Kara no Kyoukai:Chapter05 05 - Revision history

61.11.175.146 at 05:04, 14 April 2009

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	Leaving this street for nearly a month didn't appeal to me, but I couldn't turn down my relative's offer and Touko-san - my boss at work - approved the trip, so I ended up having no choice but to go. And so my 3 weeks in the school, which felt like a concentration camp in some ways, finished and I came back to this place, where I was born and grew up.<br>		Leaving this street for nearly a month didn't appeal to me, but I couldn't turn down my relative's offer and Touko-san - my boss at work - approved the trip, so I ended up having no choice but to go. And so my 3 weeks in the school, which felt like a concentration camp in some ways, finished and I came back to this place, where I was born and grew up.<br>

	"... Mmm, name: ~~Kokuto~~ Mikiya."<br>		"... Mmm, name: Kokutou Mikiya."<br>

	For no reason at all, I read the contents on the license in my hand.<br>		For no reason at all, I read the contents on the license in my hand.<br>

Alyeris at 11:41, 30 June 2008

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	'''/5 ~~Paradigm~~ Paradox'''		'''/5 Spiral Paradox'''

	Winter's arrived.<br>		Winter's arrived.<br>

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2008-06-01T17:15:57Z

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	Putting the three medicine bottles at the head of Touko-san's bed, I pull up a nearby chair and sit down next to the bed. Touko-san takes out some pills from the bottles and swallows them, then lies down and starts talking.<br>		Putting the three medicine bottles at the head of Touko-san's bed, I pull up a nearby chair and sit down next to the bed. Touko-san takes out some pills from the bottles and swallows them, then lies down and starts talking.<br>

	"Yes. At the time, having run away from my grandfather, there was nowhere for me to go. I calculated that there was nothing else for an amateur mage, who didn't even have the skills or the resources to make an atelier, to do but go under the wing of a large organisation. It's like an university. The equipment is worn, defaced <!-- Is this sentence supposed to be in the present tense? She's reminiscing. -->, and failing, but there's nothing wrong with the establishment itself. In the shadows of a large museum, there was a western-eastern ancient and modern age research department. Of course it was actually the association that nourished so many of today's mages. That <!-- Ambiguous. Is it referring to the research department, the association, or the mages. --> was also a treasury beyond my wildest hopes."<br>		"Yes. At the time, having run away from my grandfather, there was nowhere for me to go. I calculated that there was nothing else for an amateur mage, who didn't even have the skills or the resources to make an atelier, to do but go under the wing of a large organisation. It's like an university. The equipment is worn, defaced<!-- Is this sentence supposed to be in the present tense? She's reminiscing. -->, and failing, but there's nothing wrong with the establishment itself. In the shadows of a large museum, there was a western-eastern ancient and modern age research department. Of course it was actually the association that nourished so many of today's mages. That <!-- Ambiguous. Is it referring to the research department, the association, or the mages. --> was also a treasury beyond my wildest hopes."<br>

	Soliloquising <!-- Isn't there a more common word to use? I had to look this up just to know what it meant.--> as if dazed by the fever, Touko-san's complexion kept getting paler. When I got worried thinking that those pills might have been poison instead of medicine, Touko-san assured me that it wasn't poison.<br>		Soliloquising <!-- Isn't there a more common word to use? I had to look this up just to know what it meant.--> as if dazed by the fever, Touko-san's complexion kept getting paler. When I got worried thinking that those pills might have been poison instead of medicine, Touko-san assured me that it wasn't poison.<br>

OceanBlue: Rephrased sentences.

2008-06-01T17:14:33Z

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70.153.214.223 at 18:05, 31 May 2008

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	"... Mmm, name: Kokuto Mikiya."<br>		"... Mmm, name: Kokuto Mikiya."<br>

	For no reason at all I read the contents on the license in my hand. ~~<!-- "For no reason at all, ..."? -->~~ <br>		For no reason at all, I read the contents on the license in my hand.<br>

	My name is clearly printed on the small license. Apart from that, my registration location, my birth date, current address, and a photo of my face are on it. There's really only a minimal amount of personal information entered on it, but among all the proofs of identity an individual can possess it is the one with the greatest range of uses. --- That point was just so strange that I couldn't stand it.<!-- "it" is ambiguous. Maybe substitute for, 'this license' or 'the license. "is the one with" is awkward and might want to be replaced with 'has'.--><br>		My name is clearly printed on the small license. Apart from that, my registration location, my birth date, current address, and a photo of my face are on it. There's really only a minimal amount of personal information entered on it, but among all the proofs of identity an individual can possess it is the one with the greatest range of uses. --- That point was just so strange that I couldn't stand it.<!-- "it" is ambiguous. Maybe substitute for, 'this license' or 'the license. "is the one with" is awkward and might want to be replaced with 'has'.--><br>

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2008-05-31T18:02:08Z

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75.158.127.17 at 04:19, 28 May 2008

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	"I guess it's a few years back now. Around the time when my little sister was entering high school, roughly eight years ago now. Remembering people's faces is my speciality but for some reason I'm poor at recalling those memories. And I don't feel like tidying it up into a nice shape either since it's a pointless exercise."<br>		"I guess it's a few years back now. Around the time when my little sister was entering high school, roughly eight years ago now. Remembering people's faces is my speciality but for some reason I'm poor at recalling those memories. And I don't feel like tidying it up into a nice shape either since it's a pointless exercise."<br>

	Still lying on the bed, Touko-san keeps talking as if she's absorbed in thought. ... For Touko-san to be talking about her past, it's not something you see very often. I think it was true when she said that this was her first time catching a cold. ~~Is this the kind of thing you call a ghost's 곽란~~. (TN: ~~Sorry I couldn't find~~ this ~~word~~)<br>		Still lying on the bed, Touko-san keeps talking as if she's absorbed in thought. ... For Touko-san to be talking about her past, it's not something you see very often. I think it was true when she said that this was her first time catching a cold. I guess sick people do act differently. (TN: this is a very rough translation, it does have something to do concern sick people acting weird)<br>

	"London --- that's the capital of England right?"<br>		"London --- that's the capital of England right?"<br>

79.119.48.179 at 13:50, 11 March 2008

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	"Oho, so Touko-san's doll making is a foreign art."<br>		"Oho, so Touko-san's doll making is a foreign art."<br>

	To that question which was perfectly unsuited to the mood Touko-san says, yes it is, and nods seriously (TN: awful phrasing here I know).<br>		To that question which was perfectly unsuited to the mood Touko-san says, yes it is, and nods seriously (TN: awful phrasing here I know \| "Yes it is", Touko-san nods seriously to this question entirely unsuited to her mood.).<br>

	Listening to Touko-san's mutterings is fine, but not being able to understand what it means makes me feel sorry as a listener. That's why I would prefer that she tells this kind of story to Shiki or Azaka, but the fever-addled Touko-san raised the gear on the story's incomprehensibility.<br>		Listening to Touko-san's mutterings is fine, but not being able to understand what it means makes me feel sorry as a listener. That's why I would prefer that she tells this kind of story to Shiki or Azaka, but the fever-addled Touko-san raised the gear on the story's incomprehensibility.<br>

	"The reason I got into doll making you see, was to reach ~~「　　」through~~ the perfect human body.<br>		"The reason I got into doll making you see, was to reach 「out for the perfect」through the perfect human body.<br>

	Adversely he chose to try and reach ~~「　　」through~~ the soul, or in other words an existence that is 「there」but 「not there」, like a cat inside an unfathomable box. The box has a definite form so you can't see inside it, but the formless soul can be seen into.<br>		Adversely he chose to try and reach 「out for the」through the soul, or in other words an existence that is 「there」but 「not there」, like a cat inside an unfathomable box. The box has a definite form so you can't see inside it, but the formless soul can be seen into.<br>

	It's similar to the collective subconsciousness some psychologist proposed. He probably thought that if he felt his way along that chain he would eventually reach the heart.<br>		It's similar to the collective subconsciousness some psychologist proposed. He probably thought that if he felt his way along that chain he would eventually reach the heart.<br>

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2007-08-03T01:40:46Z

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202.179.105.65 at 01:29, 3 August 2007

2007-08-03T01:29:28Z

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	Putting the three medicine bottles at the head of Touko-san's bed, I pull up a nearby chair and sit down next to the bed. Touko-san takes out some pills from the bottles and swallows them, then lies down and starts talking.<br>		Putting the three medicine bottles at the head of Touko-san's bed, I pull up a nearby chair and sit down next to the bed. Touko-san takes out some pills from the bottles and swallows them, then lies down and starts talking.<br>

	"Yes. At the time, having run out from under my grandfather, there was nowhere for me to go. I calculated that there was nothing else for an amateur mage who didn't even have the skills or the resources to make ~~a (work area) (TN: forgot the correct word for this)~~ to do but go under the wing of a large organisation. It's like an university. The equipment is worn and defaced, and failing, but there's nothing wrong with the establishment itself. In the shadows of a large museum there was an western-eastern ancient and modern age research department. Of course it was actually the association that nourished so many of today's mages. That was also a treasury beyond my wildest hopes."<br>		"Yes. At the time, having run out from under my grandfather, there was nowhere for me to go. I calculated that there was nothing else for an amateur mage who didn't even have the skills or the resources to make an atelier to do but go under the wing of a large organisation. It's like an university. The equipment is worn and defaced, and failing, but there's nothing wrong with the establishment itself. In the shadows of a large museum there was an western-eastern ancient and modern age research department. Of course it was actually the association that nourished so many of today's mages. That was also a treasury beyond my wildest hopes."<br>

	Soliloquising as if dazed by the fever Touko-san's complexion kept getting paler. When I got worried thinking that those pills might have been poison not medicine, Touko-san assured me that it wasn't poison.<br>		Soliloquising as if dazed by the fever Touko-san's complexion kept getting paler. When I got worried thinking that those pills might have been poison not medicine, Touko-san assured me that it wasn't poison.<br>
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	"It's a good opportunity so just let me talk a little longer.<br>		"It's a good opportunity so just let me talk a little longer.<br>

	... It was difficult for a girl not yet twenty to study abroad. Especially since an Aozaki gets treated like a heretic. In order to enter that place I decided to specialise in rune sorcery. At the time ~~tune~~ wasn't popular and there were few people studying it. The association side needed a researcher too. So stabilising the rune characters from that side took me 2 years, and another few years to approach the originals in the Tule association, so it may have been about the time I just got my own workroom.<br>		... It was difficult for a girl not yet twenty to study abroad. Especially since an Aozaki gets treated like a heretic. In order to enter that place I decided to specialise in rune sorcery. At the time rune wasn't popular and there were few people studying it. The association side needed a researcher too. So stabilising the rune characters from that side took me 2 years, and another few years to approach the originals in the Tule association, so it may have been about the time I just got my own workroom.<br>

	One day while I was absorbed in making the doll that was my goal, I met that man. Someone who possessed an unique personal history like originally being a Tamil priest. He was a hellish man. His strong will, and tempered shell, it was like an eternally burning drive for achievement.<br>		One day while I was absorbed in making the doll that was my goal, I met that man. Someone who possessed an unique personal history like originally being a Tamil priest. He was a hellish man. His strong will, and tempered shell, it was like an eternally burning drive for achievement.<br>

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	This person has a genius's nature and, as those kinds of people sometimes do, has few acquaintances. Even after catching a cold she said that she didn't do anything and lay in bed for the whole day. The person in question saying that it couldn't be helped since she didn't have an immunity to this cold at the current time or some nonsense like that.<br>		This person has a genius's nature and, as those kinds of people sometimes do, has few acquaintances. Even after catching a cold she said that she didn't do anything and lay in bed for the whole day. The person in question saying that it couldn't be helped since she didn't have an immunity to this cold at the current time or some nonsense like that.<br>

	... Personally I think that if you don't have any immunity ~~its~~ really not the time to be sleeping, but as a magus Touko-san probably doesn't feel like engaging the services of a doctor. No doubt that thing called pride is stopping her.<br>		... Personally I think that if you don't have any immunity it's really not the time to be sleeping, but as a magus Touko-san probably doesn't feel like engaging the services of a doctor. No doubt that thing called pride is stopping her.<br>

	Due to those circumstances I couldn't really meet up with Shiki after a month away, and ended up nursing Touko-san for the whole day.		Due to those circumstances I couldn't really meet up with Shiki after a month away, and ended up nursing Touko-san for the whole day.
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	"--- How surprising, Shiki doing something for me. But well, that fits. Since that kid is adept at using a knife. ... I suppose it can't be helped. There are some bottles of pills on the desk so can you get them for me?"<br>		"--- How surprising, Shiki doing something for me. But well, that fits. Since that kid is adept at using a knife. ... I suppose it can't be helped. There are some bottles of pills on the desk so can you get them for me?"<br>

	Realising she can't get a ~~mean~~ off me, Touko-san lies back on the bed.<br>		Realising she can't get a meal off me, Touko-san lies back on the bed.<br>

	When I went to get the three medicine bottles on Touko-san's desk --- one photo caught my attention.<br>		When I went to get the three medicine bottles on Touko-san's desk --- one photo caught my attention.<br>
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	Touko-san takes off her glasses as she replies.<br>		Touko-san takes off her glasses as she replies.<br>

	"Oh? Ah, those are my old friends. I couldn't remember what they looked like so I took that out of my album. --- Around the time I was in London, it was an unique mistake."<br>		"Oh? Ah, those are my old friends. I couldn't remember what they looked like so I took that out of my album. --- Around the time I was in London, it was a unique mistake."<br>

	When she takes off her glasses Touko-san's manner of speaking is the first thing to change. Previously my friend Ryougi Shiki had a somewhat obscure dual personality, but this person called Aozaki Touko really changes identities as if flicking a switch. She says that it's actually her personality and not her identity that changes, but from my perspective it doesn't really matter what it is.<br>		When she takes off her glasses Touko-san's manner of speaking is the first thing to change. Previously my friend Ryougi Shiki had a somewhat obscure dual personality, but this person called Aozaki Touko really changes identities as if flicking a switch. She says that it's actually her personality and not her identity that changes, but from my perspective it doesn't really matter what it is.<br>
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	"I guess it's a few years back now. Around the time when my little sister was entering high school, roughly eight years ago now. Remembering people's faces is my speciality but for some reason I'm poor at recalling those memories. And I don't feel like tidying it up into a nice shape either since it's a pointless exercise."<br>		"I guess it's a few years back now. Around the time when my little sister was entering high school, roughly eight years ago now. Remembering people's faces is my speciality but for some reason I'm poor at recalling those memories. And I don't feel like tidying it up into a nice shape either since it's a pointless exercise."<br>

	Still ~~lieing~~ on the bed, Touko-san keeps talking as if she's absorbed in thought. ... For Touko-san to be talking about her past, it's not something you see very often. I think it was true when she said that this was her first time catching a cold. Is this the kind of thing you call a ghost's 곽란. (TN: Sorry I couldn't find this word)<br>		Still lying on the bed, Touko-san keeps talking as if she's absorbed in thought. ... For Touko-san to be talking about her past, it's not something you see very often. I think it was true when she said that this was her first time catching a cold. Is this the kind of thing you call a ghost's 곽란. (TN: Sorry I couldn't find this word)<br>

	"London --- that's the capital of England right?"<br>		"London --- that's the capital of England right?"<br>
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	Putting the three medicine bottles at the head of Touko-san's bed, I pull up a nearby chair and sit down next to the bed. Touko-san takes out some pills from the bottles and swallows them, then lies down and starts talking.<br>		Putting the three medicine bottles at the head of Touko-san's bed, I pull up a nearby chair and sit down next to the bed. Touko-san takes out some pills from the bottles and swallows them, then lies down and starts talking.<br>

	"Yes. At the time, having run out from under my grandfather, there was nowhere for me to go. I calculated that there was nothing else for an amateur mage who didn't even have the skills or the resources to make an atelier to do but go under the wing of a large organisation. It's like an university. The equipment is worn and defaced, and failing, but there's nothing wrong with the establishment itself. In the shadows of a large museum there was an western-eastern ancient and modern age research department. Of course it was actually the association that nourished so many of today's mages. That was also a treasury beyond my wildest hopes."<br>		"Yes. At the time, having run out from under my grandfather, there was nowhere for me to go. I calculated that there was nothing else for an amateur mage who didn't even have the skills or the resources to make an atelier to do but go under the wing of a large organisation. It's like an university. The equipment is worn and defaced, and failing, but there's nothing wrong with the establishment itself. In the shadows of a large museum there was a western-eastern ancient and modern age research department. Of course it was actually the association that nourished so many of today's mages. That was also a treasury beyond my wildest hopes."<br>

	Soliloquising as if dazed by the fever Touko-san's complexion kept getting paler. When I got worried thinking that those pills might have been poison not medicine, Touko-san assured me that it wasn't poison.<br>		Soliloquising as if dazed by the fever Touko-san's complexion kept getting paler. When I got worried thinking that those pills might have been poison not medicine, Touko-san assured me that it wasn't poison.<br>
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	... It was difficult for a girl not yet twenty to study abroad. Especially since an Aozaki gets treated like a heretic. In order to enter that place I decided to specialise in rune sorcery. At the time rune wasn't popular and there were few people studying it. The association side needed a researcher too. So stabilising the rune characters from that side took me 2 years, and another few years to approach the originals in the Tule association, so it may have been about the time I just got my own workroom.<br>		... It was difficult for a girl not yet twenty to study abroad. Especially since an Aozaki gets treated like a heretic. In order to enter that place I decided to specialise in rune sorcery. At the time rune wasn't popular and there were few people studying it. The association side needed a researcher too. So stabilising the rune characters from that side took me 2 years, and another few years to approach the originals in the Tule association, so it may have been about the time I just got my own workroom.<br>

	One day while I was absorbed in making the doll that was my goal, I met that man. Someone who possessed an unique personal history like originally being a Tamil priest. He was a hellish man. His strong will, and tempered shell, it was like an eternally burning drive for achievement.<br>		One day while I was absorbed in making the doll that was my goal, I met that man. Someone who possessed a unique personal history like originally being a Tamil priest. He was a hellish man. His strong will, and tempered shell, it was like an eternally burning drive for achievement.<br>

	... Hellish. What I mean by saying that Kokuto, is that if the idea of Hell was to gain a will and take the form of a man, my hypothesis is that it would be something like him. To that degree he can't accept others, he was just absorbing misery. His ability as a mage was full of flaws, but his strong ego surpassed everything.<br>		... Hellish. What I mean by saying that Kokuto, is that if the idea of Hell was to gain a will and take the form of a man, my hypothesis is that it would be something like him. To that degree he can't accept others, he was just absorbing misery. His ability as a mage was full of flaws, but his strong ego surpassed everything.<br>
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	Ah, but you see. Both he and I were trying for the original work. The one original, you could call it humanity's individuality. Modern humans have become so divided that their lineages and attributes are already impossible to divine. Therefore it's impossible to reach the origin. Lineages and attributes, or in other words fate. It's like a number form, so a life only achieves a certain result if this ability and that role is poured in. A life that can only achieve this result. It's natural, since the genes have only been granted those abilities. If you call that fate then it will be fate.<br>		Ah, but you see. Both he and I were trying for the original work. The one original, you could call it humanity's individuality. Modern humans have become so divided that their lineages and attributes are already impossible to divine. Therefore it's impossible to reach the origin. Lineages and attributes, or in other words fate. It's like a number form, so a life only achieves a certain result if this ability and that role is poured in. A life that can only achieve this result. It's natural, since the genes have only been granted those abilities. If you call that fate then it will be fate.<br>

	The pinnacle of creation has become to complicated. Probably as a result of being invested with many abilities after pursuing omnipotence. The genes that are the data which form a human are nothing more than four different bases. But the simple spiral formed by stacking those four types of bases ~~have~~ fallen into the paradox that by being piled up till it was impossible to measure it really has become impossible to measure.<br>		The pinnacle of creation has become too complicated. Probably as a result of being invested with many abilities after pursuing omnipotence. The genes that are the data which form a human are nothing more than four different bases. But the simple spiral formed by stacking those four types of bases has fallen into the paradox that by being piled up till it was impossible to measure it really has become impossible to measure.<br>

	So --- I decided that the only thing to do was to make it myself. Although the result was cruel. No matter how hard I tried, the only thing I could make was a perfect me."<br>		So --- I decided that the only thing to do was to make it myself. Although the result was cruel. No matter how hard I tried, the only thing I could make was a perfect me."<br>