Seirei Tsukai no Blade Dance:Volume6 Chapter7 - Revision history

Zzhk: Reverted edits by Masterupc (talk) to last revision by Cthaeh

2018-04-04T04:53:23Z

Reverted edits by Masterupc (talk) to last revision by Cthaeh

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	Ever since the youth resolved himself to kill the darkness spirit girl who sent his heart into incredible turmoil--<!-- Cthaeh, I'll stop making corrections. Instead, I suggest that you do that and. As the guide states, if possible, everything will be translated to UK english. Then, for reference, consult the Cambridge Dictionary (https://dictionary.cambridge.org/) for grammar and translation issues. That will do the trick. As a writer, I know what I'm doing but if that displeases you, then that's all. Masterupc. -->		Ever since the youth resolved himself to kill the darkness spirit girl who sent his heart into incredible turmoil--

	He began to grow and develop with unbelievable speed.		He began to grow and develop with unbelievable speed.
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	With a great roar, Nepenthes Lore tore apart the barrier using claw-like gauntlets.		With a great roar, Nepenthes Lore tore apart the barrier using claw-like gauntlets.

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Masterupc: A brief comment to Cthaeh, for better understanding.

2018-03-29T01:06:57Z

A brief comment to Cthaeh, for better understanding.

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	Ever since the youth resolved himself to kill the darkness spirit girl who sent his heart into incredible turmoil--		Ever since the youth resolved himself to kill the darkness spirit girl who sent his heart into incredible turmoil--<!-- Cthaeh, I'll stop making corrections. Instead, I suggest that you do that and. As the guide states, if possible, everything will be translated to UK english. Then, for reference, consult the Cambridge Dictionary (https://dictionary.cambridge.org/) for grammar and translation issues. That will do the trick. As a writer, I know what I'm doing but if that displeases you, then that's all. Masterupc. -->

	He began to grow and develop with unbelievable speed.		He began to grow and develop with unbelievable speed.
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	With a great roar, Nepenthes Lore tore apart the barrier using claw-like gauntlets.		With a great roar, Nepenthes Lore tore apart the barrier using claw-like gauntlets.

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Cthaeh: consistency

2015-11-29T21:55:25Z

consistency

Cthaeh: consistency + edits

2014-12-05T00:48:03Z

consistency + edits

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Zzhk: /* Part 7 */

2013-03-13T08:21:50Z

Part 7

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	The girl's fingertips, gently caressing his cheek, dissipated into the air as particles of light--		The girl's fingertips, gently caressing his cheek, dissipated into the air as particles of light--

	"''~~If any~~ time in the future when I ~~change to the point when~~ I am myself no longer~~, when the time comes~~''--"		"''Should there ever come a time in the future when I have changed so much that I am myself no longer''--"

	--Kill me.		--Kill me.

Royaloyalz: Term update

2013-03-03T13:44:47Z

Term update

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	The demon sealing eye. This was a special eye that descendants from lineages of elementalists were born with in rare instances.		The demon sealing eye. This was a special eye that descendants from lineages of elementalists were born with in rare instances.

	A type of extremely rare spirit ~~ore~~.		A type of extremely rare spirit crystal.

	Due to numerous cases of demon sealing eyes with powerful spirits sealed inside of them, the possessors were regarded as dangerous in most situations and persecuted, either that or used as weapons by those in authority -- that was how things were.		Due to numerous cases of demon sealing eyes with powerful spirits sealed inside of them, the possessors were regarded as dangerous in most situations and persecuted, either that or used as weapons by those in authority -- that was how things were.

Royaloyalz: Some edits to help improve sentence structure

2013-03-01T11:00:28Z

Some edits to help improve sentence structure

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	''I've done so many bad things to that guy in the past...''		''I've done so many bad things to that guy in the past...''

	Claire reflected over everything she had done to this date.		Claire reflected over everything she had done till this date.

	Whenever Kamito was intimate with other girls, she always felt enraged for no particular reason, unable to accept, wanting to whip him and burn him into charcoal--		Whenever Kamito was intimate with other girls, she always felt enraged for no particular reason, unable to accept, wanting to whip him and burn him into charcoal--
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	Thud thud.		Thud thud.
			[[image:STnBD V06 194.png\|thumb]]

	Clenching her fists, she hammered against Kamito's chest.		Clenching her fists, she hammered against Kamito's chest.
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	"Claire... I'm sorry."		"Claire... I'm sorry."

	Faced with Claire like this, Kamito gently caressed her head.		Faced with Claire acting like this, Kamito gently caressed her head.

	"Wah... Sob... I-Idiot..."		"Wah... Sob... I-Idiot..."
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	"K-Kamito..."		"K-Kamito..."
	~~[[image:STnBD V06 194.png\|thumb]]~~

	Fiddling awkwardly with her fingers, her head bowed deeply--		Fiddling awkwardly with her fingers, her head bowed deeply--
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	"I-In that case, I'll feed him too!"		"I-In that case, I'll feed him too!"

	Sticking her fork in a piece of meat, Claire thrust it over.		Sticking her fork into a piece of meat, Claire thrust it over.

	"That's really hot, Claire, and you poked me in the face! Ouch!"		"That's really hot, Claire, and you poked me in the face! Ouch!"
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	That was what his intuition predicted.		That was what his intuition predicted.

	Splash -- Suddenly, he heard a light noise in water behind him.		Splash -- Suddenly, he heard a light noise in the water behind him.

	"...!?"		"...!?"
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	This was the benefit she brought up during negotiations for the alliance. However, if that spirit could not be used, then Kamito and his team's strategy had to be altered fundamentally.		This was the benefit she brought up during negotiations for the alliance. However, if that spirit could not be used, then Kamito and his team's strategy had to be altered fundamentally.

	"I apologize. I must prevail in this «Blade Dance» no matter what. Because, raised as a tool, that is my mission."		"I apologize. I must prevail in this «Blade Dance» no matter what. Because, being raised as a tool, that is my mission."

	Despite the «Rupture Division»'s collapse and nearly losing everything, she still struggled for survival.		Despite the «Rupture Division»'s collapse and nearly losing everything, she still struggled for survival.

Rizo536: /* Part 9 */

2013-03-01T09:10:58Z

Part 9

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	In ~~this~~ quiet forest, the black-winged angel appeared--		In the quiet forest, the black-winged angel appeared--

	"What a secure «stronghold» your team has built here. As expected of Her Highness the ~~imperial princess~~, former ~~candidate for Queen~~."		"What a secure «stronghold» your team has built here. As expected of Her Highness the Imperial Princess, former heiress to the throne."

	Restia shrugged and pouted her adorable lips.		Restia shrugged and pouted her adorable lips.

	Probably as a counter against those with the attribute of darkness, there ~~were~~ apparently multiple holy ~~barrier~~.		Probably as a counter against those with the attribute of darkness, there was apparently multiple holy barriers.

	To her it was like the gates of hell.		To her it was like the gates of hell.
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	However--		However--

	"I'm very sorry but I shall have to break through by force."		"I'm very sorry, but I shall have to break through by force."

	As Restia giggled, a massive figure appeared from the depths of the forest.		As Restia giggled, a massive figure appeared from the depths of the forest.
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	Emanating an aura of ominous disaster from all over, the black knight -- Nepenthes Lore.		Emanating an aura of ominous disaster from all over, the black knight -- Nepenthes Lore.

	Having absorbed divine power from numerous elementalists to become a complete monster, the materialization of the Demon King's will.		Having absorbed divine power from numerous elementalists to become a complete monster, there stood the materialization of the Demon King's will.

	"Well then, let's begin to blade dance, Kamito..."		"Well then, let's begin the blade dance, Kamito..."

	With a great roar, Nepenthes Lore tore apart the barrier using claw-like gauntlets.		With a great roar, Nepenthes Lore tore apart the barrier using claw-like gauntlets.

Worker at 07:16, 23 February 2013

2013-02-23T07:16:58Z

All Nighter94: /* Part 8 */ grammar

2013-02-20T20:48:25Z

Part 8: grammar

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	Milla's eyes widened with surprise.		Milla's eyes widened with surprise.

	"I am the same as you, Milla. Raised as a tool for murder from ~~young~~."		"I am the same as you, Milla. Raised as a tool for murder from childhood."

	"However, you... Don't look like it."		"However, you... Don't look like it."

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	After that, through the ''re-education'' efforts of the elders at the Instructional School, the boy lost his emotions once more -- however, his feeling of longing for her, that alone was never forgotten.		After that, through the ''re-education'' efforts of the elders at the Instructional School, the boy lost his emotions once more -- however, his feeling of longing for her, that alone was never forgotten.

	Then four years ago, on the day that the flame ~~demonic deity~~<!--炎の魔神--> attacked and destroyed the Instructional School, he took the ring where she was sealed and the two of them began their journey.		Then four years ago, on the day that the archdemon of flame<!--炎の魔神--> attacked and destroyed the Instructional School, he took the ring where she was sealed and the two of them began their journey.

	--Those short but wonderful days.		--Those short but wonderful days.
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	"No I didn't. But I could guess."		"No I didn't. But I could guess."

	The ~~demon sealing eye~~. This was a special eye that descendants from lineages of elementalists were born with in rare instances.		The Demon Sealing Eye. This was a special eye that descendants from lineages of elementalists were born with in rare instances.

	A type of extremely rare spirit crystal.		A type of extremely rare spirit crystal.

	Due to numerous cases of ~~demon sealing eyes~~ with powerful spirits sealed inside of them, the possessors were regarded as dangerous in most situations and persecuted, either that or used as weapons by those in authority -- that was how things were.		Due to numerous cases of Demon Sealing Eyes with powerful spirits sealed inside of them, the possessors were regarded as dangerous in most situations and persecuted, either that or used as weapons by those in authority -- that was how things were.

	In any case, this thirteen-year-old girl was saddled with a cruel and harsh fate.		In any case, this thirteen-year-old girl was saddled with a cruel and harsh fate.

	The reason why Kamito knew about the ~~demon sealing eye~~ which was unknown to most people, was because there was another girl at the Instructional School who also possessed the same type of ''eye''.		The reason why Kamito knew about the Demon Sealing Eye which was unknown to most people, was because there was another girl at the Instructional School who also possessed the same type of ''eye''.

	That girl had been used as a weapon and perished at an early age.		That girl had been used as a weapon and perished at an early age.
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	"I see. The Rupture Division also served as the team for controlling that militarized spirit."		"I see. The Rupture Division also served as the team for controlling that militarized spirit."

	"That's right. They were the team prepared for using the tool that is me. Only with the Rupture Division present can the ~~demon sealing eye~~ be operated."		"That's right. They were the team prepared for using the tool that is me. Only with the Rupture Division present can the Demon Sealing Eye be operated."

	In other words--		In other words--

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	He began to grow and develop with unbelievable speed.		He began to grow and develop with unbelievable speed.

	Even the elders who decided to have them meet had not anticipated this. By this point, even amongst ranked ~~spirit contractors~~ who also trained at the «Instructional School», there were few who could match him in combat.		Even the elders who decided to have them meet had not anticipated this. By this point, even amongst ranked elementalists who also trained at the «Instructional School», there were few who could match him in combat.

	"You're not going to kill me?"		"You're not going to kill me?"
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	...A lap pillow, how nostalgic.		...A lap pillow, how nostalgic.

	(Back then, I always went to sleep on her lap...)		''Back then, I always went to sleep on her lap...''

	Keeping his eyes opened, he stared blankly--		Keeping his eyes opened, he stared blankly--
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	...Right. Just like Kamito, she was raised as a tool.		...Right. Just like Kamito, she was raised as a tool.

	(Isn't that identical to what those «Instructional School» guys were doing...)		''Isn't that identical to what those «Instructional School» guys were doing...''

	He felt intense wrath towards the Principality of Rossvale's knights who raised Milla.		He felt intense wrath towards the Principality of Rossvale's knights who raised Milla.
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	The two hastily gathered their camping equipment.		The two hastily gathered their camping equipment.

	(That girl Claire, surely she must be angry...)		''That girl Claire, surely she must be angry...''

	===Part 3===		===Part 3===
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	...But surely I have no appetite right now.		...But surely I have no appetite right now.

	(Kamito, without you by my side, I...)		''Kamito, without you by my side, I...''

	What was with this pain in her chest?		What was with this pain in her chest?
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	...Loneliness? No, even though that was partially the reason, there was more--		...Loneliness? No, even though that was partially the reason, there was more--

	(I've done so many bad things to that guy in the past...)		''I've done so many bad things to that guy in the past...''

	Claire reflected over everything she had done to this date.		Claire reflected over everything she had done to this date.
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	Whenever Kamito was intimate with other girls, she always felt enraged for no particular reason, unable to accept, wanting to whip him and burn him into charcoal--		Whenever Kamito was intimate with other girls, she always felt enraged for no particular reason, unable to accept, wanting to whip him and burn him into charcoal--

	(...I really am a fool. Clearly now, I can be a bit more forthright.)		''...I really am a fool. Clearly now, I can be a bit more forthright.''

	Just as she sighed--		Just as she sighed--
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	Claire began to pout.		Claire began to pout.

	"When ~~spirit contractors~~ exchange «Oaths», I remember the ritual..."		"When elementalists exchange «Oaths», I remember the ritual..."

	"A kiss from both parties -- is necessary, right?"		"A kiss from both parties -- is necessary, right?"
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	--In the end, Kamito had to spend quite a long time to clear up the misunderstanding.		--In the end, Kamito had to spend quite a long time to clear up the misunderstanding.

	(...Why do they have to be suspicious to this degree?)		''...Why do they have to be suspicious to this degree?''

	Tilting his head in puzzlement, Kamito was lying on a futon in the tent.		Tilting his head in puzzlement, Kamito was lying on a futon in the tent.
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	Milla quietly shook her head.		Milla quietly shook her head.

	(Taken care of with great caution -- hmm?)		''Taken care of with great caution -- hmm?''

	Rather than cherished, this meant something different.		Rather than cherished, this meant something different.
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	--Those short but wonderful days.		--Those short but wonderful days.

	(Restia...)		''Restia...''

	As if trying to catch a hold of the night sky which reminded him of her beautiful black hair, Kamito reached out with his hand.		As if trying to catch a hold of the night sky which reminded him of her beautiful black hair, Kamito reached out with his hand.
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	The spirit seal on his left hand was hurting.		The spirit seal on his left hand was hurting.

	(Summoning? Calling for me...)		''Summoning? Calling for me...''

	Very soon, he would have to settle things with her--		Very soon, he would have to settle things with her--
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	...I see. Indeed, Claire and the girls were probably not going to come to this male bath.		...I see. Indeed, Claire and the girls were probably not going to come to this male bath.

	(Something she doesn't want the others to hear--)		''Something she doesn't want the others to hear--''

	Kamito immersed himself in the bath again.		Kamito immersed himself in the bath again.
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	"No I didn't. But I could guess."		"No I didn't. But I could guess."

	The demon sealing eye. This was a special eye that descendants from lineages of ~~spirit contractors~~ were born with in rare instances.		The demon sealing eye. This was a special eye that descendants from lineages of elementalists were born with in rare instances.

	A type of extremely rare spirit ore.		A type of extremely rare spirit ore.
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	Kamito groaned painfully. Recalling how his own emotions were killed off and the orphans at the «Instructional School» who were used and expended like tools--		Kamito groaned painfully. Recalling how his own emotions were killed off and the orphans at the «Instructional School» who were used and expended like tools--

	(If I had never met Restia, my fate would have been the same as those guys...)		''If I had never met Restia, my fate would have been the same as those guys...''

	"...Why are you telling me this?"		"...Why are you telling me this?"
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	Tactical class -- amongst military spirits, this was a type of spirit that was particularly difficult to control.		Tactical class -- amongst military spirits, this was a type of spirit that was particularly difficult to control.

	Other than for exceptional cases like Muir Alenstarl -- this was not the type of spirit that ordinary ~~spirit contractors~~ could control alone.		Other than for exceptional cases like Muir Alenstarl -- this was not the type of spirit that ordinary elementalists could control alone.

	Controlling that type of spirit required specialized training as a team.		Controlling that type of spirit required specialized training as a team.
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	Gazing up at the night sky concealed by darkness, Kamito muttered to himself.		Gazing up at the night sky concealed by darkness, Kamito muttered to himself.

	(...Restia, even now, I'm still waiting for you to continue that bedtime story.)		''...Restia, even now, I'm still waiting for you to continue that bedtime story.''

	At this very moment -- a sharp pain was felt in his left hand's «Spirit Seal».		At this very moment -- a sharp pain was felt in his left hand's «Spirit Seal».
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	Emanating an aura of ominous disaster from all over, the black knight -- Nepenthes Lore.		Emanating an aura of ominous disaster from all over, the black knight -- Nepenthes Lore.

	Having absorbed divine power from numerous ~~spirit contractors~~ to become a complete monster, the materialization of the Demon King's will.		Having absorbed divine power from numerous elementalists to become a complete monster, the materialization of the Demon King's will.

	"Well then, let's begin to blade dance, Kamito..."		"Well then, let's begin to blade dance, Kamito..."