by running away.		Thinking this, the shopowners gathered. They hid their invoices away in the darkest corners of the deepest counters, dealing with the coming problems by running away.

	Having done this, they started to gamble. They were betting on the winner of the day’s lesson.		Having done this, they started to gamble. They were betting on the winner of the day’s lesson.
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	“...Even so, that teacher is apocalyptically strong in athletics. She’s a tester for IZUMO, isn’t she?”		“...Even so, that teacher is apocalyptically strong in athletics. She’s a tester for IZUMO, isn’t she?”

	“Jud, and also, they’re without a vice-chancellor of the chancellor’s officers, so they’re missing a spearhead to their attacks.”		“Jud, and also they’re without a vice-chancellor of the chancellor’s officers so they’re missing a spearhead to their attacks.”

	“Putting that aside, think about how all the all-on-~~one’sve~~ gone. They haven’t been able to hit her. Not even once. Well... they almost got her last round... that was just a shame.”		“Putting that aside, think about how all the all-on-one’s have gone. They haven’t been able to hit her. Not even once. Well... they almost got her last round... that was just a shame.”

	‘Mmmm,’ the shopkeepers mumbled. As the source of the tumult continued its approach from Okutama, each of them wrote their choice on a piece of note paper and handed it to the bookkeeper.		‘Mmmm,’ the shopkeepers mumbled. As the source of the tumult continued its approach from Okutama, each of them wrote their choice on a piece of note paper and handed it to the bookkeeper.
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	Many gatherings of that kind had sprung to life within the town.		Many gatherings of that kind had sprung to life within the town.

	But in the centre of the town, a store stayed open, utterly still in this bustle of activity.		But in the centre of the town a store stayed open, utterly still in this bustle of activity.

	A cafe on the second starboard ship, tucked into an alley near the centre-point of Tama’s surface.		It was a cafe on the second starboard ship, tucked into an alley near the centre-point of Tama’s surface.

	Two signs were set up in front of the bakery. One ~~with~~ the words ‘shopkeeper making a delivery’, and the other ~~with~~ the words ‘open for business’.		Two signs were set up in front of the bakery. One had the words ‘shopkeeper making a delivery’, and the other had the words ‘open for business’.

	Another sign hung above the door. A sign painted with the name, ‘Blue Thunder’.		Another sign hung above the door: A sign painted with the name, ‘Blue Thunder’.

	There were no customers in the shop, but a silhouette stood behind the counter. This silhouette faced the street, her gaze forming a perpendicular angle with the lines of the road.		There were no customers in the shop, but a silhouette stood behind the counter. This silhouette faced the street, her gaze forming a perpendicular angle with the lines of the road.
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	~~Across~~ the counter of “Blue Thunder”, the female automaton stood there in an apron, her head lowered slightly. She placed ~~the~~ baked bread upon the shelf behind her; she didn’t spare the road a glance.		Behind the counter of “Blue Thunder” the female automaton stood there in an apron, with her head lowered slightly. She placed baked bread upon the shelf behind her; she didn’t spare the road a glance.

	However, her face suddenly turned towards the back of the store. An oven used for baking bread stood there, and above it a kitchen counter, which held a stove that used the excess heat		However, her face suddenly turned towards the back of the store. An oven used for baking bread stood there, and above it a kitchen counter which held a stove that used the excess heat.

	The automaton moved her gaze towards the kitchen counter and the cooking equipment next to it.		The automaton moved her gaze towards the kitchen counter and the cooking equipment next to it.