Kanon:Volume 1 Chapter 1 - Revision history

Napen123 at 03:53, 6 June 2017

2017-06-06T03:53:58Z

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	Yuichi had his jacket on, but he was still reluctant.		Yuichi had his jacket on, but he was still reluctant.

	“It’s not that cold. Besides, I’m going out to buy stuff for mum. You promised at noon ~~that you’d go too~~.”		“It’s not that cold. Besides, I’m going out to buy stuff for mum. You promised you’d go at noon.”

	Pouting her small lips, Nayuki curled her braid around her fingertips.		Pouting her small lips, Nayuki curled her braid around her fingertips.

	Nayuki with braids. Nayuki at primary school, those days when Yuichi came to this town every winter. It seemed a dream to him, but it was him all right.		Nayuki with braids. Nayuki at primary school, those days when Yuichi came to this town every winter. It seemed like a dream to him, but it was him all right.

	“I didn’t think it would be so cold ~~back then~~.”		“I didn’t think it would get so cold.”

	In his dreams, Yuichi, a primary school kid, kneeled at the door.		In his dreams, Yuichi, a primary school kid, kneeled at the door.

	“You’ll need to swallow a thousand needles if you don’t abide to your promises. It’s in its growing period, so ~~you’d~~ have to swallow one thousand and five hundred.”		“You’ll need to swallow a thousand needles if you don’t abide by your promises. It’s in its growing period, so you’ll have to swallow one thousand and five hundred.”

	“…I understand.”		“…I understand.”

	The two of them walked outside, ~~shoulders~~ to ~~shoulders~~. His ears were frozen in pain by the cold air. Yuichi turned around.		The two of them walked outside, shoulder to shoulder. His ears were frozen in pain by the cold air. Yuichi turned around.

	“Forget it, I’m not going.”		“Forget it, I’m not going.”
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	“Filling his bowl with red ginger, and letting him eat red ginger as a side dish. The soup is also going to be juice squashed from red ginger.”		“Filling his bowl with red ginger, and letting him eat red ginger as a side dish. The soup is also going to be juice squashed from red ginger.”

	''There were only red gingers left in the fridge. So those who don’t buy stuff is going to eat ginger, fair?''		''There were only red gingers left in the fridge. So those who don’t buy stuff are going to eat ginger, fair?''

	Nayuki’s eyes told him.		Nayuki’s eyes told him.
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	“No. I’m going back.”		“No. I’m going back.”

	“You ~~have~~ just ~~come~~ out.”		“You just came out.”

	Nayuki looked troubled. This look on her face drives Yuichi mad. Since primary school, looking back at his dreams, he ~~had~~ always been so repellent.		Nayuki looked troubled. This look on her face drives Yuichi mad. Since primary school, looking back at his dreams, he's always been so repellent.

	“Nayuki, you said it isn’t cold, but it is. That’s a lie~~. So you’d~~ have to swallow a thousand needles too.”		“Nayuki, you said it isn’t cold, but it is. That’s a lie, so you’ll have to swallow a thousand needles too.”

	“Ah…”		“Ah…”
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	Yuichi also knew Nayuki didn’t really hate his silly jokes.		Yuichi also knew Nayuki didn’t really hate his silly jokes.

	Like this, he came to Nayuki’s side every winter. How many years had past? ~~On the~~ first time they met, both of them were very shy. But gradually, they could talk to each other without holding back.		Like this, he came to Nayuki’s side every winter. How many years had past? The first time they met, both of them were very shy. But, gradually, they could talk to each other without holding back.

	Gentle and leisure-like, Nayuki was almost opposite to Yuichi, who was impatient and dissentious, but this probably made things the better.		Gentle and leisure-like, Nayuki was almost the opposite to Yuichi, who was impatient and dissentious, but this probably made things the better.

	~~“I’m~~ going to buy things before the shops close~~. Wait here, Yuichi~~.”		“Wait here, Yuichi, I’m going to go buy things before the shops close.”

	In front of the entrance of the shopping district, Nayuki and Yuichi parted ways. There was a shop for kids nearby, and Yuichi waited for Nayuki while looking at the toys and video games inside.		In front of the entrance of the shopping district, Nayuki and Yuichi parted ways. There was a shop for kids nearby, and Yuichi waited for Nayuki while looking at the toys and video games inside.
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	Nayuki smiled ecstatically.		Nayuki smiled ecstatically.

	I didn’t know whether ~~god~~ heeded Nayuki’s wish, but I was brought to the classroom where Nayuki and Kaori ~~was~~ in.		I didn’t know whether God heeded Nayuki’s wish, but I was brought to the classroom where Nayuki and Kaori were in.

	“I am Yuichi Aizawa. Nice to meet you.”		“I am Yuichi Aizawa. Nice to meet you.”
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	“Hey.”		“Hey.”

	Turning back, I found an unfamiliar male student looking at me. Well, I didn’t ~~knew~~ anyone ~~save~~ Nayuki, so everyone was unfamiliar.		Turning back, I found an unfamiliar male student looking at me. Well, I didn’t know anyone other than Nayuki, so everyone was unfamiliar.

	“It’s a waste to buy the textbooks only for the third semester. Take my textbook and copy it. It’s fine.”		“It’s a waste to buy the textbooks only for the third semester. Take my textbook and copy it. It’s fine.”
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	Reaching the entrance, I headed off by myself quickly.		Reaching the entrance, I headed off by myself quickly.

	Nayuki, Kaori, and Kitazawa couldn’t even hear what he was saying, and tilted their heads in astonishment.		Nayuki, Kaori, and Kitazawa couldn’t even hear what he was saying and tilted their heads in astonishment.

	There wasn’t any place for me to go to, as I was unfamiliar with the town.		There wasn’t any place for me to go to, as I was unfamiliar with the town.
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	Looking at my reluctance, the girl was astonished.		Looking at my reluctance, the girl was astonished.

	Actually, I ~~had~~ stole glimpses behind me as I was running.		Actually, I stole glimpses behind me as I was running.

	An old man wearing an apron looked around, searching for someone, and ran along the shopping district. Although I wasn’t a-hundred-percent sure, I did remember seeing him sell taiyaki.		An old man wearing an apron looked around, searching for someone, and ran along the shopping district. Although I wasn’t a-hundred-percent sure, I did remember seeing him sell taiyaki.
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	“Wings are wings. Those wings at your back.”		“Wings are wings. Those wings at your back.”

	At first glance it looked like those pair of wings were on her back, but with a closer look, you could tell they were on the bag.		At first glance, it looked like those pair of wings were on her back, but with a closer look, you could tell they were on the bag.

	“My back…”		“My back…”

Napen123: grammar (was -> were; learnt -> learned)

2017-06-06T03:12:26Z

grammar (was -> were; learnt -> learned)

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	Minase’s family consisted of, since Yuichi was a kid, Nayuki and her mother only.		Minase’s family consisted of, since Yuichi was a kid, Nayuki and her mother only.

	Why were there only two? Were the parents divorced? Yuichi didn’t know and didn’t want to either. Everyone had their own personal affairs. Besides, there were only two people. He would come to know soon enough by living here, for Akiko and Nayuki ~~was~~ spending their days happily together.		Why were there only two? Were the parents divorced? Yuichi didn’t know and didn’t want to either. Everyone had their own personal affairs. Besides, there were only two people. He would come to know soon enough by living here, for Akiko and Nayuki were spending their days happily together.

	On the table were a brown toast, orange juice, half-simmered eggs, and salad with small tomatoes. The juice was self-made, squeezed appropriately. The salad’s seasoning was Akiko’s secret. Look. Even you could tell from a simple breakfast the harmony of this family.		On the table were a brown toast, orange juice, half-simmered eggs, and salad with small tomatoes. The juice was self-made, squeezed appropriately. The salad’s seasoning was Akiko’s secret. Look. Even you could tell from a simple breakfast the harmony of this family.
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	“Doesn’t that imply it does matter?!”		“Doesn’t that imply it does matter?!”

	Yuichi got up in a flurry. From what he had ~~learnt~~ through waiting for her and her sleepy mornings, he knew he couldn’t trust Nayuki’s perception of time.		Yuichi got up in a flurry. From what he had learned through waiting for her and her sleepy mornings, he knew he couldn’t trust Nayuki’s perception of time.

	“I’ll be waiting at the door. Hurry, Nayuki.”		“I’ll be waiting at the door. Hurry, Nayuki.”

Napen123: grammar (all in the first floor -> all on the first floor)

2017-06-06T03:09:32Z

grammar (all in the first floor -> all on the first floor)

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	So Yuichi left the ringing room alone and went to the kitchen, scratching his head.		So Yuichi left the ringing room alone and went to the kitchen, scratching his head.

	Minase’s house composed of the kitchen, the living room, Akiko’s bedroom, all in the first floor, while Nayuki’s room and two guest rooms were in the second.		Minase’s house composed of the kitchen, the living room, Akiko’s bedroom, all on the first floor, while Nayuki’s room and two guest rooms were in the second.

	“This house is quite big and lonely for the two of us. It’s great you had come to live with us, Yuichi.”		“This house is quite big and lonely for the two of us. It’s great you had come to live with us, Yuichi.”

67.187.151.180: /* Chapter 1 - The First Day of Transfer */

2015-05-28T19:12:35Z

Chapter 1 - The First Day of Transfer

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	Nayuki switched the topic back to me.		Nayuki switched the topic back to me.

	~~“Club’s~~ aren’t my thing.”		“Clubs aren’t my thing.”

	I immediately replied. It wasn’t that I didn’t want to enter any under any circumstances, but that Nayuki had been carelessly talking too much about me.		I immediately replied. It wasn’t that I didn’t want to enter any under any circumstances, but that Nayuki had been carelessly talking too much about me.

Pudding321 at 03:53, 18 May 2014

2014-05-18T03:53:42Z

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	Nayuki with braids. Nayuki at primary school, those days when Yuichi came to this town every winter. It seemed a dream to him, but it was him all right.		Nayuki with braids. Nayuki at primary school, those days when Yuichi came to this town every winter. It seemed a dream to him, but it was him all right.

	“I didn’t ~~thought(~~think) it would be so cold back then.”		“I didn’t think it would be so cold back then.”

	In his dreams, Yuichi, a primary school kid, kneeled at the door.		In his dreams, Yuichi, a primary school kid, kneeled at the door.

140.209.14.38: /* Chapter 1 - The First Day of Transfer */

2014-05-18T02:53:53Z

Chapter 1 - The First Day of Transfer

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	Nayuki with braids. Nayuki at primary school, those days when Yuichi came to this town every winter. It seemed a dream to him, but it was him all right.		Nayuki with braids. Nayuki at primary school, those days when Yuichi came to this town every winter. It seemed a dream to him, but it was him all right.

	“I didn’t thought it would be so cold back then.”		“I didn’t thought(think) it would be so cold back then.”

	In his dreams, Yuichi, a primary school kid, kneeled at the door.		In his dreams, Yuichi, a primary school kid, kneeled at the door.

107.213.137.177: /* Chapter 1 - The First Day of Transfer */ grammar ("has old as" changed to "as old as")

2014-04-25T02:53:57Z

Chapter 1 - The First Day of Transfer: grammar ("has old as" changed to "as old as")

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	“This house is quite big and lonely for the two of us. It’s great you had come to live with us, Yuichi.”		“This house is quite big and lonely for the two of us. It’s great you had come to live with us, Yuichi.”

	While they were having a chat, Nayuki’s mother Akiko smiled and talked with a gentle voice much like Nayuki. Akiko was young and beautiful. It was impossible to tell that she had a daughter, Nayuki, ~~has~~ old as Yuichi.		While they were having a chat, Nayuki’s mother Akiko smiled and talked with a gentle voice much like Nayuki. Akiko was young and beautiful. It was impossible to tell that she had a daughter, Nayuki, as old as Yuichi.

	Minase’s family consisted of, since Yuichi was a kid, Nayuki and her mother only.		Minase’s family consisted of, since Yuichi was a kid, Nayuki and her mother only.

Pudding321 at 03:17, 5 February 2014

2014-02-05T03:17:58Z

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Pudding321 at 00:58, 2 February 2014

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Pudding321 at 00:56, 2 February 2014

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	I didn’t even have a single idea of where she would be going back.		I didn’t even have a single idea of where she would be going back.

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