Kara no Kyoukai:Chapter03 06 - Revision history

Georgi: Some significant changes in the starting passages; tried to make it flow better

2009-05-11T19:08:00Z

Some significant changes in the starting passages; tried to make it flow better

61.11.175.146: /* /3 */

2009-04-09T05:26:00Z

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	After parting with Azaka, I return to my place. When night comes, I go out into town. There have been five people killed so far. Four of them were in that basement bar two days ago. According to ~~Tohko~~, another was at a construction site yesterday night. Aside from the four killed two days ago, I do not see any relation to the one killed last night; but I cannot say it is a total stranger. Mikiya once said that ones that hang around at night have many connections. Maybe there is a high probability that the four, and the one killed last night are connected.		After parting with Azaka, I return to my place. When night comes, I go out into town. There have been five people killed so far. Four of them were in that basement bar two days ago. According to Touko, another was at a construction site yesterday night. Aside from the four killed two days ago, I do not see any relation to the one killed last night; but I cannot say it is a total stranger. Mikiya once said that ones that hang around at night have many connections. Maybe there is a high probability that the four, and the one killed last night are connected.

	"That girl..."		"That girl..."
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	I suddenly recall the girl that was with Azaka. ...... That aura of death creeping from out of her like capillaries.<!-- Think this works --> Since I am not used to my eyes yet, I saw it without any prior preparation. ... That was abnormal. It might be more abnormal than me. But that girl was normal. She smelled of blood, and she had eyes like me that seemed as if she did not know which boundary she was standing on. She must be my prey for sure, but I still cannot be confident in myself. That girl has no cause. She has no reason to kill for pleasure like I do, no darkness that takes pleasure in murder.		I suddenly recall the girl that was with Azaka. ...... That aura of death creeping from out of her like capillaries.<!-- Think this works --> Since I am not used to my eyes yet, I saw it without any prior preparation. ... That was abnormal. It might be more abnormal than me. But that girl was normal. She smelled of blood, and she had eyes like me that seemed as if she did not know which boundary she was standing on. She must be my prey for sure, but I still cannot be confident in myself. That girl has no cause. She has no reason to kill for pleasure like I do, no darkness that takes pleasure in murder.

	Take pleasure in murder... What would ~~Kokuto~~ Mikiya think if he were to hear that? Would he scold me, telling me that murder is bad?		Take pleasure in murder... What would Kokutou Mikiya think if he were to hear that? Would he scold me, telling me that murder is bad?

	"Idiot."		"Idiot."

	I do not really know if that word is directed at him or me. ~~Kokuto~~ Mikiya said I have not changed from before. I guess I am no different than I was before I went into that coma. Then, did I always take walks at night? ... Was I always this abnormal person, searching for someone to kill? <!-- Clunky -->		I do not really know if that word is directed at him or me. Kokutou Mikiya said I have not changed from before. I guess I am no different than I was before I went into that coma. Then, did I always take walks at night? ... Was I always this abnormal person, searching for someone to kill? <!-- Clunky -->

	".........."		".........."

	No, that's wrong. Shiki did not have such a taste. She did, but it was not prioritized. Then this is SHIKI's sensibility. That of the man, Ryougi SHIKI - the yin; inside the woman, Ryougi Shiki - the yang. I dwell on my conclusion. I used to have him inside of me, but he is not anymore. Not being there must mean that he is dead. Then......... this desire to kill can only be mine. As ~~Tohko~~ said, this job is just for me; because I am certainly happy about being able to kill someone.		No, that's wrong. Shiki did not have such a taste. She did, but it was not prioritized. Then this is SHIKI's sensibility. That of the man, Ryougi SHIKI - the yin; inside the woman, Ryougi Shiki - the yang. I dwell on my conclusion. I used to have him inside of me, but he is not anymore. Not being there must mean that he is dead. Then......... this desire to kill can only be mine. As Touko said, this job is just for me; because I am certainly happy about being able to kill someone.

	...... It's almost midnight.		...... It's almost midnight.

Vaelis at 13:18, 3 January 2009

2009-01-03T13:18:10Z

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	After parting with Azaka, I return to my place. When night comes, I go out into town. There have been five people killed so far. Four of them were in that basement bar two days ago. According to Tohko, another was at a construction site yesterday night. Aside from the four killed two days ago, I do not see any relation to the one killed last night; but I cannot say it is a total stranger. Mikiya once said that ones that hang around at night have many connections. Maybe there is a high probability that the four, and the one killed last night are connected.		After parting with Azaka, I return to my place. When night comes, I go out into town. There have been five people killed so far. Four of them were in that basement bar two days ago. According to Tohko, another was at a construction site yesterday night. Aside from the four killed two days ago, I do not see any relation to the one killed last night; but I cannot say it is a total stranger. Mikiya once said that ones that hang around at night have many connections. Maybe there is a high probability that the four, and the one killed last night are connected.
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	I can see a big port in the distance.		I can see a big port in the distance.

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	After I part with Azaka, I change my destination. I do not know where the last one would run to, but I think there is a way to search for him. The only ones directly involved with me were the four that I killed and the one that escaped, but I was taken to many places by them. If I go there and ask where the last one went, I should be able to find where he escaped to. Since they cannot trust the police or the school, the only ones they can depend on should be their kind. I hold my burning stomach as I walk through the night town. I had some hesitations about going into indecent places, but they are now trivial to me as I am tormented by the pain and my memories of being violated.		After I part with Azaka, I change my destination. I do not know where the last one would run to, but I think there is a way to search for him. The only ones directly involved with me were the four that I killed and the one that escaped, but I was taken to many places by them. If I go there and ask where the last one went, I should be able to find where he escaped to. Since they cannot trust the police or the school, the only ones they can depend on should be their kind. I hold my burning stomach as I walk through the night town. I had some hesitations about going into indecent places, but they are now trivial to me as I am tormented by the pain and my memories of being violated.
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	I can see a big port in the distance.		I can see a big port in the distance.

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	The man can feel his good fortune. He knows from the boasting Keita that Keita's group was playing around with this girl from an all-girls school. It was Keita's habit to do as he wanted to that girl and then brag about it; but this man has nothing to do with it. He does not have any strong connections with Keita's group, and they are from different areas. That's why he always listened to Keita's story without concern. But for that girl to actually come to him!!		The man can feel his good fortune. He knows from the boasting Keita that Keita's group was playing around with this girl from an all-girls school. It was Keita's habit to do as he wanted to that girl and then brag about it; but this man has nothing to do with it. He does not have any strong connections with Keita's group, and they are from different areas. That's why he always listened to Keita's story without concern. But for that girl to actually come to him!!
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	In a dark alley not even lit up by the moonlight, a tragedy raises its curtains.		In a dark alley not even lit up by the moonlight, a tragedy raises its curtains.

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	".........!!"		".........!!"
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	... The pool of blood reflecting her face shows her mouth forming a smile...		... The pool of blood reflecting her face shows her mouth forming a smile...

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BonekruZher: threads=>threats

2008-12-16T08:55:05Z

threads=>threats

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	"Well, who cares. But what do you mean you don't care if I know or not? Was that your intention to begin with? Keita's not your intention, but you came to find a new man or something?!"		"Well, who cares. But what do you mean you don't care if I know or not? Was that your intention to begin with? Keita's not your intention, but you came to find a new man or something?!"

	The man laughs from his heart this time - "I really am in luck, I should be able to get the money without even making any ~~threads~~." And besides, Asagami Fujino is a beautiful girl that he would not be able to easily obtain otherwise. A prize of money and beauty. What else can you call this but luck?		The man laughs from his heart this time - "I really am in luck, I should be able to get the money without even making any threats." And besides, Asagami Fujino is a beautiful girl that he would not be able to easily obtain otherwise. A prize of money and beauty. What else can you call this but luck?

	"Sorry, I should have taken you to my place from the start, then. Or do like this kinda place better, perhaps?"		"Sorry, I should have taken you to my place from the start, then. Or do like this kinda place better, perhaps?"

Fushichou: "What ramains left are the words Shiki left." Changed "ramains" to "remains." Spelling error.

2008-06-26T09:14:14Z

"What ramains left are the words Shiki left." Changed "ramains" to "remains." Spelling error.

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	...... I'm back to my previous self. I feel nothing again.		...... I'm back to my previous self. I feel nothing again.

	Fujino looks down at the man once more. There is no remnant of the feeling that was in her before. Only the sense of guilt enters her brain. What ~~ramains~~ left are the words Shiki left. Those words saying that Fujino and Shiki are both alike, both killers.		Fujino looks down at the man once more. There is no remnant of the feeling that was in her before. Only the sense of guilt enters her brain. What remains left are the words Shiki left. Those words saying that Fujino and Shiki are both alike, both killers.

	"No....... I am not like you."		"No....... I am not like you."

Fushichou: "Shiki is saying that the she and the corpse are out of the ordinary" I removed the "the" that was before "she."

2008-06-26T09:11:13Z

"Shiki is saying that the she and the corpse are out of the ordinary" I removed the "the" that was before "she."

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	"A human who did not end his life like a human is not human anymore. Even if the people you've killed are left with their head intact or their body unwounded, you can't think of it as being normal. Those removed from the boundary are deprived of all their meaning. That's why that thing is just a piece of meat."		"A human who did not end his life like a human is not human anymore. Even if the people you've killed are left with their head intact or their body unwounded, you can't think of it as being normal. Those removed from the boundary are deprived of all their meaning. That's why that thing is just a piece of meat."

	Suddenly, Fujino feels a repulsion towards this person. Shiki is saying that ~~the~~ she and the corpse are out of the ordinary, just like Ryougi Shiki, who is watching this tragedy right now without a change of expression.		Suddenly, Fujino feels a repulsion towards this person. Shiki is saying that she and the corpse are out of the ordinary, just like Ryougi Shiki, who is watching this tragedy right now without a change of expression.

	"...... No. I am sane. I am not like you!'		"...... No. I am sane. I am not like you!'

Fushichou: It said "...causing the last of the life1 life2 remaining in him..." I removed one "life."

2008-06-26T09:03:58Z

It said "...causing the last of the life1 life2 remaining in him..." I removed one "life."

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	"I am sorry.... but I have to do this."		"I am sorry.... but I have to do this."

	The man's remaining left leg is ripped away, causing the last of the ~~life~~ life remaining in him to be cut off as well. Fujino looks down at the convulsing body. Right now she knows how the man feels. Until now, she did not know. She could not understand people's reaction to pain. But now that she knows pain, she can strongly sympathize with this man. That makes her happy. To be alive means to be hurt.		The man's remaining left leg is ripped away, causing the last of the life remaining in him to be cut off as well. Fujino looks down at the convulsing body. Right now she knows how the man feels. Until now, she did not know. She could not understand people's reaction to pain. But now that she knows pain, she can strongly sympathize with this man. That makes her happy. To be alive means to be hurt.

	"And finally... I can be normal."		"And finally... I can be normal."

Ddrddr at 11:14, 12 May 2007

2007-05-12T11:14:48Z

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	Fujino murmurs as if crying. Truthfully, Fujino hates murder. She starts to tremble at the thought that she would have to continue such an act in order to find Minato Keita. Because killing people would be unforgivable. Those are her true emotions.		Fujino murmurs as if crying. Truthfully, Fujino hates murder. She starts to tremble at the thought that she would have to continue such an act in order to find Minato Keita. Because killing people would be unforgivable. Those are her true emotions.

	... The pool of blood reflecting her face shows her mouth ~~making~~ a smile...		... The pool of blood reflecting her face shows her mouth forming a smile...

Ddrddr: mostly just rephrasing for drama, effect, sense, etc

2007-05-12T11:12:10Z

mostly just rephrasing for drama, effect, sense, etc

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Bored tenshi at 05:19, 20 February 2007

2007-02-20T05:19:07Z

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