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Hiro Hayase: /* Part 3 */

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	“G-Gilliam, you bastard! Shouldn’t you let go of the princess already?”		“G-Gilliam, you bastard! Shouldn’t you let go of the princess already?”

	“What’s gotten you so excited, Shique? If let go of her now, she’ll fall to the floor, won’t she?”		“What’s gotten you so excited, Shique? If I let go of her now, she’ll fall to the floor, won’t she?”

	“Then, hand her over to me…”		“Then, hand her over to me…”
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	“Y-Yes!”		“Y-Yes!”

	“You’ve continued in excellence since Seirin Valley. You have saved not only my own fate,<ref>In this sentence, the word for life and fate (命) is the same.</ref> but also that of both Mephius and Garbera. Representing the people of both nations, I thank you from the bottom of my heart.		“You’ve continued in excellence since Seirin Valley. You have saved not only my own fate,<ref>In this sentence, the word for life and fate (命) is the same.</ref> but also that of both Mephius and Garbera. Representing the people of both nations, I thank you from the bottom of my heart.”

	“No, I—” Gilliam said.		“No, I—” Gilliam said.
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	Orba touched the sword at his lower waist, which was different than the one he usually carried. It was the shortsword he’d taken back from Ryucown. The blade was glittering as if it was still new, and it had been engraved with Orba’s name.		Orba touched the sword at his lower waist, which was different than the one he usually carried. It was the shortsword he’d taken back from Ryucown. The blade was glittering as if it was still new, and it had been engraved with Orba’s name.
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Hiro Hayase: /* Part 1 */

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Part 1

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	''O, R, B, A…''		''O, R, B, A…''

	It was none other than his own name. Orba heartbeat, that had been on the verge of stopping, firmly started ticking away at a steady rhythm again.		It was none other than his own name. Orba's heartbeat, that had been on the verge of stopping, firmly started ticking away at a steady rhythm again.

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	“Y-Yes!”		“Y-Yes!”

	“You’ve continued in excellence since Seirin Valley. You haven’t only saved the fate<ref>In this sentence the word for life and fate (命) is the same</ref> of only me, but also of both Mephius and Garbera. Representing the people of both nations, I thank you from the bottom of my heart.		“You’ve continued in excellence since Seirin Valley. You haven’t only saved the fate<ref>In this sentence, the word for life and fate (命) is the same.</ref> of only me, but also of both Mephius and Garbera. Representing the people of both nations, I thank you from the bottom of my heart.

	“No, I—” Gilliam said.		“No, I—” Gilliam said.
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	She had to become stronger. The foundation of royalty was to become such a person that everyone in the nation could discover the same virtues. That was the duty of those privileged ones. Wasn’t that something her grandfather, Jeorg, would have said?		She had to become stronger. The foundation of royalty was to become such a person that everyone in the nation could discover the same virtues. That was the duty of those privileged ones. Wasn’t that something her grandfather, Jeorg, would have said?

	The swordsman arrogantly turned his head halfway to look at Vileena. His eyes were visible through the holes and crack in the mask, and for a moment Vileena thought ~~that he~~ resembled someone ~~else~~.		The swordsman arrogantly turned his head halfway to look at Vileena. His eyes were visible through the holes and crack in the mask, and for a moment Vileena thought they resembled someone else’s.


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	Orba touched the sword at his lower waist, which was different than the one he usually carried. It was the shortsword he’d taken back from Ryucown. The blade was glittering as if it was still new, and it had been engraved with Orba’s name.		Orba touched the sword at his lower waist, which was different than the one he usually carried. It was the shortsword he’d taken back from Ryucown. The blade was glittering as if it was still new, and it had been engraved with Orba’s name.
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	''I won’t let it end here!''		''I won’t let it end here!''

	Each time he encouraged himself. And right now, with many swords pointed his way, and many guns aimed in his direction, Orba tightened the grip on his sword.		Each time he had encouraged himself. And right now, with many swords pointed his way, and many guns aimed in his direction, Orba tightened the grip on his sword.

	Slowly but steadily, Ryucown’s men came closer. Orba was tempted to step out of the encirclement, but the sword slaves silently stood with their weapons drawn, guarding him. Either side had the relentless urge to kill, and they became like colourless bullets as they charged toward each other, clashed into one another, and exploded.		Slowly but steadily, Ryucown’s men came closer. Orba was tempted to step out of the encirclement, but the sword slaves silently stood with their weapons drawn, guarding him. Either side had the relentless urge to kill, and they became like colourless bullets as they charged toward each other, clashed into one another, and exploded.

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	He had his doubts up until now. However, now he was convinced.		He had his doubts up until now. However, now he was convinced.

	There was nobody else who knew that Orba was acting a the prince’s body double. At least not among the people governing the state. He didn’t know the reason for it, but it was most likely so that Fedom could eventually pull Mephius by the strings. Aside from that, there were several other things Orba could think of.		There was nobody else who knew that Orba was acting as the prince’s body double. At least not among the people governing the state. He didn’t know the reason for it, but it was most likely so that Fedom could eventually pull Mephius by the strings. Aside from that, there were several other things Orba could think of.

	However, he didn’t show his sudden realization on his face. He just nodded in response.		However, he didn’t show his sudden realization on his face. He just nodded in response.

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Dohma: Volume 1 Chapter 7 complete

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	The ‘gift’ Orba had mentioned at the Doom’s bridge earlier was Princess Vileena. He had expected there to be traitors within the Garberan camp and that, as soon as they launched their attack, Ryucown’s forces would coordinate with them for a pincer strike.		The ‘gift’ Orba had mentioned at the Doom’s bridge earlier was Princess Vileena. He had expected there to be traitors within the Garberan camp and that, as soon as they launched their attack, Ryucown’s forces would coordinate with them for a pincer strike.

	And the spies within the Garberan camp had done precisely as expected – getting close to the soldiers guarding the princess. Like this, he was able to read the ~~enemy~~ movements. And just before they took the princess off the ship, Orba swooped down on them to save her.		And the spies within the Garberan camp had done precisely as expected – getting close to the soldiers guarding the princess. Like this, he was able to read the enemy’s movements. And just before they took the princess off the ship, Orba swooped down on them to save her.

	Then, during the confusion caused by Ryucown’s attack, Orba and his forces changed into Garberan armour, took the unconscious princess off the ship, and led a battalion of trained soldiers toward Zaim Fortress. Naturally, when Ryucown’s force saw them coming, they automatically thought their allies’ plan had been a success and even escorted them into the fortress.		Then, during the confusion caused by Ryucown’s attack, Orba and his forces changed into Garberan armour, took the unconscious princess off the ship, and led a battalion of trained soldiers toward Zaim Fortress. Naturally, when Ryucown’s force saw them coming, they automatically thought their allies’ plan had been a success and even escorted them into the fortress.

	Orba’s heart brimmed with excitement. He felt like he’d become a main character in one of the heroic novels he’d read when he was young. Everything was moving to his plan, and now he was facing the enemy general one-on-one.		Orba’s heart brimmed with excitement. He felt like he’d become a main character in one of the heroic novels he’d read when he was young. Everything was moving according to his plan, and now he was facing the enemy general one-on-one.

	But,		But,
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	Ryucown gave a thin smile. Then he stepped back.		Ryucown gave a thin smile. Then he stepped back.

	Orba fell for the feint and followed. In that instant, Ryucown pushed himself off the ground. The point of his blade grazed ~~the~~ Orba’s face. And when his feet touched the ground again, Ryucown positioned himself next to his opponent’s side. Pushing himself off the ground again he raised his sword overhead, and soon enough the point of his blade touched the mask.		Orba fell for the feint and followed. In that instant, Ryucown pushed himself off the ground. The point of his blade grazed Orba’s face. And when his feet touched the ground again, Ryucown positioned himself next to his opponent’s side. Pushing himself off the ground again, he raised his sword overhead, and soon enough the point of his blade touched the mask.

	“Ugh.”		“Ugh.”
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	Shique mirrored his stance. There was still a killing intent in their eyes. Knocking down a thrown spear by the soldiers surrounding them, Gilliam said,		Shique mirrored his stance. There was still a killing intent in their eyes. Knocking down a thrown spear by the soldiers surrounding them, Gilliam said,

	“I don’t want to say this, but it I wish Orba were here. The bastard’s an annoying one, but you can rely on that icy cold strength in a battle – what’s so funny, Shique?"		“I don’t want to say this, but I wish Orba were here. The bastard’s an annoying one, but you can rely on that icy cold strength in a battle – what’s so funny, Shique?"

	“No, no, you’re right. Although that masked guy is pretty strong, he is far from Orba, right? Oh really, if I knew it would come to this, I would’ve tried much harder to get him here.”		“No, no, you’re right. Although that masked guy is pretty strong, he is far from Orba, right? Oh really, if I knew it would come to this, I would’ve tried much harder to get him here.”
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	“What is the meaning of this?”		“What is the meaning of this?”

	“Do you have the guts to repeat your earlier words in front of your loyal troops? Your true intentions? While you are a knight serving royalty, your own ideals stray from your true purpose. Do you wish to have them to bear the same burden?”		“Do you have the guts to repeat your earlier words in front of your loyal troops? Your true intentions? While you are a knight serving royalty, your own ideals stray from your true purpose. Do you wish to have them bear the same burden?”

	Vibrant light had come back to the pair of eyes that had held such despair before. Even as she held a gun to her head.		Vibrant light had come back to the pair of eyes that had held such despair before. Even as she held a gun to her head.
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	Ryucown pointed toward the pillars on the opposite site, behind which the flames of war kept going on.		Ryucown pointed toward the pillars on the opposite site, behind which the flames of war kept going on.

	"Look at the armies of those mindless ~~Mephians~~ and ~~Garberans~~ camps who, despite their overwhelming numbers, are struggling against our courageous men. Do you not understand what this represents, your highness? Putting aside the cowardly Mephians, the Garberan army has fallen into chaos. Indeed, they are wavering because they can’t decide whether to follow me or not. They do not blindly follow the royal family, and are wondering if those who follow my path aren’t truly the ones protecting this country. This is the answer the people of Garberan have found.”		"Look at the armies of those mindless Mephian and Garberan camps who, despite their overwhelming numbers, are struggling against our courageous men. Do you not understand what this represents, your highness? Putting aside the cowardly Mephians, the Garberan army has fallen into chaos. Indeed, they are wavering because they can’t decide whether to follow me or not. They do not blindly follow the royal family, and are wondering if those who follow my path aren’t truly the ones protecting this country. This is the answer the people of Garberan have found.”

	Following Ryucown’s words, his men raised their voices.		Following Ryucown’s words, his men raised their voices.
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	“He killed Lord Ryucown! Don’t leave a single one of them alive!!”		“He killed Lord Ryucown! Don’t leave a single one of them alive!!”

	The soldier’s fighting spirit was mixed with rage. The gladiators who’d also rushed into a hall formed a circle around Orba.		The soldier’s fighting spirit was mixed with rage. The gladiators who’d also rushed into the hall formed a circle around Orba.

	Just then, about a dozen ships that had gone for an attack on the Mephian air corps came back for supplies. These soldiers realized what was going on, and they all pulled out swords and guns and surged onto the uppermost part of the fortress.		Just then, about a dozen ships that had gone for an attack on the Mephian air corps came back for supplies. These soldiers realized what was going on, and they all pulled out swords and guns and surged onto the uppermost part of the fortress.
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	“Then, hand her over to me…”		“Then, hand her over to me…”

	“I-I’m fine. Thank you,” ~~and~~ embarrassed Vileena said, letting go of Gilliam. “Shique and Gilliam - isn’t it?”		“I-I’m fine. Thank you,” an embarrassed Vileena said, letting go of Gilliam. “Shique and Gilliam - isn’t it?”

	“Y-Yes!”		“Y-Yes!”
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	Even if he could just take a little bit of that mirage into his own hands, he’d sincerely believed that he had to succeed, fight, or die.		Even if he could just take a little bit of that mirage into his own hands, he’d sincerely believed that he had to succeed, fight, or die.

	And if he asked himself if that was kind of man he wanted to become, the only answer was to take the challenge head-on and with confidence.		And if he asked himself if that was the kind of man he wanted to become, the only answer was to take the challenge head-on and with confidence.

	“Hey you! Are you from the prince’s personal guard?”		“Hey you! Are you from the prince’s personal guard?”
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	''I see… it’s just as I thought…''		''I see… it’s just as I thought…''

	He had his doubts up until now. However, now he was convinced.		He’d had his doubts up until now. However, now he was convinced.

	There was nobody else who knew that Orba was acting as the prince’s body double. At least not among the people governing the state. He didn’t know the reason for it, but it was most likely so that Fedom could eventually pull Mephius by the strings. Aside from that, there were several other things Orba could think of.		There was nobody else who knew that Orba was acting as the prince’s body double. At least not among the people governing the state. He didn’t know the reason for it, but it was most likely so that Fedom could eventually pull Mephius by the strings. Aside from that, there were several other things Orba could think of.