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	“Eh?”		“Eh?”

	At this moment I discovered at last what the huge monster, which is destroying the city savagely, was actually after. Then, what was it actually after? I saw it—it was a girl who looked extremely small compared to that huge monster. She was a very beautiful girl with black hair. She was wearing ~~back~~-and-white striped clothes, dancing in the sky, jumping and evading while attacking the monster occasionally. It was surprising to see her fighting alone such a huge, abominable monster.		At this moment I discovered at last what the huge monster, which is destroying the city savagely, was actually after. Then, what was it actually after? I saw it—it was a girl who looked extremely small compared to that huge monster. She was a very beautiful girl with black hair. She was wearing black-and-white striped clothes, dancing in the sky, jumping and evading while attacking the monster occasionally. It was surprising to see her fighting alone such a huge, abominable monster.

	“Goo-Good Luck!” I couldn’t help but to clasp my hands and root for her. But, my weak supporting sounds couldn’t possibly be sent to her; not long, she was swirled away like a dried leaf by the turbulence blasted from the monster.		“Goo-Good Luck!” I couldn’t help but to clasp my hands and root for her. But, my weak supporting sounds couldn’t possibly be sent to her; not long, she was swirled away like a dried leaf by the turbulence blasted from the monster.

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2014-01-31T07:03:35Z

Chapter 1 : As If I Met Her In My Dreams...: fixed an obvious typo

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	“Men who don't even have the courage to confess face-to-face are out of the question.”		“Men who don't even have the courage to confess face-to-face are out of the question.”

	What a swift and direct reply. But, how should I tell this answer to Hitomi-chan? Just when I stopped brushing my teeth, mum had already brushed her teeth agilely and was starting to wash her ~~fce~~ at the sink beside me. I quickly accelerated my speed in brushing my teeth, but mum had already finished washing her face and was starting to comb her beautiful hair. Looking at her delicate hands tidying her face, even I as her family member was captivated by her charm. <!-- this sentence in old version is obviated in new version: Though she looked so skillful in tidying herself, she hadn't really woken up yet. -->		What a swift and direct reply. But, how should I tell this answer to Hitomi-chan? Just when I stopped brushing my teeth, mum had already brushed her teeth agilely and was starting to wash her face at the sink beside me. I quickly accelerated my speed in brushing my teeth, but mum had already finished washing her face and was starting to comb her beautiful hair. Looking at her delicate hands tidying her face, even I as her family member was captivated by her charm. <!-- this sentence in old version is obviated in new version: Though she looked so skillful in tidying herself, she hadn't really woken up yet. -->

	“Right. How's Kazuko doing?”		“Right. How's Kazuko doing?”

SonodaYuki at 07:16, 11 September 2013

2013-09-11T07:16:39Z

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	Yes, this person who was standing up and smiling at me was my dad, Tomohisa Kaname.		Yes, this person who was standing up and smiling at me was my dad, Tomohisa Kaname.

	“Where’s mum?” <!-- Question: this was "Mama", not "Haha" or "Okaa", right? ~~~~~~~~ -->		“Where’s mum?” <!-- Question: this was "Mama", not "Haha" or "Okaa", right? --Sonoda Yuki -->

	Hearing my inquiry, dad shrugged his shoulders and said in a soft, placid voice, “Tatsuya has gone to call her. Can you also help?”		Hearing my inquiry, dad shrugged his shoulders and said in a soft, placid voice, “Tatsuya has gone to call her. Can you also help?”

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Pudding321 at 14:43, 27 January 2013

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	With that said, she smiled at me, took the red ribbon, and nimbly tied it on my hair.		With that said, she smiled at me, took the red ribbon, and nimbly tied it on my hair.

	“Mmm. Isn’t this great? Now Madoka’s stealth fans will be lost their ~~mind~~ for your charm.”		“Mmm. Isn’t this great? Now Madoka’s stealth fans will lost their minds for your charm.”

	“I don’t have any stealth fans!”		“I don’t have any stealth fans!”

Pudding321 at 07:10, 24 January 2013

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	“Ah?”		“Ah?”

	During our frolic, we didn’t have a single idea that we had become the attention of the students around us.		During our frolic, we didn’t have a single idea that we had become the centre of attention to the students around us.