Suzumiya Haruki no Seitenkan:Volume1 Chapter1 - Revision history

RCG M3tal: Reinsertion of the "Marry Me" quote. It may be retarded, but later chapters have parts that make no sense without. The Russian connotation "comrade" is equally stupid, and doujinshi used "bride" line?

2010-05-23T21:26:34Z

Reinsertion of the "Marry Me" quote. It may be retarded, but later chapters have parts that make no sense without. The Russian connotation "comrade" is equally stupid, and doujinshi used "bride" line?

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	Up to this point, the introduction was still normal, still ordinary, so I saw no point in turning around to look at him. I just stared at the front and listened to his deep, clear voice.		Up to this point, the introduction was still normal, still ordinary, so I saw no point in turning around to look at him. I just stared at the front and listened to his deep, clear voice.

	"Normal humans do not interest me! If anyone here is an alien, a time traveler, a slider, or an esper, then come! Be my ~~comrade~~! That is all." <!--God, that "marry me" line is retarded and I regret ever putting it in there. Out it goes.-->		"Normal humans do not interest me! If anyone here is an alien, a time traveler, a slider, or an esper, then come! Be my bride! That is all." <!--God, that "marry me" line is retarded and I regret ever putting it in there. Out it goes.-->

	Eh?		Eh?

RCG M3tal: There was a repeat "Haruki let go of my ponytail..." "He finally let go of my ponytail". Changed it so the first one is "lessened grip"

2010-05-23T21:01:43Z

There was a repeat "Haruki let go of my ponytail..." "He finally let go of my ponytail". Changed it so the first one is "lessened grip"

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	"Really? Wow, that’s a really excellent idea. Can you let go of my hair now?"		"Really? Wow, that’s a really excellent idea. Can you let go of my hair now?"

	Haruki ~~let go~~ of my ~~ponytail~~ but not his excitement. <!-- I DECLARE MY LOVE FOR JINTOR IN THIS SENTENCE. -->		Haruki lessened his grip of my hair but not his excitement. <!-- I DECLARE MY LOVE FOR JINTOR IN THIS SENTENCE. -->

	"What's with that attitude? You should be waaay happier about something like this!"		"What's with that attitude? You should be waaay happier about something like this!"

Kaisos at 06:20, 12 October 2008

2008-10-12T06:20:35Z

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	"Normal humans do not interest me! If anyone here is an alien, a time traveler, a slider, or an esper, then come! Be my comrade! That is all." <!--God, that "marry me" line is retarded and I regret ever putting it in there. Out it goes.-->		"Normal humans do not interest me! If anyone here is an alien, a time traveler, a slider, or an esper, then come! Be my comrade! That is all." <!--God, that "marry me" line is retarded and I regret ever putting it in there. Out it goes.-->

	Eh~~, what~~'s this… so early in the morning?		Eh?

			What's this… so early in the morning?

	Upon hearing something as off-the-wall as that, there’s no way I couldn't help but turn around.		Upon hearing something as off-the-wall as that, there’s no way I couldn't help but turn around.

Kaisos at 04:25, 12 October 2008

2008-10-12T04:25:20Z

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	As I was thinking about these useless things, the boring ceremony finally ended, (why do we need to sit through these things again?) and I, along with my not-so-willing new classmates, entered the 1-5 classroom.		As I was thinking about these useless things, the boring ceremony finally ended, (why do we need to sit through these things again?) and I, along with my not-so-willing new classmates, entered the 1-5 classroom.

	Our homeroom teacher, Okabe-sensei, with her practiced-for-an-hour-in-front-of-a-mirror smile, walked to the front of the class and gave a self-introduction. She first said that she was a PE teacher, and was the managing teacher for the girls’ handball team. Then she moved on to stuff like how, back when she was in university, she used to play on the women's handball team, and even won the championship, and that this school seriously lacked handball players, so whoever entered the team would become a regular instantly. She sounds really desperate. Guess there’s not much support for handball here... She went on to say stuff like how handball was the most interesting sport in all the world and on and on.~~.. just~~ when I thought that the mind-numbing handball dialogue would never end, she suddenly blurted out:		Our homeroom teacher, Okabe-sensei, with her practiced-for-an-hour-in-front-of-a-mirror smile, walked to the front of the class and gave a self-introduction. She first said that she was a PE teacher, and was the managing teacher for the girls’ handball team. Then she moved on to stuff like how, back when she was in university, she used to play on the women's handball team, and even won the championship, and that this school seriously lacked handball players, so whoever entered the team would become a regular instantly. She sounds really desperate. Guess there’s not much support for handball here... She went on to say stuff like how handball was the most interesting sport in all the world and on and on. Just when I thought that the mind-numbing handball dialogue would never end, she suddenly blurted out:

	"Now, let's all introduce ourselves!"		"Now, let's all introduce ourselves!"
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	"Normal humans do not interest me! If anyone here is an alien, a time traveler, a slider, or an esper, then come! Be my comrade! That is all." <!--God, that "marry me" line is retarded and I regret ever putting it in there. Out it goes.-->		"Normal humans do not interest me! If anyone here is an alien, a time traveler, a slider, or an esper, then come! Be my comrade! That is all." <!--God, that "marry me" line is retarded and I regret ever putting it in there. Out it goes.-->

	~~What~~'s this… so early in the morning?		Eh, what's this… so early in the morning?

	Upon hearing something as off-the-wall as that, there’s no way I couldn't help but turn around.		Upon hearing something as off-the-wall as that, there’s no way I couldn't help but turn around.
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	“Aw, that’s too bad. You should check out the game next week, though. I hear they’re really going—“		“Aw, that’s too bad. You should check out the game next week, though. I hear they’re really going—“

	"Go away! You are ~~aggravating me~~!"		"Go away! You are annoying!"

	That's how it went.		That's how it went.

Kaisos: FINAL EDIT. SOMEONE SHUT DISCREET UP.

2008-10-11T20:21:49Z

FINAL EDIT. SOMEONE SHUT DISCREET UP.

Show changes

Kaisos: Fixe'd. A lot. Also added ironic and amusing comments.

2008-09-18T04:32:54Z

Fixe'd. A lot. Also added ironic and amusing comments.

Show changes

Kaisos at 23:41, 28 May 2008

2008-05-28T23:41:29Z

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	He was tall, and by tall, I mean ''tall''. He had long dark hair that came down past his neck. His angular face was filled with daring and challenge as the rest of the class stared at him. His seriousness and zeal shone through his glinting eyes and long eyebrows. His lips were tightly pursed in a frown.		He was tall, and by tall, I mean ''tall''. He had long dark hair that came down past his neck. His angular face was filled with daring and challenge as the rest of the class stared at him. His seriousness and zeal shone through his glinting eyes and long eyebrows. His lips were tightly pursed in a frown.

	~~All this~~ was my first impression of ~~this guy~~.		This was my first impression of Suzimiya Haruki.

	Haruki, with his passionate eyes, scanned the class slowly, stopped to glare at me (I had my mouth wide open), and then sat down and crossed his arms without so much as a smile.		Haruki, with his passionate eyes, scanned the class slowly, stopped to glare at me (I had my mouth wide open), and then sat down and crossed his arms without so much as a smile.
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	After grabbing everyone's attention on the first day, Haruki reverted to being an ordinary high school ~~male~~.		After grabbing everyone's attention on the first day, Haruki reverted to being an ordinary high school boy.

	This was only the calm before the storm! Looking back, I finally understand it all.		This was only the calm before the storm! Looking back, I finally understand it all.
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	But, just as I was still part of this class, there were always people who wanted to talk to the eyebrow-locking shut-mouthed glowering Haruki. Sucks to be them.		But, just as I was still part of this class, there were always people who wanted to talk to the eyebrow-locking shut-mouthed glowering Haruki. Sucks to be them.

	Most of the people were sports-obsessed, delinquent-esque guys; I guess they saw a fellow kinsman in the tall, ~~thickset~~ Haruki. This would be perfectly fine if Haruki actually was a sports-obsessed delinquent.		Most of the people were sports-obsessed, delinquent-esque guys; I guess they saw a fellow kinsman in the tall, well-built Haruki. This would be perfectly fine if Haruki actually was a sports-obsessed delinquent.

	"Hey, did you see the game last night? The one that went on for an hour without a single goal scored?"		"Hey, did you see the game last night? The one that went on for an hour without a single goal scored?"
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	Unfortunately for my poor sanity, Haruki would completely ignore these conventions and start stripping before the girls had even left.		Unfortunately for my poor sanity, Haruki would completely ignore these conventions and start stripping before the girls had even left.

	It wasn’t as if he was an exhibitionist or anything. I think he simply didn’t care whether anybody saw his body or not. Wearing his usual scowl, he’d just ~~throw~~ his pants ~~onto the desk~~ and ~~get~~ into his gym gear.
			It wasn’t as if he was an exhibitionist or anything. I think he simply didn’t care whether anybody saw his body or not. Wearing his usual scowl, he’d just start taking off his clothes, starting with his shirt, before pulling off his pants and getting into his gym gear.

	While this was happening most of the girls in the class would be either completely confused or squealing in delight, so it was up to me to get them out of there, trying to ignore Haruki’s near-naked body.		While this was happening most of the girls in the class would be either completely confused or squealing in delight, so it was up to me to get them out of there, trying to ignore Haruki’s near-naked body.

	According to gossip, the other guys in the class (led by Asakura Ryou) attempted to talk Haruki out of that kind of behaviour, but he refused. Something about “the male body being nothing to be ashamed of”. Every PE lesson, Haruki would totally ignore everyone else and take his ~~pants off~~ without so much as a glance. So, in order to preserve the purity of our maiden eyes, we girls decided to leave the classroom as soon as the bell rang. But for those who are too corrupted to turn back, the photographs are available at 200 yen apiece from a certain Kazuma-kun in 1-5.
			According to gossip, the other guys in the class (led by Asakura Ryou) attempted to talk Haruki out of that kind of behaviour, but he refused. Something about “the male body being nothing to be ashamed of”. Every PE lesson, Haruki would totally ignore everyone else and take off his clothes without so much as a glance. So, in order to preserve the purity of our maiden eyes, we girls decided to leave the classroom as soon as the bell rang. But for those who are either too corrupted to turn back, or who don't believe me, the photographs are available at 200 yen apiece from a certain Kazuma-kun in 1-5.

	Seriously, though, Haruki is pretty well built… argh, where am I going with this?		Seriously, though, Haruki is pretty well built… argh, where am I going with this?
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	I paused a while, trying to think of my answer under that glare.		I paused a while, trying to think of my answer under that glare.

	"F-~~for a while~~, I think."		"A-awhile ago, I think."

	"~~Truth be told?~~"		"Well..."

	Haruki tipped his chair back and put his hands behind his head, looking both annoyed and bored.		Haruki tipped his chair back and put his hands behind his head, looking both annoyed and bored.
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	Of course, the only chance I could talk to Haruki was the short bit of time before home room session, as he’s never in the classroom during breaks. But, since I sit in front of him, I'm pretty sure I have a better chance of talking to him than anybody else.		Of course, the only chance I could talk to Haruki was the short bit of time before home room session, as he’s never in the classroom during breaks. But, since I sit in front of him, I'm pretty sure I have a better chance of talking to him than anybody else.

	What shocked me the most is that Haruki actually answered my question. I just thought that he’d go all like, “Silence! You’re a waste of time!” Maybe this ~~make~~ me as weird as he is, talking to him like that?		What shocked me the most is that Haruki actually answered my question. I just thought that he’d go all like, “Silence! You’re a waste of time!” Maybe this makes me as weird as he is, talking to him like that?

	So when I came to school the next day and discovered that, instead of resorting to more gel, Haruki had gotten a haircut, I felt quite depressed.		So when I came to school the next day and discovered that, instead of resorting to more gel, Haruki had gotten a haircut, I felt quite depressed.
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	He flipped a lock of hair out from in front of his face, and stared at me with those bright, cold eyes. Doesn’t his face have any other expressions besides “Angry” and “Off”?		He flipped a lock of hair out from in front of his face, and stared at me with those bright, cold eyes. Doesn’t his face have any other expressions besides “Angry” and “Off”?

	"Did that one girl tell you? Taniguchi, right? Why is that girl in the same class as me year after year? I do hope she ~~isn’t~~ one of those stalking psycho girls that follow you around for years.”		"Did that one girl tell you? Taniguchi, right? Why is that girl in the same class as me year after year? I hope she isn't one of those stalking psycho girls that follow you around for years.”

	"Don't think so," I thought.		"Don't think so," I thought.
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	He seems to totally dismiss everything.		He seems to totally dismiss everything.

	"Every single one of them was silly and childish! I cannot engage in a serious relationship with them! Each one of them expects to be taken out to dinner and ~~paid for, with~~ candles! Often a sappy romantic movie beforehand, for a 'heart-pounding experience'! And at the end of the day, all they’d say is a shy 'see you tomorrow' and then walk away!"		"Every single one of them was silly and childish! I cannot engage in a serious relationship with them!
			Each one of them expects to be taken out to dinner, and they always want candles! Often a sappy romantic movie beforehand, for a 'heart-pounding experience'! And at the end of the day, all they’d say is a shy 'see you tomorrow' and then walk away!"

	"I don’t see much that’s wrong with that," I thought to myself; but there’s no way I’d say that out loud. If Haruki says it's bad, then to him, it’s bad. No exceptions.		"I don’t see much that’s wrong with that," I thought to myself; but there’s no way I’d say that out loud. If Haruki says it's bad, then to him, it’s bad. No exceptions.
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	Sigh…		Sigh…

	I wonder when Haruki started to do weird stuff that made others brand him as an occultist? I guess he was thinking something like ‘Waiting achieves nothing, so why not perform some weird ceremonies to call them out?’ In the end, however, nothing happened. Is that why Haruki always has that "screw-everything~~-ever~~" look on his face...?		I wonder when Haruki started to do weird stuff that made others brand him as an occultist? I guess he was thinking something like ‘Waiting achieves nothing, so why not perform some weird ceremonies to call them out?’ In the end, however, nothing happened. Is that why Haruki always has that "screw-everything" look on his face...?


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	Taniguchi, you look like a total moron with that expression.		Taniguchi, you look like a total moron with that expression.

	"Shut it! That’s not important right now. What kind of ~~magical~~ spell did you cast?"		"Shut it! That’s not important right now. What kind of spell did you cast?"

	"~~Magical spell~~? What?"		"Spell? What spell?"

	I once heard that highly advanced technology is indistinguishable from magic. I remember this as I fire my question back at Taniguchi. She then jabbed her finger at Haruki's empty seat.		I once heard that highly advanced technology is indistinguishable from magic. I remember this as I fire my question back at Taniguchi. She then jabbed her finger at Haruki's empty seat.
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	"Well, I guess there's not much you can do about that."		"Well, I guess there's not much you can do about that."

	"I thought after I graduated to senior high I would encounter some ‘kick-ass’ clubs! But this, this is like trying to get into the Major ~~League~~ but then discovering that the school you're attending doesn't even have a baseball team!"		"I thought after I graduated to senior high I would encounter some ‘kick-ass’ clubs! But this, this is like trying to get into the Major Leagues but then discovering that the school you're attending doesn't even have a baseball team!"

	Haruki looked as if he were some sort of spectre ready to go to a hundred Buddhist monasteries to lay some curses. He stared out at the sky with utter disdain and let out a huge sigh.		Haruki looked as if he were some sort of spectre ready to go to a hundred Buddhist monasteries to lay some curses. He stared out at the sky with utter disdain and let out a huge sigh.
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	"A club!"		"A club!"

	My head suddenly hurt and I don't think it had anything to do with my ~~scalp~~ being ~~nearly peeled off~~.		My head suddenly hurt and I don't think it had anything to do with my hair nearly being ripped out.

	"Really? Wow, that’s a really excellent idea. Can you let go of my hair now?"		"Really? Wow, that’s a really excellent idea. Can you let go of my hair now?"

Kaisos at 05:23, 29 April 2008

2008-04-29T05:23:25Z

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	Upon hearing something as off-the-wall as that, there’s no way I couldn't help but turn around.		Upon hearing something as off-the-wall as that, there’s no way I couldn't help but turn around.

	He was tall, and by tall, I mean ''tall''. He had dark hair that came down ~~just~~ past his neck. His angular face was filled with daring and challenge as the rest of the class stared at him. His seriousness and zeal shone through his glinting eyes and long eyebrows. His lips were tightly pursed in a frown.		He was tall, and by tall, I mean ''tall''. He had long dark hair that came down past his neck. His angular face was filled with daring and challenge as the rest of the class stared at him. His seriousness and zeal shone through his glinting eyes and long eyebrows. His lips were tightly pursed in a frown.

	All this was my first impression of this guy.		All this was my first impression of this guy.
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	Now, why would I say something like that?		Now, why would I say something like that?

	Peculiarity #1: Every day, his hairstyle changed. Added to this, from my observations, there was sort of a weird pattern to it all. On Monday, Haruki would come to school with his hair down. On Tuesday, there’d be a single spike gelled up on the back of his head. On the next day, there'd be two spikes, the day after, three; by Friday, there were four spikes, one on each cardinal direction of his head. Was that supposed to signify something?		Peculiarity #1: Every day, his hairstyle changed. Added to this, from my observations, there was sort of a weird pattern to it all. On Monday, Haruki would come to school with his long hair down. On Tuesday, there’d be a single spike gelled up on the back of his head. On the next day, there'd be two spikes, the day after, three; by Friday, there were four spikes, one on each cardinal direction of his head. Was that supposed to signify something?

	So Monday, zero. Tuesday, one. Wednesday, two...		So Monday, zero. Tuesday, one. Wednesday, two...
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	What shocked me the most is that Haruki actually answered my question. I just thought that he’d go all like, “Silence! You’re a waste of time!” Maybe this make me as weird as he is, talking to him like that?		What shocked me the most is that Haruki actually answered my question. I just thought that he’d go all like, “Silence! You’re a waste of time!” Maybe this make me as weird as he is, talking to him like that?

	So when I came to school the next day and discovered that, instead of ~~having three gelled spikes on his head~~, ~~Haruki’s hair was held back by~~ a ~~yellow hairband~~, I felt quite depressed.		So when I came to school the next day and discovered that, instead of resorting to more gel, Haruki had gotten a haircut, I felt quite depressed.

	What the…? Even though he looks better without the weird spikes, he changed his hairstyle right after I talked to him about it! Does he think I'm an undercover alien and I'm onto his plans or something?		What the…? Even though he looks better without the weird spikes, he changed his hairstyle right after I talked to him about it! Does he think I'm an undercover alien and I'm onto his plans or something?

Kaisos at 16:46, 8 April 2008

2008-04-08T16:46:25Z

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	Upon hearing something as off-the-wall as that, there’s no way I couldn't help but turn around.		Upon hearing something as off-the-wall as that, there’s no way I couldn't help but turn around.

	He had dark hair that came down just past his neck. His angular face was filled with daring and challenge as the rest of the class stared at him. His seriousness and zeal shone through his glinting eyes and long eyebrows. His lips were tightly pursed in a frown. All this was my first impression of this guy.		He was tall, and by tall, I mean ''tall''. He had dark hair that came down just past his neck. His angular face was filled with daring and challenge as the rest of the class stared at him. His seriousness and zeal shone through his glinting eyes and long eyebrows. His lips were tightly pursed in a frown.

			All this was my first impression of this guy.

	Haruki, with his passionate eyes, scanned the class slowly, stopped to glare at me (I had my mouth wide open), and then sat down and crossed his arms without so much as a smile.		Haruki, with his passionate eyes, scanned the class slowly, stopped to glare at me (I had my mouth wide open), and then sat down and crossed his arms without so much as a smile.
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	We started to talk about Haruki.		We started to talk about Haruki.

	"Did you try to talk to Suzumiya~~-kun~~?" Taniguchi asked, a deceptively innocent smile on her face. I nodded.		"Did you try to talk to Suzumiya?" Taniguchi asked, a deceptively innocent smile on her face. I nodded.

	"And then he said some crazy stuff and really you didn't know how to react?"		"And then he said some crazy stuff and really you didn't know how to react?"

Bemosan: no sense, removed the "that i that" in "Every time that i that this thought rose to my head,"

2008-04-03T20:46:02Z

no sense, removed the "that i that" in "Every time that i that this thought rose to my head,"

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	And so, I entered the senior high school in my area.		And so, I entered the senior high school in my area.

	At that point, I’d already begun to regret this decision. My new school sat on top of a very high hill, and, even in the spring weather, students would become hot and sweaty just from climbing the steep road. Looks like my intent to walk to school in a leisurely fashion wasn’t going to work. Every time ~~that I that~~ this thought rose to my head, along with the fact that I would have to walk up this hill every day for the next three years, I became tired and depressed, which is why I overslept a bit today. I was beating myself over the head for not studying harder in middle school. Had I done so, I might have gotten into a better school not at the top of Mount Everest. (I suppose this is why people in fiction invent time machines.) All of this was just too depressing.		At that point, I’d already begun to regret this decision. My new school sat on top of a very high hill, and, even in the spring weather, students would become hot and sweaty just from climbing the steep road. Looks like my intent to walk to school in a leisurely fashion wasn’t going to work. Every time this thought rose to my head, along with the fact that I would have to walk up this hill every day for the next three years, I became tired and depressed, which is why I overslept a bit today. I was beating myself over the head for not studying harder in middle school. Had I done so, I might have gotten into a better school not at the top of Mount Everest. (I suppose this is why people in fiction invent time machines.) All of this was just too depressing.

	That was the reason for my lone grim face in the, pointless, time-wasting entrance ceremony. Everyone else in the room had that "starting a new journey" look on their face; you know, the unique "hopeful, yet filled with uncertainty" look that every new student wears when they enter a new school. (They look really stupid like that.) As for me, that was not the case — a lot of old classmates from my old junior high school were also coming to this school. Added to that, a few of my friends were also here. As a result, I didn't look as worried, or excited, as other people.		That was the reason for my lone grim face in the, pointless, time-wasting entrance ceremony. Everyone else in the room had that "starting a new journey" look on their face; you know, the unique "hopeful, yet filled with uncertainty" look that every new student wears when they enter a new school. (They look really stupid like that.) As for me, that was not the case — a lot of old classmates from my old junior high school were also coming to this school. Added to that, a few of my friends were also here. As a result, I didn't look as worried, or excited, as other people.