Suzumiya Haruki no Seitenkan:Volume1 Chapter6 - Revision history

71.94.133.237 at 17:32, 12 July 2011

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	"Hey! Hurry up!” Haruki yelled at me and pulled my hand. Like that, I was dragged into the entrance hall. The first thing I noticed wasn't the chique decor, but the loud music. Why is someone playing foreign music so loudly in a semi-public space, and if they must play music, why Cher? Ignoring this assault to my ears, Haruki dragged me into the elevator, which had stopped at the ground floor. It’s just simple manners to stare silently at the floor numbers when riding an elevator, but…		"Hey! Hurry up!” Haruki yelled at me and pulled my hand. Like that, I was dragged into the entrance hall. The first thing I noticed wasn't the chique decor, but the loud music. Why is someone playing foreign music so loudly in a semi-public space, and if they must play music, why Cher? Ignoring this assault to my ears, Haruki dragged me into the elevator, which had stopped at the ground floor. It’s just simple manners to stare silently at the floor numbers when riding an elevator, but…

	~~^ Don’t know about this… I mean I’ve never heard of such manners when you’re in an elevator with friends, so it might just be me, but it seems weird.~~

	"That Asakura..."		"That Asakura..."
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	The old lady seemed rather pleased to be talking to a good-looking guy like Haruki.		The old lady seemed rather pleased to be talking to a good-looking guy like Haruki.

	~~^ Previous iteration didn’t make much sense and was kind of repeating earlier creepiness from old lady.~~

	"Come to think of it, although I've often seen that handsome young boy, I don't recall ever seeing his parents. I remember the fine young man's called Ryou. Such a nice name. I was hoping he would at least come and say goodbye... it's such a pity. I forget how many times I invited him over for tea and a chat. But y’know, you're not bad yourself!”		"Come to think of it, although I've often seen that handsome young boy, I don't recall ever seeing his parents. I remember the fine young man's called Ryou. Such a nice name. I was hoping he would at least come and say goodbye... it's such a pity. I forget how many times I invited him over for tea and a chat. But y’know, you're not bad yourself!”
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	"Hey, little lady!" the caretaker called to me only loud enough for me to hear. “That boy’s a looker,” she whispered, “he’ll grow up to be a nice man. If I was just my granddaughter’s age, I’d go for him in a heartbeat, so don’t let him get away! Tame him, and you’ll be set for life.”		"Hey, little lady!" the caretaker called to me only loud enough for me to hear. “That boy’s a looker,” she whispered, “he’ll grow up to be a nice man. If I was just my granddaughter’s age, I’d go for him in a heartbeat, so don’t let him get away! Tame him, and you’ll be set for life.”

	~~^ Previous iteration was Ew. Old People Dirty Talk is no good.~~

	The old woman was obviously senile. What I was worried about was what sort of terrible reaction Haruki, who might have overheard all that, would have. Yet he silently continued moving forward, and so I remained silent as well and followed him out of the building.		The old woman was obviously senile. What I was worried about was what sort of terrible reaction Haruki, who might have overheard all that, would have. Yet he silently continued moving forward, and so I remained silent as well and followed him out of the building.
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	“…Fine.”		“…Fine.”

	~~^ Original seemed WAY out of place and definitely a bit random.~~

	As we walked towards an open area in the middle of the shopping centre, Itsuko looked at me and said, "There's still time for you to change your mind, you know. It’d probably be simpler just to go back and try on the dress."		As we walked towards an open area in the middle of the shopping centre, Itsuko looked at me and said, "There's still time for you to change your mind, you know. It’d probably be simpler just to go back and try on the dress."
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	"So you brought me here just to see this? There's not even anybody here!" Can I go home now?		"So you brought me here just to see this? There's not even anybody here!" Can I go home now?

	~~^ I think it would be better to not mention the dress at all in this crazy esper scene. It distracts and right now I can’t figure out a way to naturally fit the reference to it.~~

	"No, the real fun will begin soon. It's about to start."		"No, the real fun will begin soon. It's about to start."
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	At this point, we were at the shop that had the yellow dress... Itsuko, predictably, made me try it on and despite my protests, it did look good, so I bought it. I might've thanked her if she hadn't been so persistent about me trying it on, even if she was right.		At this point, we were at the shop that had the yellow dress... Itsuko, predictably, made me try it on and despite my protests, it did look good, so I bought it. I might've thanked her if she hadn't been so persistent about me trying it on, even if she was right.

	~~^ Too much Yuri-ness, must be more subtle~~

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RCG M3tal at 18:57, 2 July 2009

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Heatth at 17:16, 13 June 2009

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Heatth at 05:44, 13 June 2009

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	The person sitting inside wasn't Asahina-senpai either, and I actually took a step backwards before stopping myself. He was sitting in my usual chair, leaning back, and looking up at the ceiling. He was wearing a loose white shirt and tight black business pants, plus the slippers made for school visitors. His long brown hair was tied into a ponytail down his back.		The person sitting inside wasn't Asahina-senpai either, and I actually took a step backwards before stopping myself. He was sitting in my usual chair, leaning back, and looking up at the ceiling. He was wearing a loose white shirt and tight black business pants, plus the slippers made for school visitors. His long brown hair was tied into a ponytail down his back.

	He wasn't Asahina-senpai, but he looked a lot like him. The Asahina-senpai I knew wasn't that tall, and he looked more like a cute little boy than this handsome guy in front of me now. This guy looked like he was in his twenties, and gave a completely different feel than the middle-~~school[/b]er[b]~~-like Asahina-senpai.		He wasn't Asahina-senpai, but he looked a lot like him. The Asahina-senpai I knew wasn't that tall, and he looked more like a cute little boy than this handsome guy in front of me now. This guy looked like he was in his twenties, and gave a completely different feel than the middle-schooler-like Asahina-senpai.

	But he resembled Asahina-senpai too much to be a coincidence.		But he resembled Asahina-senpai too much to be a coincidence.
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	"Right, Onee-chan. The me from the past is now sitting in his classroom, eating lunch with his friends."		"Right, Onee-chan. The me from the past is now sitting in his classroom, eating lunch with his friends."

	~~[Editor’s note: Mitsuuru has friends? As in plural?]~~

	What’s with the Onee-chan?		What’s with the Onee-chan?
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	"Ah, I remember this.” He said, looking uncomfortable. “Well, I guess there’s no way I’d pass off as a girl while wearing it now, huh?”		"Ah, I remember this.” He said, looking uncomfortable. “Well, I guess there’s no way I’d pass off as a girl while wearing it now, huh?”

	~~[Editor’s note: Flashes of Kamen no Maid Guy.]~~

	That’s definitely true. "What sort of other stuff did Haruki make you wear?”		That’s definitely true. "What sort of other stuff did Haruki make you wear?”
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	"I had seen Asahina Mitsuuru's differential temporal clone already this morning."		"I had seen Asahina Mitsuuru's differential temporal clone already this morning."

	~~[Editor’s note: Has anyone else always wondered what that line actually means? Or is it just that the word for “clone” in Japanese can also mean “double” or something?]~~

	Nagato silently sat down in his seat and then placed his book on the desk and opened it.		Nagato silently sat down in his seat and then placed his book on the desk and opened it.
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	"After I finally got out of the counsellor’s office, I went to ask Okabe in the staff room. The teachers only learned about Asakura transferring this morning. Early in the morning, someone claiming to be Asakura's mom called, saying they had to move due to some emergency. And you know where they're moving? Canada! How can this be possible? Why the hell would anyone move to Canada? There’s something going on here, I know it!"		"After I finally got out of the counsellor’s office, I went to ask Okabe in the staff room. The teachers only learned about Asakura transferring this morning. Early in the morning, someone claiming to be Asakura's mom called, saying they had to move due to some emergency. And you know where they're moving? Canada! How can this be possible? Why the hell would anyone move to Canada? There’s something going on here, I know it!"

	~~[bb’s note: Isn’t Kaisos Canadian? Just an amusing coincidence.]~~

	"Really now?" I said, trying to fill my response to the brim with sarcasm. Of course, it’s wasted on Haruki.		"Really now?" I said, trying to fill my response to the brim with sarcasm. Of course, it’s wasted on Haruki.
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	“…Fine.”		“…Fine.”

	~~[Editor’s note: Yes, that is the same dress Mikuru wears in Lone Island Syndrome. Since we already had Kyon-chan wear Mikuru’s clothing in Chapter 4, I figured, why not?]~~

	^ Original seemed WAY out of place and definitely a bit random.		^ Original seemed WAY out of place and definitely a bit random.

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	I shrugged. I’ll just let Haruki go on with his rant for now.		I shrugged. I’ll just let Haruki go on with his rant for now.

	"Yet ~~she~~ lives near the school, and it's one of those apartments paid by cash and not by rent. The price here must be insanely expensive. Could he have been going from here to his junior high on the train for the past three years?”		"Yet he lives near the school, and it's one of those apartments paid by cash and not by rent. The price here must be insanely expensive. Could he have been going from here to his junior high on the train for the past three years?”

	"I told you I don't know." Why are you asking me?		"I told you I don't know." Why are you asking me?
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	And who knows, even those who control Nagato-san might change their thinking and decide to kill you instead.''		And who knows, even those who control Nagato-san might change their thinking and decide to kill you instead.''

	Asakura may be gone, but that doesn’t mean I’m safe. One of ~~her~~ friends might decide to assassinate me as I sleep. Even Nagato, who saved me…		Asakura may be gone, but that doesn’t mean I’m safe. One of his friends might decide to assassinate me as I sleep. Even Nagato, who saved me…

	I shivered involuntarily, which, unfortunately, Haruki noticed.		I shivered involuntarily, which, unfortunately, Haruki noticed.
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	"I see. Right, well if you hear anything about Asakura, let me know, okay?"		"I see. Right, well if you hear anything about Asakura, let me know, okay?"

	He nodded his head. Are those the only responses you’re capable of!?		He nodded his head. Are those the only responses you’re capable of?

	I noticed some food cans and vegetables inside his grocery bags. I guess he does need to eat after all.		I noticed some food cans and vegetables inside his grocery bags. I guess he does need to eat after all.
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	"Well, I think that he’s very charming and charismatic, but let’s leave that aside for now. Do you still remember me saying that this world had probably been created by Suzumiya-san?"		"Well, I think that he’s very charming and charismatic, but let’s leave that aside for now. Do you still remember me saying that this world had probably been created by Suzumiya-san?"

	I didn’t like what she was saying, but I did remember it having come up..		I didn’t like what she was saying, but I did remember it having come up.

	"He has the ability to realize dreams." Itsuko said.		"He has the ability to realize dreams." Itsuko said.
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	The giant slowly lifted its arm and then swung it down like an axe, and the building beside it was smashed in half; then, as if in slow motion, the concrete, wires, and debris made a deafening noise falling to the ground.		The giant slowly lifted its arm and then swung it down like an axe, and the building beside it was smashed in half; then, as if in slow motion, the concrete, wires, and debris made a deafening noise falling to the ground.

	Itsuko was talking again, but I could barely hear her over the destruction "We believe these to be the manifestation of Suzumiya-san's frustration. Every time his inner conflict reaches a certain limit, these giants will appear and destroy everything around them to relieve pressure. We cannot allow these things to have their way in our reality, or they'll cause widespread death and destruction. That is why this ~~Sealed Reality~~ is created, so that they can wreak their havoc inside. You understand?"		Itsuko was talking again, but I could barely hear her over the destruction "We believe these to be the manifestation of Suzumiya-san's frustration. Every time his inner conflict reaches a certain limit, these giants will appear and destroy everything around them to relieve pressure. We cannot allow these things to have their way in our reality, or they'll cause widespread death and destruction. That is why this Closed Space is created, so that they can wreak their havoc inside. You understand?"

	Every time the glowing red giant waved its arms, the buildings would be sliced in half and collapse. The giant would then continue forwards, stepping on the debris.		Every time the glowing red giant waved its arms, the buildings would be sliced in half and collapse. The giant would then continue forwards, stepping on the debris.
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	Right above where the giant first appeared was a crack, like that of a hatching bird trying to break through its eggshell. The crack began to spread rapidly like a spider web.		Right above where the giant first appeared was a crack, like that of a hatching bird trying to break through its eggshell. The crack began to spread rapidly like a spider web.

	"Following the red creature's destruction, the ~~Sealed Reality~~ will also be destroyed. Believe me you won’t want to miss it.”		"Following the red creature's destruction, the Closed Space will also be destroyed. Believe me you won’t want to miss it.”

	As Itsuko finished her explanation, the large cracks now covered the skies above, like a metallic net. The net margins started to narrow until they became as small as black curvy lines. Then, at that moment, CRACK!		As Itsuko finished her explanation, the large cracks now covered the skies above, like a metallic net. The net margins started to narrow until they became as small as black curvy lines. Then, at that moment, CRACK!
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	"I don't get it at all." I answered truthfully.		"I don't get it at all." I answered truthfully.

	"I knew you'd say that, hoho." Itsuko laughed. "Those ~~blue~~ giants, we call them Celestials, but, as I've told you already, they are greatly related to Suzumiya-san's mental condition. We're the same, of course. Once Closed Space appears, once the Celestials begin their movement, we're able to use our powers. We can only use those powers within Closed Space; right now, I’m totally powerless."		"I knew you'd say that, hoho." Itsuko laughed. "Those red giants, we call them Celestials, but, as I've told you already, they are greatly related to Suzumiya-san's mental condition. We're the same, of course. Once Closed Space appears, once the Celestials begin their movement, we're able to use our powers. We can only use those powers within Closed Space; right now, I’m totally powerless."

	I silently glanced at the driver's back. All that is related to Haruki’s mental state? What is he, a teenage girl?		I silently glanced at the driver's back. All that is related to Haruki’s mental state? What is he, a teenage girl?