Strike Witches:Afrika Chapter7 - Revision history

Piroko: Small fixes. Selkirk-requested fixes

2009-03-01T08:57:56Z

Small fixes. Selkirk-requested fixes

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	Following right behind her was, of course, Leutnant Liesa. She took off waving happily in our direction.		Following right behind her was, of course, Leutnant Liesa. She took off waving happily in our direction.

	It sure is a lot of effort just to go on a sortie here in Africa, where lift-off propulsion systems ~~weren~~'t used.		It sure is a lot of effort just to go on a sortie here in Africa, where lift-off propulsion systems aren't used.


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	One of the techs pulled the nearly unused ammunition belt from the ammo case, and I took a picture of the surprised techs as they each inspected it in turn. I had forgotten to take pictures during the first flight, and while I had decided to make sure I took pictures this time around, I would still have quite a few shots left over for other things.		One of the techs pulled the nearly unused ammunition belt from the ammo case, and I took a picture of the surprised techs as they each inspected it in turn. I had forgotten to take pictures during the first flight, and while I had decided to make sure I took pictures this time around, I would still have quite a few shots left over for other things.

	~~But to~~ only ~~use~~ 60 rounds to bring down four flyers~~, it~~ was ~~really~~ like Leutnant Rall ~~had~~ said. Fifteen rounds per craft, with machine-like precision.		She only used 60 rounds to bring down four flyers. It was just like Leutnant Rall said: Fifteen rounds per craft, with machine-like precision.


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	"Enemy formation, breaking apart!"		"Enemy formation, breaking apart!"

	Apparently, the enemy had realized their foolishness in maintaining formation after getting two flyers shot down in quick succession. By scattering, and laying down fire on Marseille from all directions, the Neuroi would have the advantage.		Apparently, the enemy had realized their foolishness in maintaining formation after getting two flyers shot down in quick succession. By scattering and laying down fire on Marseille from all directions, the Neuroi would have the advantage.

	"Six of them to the left!"		"Six of them to the left!"
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	"Twelve of them, sir."		"Twelve of them, sir."

	A surprised look passed quickly over the general's face. He shook Marseille's hand, then got back into the car without another word.		A surprised look passed quickly over the general's face. He shook Marseille's hand, then got back into the car without saying another word.

Piroko at 03:39, 1 March 2009

2009-03-01T03:39:07Z

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	A white flag was waved at the far end of the airstrip - permission to take off.		A white flag was waved at the far end of the airstrip - permission to take off.

	Marseille began slowly ~~approaching~~ the runway.		Marseille began to slowly approach the runway.

	"Why don't you come visit me when I get back?"		"Why don't you come visit me when I get back?"
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	I stared at Marseille as I tried to think of what she could want from me. However, with one last smile in my direction, she roared down the runway and into the sky.		I stared at Marseille as I tried to think of what she could want from me. However, with one last smile in my direction, she roared down the runway and into the sky.

	Following right behind her was of course Leutnant Liesa. She took off waving happily in our direction.		Following right behind her was, of course, Leutnant Liesa. She took off waving happily in our direction.

	It sure is a lot of effort just to go on a sortie here in Africa, where lift-off propulsion systems weren't used.		It sure is a lot of effort just to go on a sortie here in Africa, where lift-off propulsion systems weren't used.

Selkirk at 16:38, 28 February 2009

2009-02-28T16:38:15Z

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	However, Marseille was different. Even after the enemy scattered, she took the initiative and continued with her relentless attack.		However, Marseille was different. Even after the enemy scattered, she took the initiative and continued with her relentless attack.
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	"Third one!"		"Third one!"

Selkirk at 16:18, 28 February 2009

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Selkirk at 13:16, 28 February 2009

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	In the end, there were two more sorties, and Marseille returned to base that evening with five more victories.		In the end, there were two more sorties, and Marseille returned to base that evening with five more victories.

	Seventeen in one day, that was Marseille's final total for the day. At noon, I had been brought to the location of the first crash, and took several pictures of the crater. The actual craft had already dissipated into ~~ligth~~ and disappeared, but there was still a great scar left on the land. However, I suppose the wind would blow again soon, and cover it all under the sand once more.		Seventeen in one day, that was Marseille's final total for the day. At noon, I had been brought to the location of the first crash, and took several pictures of the crater. The actual craft had already dissipated into light and disappeared, but there was still a great scar left on the land. However, I suppose the wind would blow again soon, and cover it all under the sand once more.

	An ephemeral battle, leaving nothing behind, just like a mirage; that was the nature of these desert battles.		An ephemeral battle, leaving nothing behind, just like a mirage; that was the nature of these desert battles.

Selkirk at 13:15, 28 February 2009

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 "Enemy, shifting to the east! The rest of them are breaking formation too!"
-She was most likely planning on taking out the smaller detachment before the main formation could catch up. It was hard to tell what was going on from the sparse information coming from the receiver.
+She was most likely taking out the smaller detachment before the main formation could catch up. I could only gather a fragmented idea of what was going on from the sparse information coming in.
-Somehow or other, she was now pursuing the six flyers that had gone east, and already had four victories.
+In any case, she had pursued the six flyers that had gone east, and apparently had shot down four of them.
 "Enemy, out of sight."
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 They must have found them again.
-"We're going in for one pass."
+"We're going in for a pass."
 "Roger."
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 "It's down!"
-In just ten minutes of fighting, Marseille had shot down 8 of the Neuroi flyers.
+In just ten minutes of fighting, Marseille had shot down 8 of the Neuroi flyers. Skill of terrifying proportions, so skilled that Lt. Liesa could not even get a single shot off. That's who Marseille was.

Selkirk at 12:04, 28 February 2009

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 Marseille's long hair trailed out behind her like a airplane vapor trail, and even like a powerful eagle, flying upward higher and higher into the sky.
-Long ago, I also aspired to fly through the skies like Marseille. Equipping a Striker unit, and heading to a different world, higher than anyone, faster than anyone. But, that world is closed to me now. I could no longer had what it took to fly through those strife-filled skies.
+Long ago, I also aspired to fly through the skies like Marseille. Equipping a Striker unit, and heading to a different world, higher than anyone, faster than anyone. But, that world is closed to me now. I no longer had what it took to fly through those strife-filled skies.
 "Are you alright?"
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 Only static came through the radio after that.

Selkirk at 03:59, 28 February 2009

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	"Look at this, the Oberleutnant only used 60 rounds!"		"Look at this, the Oberleutnant only used 60 rounds!"

	One of the techs pulled the nearly unused ammunition belt from the ammo case, and I took a picture of the surprised techs as they inspected in turn. I had forgotten to take pictures during the first flight, and while I had decided to make sure I took pictures this time around, I would still have quite a few shots left over for other things.		One of the techs pulled the nearly unused ammunition belt from the ammo case, and I took a picture of the surprised techs as they each inspected it in turn. I had forgotten to take pictures during the first flight, and while I had decided to make sure I took pictures this time around, I would still have quite a few shots left over for other things.

	But to only use 60 rounds to bring down four flyers, it was really like Leutnant Rall said. Fifteen rounds per craft, with machine-like precision.		But to only use 60 rounds to bring down four flyers, it was really like Leutnant Rall had said. Fifteen rounds per craft, with machine-like precision.


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	"Enemy Hierax, numbering approximately thirty!"		"Enemy Hierax, numbering approximately thirty!"

	~~Reports~~ came from the radio receiver in quick succession.		The reports came from the radio receiver in quick succession.

	Outnumbered 15 to 1, the exact opposite of Monty's ideal conditions. However, Marseille did not even break a sweat at the numbers.		Outnumbered 15 to 1, the exact opposite of Monty's ideal conditions. However, Marseille did not even break a sweat at the numbers.

Selkirk at 03:56, 28 February 2009

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	I was immediately reminded of what I had heard last night.		I was immediately reminded of what I had heard last night.

			"So long as a keep an eye out on the enemy's cannons, I won't be in any danger. The only way I'll be in any danger is if I make a mistake and get caught by surprise."

			Edging up close to the enemy, dodging at the last moment, and swinging back right behind the enemy... that was her specialty. I suppose that's why a wingman at her back would only get in the way.

			"Hard left!"

			Lt. Liesa's voice. Perhaps Marseille had overshot her target.

			"0839, 2 klicks east-south-east of El Imad, enemy down."

			"Remaining enemies are breaking off. We will return to base as well."

			Marseille's calm voice came through the radio receiver.

			In the mere twenty minutes since the beginning of hostilities, Marseille had shot down four enemy flyers. That must have been par for the course for her.



			Marseille returned to base at 9:14. We waved, but she was as composed as she was yesterday. As the technicians came up to welcome her back warmly one after the other, the remaining technicians prepared for the next attack. The munitions technician handed her a new ammunition belt and gun, while the engineers inspected the engines and filled them with new coolant, and the electrical engineers checked to make sure all the circuits were working.

			Matilda hurried over with a sun-shade, as Marseille prepared for the next sortie, still in her Striker.

			"Just four down, huh. I'll bet that wasn't enough for you."

			I walked up to her side and handed her a towel, which she accepted with a small self-deprecating grin.

			"The day's only just getting started, and those Neuroi will be back. There's a long way to go yet."

			"Refit complete!"

			The technicians finished their work and backed away from the Striker. Marseille tossed the towel back to me, checked her preparations, and took off into the air again.

			As we all watched her fly off again, the munitions team started murmuring among themselves excitedly.

			"Look at this, the Oberleutnant only used 60 rounds!"

			One of the techs pulled the nearly unused ammunition belt from the ammo case, and I took a picture of the surprised techs as they inspected in turn. I had forgotten to take pictures during the first flight, and while I had decided to make sure I took pictures this time around, I would still have quite a few shots left over for other things.

			But to only use 60 rounds to bring down four flyers, it was really like Leutnant Rall said. Fifteen rounds per craft, with machine-like precision.



			"Right, 10 klicks, enemy sighted!"

			"Enemy Hierax, numbering approximately thirty!"

			Reports came from the radio receiver in quick succession.

			Outnumbered 15 to 1, the exact opposite of Monty's ideal conditions. However, Marseille did not even break a sweat at the numbers.

			"Follow behind me, Liesa!"

			"Roger."

			Only static came through the radio after that.

Selkirk at 14:41, 27 February 2009

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	I stared at Marseille as I tried to think of what she could want from me. However, with one last smile in my direction, she roared down the runway and into the sky.		I stared at Marseille as I tried to think of what she could want from me. However, with one last smile in my direction, she roared down the runway and into the sky.

	Following right behind her was of course Leutnant ~~Raisa~~. She took off waving happily in our direction.		Following right behind her was of course Leutnant Liesa. She took off waving happily in our direction.

	It sure is a lot of effort just to go on a sortie here in Africa, where lift-off propulsion systems weren't used.		It sure is a lot of effort just to go on a sortie here in Africa, where lift-off propulsion systems weren't used.
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	Marseille's voice came from a nearby receiver.		Marseille's voice came from a nearby receiver.

	"~~Raisa~~, we will intercept!"		"Liesa, we will intercept!"

	"This is ~~Raisa~~, enemy formation consists of small flyers, Hierax class, 10 units."		"This is Liesa, enemy formation consists of small flyers, Hierax class, 10 units."

	Lt. ~~Raisa~~ reported the details of the encounter for us back at base. The Hierax class's air combat worthiness was far below that of a Witch.		Lt. Liesa reported the details of the encounter for us back at base. The Hierax class's air combat worthiness was far below that of a Witch.

	They could be an annoyance if they came all at once in large numbers, but they were slow and awkward in flight, and even I used to treat them as sitting ducks. With only those as enemies, it would be an easy victory.		They could be an annoyance if they came all at once in large numbers, but they were slow and awkward in flight, and even I used to treat them as sitting ducks. With only those as enemies, it would be an easy victory.
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	"0833, 1 klick south-east of Imad, yet another down!"		"0833, 1 klick south-east of Imad, yet another down!"

	The next moment, Lt. ~~Raisa~~'s voice came from the radio again, this time with a tone of urgency.		The next moment, Lt. Liesa's voice came from the radio again, this time with a tone of urgency.

	"Six enemy craft, Chelidon class high-speed light flyers, coming in from 6 o'clock!"		"Six enemy craft, Chelidon class high-speed light flyers, coming in from 6 o'clock!"
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	The Chelidon class, with a streamlined design giving it a high maximum speed and excellent maneuverability, was a formidable enemy. With six of them heading towards them from the rear in a surprise attack, would they be alright?		The Chelidon class, with a streamlined design giving it a high maximum speed and excellent maneuverability, was a formidable enemy. With six of them heading towards them from the rear in a surprise attack, would they be alright?

	"~~Raisa~~, get away from my rear."		"Liesa, get away from my rear."

	Marseille's voice.		Marseille's voice.

	I was immediately reminded of what I had heard last night.		I was immediately reminded of what I had heard last night.