Maria-sama ga Miteru:Volume26 Chapter1 2 - Revision history

Leviticus: Correction

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	Yumi asked the question that she'd been pondering for the entire time they'd been walking. Since there shouldn't be anything that unusual about the Red Rose s&oelig;urs being together at this point.		Yumi asked the question that she'd been pondering for the entire time they'd been walking. Since there shouldn't be anything that unusual about the Red Rose s&oelig;urs being together at this point.

	"Last year, I rejected everyone's chocolates except yours, right? They wanted to see my expression - "		"Last year, I rejected everyone's chocolates except yours, right? They wanted to see my expression —"

	"Your expression when you accepted my chocolates? Please show that only to me."		"Your expression when you accepted my chocolates? Please show that only to me."
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	"Last year, you gave some to Sei-sama too, didn't you?"		"Last year, you gave some to Sei-sama too, didn't you?"

	"Ah – "		"Ah —"

	It seemed like she was asking whether Yumi had made chocolates for anyone else.		It seemed like she was asking whether Yumi had made chocolates for anyone else.

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Good Morning Chocolate. Part 2

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	Of course, in comparison to the trains during rush hour, it was quite empty. Even so, it was hard to ensure there was an adequate separation from other people. It would be inexcusable to have their arrival intrude upon other people that were exchanging chocolates too.		Of course, in comparison to the trains during rush hour, it was quite empty. Even so, it was hard to ensure there was an adequate separation from other people. It would be inexcusable to have their arrival intrude upon other people that were exchanging chocolates too.

	The Rose Mansion came in handy at times like these, but Sachiko-sama seemed to be avoiding it, perhaps because it was being used as the treasure hunt's headquarters. It wasn't as though outsiders were forbidden from entering the Rose Mansion, but Yumi understood that feeling; she'd found it hard to step inside ~~a little over a~~ year ~~ago. <!-- "Last year" was February Year 1. I think that 4-5 months deserves to be noted (the time leading up to the School Festival)~~. ~~-LV -->~~		The Rose Mansion came in handy at times like these, but Sachiko-sama seemed to be avoiding it, perhaps because it was being used as the treasure hunt's headquarters. It wasn't as though outsiders were forbidden from entering the Rose Mansion, but Yumi understood that feeling since she'd found it hard to step inside during last year's event too.

	In the end, Sachiko-sama finally stopped walking when they were around the back of the Rose Mansion.		In the end, Sachiko-sama finally stopped walking when they were around the back of the Rose Mansion.
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	Yumi asked the question that she'd been pondering for the entire time they'd been walking. Since there shouldn't be anything that unusual about the Red Rose s&oelig;urs being together at this point.		Yumi asked the question that she'd been pondering for the entire time they'd been walking. Since there shouldn't be anything that unusual about the Red Rose s&oelig;urs being together at this point.

	"Last year, I rejected everyone's chocolates except yours, right? They wanted to see my expression~~....~~" ~~<!-- Did Yumi interrupt Sachiko here? -LV -->~~		"Last year, I rejected everyone's chocolates except yours, right? They wanted to see my expression - "

	"Your expression when you accepted my chocolates? Please show that only to me."		"Your expression when you accepted my chocolates? Please show that only to me."

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	===<noinclude>Good Morning Chocolate. </noinclude>Part 2===		===<noinclude>Good Morning Chocolate. </noinclude>Part 2===

	The second-year ~~pine~~ classroom was filled with a sweet smell.		The second-year Pine classroom was filled with a sweet smell.

	That wasn't a metaphor, it really was the smell of chocolate.		That wasn't a metaphor; it really was the smell of chocolate.

	There were chocolates, both still-to-be-given and already-received, in the desks, in the bags, and in the lockers. Of course, that's not to ignore those girls secretly snacking on chocolates they'd made for taste-testing, or ~~had~~ just happened to make too much.		There were chocolates, both still-to-be-given and already-received, in the desks, in the bags, and in the lockers. Of course, that's not to ignore those girls secretly snacking on chocolates they'd made for taste-testing, or just happened to make too much.

	Students entering ~~into~~ their regular old classroom were met by this unusual aroma, reinforcing the fact that, "Ahh, it's Valentine's Day." But that was only at the beginning, ~~soon enough~~ they became accustomed to it and didn't notice the smell.		Students entering their regular old classroom were met by this unusual aroma, reinforcing the fact that, "Ahh, it's Valentine's Day." But that was only at the beginning. Soon enough, they became accustomed to it and didn't notice the smell.

	Yumi left her coat and school bag in the classroom and headed out with only her handbag. After a little bit of indecision, she decided to leave the chocolates from her shoe~~-box~~ in her locker.		Yumi left her coat and school bag in the classroom and headed out with only her handbag. After a little bit of indecision, she decided to leave the chocolates from her shoe locker in her class locker.

	After that she headed towards her onee-sama, so she could give her chocolates. It would have been a mistake to take easily confused packages with her. Yumi hadn't forgotten last year's debacle.		After that she headed towards her onee-sama, so she could give her chocolates. It would have been a mistake to take easily confused packages with her. Yumi hadn't forgotten last year's debacle.

	There were a couple of students standing outside the third-year ~~pine~~ classroom, as though they were waiting for someone.		There were a couple of students standing outside the third-year Pine classroom, as though they were waiting for someone.

	(What if they're all here to give chocolates to my onee-sama?)		(What if they're all here to give chocolates to my onee-sama?)
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	Knowing what happened last year and the year before, only masochistic second and third-years would be so reckless as to think of giving Sachiko-sama chocolates. But the first-years wouldn't know.		Knowing what happened last year and the year before, only masochistic second and third-years would be so reckless as to think of giving Sachiko-sama chocolates. But the first-years wouldn't know.

	It wasn't as though Yumi was jealous, but she didn't want to witness any other students giving Sachiko-sama chocolates. Since not only would they be turned down, they probably wouldn't want her ~~petit soeur~~ to see that either.		It wasn't as though Yumi was jealous, but she didn't want to witness any other students giving Sachiko-sama chocolates. Since not only would they be turned down, they probably wouldn't want her petite s&oelig;ur to see that either.

	But those worries were unfounded. Watching from a safe distance, Yumi saw the waiting girls give their chocolates to other third-years, one by one, and then leave.		But those worries were unfounded. Watching from a safe distance, Yumi saw the waiting girls give their chocolates to other third-years, one by one, and then leave.
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	"Um."		"Um."

	Yumi was about to pull the chocolates out of her handbag when Sachiko-sama stopped her with a, "Wait."		Yumi was about to pull the chocolates out of her handbag when Sachiko-sama stopped her with a "Wait."

	"Let's go some place else."		"Let's go some place else."
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	But it went without saying that today was Valentine's Day. There would already be people at any of the places Yumi could think of.		But it went without saying that today was Valentine's Day. There would already be people at any of the places Yumi could think of.

	"It feels like it's ~~over-capacity~~ everywhere we go."		"It feels like it's overcapacity everywhere we go."

	Of course, in comparison to the trains during rush hour it was quite empty, ~~but even so~~ it was hard to ensure there was an adequate separation from other people. It would be inexcusable to have their arrival intrude upon other people that were exchanging chocolates too.		Of course, in comparison to the trains during rush hour, it was quite empty. Even so, it was hard to ensure there was an adequate separation from other people. It would be inexcusable to have their arrival intrude upon other people that were exchanging chocolates too.

	The Rose Mansion came in handy at times like these, but Sachiko-sama seemed to be avoiding it, perhaps because it was being used as the treasure hunt's headquarters. It wasn't as though outsiders were forbidden from entering the Rose Mansion, but Yumi understood that feeling ~~because~~ she'd found it hard to step inside ~~last~~ year ~~too~~.		The Rose Mansion came in handy at times like these, but Sachiko-sama seemed to be avoiding it, perhaps because it was being used as the treasure hunt's headquarters. It wasn't as though outsiders were forbidden from entering the Rose Mansion, but Yumi understood that feeling; she'd found it hard to step inside a little over a year ago. <!-- "Last year" was February Year 1. I think that 4-5 months deserves to be noted (the time leading up to the School Festival). -LV -->

	In the end, Sachiko-sama finally stopped walking when they were around the back of the Rose Mansion.		In the end, Sachiko-sama finally stopped walking when they were around the back of the Rose Mansion.
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	"Why were your classmates spying on you, onee-sama?"		"Why were your classmates spying on you, onee-sama?"

	Yumi asked the question that she'd been pondering for the entire time they'd been walking. Since there shouldn't be anything that unusual about the Red Rose ~~soeurs~~ being together at this point.		Yumi asked the question that she'd been pondering for the entire time they'd been walking. Since there shouldn't be anything that unusual about the Red Rose s&oelig;urs being together at this point.

	"Last year, I rejected everyone's chocolates except yours, right? They wanted to see my expression – "		"Last year, I rejected everyone's chocolates except yours, right? They wanted to see my expression...." <!-- Did Yumi interrupt Sachiko here? -LV -->

	"Your expression when you accepted my chocolates? Please show that only to me."		"Your expression when you accepted my chocolates? Please show that only to me."
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	"Not at all."		"Not at all."

	Yumi shook her head, and Sachiko-sama accepted the chocolates with a, "Thank-you." Then she boldly unfastened the silver ribbon and opened the package.		Yumi shook her head, and Sachiko-sama accepted the chocolates with a "Thank you." Then she boldly unfastened the silver ribbon and opened the package.

	"Oh my."		"Oh my."
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	"Are these … surprise chocolates?"		"Are these … surprise chocolates?"

	Sachiko-sama inquired, their appearance sparking a memory. That was the name ~~that~~ Yumi had hastily made up last year, partly out of desperation and partly to cover her embarrassment at the accident. But this year.		Sachiko-sama inquired, their appearance sparking a memory. That was the name Yumi had hastily made up last year, partly out of desperation and partly to cover her embarrassment at the accident. But this year.

	"Version two."		"Version two."
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	"Well then, this is from me."		"Well then, this is from me."

	It was only now that Yumi realized Sachiko-sama was still carrying her handbag, as a small package emerged, like magic.		It was only now that Yumi realized Sachiko-sama was still carrying her handbag, as a small package emerged like magic.

	"Wait, are you telling me those are chocolates?"		"Wait, are you telling me those are chocolates?"

	The package wrapped in green wrapping paper with dark brown lines, and tied with a yellow ribbon.		The package was wrapped in green wrapping paper with dark brown lines and tied with a yellow ribbon.

	"Wouldn't that be the most likely conclusion, when receiving a gift on a day like today?"		"Wouldn't that be the most likely conclusion, when receiving a gift on a day like today?"
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	"Ah, never mind that."		"Ah, never mind that."

	Back on topic, while she gave her onee-sama chocolates, she never expected to receive any either. Of course, she knew that different ~~soeurs~~ had different approaches – like Rei-sama and Yoshino-san's tradition. She knew that, but she still couldn't imagine her onee-sama, Ogasawara Sachiko-sama, making chocolates.		Back on topic, while she gave her onee-sama chocolates, she never expected to receive any either. Of course, she knew that different s&oelig;urs had different approaches – like Rei-sama and Yoshino-san's tradition. She knew that, but she still couldn't imagine her onee-sama, Ogasawara Sachiko-sama, making chocolates.

	"Last year, I was so happy when you gave me chocolates. So I thought I'd do the same this year."		"Last year, I was so happy when you gave me chocolates. So I thought I'd do the same this year."
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	Then she added, "I wanted to convey my feelings."		Then she added, "I wanted to convey my feelings."

	"Onee-~~sama …~~ "		"Onee-sama…."

	This was probably why she had wanted to escape the gaze of her classmates. Sachiko-sama was famous for refusing any chocolates given to her, so for her to give chocolates in return would undoubtedly cause an uproar.		This was probably why she had wanted to escape the gaze of her classmates. Sachiko-sama was famous for refusing any chocolates given to her, so for her to give chocolates in return would undoubtedly cause an uproar.
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	"But the taste should be the same. Try one of them."		"But the taste should be the same. Try one of them."

	At Sachiko-sama's urging, Yumi carefully undid the paper so as not to tear it, opened the box and ate one of the chocolates.		At Sachiko-sama's urging, Yumi carefully undid the paper so as not to tear it, opened the box, and ate one of the chocolates.

	"It's good."		"It's good."

	The taste of Sachiko-sama's memories. ~~Then they~~ offered each other one of the chocolates they'd received, and so put one of the chocolates they'd brought from home into their mouths. Then they both smiled simultaneously. At ~~the~~ moment, the two flavors were mixing, filling their mouths.		The taste of Sachiko-sama's memories. They offered each other one of the chocolates they'd received, and also put one of the chocolates they'd brought from home into their mouths. Then they both smiled simultaneously. At that moment, the two flavors were mixing, filling their mouths.

	As Sachiko-sama took her second chocolate from the box, and third in total, she quietly asked Yumi:		As Sachiko-sama took her second chocolate from the box, and third in total, she quietly asked Yumi:

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===<noinclude>Good Morning Chocolate. </noinclude>Part 2===

The second-year pine classroom was filled with a sweet smell.

That wasn't a metaphor, it really was the smell of chocolate.

There were chocolates, both still-to-be-given and already-received, in the desks, in the bags, and in the lockers. Of course, that's not to ignore those girls secretly snacking on chocolates they'd made for taste-testing, or had just happened to make too much.

Students entering into their regular old classroom were met by this unusual aroma, reinforcing the fact that, "Ahh, it's Valentine's Day." But that was only at the beginning, soon enough they became accustomed to it and didn't notice the smell.

Yumi left her coat and school bag in the classroom and headed out with only her handbag. After a little bit of indecision, she decided to leave the chocolates from her shoe-box in her locker.

After that she headed towards her onee-sama, so she could give her chocolates. It would have been a mistake to take easily confused packages with her. Yumi hadn't forgotten last year's debacle.

There were a couple of students standing outside the third-year pine classroom, as though they were waiting for someone.

(What if they're all here to give chocolates to my onee-sama?)

Knowing what happened last year and the year before, only masochistic second and third-years would be so reckless as to think of giving Sachiko-sama chocolates. But the first-years wouldn't know.

It wasn't as though Yumi was jealous, but she didn't want to witness any other students giving Sachiko-sama chocolates. Since not only would they be turned down, they probably wouldn't want her petit soeur to see that either.

But those worries were unfounded. Watching from a safe distance, Yumi saw the waiting girls give their chocolates to other third-years, one by one, and then leave.

"Oh, it's Fukuzawa Yumi-chan."

One of the third-years called out to her, after receiving their chocolates.

"Sachiko-san's already here."

"Oh, is that so?"

"Should I get her for you?"

"Please."

"Oka~y."

The girl grinned as she went back into the classroom.

Yumi had been loitering outside her onee-sama's classroom on the morning of February 14. It was pretty obvious why she was there.

"Yumi."

Before long, Sachiko-sama appeared in the hallway.

"Gokigenyou, onee-sama."

She was as beautiful as ever. The dry winter air was having no effect on her at all. Her skin was smooth and her hair was silky.

"Gokigenyou."

"Um."

Yumi was about to pull the chocolates out of her handbag when Sachiko-sama stopped her with a, "Wait."

"Let's go some place else."

"Huh?"

"Don't worry."

Sachiko-sama walked off down the hallway, holding Yumi's hand. Yumi had thought she'd just hand over the chocolates and then quickly leave, but now she was thinking that perhaps she should have chosen a more suitable location.

"You may not have noticed, but some of my classmates had come out of the classroom in order to satisfy their curiosity."

"Ah."

"Plus, there were so many people around, I couldn't relax."

But it went without saying that today was Valentine's Day. There would already be people at any of the places Yumi could think of.

"It feels like it's over-capacity everywhere we go."

Of course, in comparison to the trains during rush hour it was quite empty, but even so it was hard to ensure there was an adequate separation from other people. It would be inexcusable to have their arrival intrude upon other people that were exchanging chocolates too.

The Rose Mansion came in handy at times like these, but Sachiko-sama seemed to be avoiding it, perhaps because it was being used as the treasure hunt's headquarters. It wasn't as though outsiders were forbidden from entering the Rose Mansion, but Yumi understood that feeling because she'd found it hard to step inside last year too.

In the end, Sachiko-sama finally stopped walking when they were around the back of the Rose Mansion.

"Why were your classmates spying on you, onee-sama?"

Yumi asked the question that she'd been pondering for the entire time they'd been walking. Since there shouldn't be anything that unusual about the Red Rose soeurs being together at this point.

"Last year, I rejected everyone's chocolates except yours, right? They wanted to see my expression – "

"Your expression when you accepted my chocolates? Please show that only to me."

Yumi removed a red package from her handbag and held it out to her onee-sama.

"… Is that a demand?"

Sachiko-sama smiled shyly.

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"Not at all."

Yumi shook her head, and Sachiko-sama accepted the chocolates with a, "Thank-you." Then she boldly unfastened the silver ribbon and opened the package.

"Oh my."

What she saw were ten home-made chocolate truffles, each about the size of a pickled plum.

"Are these … surprise chocolates?"

Sachiko-sama inquired, their appearance sparking a memory. That was the name that Yumi had hastily made up last year, partly out of desperation and partly to cover her embarrassment at the accident. But this year.

"Version two."

"Version two?"

"You'll be surprised how much love is mixed in."

"Hehehe."

Sachiko-sama took one of the chocolates and put it in her mouth.

"It's true."

"Right?"

They looked into each other's eyes and laughed. Such bliss.

"Well then, this is from me."

It was only now that Yumi realized Sachiko-sama was still carrying her handbag, as a small package emerged, like magic.

"Wait, are you telling me those are chocolates?"

The package wrapped in green wrapping paper with dark brown lines, and tied with a yellow ribbon.

"Wouldn't that be the most likely conclusion, when receiving a gift on a day like today?"

"I suppose … but I wasn't really expecting this either."

"Either?"

"Ah, never mind that."

Back on topic, while she gave her onee-sama chocolates, she never expected to receive any either. Of course, she knew that different soeurs had different approaches – like Rei-sama and Yoshino-san's tradition. She knew that, but she still couldn't imagine her onee-sama, Ogasawara Sachiko-sama, making chocolates.

"Last year, I was so happy when you gave me chocolates. So I thought I'd do the same this year."

Then she added, "I wanted to convey my feelings."

"Onee-sama … "

This was probably why she had wanted to escape the gaze of her classmates. Sachiko-sama was famous for refusing any chocolates given to her, so for her to give chocolates in return would undoubtedly cause an uproar.

"Thank-you very much."

Accepting both the chocolates and Sachiko-sama's feelings, Yumi clasped them to her chest.

"Although I'm afraid they're only store-bought chocolates. I wasn't confident I could make chocolates like you did, but they're still quite good."

Apparently these chocolates had her onee-sama's seal of approval.

"I've got an emotional attachment to those chocolates."

Sachiko-sama said, pointing.

"When I was in kindergarten, I received a box of these chocolates from a classmate on the day she moved away. I've since forgotten that girl's name and face, but I never forgot the taste of those chocolates. As a result, every so often I find myself searching them out."

It was unusual for Sachiko-sama to be reminiscing about her barely remembered time in kindergarten. This episode with her classmate must have left a large impression on her.

"I even looked after the wrapping paper it came in, ironing it out."

"Is this it?"

Yumi asked, looking at the green and dark-brown lined paper.

"No."

The current wrapping paper was Valentine's Day specific, so wouldn't typically be used for an everyday gift. But even if it were just a normal gift, the wrapping paper designs would have changed somewhat over the decade between then and now.

"But the taste should be the same. Try one of them."

At Sachiko-sama's urging, Yumi carefully undid the paper so as not to tear it, opened the box and ate one of the chocolates.

"It's good."

The taste of Sachiko-sama's memories. Then they offered each other one of the chocolates they'd received, and so put one of the chocolates they'd brought from home into their mouths. Then they both smiled simultaneously. At the moment, the two flavors were mixing, filling their mouths.

As Sachiko-sama took her second chocolate from the box, and third in total, she quietly asked Yumi:

"Did you make these just for me?"

"Huh?"

"Last year, you gave some to Sei-sama too, didn't you?"

"Ah – "

It seemed like she was asking whether Yumi had made chocolates for anyone else.

"They're just for you. That's why they're so full of love."

"A surprising amount."

"Yeah."

Yumi understood that her onee-sama wasn't jealous, she just wanted confirmation. While Yumi hadn't been consciously aware of it at first, now that she'd been asked and had to put it into words, her feelings crystallized.

"I thought I'd keep some distance from Touko-chan for the time being."

"I see."

"There seems to have been some sort of misunderstanding. I want to give Touko-chan some time to compose herself, because it will just deteriorate even further if she's not willing to listen to what I have to say."

"That sounds about right."

After agreeing, Sachiko-sama ate another chocolate truffle.

"It really is a shame, there's so much love in these."

She said.