Seirei Tsukai no Blade Dance:Volume4 Chapter3 - Revision history

Rxls at 15:28, 28 June 2018

2018-06-28T15:28:08Z

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	==Chapter 3: Dracunia's Dragon Princess==		==Chapter 3 - Dracunia's Dragon Princess==
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Rxls: Undo revision 537344 by Masterupc (talk)

2018-06-28T14:06:24Z

Undo revision 537344 by Masterupc (talk)

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Masterupc: punctuation, misspelled words, misuse of '-' and '–'.

2018-03-14T04:18:14Z

punctuation, misspelled words, misuse of '-' and '–'.

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Hiro Hayase: /* Part 3 */ sub-human -> demihuman

2017-01-28T21:48:05Z

Part 3: sub-human -> demihuman

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	Beautiful jade hair. Pure red pupils and pointed ears.		Beautiful jade hair. Pure red pupils and pointed ears.

	She was a ~~sub-human~~ Elfim with all the traits of one.		She was a demihuman Elfim with all the traits of one.

	"It's not Muir's fault. It's the fault of those military guys for having a weak spirit."		"It's not Muir's fault. It's the fault of those military guys for having a weak spirit."

Cthaeh: consistency

2015-11-21T23:30:31Z

consistency

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	"Wh-~~why~~ are you taking out your sword!?"		"Wh-Why are you taking out your sword!?"

	Kamito backed away.		Kamito backed away.
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	Kamito broke out into a cold sweat.		Kamito broke out into a cold sweat.

	"Yes, I will have you let me cut off your '''that''', Kazehaya Kamito."		"Yes, I will have you let me cut off your ''that'', Kazehaya Kamito."

	Leonora drew the sword back out from the smashed floor and took a stance.		Leonora drew the sword back out from the smashed floor and took a stance.
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	"......S-~~sorry~~!"		"......S-Sorry!"

	Kamito quickly withdrew his hand but,		Kamito quickly withdrew his hand but,
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	"......Even though you were passed out the whole time."		"......Even though you were passed out the whole time."

	"Th-~~that~~'s because a man to-touched my chest......!"		"Th-That's because a man to-touched my chest......!"

	The glaring Claire and panicking Leonora.		The glaring Claire and panicking Leonora.

Cthaeh: consistency + edits

2014-12-03T01:22:58Z

consistency + edits

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Monsterbandage: /* Part 3 */

2013-05-09T02:37:50Z

Part 3

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	Muir smiled innocently and turned towards her.		Muir smiled innocently and turned towards her.

	"Muir, don't do willful things. We are the Cardinal's tools?"		"Muir, don't do willful things. We are the Cardinal's tools?" <!-- was this meant to be a question? then it should be something like 'Are we not the Cardinal's tools?'-->

	"Shut up, Lily."		"Shut up, Lily."
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	~~She~~ had accompanied her for a long time so she knew that well.		Lily had accompanied her for a long time so she knew that well.

	"Muir doesn't care about anything other than nii-sama. I'll kill you too if you get in my way, Lily."		"Muir doesn't care about anything other than nii-sama. I'll kill you too if you get in my way, Lily."

Monsterbandage: /* Part 2 */

2013-05-09T01:46:53Z

Part 2

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	Claire chewed her lip. Claire's battle style of wearing down her prey was not made for short-term battles. She knew that best herself.		Claire chewed her lip. Claire's battle style of wearing down her prey was not made for short-term battles. She knew that best herself.

	"But what do I do then. I can't use magic to fly like Ellis."		"But what do I do then. I can't use magic to fly like Ellis." <!-- feels like claire should have been refering to kamito here-->

	"As long as I cling to it and don't fall off, isn't that fine?"		"As long as I cling to it and don't fall off, isn't that fine?"
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	With the wind barrier damaged, the groaning sound of the wind could be heard.		With the wind barrier damaged, the groaning sound of the wind could be heard.

	On the back of the destruction spirit whose head was lodged in the side of the ship—		On the back of the destruction spirit whose head was lodged into the side of the ship—

	"Ohhhhhhhhh!"		"Ohhhhhhhhh!"
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	From the giant flailing about, the ship's armor fell off ~~and~~ into the forest.		From the giant flailing about, the ship's armor fell off into the forest.

	''The ship won't last at this rate......''		''The ship won't last at this rate......''
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	While still onboard the ship deck, the destruction spirit raged.		While still onboard the ship deck, the destruction spirit raged.

	It ~~appeared~~ that its head had gotten stuck in the ship.		It appears that its head had gotten stuck in the ship.

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	"Kazehaya Kamito, I will retire for today but—"		"Kazehaya Kamito, I will retire for today but—"

	And Leonora reverted her black dragon to its sword form and turned on her ~~heal~~.		And Leonora reverted her black dragon to its sword form and turned on her heel.

	"Deceiving princess shrine maidens and forming a heavenly harem — that «wish» is something this blade will never allow."		"Deceiving princess shrine maidens and forming a heavenly harem — that «wish» is something this blade will never allow."

KreinS: /* Chapter 3: Dracunia's Dragon Princess */

2013-03-21T20:09:00Z

Chapter 3: Dracunia's Dragon Princess

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	~~Upon~~ ascending to the ship's deck, they could see clouds drifting at terrifying speeds.		On ascending the ship's deck they could see clouds drifting at terrifying speeds.

	Actually, the ship was at a speed whereby a person's body would be blown away in a flash by the blowing winds but not even the sound of the wind could be heard thanks to a spirit magic barrier enclosing the ship.		Actually, the ship was at a speed whereby a person's body would be blown away in a flash by the blowing winds but not even the sound of the wind could be heard thanks to a spirit magic barrier enclosing the ship.
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	"......?"		"......?"

	Turning around, a beautiful ~~noble~~-looking girl with shoulder-length hair was there.		Turning around, a beautiful elite-looking girl with shoulder-length hair was there.

	A beret adorned her head. A black surcoat with not a single wrinkle.		A beret adorned her head. A black surcoat with not a single wrinkle.
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	Large tears formed from Leonora's eyes—		Large tears formed from Leonora's eyes—

	The large sword carved into the ship deck with a ~~large~~ sound.		The large sword carved into the ship deck with a loud sound.

	Just ~~now~~, the ship's floor exploded into shards.		Just then, the ship's floor exploded into shards.

	"......Wha!?"		"......Wha!?"
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	......In any case, he couldn't leave her here.		......In any case, he couldn't leave her here.

	And just then. The ship rocked ~~greatly~~ a second time.		And just then. The ship rocked violently a second time.

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	It was a chance. The ship couldn't take another ~~charge~~.		It was a chance. The ship couldn't take another blow.

	Kamito took a stance with his Demon Slayer and charged it with divine power.		Kamito took a stance with his Demon Slayer and charged it with divine power.
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	"......Even though you were passed out the whole time."		"......Even though you were passed out the whole time."

	"Th, that's because a man to, touched my chest......!"		"Th, that's because a man to-touched my chest......!"

	The glaring Claire and panicking Leonora.		The glaring Claire and panicking Leonora.
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	"......!?"		"......!?"

	An instant~~. A~~ shudder ran through Lily Flame's body.		For an instant a shudder ran through Lily Flame's body.

	The number two of the «Instructional School» — «Monster» Muir Alenstarl.		The number two of the «Instructional School» — «Monster» Muir Alenstarl.

220.255.1.90: /* Part 1 */

2013-02-28T13:29:29Z

Part 1

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	Upon ascending to the ship's deck, they could see clouds drifting at terrifying speeds.		Upon ascending to the ship's deck, they could see clouds drifting at terrifying speeds.

	Actually, the ship was at speed whereby a person's body would be blown away in a flash by the blowing winds but not even the sound of the wind could be heard thanks to a spirit magic barrier enclosing the ship.		Actually, the ship was at a speed whereby a person's body would be blown away in a flash by the blowing winds but not even the sound of the wind could be heard thanks to a spirit magic barrier enclosing the ship.

	Looking down from the side of the airship, an eerie forest stretched out into the distance.		Looking down from the side of the airship, an eerie forest stretched out into the distance.
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	The Dracunia Dragon Duchy.		The Dracunia Dragon Duchy.

	Located to the west of the Empire, it was a country that employed the strongest magic beasts, ~~and~~ dragons, in their military.		Located to the west of the Empire, it was a country that employed the strongest magic beasts, the dragons, in their military.

	"Dracunia's representative, huh?"		"Dracunia's representative, huh?"