Talk:Chrome Shelled Regios:Volume1 Prologue - Revision history

Kadi at 09:12, 15 April 2010

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	sorry it took me so long to find out about the discussion page function... anyway, thanks for fixing up the mistakes! I'll go and change the "no joke" part to "dangerous". - [[User:Blewin\|Blewin]]		sorry it took me so long to find out about the discussion page function... anyway, thanks for fixing up the mistakes! I'll go and change the "no joke" part to "dangerous". - [[User:Blewin\|Blewin]]

			I've been wondering for a while: What color is "tea colored hair"? Or "tea color" in general? (This is about the color of Layfon's hair)--[[User:Kadi\|Kadi]] 09:12, 15 April 2010 (UTC)

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	"Layfon reached out a hand to steady Leerin on her shoulder." --> "Layfon reached out and placed his hand on Leerin's shoulder to steady her." [[User:Eschiver\|Eschiver]] 16:16, 14 April 2009 (UTC)Eschiver		"Layfon reached out a hand to steady Leerin on her shoulder." --> "Layfon reached out and placed his hand on Leerin's shoulder to steady her." [[User:Eschiver\|Eschiver]] 16:16, 14 April 2009 (UTC)Eschiver


			sorry it took me so long to find out about the discussion page function... anyway, thanks for fixing up the mistakes! I'll go and change the "no joke" part to "dangerous". - [[User:Blewin\|Blewin]]

2009-04-14T16:17:10Z

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	"Since it was no joke when the city moved, the driver and all the passengers could only wait in the small waiting area." The "no joke" part is vague. Does it mean "dangerous?" [[User:Eschiver\|Eschiver]] 16:10, 14 April 2009 (UTC)Eschiver		"Since it was no joke when the city moved, the driver and all the passengers could only wait in the small waiting area." The "no joke" part is vague. Does it mean "dangerous?" [[User:Eschiver\|Eschiver]] 16:10, 14 April 2009 (UTC)Eschiver

	"~~“Even here……” Again, the sound of the city’s movement drowned him out. A strong gust of wind blew past them.~~ Layfon reached out a hand to steady Leerin on her shoulder." --> "~~“Even here……” Again, the sound of the city’s movement drowned him out. A strong gust of wind blew past them.~~ Layfon reached out and placed his hand on Leerin's shoulder to steady her." [[User:Eschiver\|Eschiver]] 16:16, 14 April 2009 (UTC)Eschiver		"Layfon reached out a hand to steady Leerin on her shoulder." --> "Layfon reached out and placed his hand on Leerin's shoulder to steady her." [[User:Eschiver\|Eschiver]] 16:16, 14 April 2009 (UTC)Eschiver

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	"Since it was no joke when the city moved, the driver and all the passengers could only wait in the small waiting area." The "no joke" part is vague. Does it mean "dangerous?" [[User:Eschiver\|Eschiver]] 16:10, 14 April 2009 (UTC)Eschiver		"Since it was no joke when the city moved, the driver and all the passengers could only wait in the small waiting area." The "no joke" part is vague. Does it mean "dangerous?" [[User:Eschiver\|Eschiver]] 16:10, 14 April 2009 (UTC)Eschiver

			"“Even here……” Again, the sound of the city’s movement drowned him out. A strong gust of wind blew past them. Layfon reached out a hand to steady Leerin on her shoulder." --> "“Even here……” Again, the sound of the city’s movement drowned him out. A strong gust of wind blew past them. Layfon reached out and placed his hand on Leerin's shoulder to steady her." [[User:Eschiver\|Eschiver]] 16:16, 14 April 2009 (UTC)Eschiver

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	I want to change it to that sentence but not sure if it would detract from meaning. [[User:Eschiver\|Eschiver]] 16:04, 14 April 2009 (UTC) Eschiver		I want to change it to that sentence but not sure if it would detract from meaning. [[User:Eschiver\|Eschiver]] 16:04, 14 April 2009 (UTC) Eschiver


			"Since it was no joke when the city moved, the driver and all the passengers could only wait in the small waiting area." The "no joke" part is vague. Does it mean "dangerous?" [[User:Eschiver\|Eschiver]] 16:10, 14 April 2009 (UTC)Eschiver

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	"Besides which, Nina understood it wasn’t possible anyone in the safe was safe." Is "safe" suppose to be city? Just making sure. Thanks.		"Besides which, Nina understood it wasn’t possible anyone in the safe was safe." Is "safe" suppose to be city? Just making sure. Thanks.


			"Nina’s line of sight became higher, and then the bus moved as if it was skipping." -->
			"Nina’s line of sight became higher and the bus began to move as if it was skipping."

			I want to change it to that sentence but not sure if it would detract from meaning. [[User:Eschiver\|Eschiver]] 16:04, 14 April 2009 (UTC) Eschiver

2009-04-14T15:57:21Z

New page: "Besides which, Nina understood it wasn’t possible anyone in the safe was safe." Is "safe" suppose to be city? Just making sure. Thanks.

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"Besides which, Nina understood it wasn’t possible anyone in the safe was safe." Is "safe" suppose to be city? Just making sure. Thanks.