Kamisama no Memochou:Volume 2 Chapter 1 - Revision history

Blind at 18:27, 29 October 2014

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	When I was supporting the door, the woman walked into the room and took out a coffee colored paper bag.		When I was supporting the door, the woman walked into the room and took out a coffee colored paper bag.

	“You can it this directly, but it’s even better after you heat it.”		“You can eat this directly, but it’s even better after you heat it.”

	With my brain in a muddle, the paper bag was stuffed roughly into my hands.		With my brain in a muddle, the paper bag was stuffed roughly into my hands.

Sab at 23:13, 16 September 2012

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	Meo shook her head frantically.		Meo shook her head frantically.

	“That’s true! The company ~~isnt’~~ big, and you even live in the same area as the people who left home to look for a living.”		“That’s true! The company isn't big, and you even live in the same area as the people who left home to look for a living.”

	“I think it’s the money of their company?”		“I think it’s the money of their company?”

Grrarr: /* Chapter 1 */

2012-04-07T18:11:34Z

Chapter 1

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	“There’s no difference, since we’re so free right now. But you’re fired if you’re not back by seven!”		“There’s no difference, since we’re so free right now. But you’re fired if you’re not back by seven!”

	Hiro ~~borrowed~~ me a jacket and a pair of cool glasses before I set off. Perhaps those have been given to him by his ex-girlfriend at that building?		Hiro lent me a jacket and a pair of cool glasses before I set off. Perhaps those have been given to him by his ex-girlfriend at that building?

	As I was about to bring my bike from the alley to the main road, I faintly heard the conversation between Min-san and Meo from the shop”		As I was about to bring my bike from the alley to the main road, I faintly heard the conversation between Min-san and Meo from the shop”

Noskillatall: grammar, tense fixes, etc

2012-03-28T08:09:03Z

grammar, tense fixes, etc

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Noskillatall: Improved grammar and flow. Mostly tense fixes.

2012-03-28T07:28:47Z

Improved grammar and flow. Mostly tense fixes.

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	One day in the spring holidays, a client suddenly appeared at the NEET Detective Agency, an odd Thai girl who was always unusually excited.		One day in the spring holidays, a client suddenly appeared at the NEET Detective Agency, an odd Thai girl who was always unusually excited.

	~~In the~~ bag that her father left behind after disappearing~~, it~~ was filled with a hefty sum of money— two hundred million yen.		The bag that her father left behind after disappearing was filled with a hefty sum of money— two hundred million yen.

	The girl’s request was— “Please save my dad.”		The girl’s request was— “Please save my dad.”

	The young NEET detective, Alice, who wore pajamas and wouldn’t take a step out of her room and me as her assistant, borrowed the power of Tetsu-senpai, Major and Hiro of the NEET Detective Squad to start our investigation. Even the leader of the juvenile delinquents, Yondaime was dragged into it, the matter developed into an unexpected direction—		The young NEET detective, Alice, who wore pajamas and wouldn’t take a step out of her room and I, as her assistant, borrowed the power of Tetsu-senpai, Major and Hiro of the NEET Detective Squad to start our investigation. Even the leader of the juvenile delinquents, Yondaime was dragged into it, the matter developed into an unexpected direction—

	This is the second episode youthful NEET- Teen Story that was somewhat unbearable, somewhat funny but also with a hint of courage.		This is the second episode youthful NEET- Teen Story that was somewhat unbearable, somewhat funny but also with a hint of courage.
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	She’s a hikikomori that almost never went out, so her way of ordering people around is quite impolite.		She’s a hikikomori that almost never went out, so her way of ordering people around is quite impolite.

	She thinks that a detective’s assistant (me) is just a useful vacuum machine that ~~could~~ talk.		She thinks that a detective’s assistant (me) is just a useful vacuum machine that can talk.

	Being physically weak, can’t live by herself but is good at arguing, whenever I complain even a bit, she ~~would~~ immediately ~~give~~ me a five thousand times scolding.		Being physically weak, she can’t live by herself but she is good at arguing; whenever I complain even a bit, she immediately gives me a five thousand times scolding.

	Really, why must I do things for this fellow?		Really, why must I do things for this fellow?
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	Surrounding Alice’s side, the group of people at the boundary of society who would not lose to Alice.		Surrounding Alice’s side, the group of people at the boundary of society who would not lose to Alice.

	No matter what difficulties they ~~encounter~~, they still wouldn’t give up, wouldn’t turn back and wouldn’t work, those are their principles. Sigh~ I really can’t stand this.		No matter what difficulties they encountered, they still wouldn’t give up, wouldn’t turn back and wouldn’t work; those are their principles. Sigh~ I really can’t stand this.

	''Tetsu-senpai''		''Tetsu-senpai''
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	He studied at my school a few years ago and dropped out, and is now an unbeatable pachinko master.		He studied at my school a few years ago and dropped out, and is now an unbeatable pachinko master.

	He learned boxing before, has acute vision like a superman, but it ~~was~~ only ~~used~~ used to bet on slot machines.		He learned boxing before and has acute vision like a superman but it is only used to bet on slot machines.

	Although he’s quite reliable sometimes, his view of money is absolutely terrible.		Although he’s quite reliable sometimes, his view of money is absolutely terrible.
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	Although he looked like that, he is definitely a university student, and an unbelievable military otaku.		Although he looked like that, he is definitely a university student, and an unbelievable military otaku.

	~~Having~~ programming skills that even university professors admire, but it ~~was~~ only used on wire tapping and taking photos secretly.		Has programming skills that even university professors admire, but it is only used on wire tapping and taking photos secretly.

	''Hiro''		''Hiro''
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	Though he is often mistaken as a model, he’s actually just a gigolo who stays at women’s houses.		Though he is often mistaken as a model, he’s actually just a gigolo who stays at women’s houses.

	~~Having~~ an appearance that ~~made~~ people want to look twice at him and speaking skills that are like mellow wine, but they ~~were~~ only used to hit on girls.		Has an appearance that makes people want to look twice at him and speaking skills that are like mellow wine, but they are only used to hit on girls.

	He made many women cry for him before, and really might be stabbed somewhere some day.		He made many women cry for him before, and really might be stabbed somewhere some day.
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	He’s very foul-mouthed and impatient, but I’ve heard that he’s very good at taking care of people, even better than the guys in the detective squad.		He’s very foul-mouthed and impatient, but I’ve heard that he’s very good at taking care of people, even better than the guys in the detective squad.

	His hobby is sewing, and he has a professional-level skill. I might be killed by him if I accidentally said that out, so I dare not mention it to anyone.		His hobby is sewing, and he has professional-level skill. I might be killed by him if I accidentally said that out, so I dare not mention it to anyone.

	''Meo''		''Meo''

Pmt7ar: I think the jacket' summary and the characters intro should be outside main text. Chapter 1 starts just after the quote each volume.

2012-01-06T21:57:07Z

I think the jacket' summary and the characters intro should be outside main text. Chapter 1 starts just after the quote each volume.

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	~~==Chapter 1==~~
	One day in the spring holidays, a client suddenly appeared at the NEET Detective Agency, an odd Thai girl who was always unusually excited.		One day in the spring holidays, a client suddenly appeared at the NEET Detective Agency, an odd Thai girl who was always unusually excited.

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	Developing towards an unexpected, heartbreaking darkness.		Developing towards an unexpected, heartbreaking darkness.

	~~Miracles can happen once to anyone, but when it happens, they never notice.~~

	~~<My Name Is Shingo> Kazuo Umezo.~~

	~~<span style=~~"~~font-size: 300%;~~"~~><center>*</center></span>~~

			Miracles can happen once to anyone, but when it happens, they never notice.
			*from "My Name Is Shingo" by Kazuo Umezo.

			==Chapter 1==

	A small portion of people misunderstood that the twenty third district of Tokyo is just a city full of buildings from north to south, and I was one of them before I moved here. In reality, the only place where there are skyscrapers piercing the skies is only the area near to the station, while flat, short houses surround the place. The asphalt road that was uneven because of the subsidence of the land, the smelly rivers that were emitting a pungent, sour odor, and the cultivated fields that I’m not sure if anyone is tending to it and the high school that I’m going to, all of these are in a two kilometers radius of that area; but it was just separated by a street, the radiance of the neon lights couldn’t be seen anymore.		A small portion of people misunderstood that the twenty third district of Tokyo is just a city full of buildings from north to south, and I was one of them before I moved here. In reality, the only place where there are skyscrapers piercing the skies is only the area near to the station, while flat, short houses surround the place. The asphalt road that was uneven because of the subsidence of the land, the smelly rivers that were emitting a pungent, sour odor, and the cultivated fields that I’m not sure if anyone is tending to it and the high school that I’m going to, all of these are in a two kilometers radius of that area; but it was just separated by a street, the radiance of the neon lights couldn’t be seen anymore.

Zephyrus at 07:56, 5 January 2012

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			==Chapter 1==
	One day in the spring holidays, a client suddenly appeared at the NEET Detective Agency, an odd Thai girl who was always unusually excited.		One day in the spring holidays, a client suddenly appeared at the NEET Detective Agency, an odd Thai girl who was always unusually excited.

Zephyrus: Added image

2012-01-05T07:39:04Z

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	She was a striking girl who had coffee-colored skin. She looked about one or two years younger than me, and her hair that reached her chest were casually tied into two braids. White words were printed on the blue shirt that she wore, it seemed like words used by a minority race; while a very, very short Denim pant was on the lower part of her body. The girl’s legs were long and slim, if she said that she just swam past the Pacific Ocean to the Tokyo Bay, I might have really believed her. A coffee colored Boston bag was slung on her shoulder, and it felt somewhat uncoordinated on her.		She was a striking girl who had coffee-colored skin. She looked about one or two years younger than me, and her hair that reached her chest were casually tied into two braids. White words were printed on the blue shirt that she wore, it seemed like words used by a minority race; while a very, very short Denim pant was on the lower part of her body. The girl’s legs were long and slim, if she said that she just swam past the Pacific Ocean to the Tokyo Bay, I might have really believed her. A coffee colored Boston bag was slung on her shoulder, and it felt somewhat uncoordinated on her.

	When our gazes met, the girl clapped her hands together , said ‘Sawasdee’ and ~~lightly~~ nodded her head ~~lightly~~. I subconsciously answered her with the same sentence. Eh…… Where is she from?		[[Image:Kamisama no memochou vol02 025.png\|thumb\|''When our gazes met, the girl clapped her hands together , said ‘Sawasdee’ and nodded her head slightly.'']]
			When our gazes met, the girl clapped her hands together , said ‘Sawasdee’ and nodded her head slightly. I subconsciously answered her with the same sentence. Eh…… Where is she from?

	The girl reconfirmed the words on the portiere hanging on the door and asked:		The girl reconfirmed the words on the portiere hanging on the door and asked:

203.116.187.1 at 09:19, 4 January 2012

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	“Narumi!”		“Narumi!”

	Not waiting for ~~Narumi’s~~ words, I rushed over and caught hold of Meo’s shoulders. I, who was usually somewhat slow, could actually take action reflexively, I, myself was somewhat surprised too.		Not waiting for Alice’s words, I rushed over and caught hold of Meo’s shoulders. I, who was usually somewhat slow, could actually take action reflexively, I, myself was somewhat surprised too.

	“Let go of me! Freak! Pervert! Old lecythus man! Machikane Fukukitaru! Nagoya chicken meat!”		“Let go of me! Freak! Pervert! Old lecythus man! Machikane Fukukitaru! Nagoya chicken meat!”

Zephyrus: Minor correction

2011-12-29T10:24:22Z

Minor correction

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	It should be normal when people have this reaction when they learn about Alice, right? The thought suddenly flashed through my mind. But aren’t they being a bit too surprised?		It should be normal when people have this reaction when they learn about Alice, right? The thought suddenly flashed through my mind. But aren’t they being a bit too surprised?

	“So that’s how it is, I actually lost to that…… Uwaa, so Hiro is a ~~lolita~~! That’s so hurtful……”		“So that’s how it is, I actually lost to that…… Uwaa, so Hiro is a lolicon! That’s so hurtful……”

	She muttered while looking at the ceiling, while the contents of her mutterings really couldn’t be ignored. What does she mean? Does Hiro…… No, how is that possible?		She muttered while looking at the ceiling, while the contents of her mutterings really couldn’t be ignored. What does she mean? Does Hiro…… No, how is that possible?