Seirei Tsukai no Blade Dance:Volume9 Prologue - Revision history

Cthaeh: reformatting + consistency

2015-12-10T03:22:47Z

reformatting + consistency

Zzhk: "made of materials" is kind of redundant

2013-04-22T07:28:49Z

"made of materials" is kind of redundant

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	From an outsider’s perspective, it looked like some mediocre bracelet. However, the truth was that almost all of the many legend-class magic tools were of modest design without exquisite ornaments.		From an outsider’s perspective, it looked like some mediocre bracelet. However, the truth was that almost all of the many legend-class magic tools were of modest design without exquisite ornaments.

	(~~It’s made of materials consisting of~~ highly pure mithril?—)		(The material is highly pure mithril?—)

	The words engraved on its surface belonged to the lost language of High Ancient.		The words engraved on its surface belonged to the lost language of High Ancient.

203.116.187.12: Some edits to help improve the flow of sentences

2013-04-22T06:15:52Z

Some edits to help improve the flow of sentences

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	—The night before the finale.		—The night before the finale.

	Immediately following the moment when the style of match finals was announced at the grand shrine of «Ragna Ys».		Immediately following the moment when the style in which the match finals will be conducted was announced at the grand shrine of «Ragna Ys».

	Under the cover of the night, one small flying boat landed in the middle of a forest.		Under the cover of the night, one small flying boat landed in the middle of a forest.

	The ship’s nationality was cleverly disguised, but it was actually Alphas Theocracy’s high speed smuggling boat, loaded with a militarized spirit.		The ship’s nationality was cleverly disguised, but it was actually the Alphas Theocracy’s high speed smuggling boat, loaded with a militarized spirit.

	“…You’re finally here.”		“…You’re finally here.”
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	At the front of the door, Lily Flame had been waiting for the boat.		At the front of the door, Lily Flame had been waiting for the boat.

	From the entrance of the boat that landed without a sound, a group of ~~priest~~, wearing jet-black robes alighted.		From the entrance of the boat that landed without a sound, a group of priests, wearing jet-black robes alighted.

	There were twenty of them. All of them had covered their faces with black cloth, but it could be easily inferred from their quick movements that they were trained combat specialists.		There were twenty of them. All of them had covered their faces with black cloth, but it could be easily inferred from their quick movements that they were trained combat specialists.
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	From an outsider’s perspective, it looked like some mediocre bracelet. However, the truth was that almost all of the many legend-class magic tools were of modest design without exquisite ornaments.		From an outsider’s perspective, it looked like some mediocre bracelet. However, the truth was that almost all of the many legend-class magic tools were of modest design without exquisite ornaments.

	(It’s made of materials of highly pure mithril?—)		(It’s made of materials consisting of highly pure mithril?—)

	The words engraved on its surface belonged to the lost language of High Ancient.		The words engraved on its surface belonged to the lost language of High Ancient.
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	“…«Valaraukar»!? Don’t tell me, that demon ruling over flames of ruination—“		“…«Valaraukar»!? Don’t tell me, that demon ruling over flames of ruination—“

	A shiver ran down her spine. That was true name of the devil that destroyed countless number of cities and countries in the far ancient times—the period of the «Spirit War».		A shiver ran down her spine. That was the true name of the devil that destroyed countless number of cities and countries in the far ancient times—the period of the «Spirit War».

	(—The Theocracy's «Snake» actually prepared such a spirit.)		(—The Theocracy's «Snake» actually prepared such a spirit.)
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	“What, Lily, are you ordering Muir?”		“What, Lily, are you ordering Muir?”

	“If you cause an uproar here, you might lose the right to participant the finals.”		“If you cause an uproar here, you might lose the right to be a participant in the finals.”

	“…”		“…”
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	That’s right, that was her goal for appearing here.		That’s right, that was her goal for appearing here.

	“It's now ~~here~~, right? Show it to me.”		“It's here now, right? Show it to me.”

	“Ye—“		“Ye—“
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	“…Ha… You guys, what—!”		“…Ha… You guys, what—!”

	“All is within your plans. Princess as one who has inherited royal blood, you shall now be the new vessel to incarnate the Hierarch.”		“All is within your plans. Princess, as one who has inherited royal blood, you shall now be the new vessel to incarnate the Hierarch.”

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KuroiHikari at 11:30, 21 April 2013

2013-04-21T11:30:50Z

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	===Part 1===		===Part 1===
	—The night before the ~~decisive battle~~.		—The night before the finale.

	Immediately following the moment when the style of match finals was announced at the grand shrine of «Ragna Ys».		Immediately following the moment when the style of match finals was announced at the grand shrine of «Ragna Ys».

Ajmc93: /* Part 2 */

2013-04-19T08:07:53Z

Part 2

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	“…I’ll definitely not let this pass. That girl, those conceited brats from «Instructional School», the girls in «Team Scarlet», and Kazehaya Kamito—Everyone, everyone, everyone, everyone will be killed by my very hands.”		“…I’ll definitely not let this pass. That girl, those conceited brats from «Instructional School», the girls in «Team Scarlet», and Kazehaya Kamito—Everyone, everyone, everyone, everyone will be killed by my very hands.”

	Her charming red lips quivered in hatred. Her defeat at Pandemoium was etched as a unerasable humiliation into Sjora’s memories.		Her charming red lips quivered in hatred. Her defeat at Pandemoium was etched as an unerasable humiliation into Sjora’s memories.

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KuroiHikari: mirroring zzhk's choice of words /* Part 2 */

2013-03-29T07:28:53Z

mirroring zzhk's choice of words Part 2

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	Sealed in the ring was a spirit that would form a pair with the Demon «Baldanders».		Sealed in the ring was a spirit that would form a pair with the Demon «Baldanders».

	~~“One that snatch away everything—«Bandersnatch»~~. With this, I’ll…”		“The one who takes everything by force—«Bandersnatch». With this, I’ll…”

	Sjora Kahn was gazing at the ring with a rapturous expression,		Sjora Kahn was gazing at the ring with a rapturous expression,

Zzhk at 10:31, 15 March 2013

2013-03-15T10:31:43Z

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			==Prologue==

	===Part 1===		===Part 1===
	—The night before the decisive battle.		—The night before the decisive battle.

Navazishmh: /* Part 2 */ Change the volume number

2013-03-06T03:13:59Z

Part 2: Change the volume number

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	<noinclude>{{SeireiDance Nav\|prev=Seirei Tsukai no Blade Dance:Volume8 Illustrations\|next=Seirei Tsukai no Blade Dance:~~Volume8~~ Chapter1}}</noinclude>		<noinclude>{{SeireiDance Nav\|prev=Seirei Tsukai no Blade Dance:Volume8 Illustrations\|next=Seirei Tsukai no Blade Dance:Volume9 Chapter1}}</noinclude>

Zzhk: nav

2013-03-06T02:26:44Z

nav

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	The '''thing''' that had Sjora’s appearance wickedly distorted her lips.		The '''thing''' that had Sjora’s appearance wickedly distorted her lips.


			<noinclude>{{SeireiDance Nav\|prev=Seirei Tsukai no Blade Dance:Volume8 Illustrations\|next=Seirei Tsukai no Blade Dance:Volume8 Chapter1}}</noinclude>

Zzhk: consistency (elementalist, Hierarch), several word choice edits

2013-03-06T02:25:04Z

consistency (elementalist, Hierarch), several word choice edits

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