Napen123: Grammatical changes (commas changes, particle changes, present to narrative tense, and minor rewordings for flow).

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Grammatical changes (commas changes, particle changes, present to narrative tense, and minor rewordings for flow).

BloodyKitty at 15:59, 26 May 2013

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 ==“A Land of Two People” —Even a Dog Doesn’t Eat—==
 “Step right up! Welcome to our country, traveler!” The guard said this with genuine enthusiasm.
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 “I wish you happiness.”
 <noinclude>

Ella.servantes at 03:00, 27 August 2012

2012-08-27T03:00:12Z

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	A number of slapping sounds were heard, and the man’s jeering continued.		A number of slapping sounds were heard, and the man’s jeering continued.

	“Seriously! You can’t even bring one snack to our guest! You’re useless, a burden to everyone! …Tsk! I can’t believe I’m even with someone like you! Say something! Hey stupid! ''Sand''! Are you listening?”		“Seriously! You can’t even bring one snack to our guest! You’re useless, a burden to everyone! …Tsk! I can’t believe I’m even with someone like you! Say something! Hey stupid! ''Sand!'' Are you listening?”

	There was silence for a moment.		There was silence for a moment.

Ella.servantes: proofreading

2012-08-27T01:56:56Z

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User753 at 14:47, 26 August 2012

2012-08-26T14:47:44Z

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	There was silence for a moment.		There was silence for a moment.

	“Your stupidity makes me sick! Our guests came all this way! Who do you think you should thank for the ~~foot~~ you eat? Whose money is keeping you alive? Who’s working? Eh? …Forget it, I’m tired from work! I’m going to sleep! I want you to clean up! Make that floor sparkle! Got it?”		“Your stupidity makes me sick! Our guests came all this way! Who do you think you should thank for the food you eat? Whose money is keeping you alive? Who’s working? Eh? …Forget it, I’m tired from work! I’m going to sleep! I want you to clean up! Make that floor sparkle! Got it?”

	Then, the sound of something dropping was heard once more.		Then, the sound of something dropping was heard once more.
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	“I wish you happiness.”		“I wish you happiness.”

			<noinclude>

	==Translator’s Notes==		==Translator’s Notes==

Ella.servantes at 08:28, 26 August 2012

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Dammitt at 18:19, 4 July 2012

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	{{Navigation		{{Navigation
	\| Kino no Tabi		\| Kino no Tabi
	\| [[Kino_no_Tabi:~~Volume2_Chapter2~~\|Chapter 2]]		\| [[Kino_no_Tabi:Volume4_Chapter2\|Chapter 2]]
	\| [[Kino_no_Tabi:~~Volume2_Chapter4~~\|Chapter 4]]		\| [[Kino_no_Tabi:Volume4_Chapter4\|Chapter 4]]
	}}		}}
	</noinclude>		</noinclude>

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	-Still working (wow this chapter is really long too)		-Still working (wow this chapter is really long too)

			<noinclude>
			{{Navigation
			\| Kino no Tabi
			\| [[Kino_no_Tabi:Volume2_Chapter2\|Chapter 2]]
			\| [[Kino_no_Tabi:Volume2_Chapter4\|Chapter 4]]
			}}
			</noinclude>

169.199.168.148 at 21:49, 21 May 2012

2012-05-21T21:49:43Z

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	"Step right up! Welcome to our country traveler!"		"Step right up! Welcome to our country, traveler!"

	The guard said this with genuine enthusiasm.		The guard said this with genuine enthusiasm.
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	The traveler was in her teens. She had short, black, unkempt hair, but her face with its big eyes had a fearless look. Goggles hanged around her neck and she wore a black jacket. Around her waist was a wide belt with some pouches. On her right thigh was a hand-persuader in a pistol holster. The gun had an octagonal barrel and a revolver installed.		The traveler was in her teens. She had short, black, unkempt hair, but her face with its big eyes had a fearless look. Goggles hanged around her neck and she wore a black jacket. Around her waist was a wide belt with some pouches. On her right thigh was a hand-persuader in a pistol holster. The gun had an octagonal barrel and a revolver installed.

	The traveler asked the guard, "Just me is OK? He is also going to be entering." The traveler then pointed with her thumb to a ~~motorad~~ parked behind her.		The traveler asked the guard, "Just me is OK? He is also going to be entering." The traveler then pointed with her thumb to a motorrad parked behind her.

	"Just you is fine, let's see... what was your name?"		"Just you is fine, let's see... what was your name?"
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	"Kino"		"Kino"

	The traveler said this, then pointed once again to the ~~motorad~~.		The traveler said this, then pointed once again to the motorrad.

	"Over there is my partner, Hermes."		"Over there is my partner, Hermes."

	"Pleased to meet you," the ~~motorad~~ named Hermes greeted from a distance.		"Pleased to meet you," the motorrad named Hermes greeted from a distance.

	"Again, welcome to our country. As for the papers, just Kino will be fine. It may take some time, but if you can please try to answer everything. You may use the chair and table over here."		"Again, welcome to our country. As for the papers, just Kino will be fine. It may take some time, but if you can please try to answer everything. You may use the chair and table over here."
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	It asked things like name, age, sex, height, and weight. Then it asked about hobbies, favorite foods, favorite colors, music tastes, self-conscious qualities, what kind of thinker are you, and clothing preferences.		It asked things like name, age, sex, height, and weight. Then it asked about hobbies, favorite foods, favorite colors, music tastes, self-conscious qualities, what kind of thinker are you, and clothing preferences.

	Then it asked what you can see in a picture that looked like an ink spill; what kind of animal would you be, how do you feel about watching boxing; what do you think about farm work; do you like children; do you wake up early; do you like raising pets; have you ever cried when watching a play or reading a story; do you prefer cats or dogs; do you dream in color; do you worry about being judged by others; do you mind living together with elderly people; do you like to gamble.		Then it asked what you can see in a picture that looked like an ink spill; what kind of animal would you be; how do you feel about watching boxing; what do you think about farm work; do you like children; do you wake up early; do you like raising pets; have you ever cried when watching a play or reading a story; do you prefer cats or dogs; do you dream in color; do you worry about being judged by others; do you mind living together with elderly people; do you like to gamble.

	"...sigh"		"...sigh"
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	Kino looked again and the fight was settled. The couple were walking away together.		Kino looked again and the fight was settled. The couple were walking away together.

	The officer warned Kino, "Traveler, ~~There~~'s one request I have of you. Even if you see a man and a woman fighting, you must never interfere. In this country nobody gets involved in couples or spouses who are fighting. The fights settle before becoming serious anyways."		The officer warned Kino, "Traveler, there's one request I have of you. Even if you see a man and a woman fighting, you must never interfere. In this country nobody gets involved in couples or spouses who are fighting. The fights settle before becoming serious anyways."

	"That's really how it is?" Kino asked doubtingly.		"That's really how it is?" Kino asked doubtingly.

	The officer smiled and said, Even if by chance you did get involved, I'm not sure you would gain anything from it. But besides that, please enjoy your visit in our country. There's no place like it, and there are many good parts. Now then, if you'll excuse me."		The officer smiled and said, "Even if by chance you did get involved, I'm not sure you would gain anything from it. But besides that, please enjoy your visit in our country. There's no place like it, and there are many good parts. Now then, if you'll excuse me."

	The officer saluted and left.		The officer saluted and left.
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	"This is my wife. A beauty isn't she?" The man said this quite happily then kissed his wife on the cheek.		"This is my wife. A beauty isn't she?" The man said this quite happily then kissed his wife on the cheek.

	"Please make yourselves at home traveler, ~~motorad~~," greeted the wife with a smile. Kino returned the greeting, and introduced herself and Hermes.		"Please make yourselves at home traveler, motorrad," greeted the wife with a smile. Kino returned the greeting, and introduced herself and Hermes.

	The man showed everyone in, and the wife, who had stayed behind to close the door, caught a glimpse of "Canon" on Kino's right hip. She said quietly, "Traveler, you carry a persuader?"		The man showed everyone in, and the wife, who had stayed behind to close the door, caught a glimpse of "Canon" on Kino's right hip. She said quietly, "Traveler, you carry a persuader?"
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	"Of course, sorry to leave you waiting," responded the wife with a lively tone.		"Of course, sorry to leave you waiting," responded the wife with a lively tone.

	The man said to Kino politely, "Welcome to my house. I don't get many chances to speak with foreigners. Traveler, ~~Motorad~~, what do you think of this country?"		The man said to Kino politely, "Welcome to my house. I don't get many chances to speak with foreigners. Traveler, Motorrad, what do you think of this country?"

	"It's boring," Hermes immediately said.		"It's boring," Hermes immediately said.

	The man laughed and said, "~~Motorad~~ is quite honest. Truthfully this country is boring. Beautiful scenery or a deep history won't be found here. But, it's still a good place. It's peaceful and there's little crime. We can live our lives carefree. On my days off I always play tennis with my friends."		The man laughed and said, "Motorrad is quite honest. Truthfully this country is boring. Beautiful scenery or a deep history won't be found here. But, it's still a good place. It's peaceful and there's little crime. We can live our lives carefree. On my days off I always play tennis with my friends."

	The woman set down a tray, and carried over a bottle and cups. It was alcohol. She filled the man's cup to the brim. The man gave a surprised look, but then quickly emptied the glass in a single gulp and let out a gasp. His face slowly began turning red. The man asked his wife who was to his side, "Hey, where's the snacks?"		The woman set down a tray, and carried over a bottle and cups. It was alcohol. She filled the man's cup to the brim. The man gave a surprised look, but then quickly emptied the glass in a single gulp and let out a gasp. His face slowly began turning red. The man asked his wife who was to his side, "Hey, where's the snacks?"
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	The man stood up and grabbed his wife's hair with both hands and pulled her.		The man stood up and grabbed his wife's hair with both hands and pulled her.

	"~~kya~~"		"Kya"

	The woman gave a slight scream and the two of them disappeared into the next room.		The woman gave a slight scream and the two of them disappeared into the next room.
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	"You fool! Be more considerate! Are you trying to embarrass me? Are you trying to be lazy? You think people are just going to feed you! Hey! Are you listening? Sandwiches!"		"You fool! Be more considerate! Are you trying to embarrass me? Are you trying to be lazy? You think people are just going to feed you! Hey! Are you listening? Sandwiches!"

	~~for~~ a short moment there was no noise, then suddenly, "Whatever, just hurry up and cook something. Make it snappy. I'm in a good mood today so I'll let you off with this. Now hurry up stupid!"		For a short moment there was no noise, then suddenly, "Whatever, just hurry up and cook something. Make it snappy. I'm in a good mood today so I'll let you off with this. Now hurry up stupid!"

	There was a thud, it sounded like something dropped.		There was a thud, it sounded like something dropped.
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	Staying in a good mood, the man poured himself a drink and gulped it down. He became talkative, and his tone cheery.		Staying in a good mood, the man poured himself a drink and gulped it down. He became talkative, and his tone cheery.

	"Man, I'm jealous of travelers! Really jealous! They travel around, going to all sorts of places. Yep. You know, I've also ridden on a ~~motorad~~ before. The engine had exhaust pipes on both sides.... I don't mean to brag, but I was pretty good at it too. But, to be honest I did fall over too. I was only borrowing it so I was only able to ride it a bit. Yep...hic! I wanted to go on a journey. Traveler! ~~traveling~~ is fun right?"		"Man, I'm jealous of travelers! Really jealous! They travel around, going to all sorts of places. Yep. You know, I've also ridden on a motorrad before. The engine had exhaust pipes on both sides.... I don't mean to brag, but I was pretty good at it too. But, to be honest I did fall over too. I was only borrowing it so I was only able to ride it a bit. Yep...hic! I wanted to go on a journey. Traveler! Traveling is fun right?"

	Kino gave the man a smile.		Kino gave the man a smile.
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	"Different countries. There's so many of them and you get to tour them. Yep. It sure is nice... You have to do it when you're young!"		"Different countries. There's so many of them and you get to tour them. Yep. It sure is nice... You have to do it when you're young!"

	The man leaned started leaning forward and lost his balance. His arm hit his wife who was carrying out the food. The woman dropped the plate, and the food completely scattered on the floor.		The man leaned, started leaning forward and lost his balance. His arm hit his wife who was carrying out the food. The woman dropped the plate, and the food completely scattered on the floor.

	"Ah!" shouted the woman.		"Ah!" shouted the woman.
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	The man's expression quickly changed. He glared at his wife with an almost demon like rage.		The man's expression quickly changed. He glared at his wife with an almost demon like rage.

	"What do you mean "Ah!"? Hey! Stupid! Don't just stand there! The snacks are ruined! Ahhh! You're useless! pick up that garbage and eat it!"		"What do you mean 'Ah!?' Hey! Stupid! Don't just stand there! The snacks are ruined! Ahhh! You're useless! pick up that garbage and eat it!"

	Kino ate another biscuit.		Kino ate another biscuit.
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	The man came back to the dining room.		The man came back to the dining room.

	"I'm very sorry to trouble you, traveler, ~~motorad~~. I'll have to say goodnight here. I enjoyed our conversation. Please make yourselves comfortable, and if you need anything feel free to tell my wife. She really is useless though."		"I'm very sorry to trouble you, traveler, motorrad. I'll have to say goodnight here. I enjoyed our conversation. Please make yourselves comfortable, and if you need anything feel free to tell my wife. She really is useless though."

	The man said this very courteously, and entered the next room.		The man said this very courteously, and entered the next room.
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	The man staggered out of the room. He could be heard going up the stairs.		The man staggered out of the room. He could be heard going up the stairs.

	~~Lino~~ glanced at Hermes, then stood up from her chair. Kino started to help the woman who was cleaning up the food which had fallen on the floor.		Kino glanced at Hermes, then stood up from her chair. Kino started to help the woman who was cleaning up the food which had fallen on the floor.

	"It's fine, please stop."		"It's fine, please stop."

Quincy at 00:09, 18 March 2010

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Kino no Tabi:Volume4 Chapter3 - Revision history

Napen123: Grammatical changes (commas changes, particle changes, present to narrative tense, and minor rewordings for flow).

BloodyKitty at 15:59, 26 May 2013

Ella.servantes at 03:00, 27 August 2012

Ella.servantes: proofreading

User753 at 14:47, 26 August 2012

Ella.servantes at 08:28, 26 August 2012

Dammitt at 18:19, 4 July 2012

Dammitt: added footer

169.199.168.148 at 21:49, 21 May 2012

Quincy at 00:09, 18 March 2010