Rakuin no Monshou:Volume11 Chapter1 - Revision history

Double Check: Duplicate sentences.

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Duplicate sentences.

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	With that being said, Mephius and Garbera had yet to recover from the wounds of a decade of war. Would they be able to withstand a war between countries?		With that being said, Mephius and Garbera had yet to recover from the wounds of a decade of war. Would they be able to withstand a war between countries?

	''No matter what, Eric has to win this first battle against Allion'' – thought Orba, while he mentally sorted out the information from all the various quarters. If it was for that, he would even consider lending his help by riding to Ende ~~and offers~~ assistance himself.		''No matter what, Eric has to win this first battle against Allion'' – thought Orba, while he mentally sorted out the information from all the various quarters. If it was for that, he would even consider lending his help by riding to Ende to offer assistance himself.

	But – first, there was Mephius.		But – first, there was Mephius.
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	“How long has it been?”		“How long has it been?”

	At those words, which had unintentionally burst from his mouth, Orba felt as though he was seeing clear to his own mind for the first time. Before Pashir could enquire what he meant, he continued, ~~“right, it’s not like it’s got nothing to do with you. Ever since Zaat Quark’s rebellion. When I prevented it and left for Apta with you.”~~		At those words, which had unintentionally burst from his mouth, Orba felt as though he was seeing clear to his own mind for the first time. Before Pashir could enquire what he meant, he continued, “Right, it’s not like it’s got nothing to do with you. Ever since Zaat Quark’s rebellion. When I prevented it and left for Apta with you.”

	~~“Are you talking about Solon?” Pashir asked. “You can’t possibly be thinking of responding to the emperor’s invitation?”~~

	“You were also listening at the council of war, weren’t you? If I stay like this without making a move, I’ll damage my cause and be letting Allion do whatever they please. Apta, Birac, and Nedain would eventually turn against me. The result would just be me bringing about my own ruin. And besides…”

	~~“Besides?”~~

	~~“Allion is obviously a threat to Mephius but… this could also be taken as a once in a lifetime ‘opportunity’.”~~

	At those words, which had unintentionally burst from his mouth, Orba felt as though he was seeing clear to his own mind for the first time. Before Pashir could enquire what he meant, he continued, “right, it’s not like it’s got nothing to do with you. Ever since Zaat Quark’s rebellion. When I prevented it and left for Apta with you.”

	“Are you talking about Solon?” Pashir asked. “You can’t possibly be thinking of responding to the emperor’s invitation?”		“Are you talking about Solon?” Pashir asked. “You can’t possibly be thinking of responding to the emperor’s invitation?”

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	With that being said, Mephius and Garbera had yet to recover from the wounds of a decade of war. Would they be able to withstand a war between countries?		With that being said, Mephius and Garbera had yet to recover from the wounds of a decade of war. Would they be able to withstand a war between countries?

	''No matter what, Eric has to win this first battle against Allion'' – thought Orba, while he mentally sorted out the information from all the various quarters. If it was for that, he would even consider lending his help by riding to ~~Ende’s~~ assistance himself.		''No matter what, Eric has to win this first battle against Allion'' – thought Orba, while he mentally sorted out the information from all the various quarters. If it was for that, he would even consider lending his help by riding to Ende and offers assistance himself.

	But – first, there was Mephius.		But – first, there was Mephius.

Double Check: giving up my (citation from raw needed) & duplicate sentence.

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giving up my (citation from raw needed) & duplicate sentence.

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	“Aye,” Pashir drew back.		“Aye,” Pashir drew back.

	Orba turned to the soldiers next and spoke directly to them. “I don’t plan on giving up my without resistance. Don’t worry.”		Orba turned to the soldiers next and spoke directly to them. “I don’t plan on giving up my life without resistance. Don’t worry.”

	The soldiers lowered their heads as far as they could go. You could sense resolve from each of them, and the older soldier had been moved to tears.		The soldiers lowered their heads as far as they could go. You could sense resolve from each of them, and the older soldier had been moved to tears.
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	With that being said, Mephius and Garbera had yet to recover from the wounds of a decade of war. Would they be able to withstand a war between countries?		With that being said, Mephius and Garbera had yet to recover from the wounds of a decade of war. Would they be able to withstand a war between countries?

	''No matter what, Eric has to win this first battle against Allion'' – thought Orba, while he mentally sorted out the information from all the various quarters. If it was for that, he would even consider lending his help by riding to Ende’s assistance himself~~. But – first, there was Mephius~~.		''No matter what, Eric has to win this first battle against Allion'' – thought Orba, while he mentally sorted out the information from all the various quarters. If it was for that, he would even consider lending his help by riding to Ende’s assistance himself.

	~~Ende’s assistance himself.~~ But – first, there was Mephius.		But – first, there was Mephius.

	They could not afford a long face-off, like they had after taking Birac. Prolonging the civil war would cause ruin for the people. And if the country was weakened, it would not be able to oppose the increasingly large and carnivorous beast that was Allion. The end result would be that they would be swallowed up, and even the titles of emperor and crown prince, held by the two currently competing, would lose all meaning.		They could not afford a long face-off, like they had after taking Birac. Prolonging the civil war would cause ruin for the people. And if the country was weakened, it would not be able to oppose the increasingly large and carnivorous beast that was Allion. The end result would be that they would be swallowed up, and even the titles of emperor and crown prince, held by the two currently competing, would lose all meaning.

Double Check: Present continuous. Duplicate sentences.

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Present continuous. Duplicate sentences.

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	The people had particularly rejoiced at the fact that the future Grand Duke would be visiting Dairan. Eric, however, did not come to his “home” dressed in fine clothes for a triumphal return. Because they were well-aware of this, Dairan’s populace did not create more of a fanfare than necessary.		The people had particularly rejoiced at the fact that the future Grand Duke would be visiting Dairan. Eric, however, did not come to his “home” dressed in fine clothes for a triumphal return. Because they were well-aware of this, Dairan’s populace did not create more of a fanfare than necessary.

	War ~~was~~ coming.		War is coming.

	Moreover, it was not because of an attack by the nomadic tribes. The great eastern country of Allion had dispatched its troops; and far from there being any reason to celebrate, Dairan, or better said, Ende itself, was facing an unprecedented crisis.		Moreover, it was not because of an attack by the nomadic tribes. The great eastern country of Allion had dispatched its troops; and far from there being any reason to celebrate, Dairan, or better said, Ende itself, was facing an unprecedented crisis.
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	Kaseria Jamil was serious?		Kaseria Jamil was serious?

	~~Eric was aware of cold sweat trickling beneath his undershirt.~~

	~~There might be more to follow. For now however, there were five thousand in all. If they focused on defence, that was by no means a difficult number to drive back.~~

	Eric was aware of cold sweat trickling beneath his undershirt.		Eric was aware of cold sweat trickling beneath his undershirt.

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