Mimizuku to Yoru no Ou: Chapter 4 - Revision history

Zero2001 at 23:22, 19 June 2011

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	Chapter 4 - Deliverance		==Chapter 4 - Deliverance==

Pmt7ar: some changes

2011-05-03T16:43:23Z

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	In the darkness, a faint light emanated from the Holy Sword.		In the darkness, a faint light emanated from the Holy Sword.

	"~~Who's the one who used~~ magic?" the Holy Knight said, facing the magicians. His low voice took form in the darkness and shook the air.		"How many of you can invoke magic?" the Holy Knight said, still facing back to the magicians. His low voice took form in the darkness and shook the air.

	"It... ~~it was~~ me and two ~~others~~, sir..."		"Me... me and these two young men, sir..."

	~~There were~~ three ~~of them who~~ were ~~assigned~~ to directly invoke magic in capturing the King of Night. The rest were there to amplify and assist this magic power.		Just three magicians were able to directly invoke magic in capturing the King of Night. The rest were there to amplify and assist this magic power.

	It felt to Ann Duke like the hilt of his sword was stuck to his palm. If he closed his eyes, he thought he could hear voices. They called out to the dormant sword, like they had done when he was a young boy.		It felt to Ann Duke like the hilt of his sword was stuck to his palm. If he closed his eyes, he thought he could hear voices. They called out to the dormant sword, like they had done when he was a young boy.
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	If only he could use this sword that had known nothing but taking lives to save someone. Ann Duke had thoughts like these, but only for a moment.		If only he could use this sword that had known nothing but taking lives to save someone. Ann Duke had thoughts like these, but only for a moment.

	"I'll cut down all beasts who block our way. ~~They won~~'t ~~take one~~ step ~~closer~~. ~~Don~~'t ~~try~~ to hurt ~~them..~~."		"I'll cut down all beasts who block our way. Don't step in the range of the sword. I don't need to say you'll get hurt."

	He looked back for a split second. Even in the darkness, his eyes sparkled in a deep, brilliant blue.		He looked back for a split second. Even in the darkness, his eyes sparkled in a deep, brilliant blue.

Pmt7ar: Some fixes in meaning. The word [人を]やめる used here is 已/辞, not 止

2011-05-03T16:27:22Z

Some fixes in meaning. The word [人を]やめる used here is 已/辞, not 止

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	Before, Kuro had said, "Paintings which use red are the most beautiful." Mimizuku could see no inconsistency in his words. She had come to understand everything that had led up to this point.		Before, Kuro had said, "Paintings which use red are the most beautiful." Mimizuku could see no inconsistency in his words. She had come to understand everything that had led up to this point.

	"That picture could even ~~call upon magic~~. I have visited it myself. And I have also seen the battered, injured prince. I asked him if~~, even after all that humans had done to him,~~ he still wanted to live. I asked him if he would not dislike stopping ~~humans~~. He answered righteously."		"That picture could even summon monsters. I have visited it myself. And I have also seen the battered, injured prince. He was a human, yet that spirit, that magic power. I asked him if he still wanted to live. I asked him if he would not dislike stopping being a human. He answered righteously."

	''Is that right,'' Mimizuku thought. That was how it went.		''Is that right,'' Mimizuku thought. That was how it went.

Amazing Buffalo at 22:46, 10 April 2011

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	"Go. Girl who names beasts. There is no reason for you to ~~stay~~ here anymore."		"Go. Girl who names beasts. There is no reason for you to be here anymore."

Amazing Buffalo at 03:33, 30 March 2011

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	After a moment, Mimizuku's body began to move on its own. Alone, but without hesitation, Mimizuku willfully took the hand.		After a moment, Mimizuku's body began to move on its own. Alone, but without hesitation, Mimizuku willfully took the hand.

	Not the ~~King~~ of ~~Monsters~~', but the Holy Knight's.		Not the king of monsters', but the Holy Knight's.

	The hand that had reached out for her. Warm human skin. It engulfed her. She was lifted up.		The hand that had reached out for her. Warm human skin. It engulfed her. She was lifted up.

Amazing Buffalo at 01:34, 30 March 2011

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	It was the knife she always used to cut up the corpses.		It was the knife she always used to cut up the corpses.

	She felt like she had screamed, like something had shaken in her throat. However, she couldn't remember anything. She couldn't remember her voice, or even if ~~what~~ she yelled were actual words.		She felt like she had screamed, like something had shaken in her throat. However, she couldn't remember anything. She couldn't remember her voice, or even if the things she yelled were actual words.

	"I stabbed him. Yeah."		"I stabbed him. Yeah."
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	Kuro did not halt his speech.		Kuro did not halt his speech.

	"It was far, very far away. If you crossed several mountains and went so far north that human skin would change color, you would find this tiny kingdom. They did not write, and they could not hunt. However, this country was never poor, because in a certain mountain in that country laid a dazzling mineral. The people mined that mineral, manufactured with it, and sold it, gaining much wealth in the process. The lifestyle of the king was as well marked by abundance. He was able to hire mercenaries, and thus increased his military power. ~~Thought~~ the land was covered in deep snow during the winter, this only made the fleeting spring more beautiful."		"It was far, very far away. If you crossed several mountains and went so far north that human skin would change color, you would find this tiny kingdom. They did not write, and they could not hunt. However, this country was never poor, because in a certain mountain in that country laid a dazzling mineral. The people mined that mineral, manufactured with it, and sold it, gaining much wealth in the process. The lifestyle of the king was as well marked by abundance. He was able to hire mercenaries, and thus increased his military power. Though the land was covered in deep snow during the winter, this only made the fleeting spring more beautiful."

	"Snow..."		"Snow..."

Amazing Buffalo at 07:10, 25 March 2011

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	''Is that right,'' Mimizuku thought. That was how it went.		''Is that right,'' Mimizuku thought. That was how it went.

	"That is right when he came to this forest and took the position of King of Night. He is still alive today. When he disappears, all of his magic power will return to the earth, and create a new king. However, there is another way to replace him. If the current king chooses a successor, ~~than~~ through this way, anyone could become the king. They would receive the moon eyes. I am the one who told the prince to go to the forest. He went and met the king. He was not a human, but a king, and in this way, king met king, it is said. And thus it came to pass that the king was chosen."		"That is right when he came to this forest and took the position of King of Night. He is still alive today. When he disappears, all of his magic power will return to the earth, and create a new king. However, there is another way to replace him. If the current king chooses a successor, then through this way, anyone could become the king. They would receive the moon eyes. I am the one who told the prince to go to the forest. He went and met the king. He was not a human, but a king, and in this way, king met king, it is said. And thus it came to pass that the king was chosen."

	After that, Kuro spoke once more.		After that, Kuro spoke once more.

Amazing Buffalo at 07:01, 25 March 2011

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	"Nooooooooo!!"		"Nooooooooo!!"

	Mimizuku howled like an animal. She moved to cast herself into flames, but Fukurou grabbed her.		Mimizuku howled like an animal. She moved to cast herself into the flames, but Fukurou grabbed her.

	"Enough."		"Enough."

Amazing Buffalo at 06:58, 25 March 2011

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	''... Just like that. I wish I could have been eaten by you, just like that.''		''... Just like that. I wish I could have been eaten by you, just like that.''

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Amazing Buffalo: Created page with "Chapter 4 - Deliverance ''I'll gather beautiful things,'' Mimizuku thought. Beautiful flowers, leaves, and smooth, glassy stones. Elegantly twisting branches and balls of sap..."

2011-03-25T06:57:11Z

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