Seirei Tsukai no Blade Dance:Volume5 Chapter4 - Revision history

Rxls at 15:32, 28 June 2018

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	==Chapter 4: Laurenfrost Sisters==		==Chapter 4 - Laurenfrost Sisters==
	===Part 1===		===Part 1===
	Kamito and the others returned to the tower just before the sun had fully sunk past the horizon.		Kamito and the others returned to the tower just before the sun had fully sunk past the horizon.

Zzhk: Reverted edits by Masterupc (talk) to last revision by Cthaeh

2018-03-28T15:13:55Z

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Zzhk at 23:06, 2 September 2015

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	The second daughter of the Laurenfrost family, Judia Laurenfrost, was originally a highly ranked, excellent princess maiden of the «Divine Ritual Institute». However, just a few years ago, while performing a sacrificial ritual towards the Water Elemental Lord, she made a mistake. In a fury, the Elemental Lord imprisoned her in a curse of never-melting ice.		The second daughter of the Laurenfrost family, Judia Laurenfrost, was originally a highly ranked, excellent princess maiden of the «Divine Ritual Institute». However, just a few years ago, while performing a sacrificial ritual towards the Water Elemental Lord, she made a mistake. In a fury, the Elemental Lord imprisoned her in a curse of never-melting ice.

	~~The Earl of~~ Laurenfrost had recruited elementalists from all over the empire in an attempt to break the curse, but to no avail. Despite possessing the power of a variety of high-level spirits, they could not break the curse.		Margrave Laurenfrost had recruited elementalists from all over the empire in an attempt to break the curse, but to no avail. Despite possessing the power of a variety of high-level spirits, they could not break the curse.

	After that, Judia had lain unmoving, dormant in a deep sleep..		After that, Judia had lain unmoving, dormant in a deep sleep..

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	Upon hearing the girl's words, Kamito could not help but frown in puzzlement.		Upon hearing the girl's words, Kamito could not help but frown in puzzlement.

	"M-M-~~Mirelle~~! W-W-W-What rubbish are you saying!"		"M-M-Mireille! W-W-W-What rubbish are you saying!"

	"Huh? Doesn't sister always write in her letters to me... ooo, ooo..."		"Huh? Doesn't sister always write in her letters to me... ooo, ooo..."
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	"I know, little pet dog of your teammate and my elder sister, right?"		"I know, little pet dog of your teammate and my elder sister, right?"

	~~Mirelle~~ smiled sweetly and said.		Mireille smiled sweetly and said.

	"L-Little pet dog, what the hell?"		"L-Little pet dog, what the hell?"

	"M-~~Mirelle~~! Stop talking nonsense!"		"M-Mireille! Stop talking nonsense!"

	Rinslet quickly hushed her, but ~~Mirelle~~ simply wore an innocent look and continued:		Rinslet quickly hushed her, but Mireille simply wore an innocent look and continued:

	"Huh, that's not right? Then, is it... boyfriend?"		"Huh, that's not right? Then, is it... boyfriend?"
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	While this scene was indeed hilarious, to be mistaken for Kamito's lover or girlfriend was certainly not very nice for Rinslet.		While this scene was indeed hilarious, to be mistaken for Kamito's lover or girlfriend was certainly not very nice for Rinslet.

	Kamito gently placed his hand on ~~Mirelle~~'s head.		Kamito gently placed his hand on Mireille's head.

	"Ai!"		"Ai!"

	~~Mirelle~~ squealed as if she was being tickled.		Mireille squealed as if she was being tickled.

	"I am neither Rinslet's pet dog, nor her boyfriend. You shouldn't vex your sister like that."		"I am neither Rinslet's pet dog, nor her boyfriend. You shouldn't vex your sister like that."
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	"... Oh... uh-huh. Kamito-kun, I'm sorry."		"... Oh... uh-huh. Kamito-kun, I'm sorry."

	Blushing slightly, ~~Mirelle~~ nodded.		Blushing slightly, Mireille nodded.

	It seemed that, like her sister, she was a naturally honest and good child.		It seemed that, like her sister, she was a naturally honest and good child.
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	This little sister was really something, to say such odd things.		This little sister was really something, to say such odd things.

	Carol cleared her throat, pinched the back of ~~Mirelle~~'s neck and said:		Carol cleared her throat, pinched the back of Mireille's neck and said:

	"All right, ~~Mirelle~~-san... your elder sister has things to do, so let's be good and go back to our room."		"All right, Mireille-san... your elder sister has things to do, so let's be good and go back to our room."

	"Oooh... but I still want to play more with Kamito-kun."		"Oooh... but I still want to play more with Kamito-kun."

	Seeing that ~~Mirelle~~ was about to defiantly shake her head in refusal, Carol whispered in her ear:		Seeing that Mireille was about to defiantly shake her head in refusal, Carol whispered in her ear:

	"Be good, you mustn't disrupt your sister's private time!"		"Be good, you mustn't disrupt your sister's private time!"
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	"Oh... t-true. I see, Carol."		"Oh... t-true. I see, Carol."

	~~Mirelle~~ abruptly stopped her fuss and grasped Rinslet's arm tightly.		Mireille abruptly stopped her fuss and grasped Rinslet's arm tightly.

	"Sister, I'll be cheering you on tomorrow, you must save Judia and bring her back!"		"Sister, I'll be cheering you on tomorrow, you must save Judia and bring her back!"
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	"I know, leave it to me."		"I know, leave it to me."

	~~Mirelle~~ gently released her sister's arm, broke out into her original smile, and turned towards Kamito.		Mireille gently released her sister's arm, broke out into her original smile, and turned towards Kamito.

	"Kamito-kun, after the Blade Dance ends, you must come visit our Laurenfrost area."		"Kamito-kun, after the Blade Dance ends, you must come visit our Laurenfrost area."
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	"Huh?"		"Huh?"

	With those words, which left Kamito shaken, ~~Mirelle~~ –		With those words, which left Kamito shaken, Mireille –

	Exited from the other end of the hallway, accompanied by Carol.		Exited from the other end of the hallway, accompanied by Carol.
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	Rinslet rumpled her long hair, a little embarrassed.		Rinslet rumpled her long hair, a little embarrassed.

	Kamito suddenly grew curious about the name ~~Mirelle~~ had mentioned in passing.		Kamito suddenly grew curious about the name Mireille had mentioned in passing.

	"Oh yes, who was that Judia person you two were talking about just now?"		"Oh yes, who was that Judia person you two were talking about just now?"

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	The one they were talking about was the fourth member of Team Inferno – Sjora Kahn. She and Lily were different from Muir in that they had not been picked by Ren Ashbell's own people, but were elementalists appointed on recommendation by the religious Alphas Theocracy.		The one they were talking about was the fourth member of Team Inferno – Sjora Kahn. She and Lily were different from Muir in that they had not been picked by Ren Ashbell's own people, but were elementalists appointed on recommendation by the religious Alphas Theocracy.

	The Alphas Theocracy had not provided Ren Ashbell with any information on Sjora's abilities, because Sjora's other responsibility was to monitor all Ren Ashbell's actions.		The Alphas Theocracy had not provided Ren Ashbell with any information on Sjora's abilities, because Sjora's other responsibility was to monitor all of Ren Ashbell's actions.

	"Muir Alenstarl... You looked for me only to talk to me about this?"		"Muir Alenstarl... You looked for me only to talk to me about this?"

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	"Is that so? That princess really brings trouble to other people."		"Is that so? That princess really brings trouble to other people."

	The one they were talking about was the fourth member of Team Inferno – Sjora Kahn. She and Lily were different from Muir in that they had not been picked by Ren Ashbell's own people, but were elementalists appointed on recommendation by the religious Alphas ~~Empire~~.		The one they were talking about was the fourth member of Team Inferno – Sjora Kahn. She and Lily were different from Muir in that they had not been picked by Ren Ashbell's own people, but were elementalists appointed on recommendation by the religious Alphas Theocracy.

	The Alphas ~~Empire~~ had not provided Ren Ashbell with any information on Sjora's abilities, because Sjora's other responsibility was to monitor all Ren Ashbell's actions.		The Alphas Theocracy had not provided Ren Ashbell with any information on Sjora's abilities, because Sjora's other responsibility was to monitor all Ren Ashbell's actions.

	"Muir Alenstarl... You looked for me only to talk to me about this?"		"Muir Alenstarl... You looked for me only to talk to me about this?"

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	Kamito returned to his own room and gathered the things he would take with him tomorrow.		Kamito returned to his own room and gathered the things he would take with him tomorrow.

	The items he put into the bag included some easy-to-carry food and a lantern made of spirit ~~ore~~, and other necessities for survival in the forest.		The items he put into the bag included some easy-to-carry food and a lantern made of spirit crystals, and other necessities for survival in the forest.

	As the rules of the game limited the weight of things he could bring with him, the items had to be carefully selected		As the rules of the game limited the weight of things he could bring with him, the items had to be carefully selected
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	Ren Ashbell was placing a chain of jewels on the sarcophagus.		Ren Ashbell was placing a chain of jewels on the sarcophagus.

	That was the «Blood Stone» – found only in the original spirit world, such a highly prized spirit ~~ore~~ contained power that ordinary spirit ~~ores~~ could not possibly rival.		That was the «Blood Stone» – found only in the original spirit world, such a highly prized spirit crystal contained power that ordinary spirit crystals could not possibly rival.

	Next, in a clear bright voice, she started singing a chant that sounded like a curse.		Next, in a clear bright voice, she started singing a chant that sounded like a curse.

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	"O-Of course not! H-H-How can he be... b-boyfriend..."		"O-Of course not! H-H-How can he be... b-boyfriend..."

	The elder of the two sisters clapped her hands to her cheeks, her face so red she looked about to go up in smoke.		The elder of the two sisters clapped her hands to her cheeks, her face so red that she looked about to go up in smoke.

	"Oooh... elder sister is embarrassed now, how cute!"		"Oooh... elder sister is embarrassed now, how cute!"
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	Mirelle squealed as if she was being tickled.		Mirelle squealed as if she was being tickled.

	"I am ~~not~~ Rinslet's pet dog, or her boyfriend. You shouldn't vex your sister like that."		"I am neither Rinslet's pet dog, nor her boyfriend. You shouldn't vex your sister like that."

	"... Oh... uh-huh. Kamito-kun, I'm sorry."		"... Oh... uh-huh. Kamito-kun, I'm sorry."
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	Kamito suddenly grew curious about the name Mirelle had mentioned in passing.		Kamito suddenly grew curious about the name Mirelle had mentioned in passing.

	"Oh yes, who was that Judia person you two ~~talked~~ about just now?"		"Oh yes, who was that Judia person you two were talking about just now?"

	"..."		"..."
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	Kamito instinctively looked around.		Kamito instinctively looked around.

	Although they were indoors, it was no guarantee; walls had ears.		Although they were indoors, there was no guarantee; the walls had ears.

	Upon seeing Kamito's embarrassed countenance, Fianna smiled sweetly and said:		Upon seeing Kamito's embarrassed countenance, Fianna smiled sweetly and said:
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	Suddenly, just at that moment –		Suddenly, just at that moment –

	From the other side of the door came the sound of something dropping to the floor.		From the other side of the door came the sound of something dropping on the floor.

	"...!?"		"...!?"
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	It was Claire, an expression of shock and horror on her face. Scattered on the floor were things that had fallen from her hands.		It was Claire, an expression of shock and horror on her face. Scattered on the floor were things that had fallen from her hands.

	"C-Claire!? Y-You're mistaken it's not what you think – ah!"		"C-Claire!? Y-You're mistaken, it's not what you think – ah!"

	Kamito rushed forward, wanting to explain himself.		Kamito rushed forward, wanting to explain himself.
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	===Part 3===		===Part 3===

	In this part of the floating island Ragna Ys ~~were~~ a chain of vast underground caves.		In this part of the floating island, Ragna Ys, was a chain of vast underground caves.

	No one alive today knew when it had been constructed, or even for what purpose.		No one alive today knew when it had been constructed, or even for what purpose.