Talk:Date A Live:Volume 2 Chapter 1 - Revision history

Kira0802 at 04:22, 17 November 2012

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	sounds the same to me. It's seems to me to be more a case of deciding on terminology. Personally I prefer the sound of "path" to "pass" (but honestly the word I would reach for as an editor is "link")--[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 19:49, 16 November 2012 (CST)		sounds the same to me. It's seems to me to be more a case of deciding on terminology. Personally I prefer the sound of "path" to "pass" (but honestly the word I would reach for as an editor is "link")--[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 19:49, 16 November 2012 (CST)

			Oops. I think I miscopied the wrong version. I'll paste the original version edited in less than 12 hours, the time I wake up and use my good doc file.

			However, some of the edits I made were justified. I looked at the Chinese version, and it was clearly written "table".

			As for that specific line, I might have asked a Japanese translator somewhere. [[User:Kira0802\|Kira]] ([[User_talk:Kira0802\|Talk]]) 22:22, 16 November 2012 (CST)

Drowzycow: /* Clarify */ decide on the terminology for the path/pass between Shidou/Tohka

2012-11-17T01:49:01Z

Clarify: decide on the terminology for the path/pass between Shidou/Tohka

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	--[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 14:22, 3 November 2012 (CDT)		--[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 14:22, 3 November 2012 (CDT)
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			"……Maa, until then it's good but, there will be problems……Now, in between Shin and Tohka there is state where an invisible pass is passing through." --needs reworking

			From how the edit has been bouncing around the message in this link gets across just fine to the reader. the previous edit of:
			“...Well, that's fine, but there's a problem...There's currently something like an invisible path/[way]/(circuit) running between Shin and Tohka.”

			sounds the same to me. It's seems to me to be more a case of deciding on terminology. Personally I prefer the sound of "path" to "pass" (but honestly the word I would reach for as an editor is "link")--[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 19:49, 16 November 2012 (CST)

Drowzycow: /* Clarify */

2012-11-03T19:22:08Z

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	ok, and nice job with the editing bro. You noticed a lot of things i missed while i was checking over the chapter. --[[User:MonsterBandage\|MonsterBandage]] 1:25, 3 November 2012 (UTC)		ok, and nice job with the editing bro. You noticed a lot of things i missed while i was checking over the chapter. --[[User:MonsterBandage\|MonsterBandage]] 1:25, 3 November 2012 (UTC)

			From part 5

			"Let me see, what this is about. Isn’t it about Shidou being unable to restrain his overflowing blue libido of puberty, so he crawled into Tohka’s futon? Stop making weird accusations on me." --Could you check if the speech needs splitting, the weird accusation bit could be Shidou's words not Kotori.

			--[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 14:22, 3 November 2012 (CDT)

Monsterbandage at 17:24, 3 November 2012

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	--[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 12:09, 3 November 2012 (CDT)		--[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 12:09, 3 November 2012 (CDT)

			ok, and nice job with the editing bro. You noticed a lot of things i missed while i was checking over the chapter. --[[User:MonsterBandage\|MonsterBandage]] 1:25, 3 November 2012 (UTC)

Drowzycow at 17:09, 3 November 2012

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	Just a general question this time, when you leave the edit page open for too long then try to save, does some of the data not go through? For some reason some of my edits aren't saved at times. --[[User:MonsterBandage\|MonsterBandage]] 12:59, 3 November 2012 (UTC)		Just a general question this time, when you leave the edit page open for too long then try to save, does some of the data not go through? For some reason some of my edits aren't saved at times. --[[User:MonsterBandage\|MonsterBandage]] 12:59, 3 November 2012 (UTC)

			Depends, the page will normally tell you what the error if it has been left to long, another possibly is there was a edit conflict where somebody submitted an edit while you were attempting to edit so you have to double check before submitting again.

			I've hit show preview/show changes rather than save page before as well :x

			--[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 12:09, 3 November 2012 (CDT)

Monsterbandage: /* Clarify */

2012-11-03T16:59:33Z

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	surfaced first then pose, fumble around the side for the candy--[[User:RikiNutcase\|RikiNutcase]] ([[User talk:RikiNutcase\|talk]]) 01:44, 3 November 2012 (CDT)		surfaced first then pose, fumble around the side for the candy--[[User:RikiNutcase\|RikiNutcase]] ([[User talk:RikiNutcase\|talk]]) 01:44, 3 November 2012 (CDT)

			Just a general question this time, when you leave the edit page open for too long then try to save, does some of the data not go through? For some reason some of my edits aren't saved at times. --[[User:MonsterBandage\|MonsterBandage]] 12:59, 3 November 2012 (UTC)

RikiNutcase: /* Clarify */

2012-11-03T06:44:32Z

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	In this sentence, "While Kotori was wobbling her head like Reine, she once again hit around the area of her bedside." did you mean she literally HIT the area or that she was fumbling around it for her candy? --[[User:MonsterBandage\|MonsterBandage]] 1:25, 3 November 2012 (UTC)		In this sentence, "While Kotori was wobbling her head like Reine, she once again hit around the area of her bedside." did you mean she literally HIT the area or that she was fumbling around it for her candy? --[[User:MonsterBandage\|MonsterBandage]] 1:25, 3 November 2012 (UTC)

			surfaced first then pose, fumble around the side for the candy--[[User:RikiNutcase\|RikiNutcase]] ([[User talk:RikiNutcase\|talk]]) 01:44, 3 November 2012 (CDT)

Monsterbandage: /* Clarify */

2012-11-03T05:25:44Z

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	Guess ill leave it as it is for now. And this sentence "Thus…………. Shidou couldn’t continue holding his breath and on his face, from the surface of the milky water he made a good day pose. " having trouble following the sequence of events. So he cant hold his breath anymore, then he makes a good day pose while still underwater? or is it that he surfaced then made the pose? --[[User:MonsterBandage\|MonsterBandage]] 1:09, 3 November 2012 (UTC)		Guess ill leave it as it is for now. And this sentence "Thus…………. Shidou couldn’t continue holding his breath and on his face, from the surface of the milky water he made a good day pose. " having trouble following the sequence of events. So he cant hold his breath anymore, then he makes a good day pose while still underwater? or is it that he surfaced then made the pose? --[[User:MonsterBandage\|MonsterBandage]] 1:09, 3 November 2012 (UTC)

	In this sentence, "While Kotori was wobbling her head like Reine, she once again hit around the area of her bedside." did you mean she literally HIT the area or that she was fumbling around it for her candy?		In this sentence, "While Kotori was wobbling her head like Reine, she once again hit around the area of her bedside." did you mean she literally HIT the area or that she was fumbling around it for her candy? --[[User:MonsterBandage\|MonsterBandage]] 1:25, 3 November 2012 (UTC)

Monsterbandage: /* Clarify */

2012-11-03T05:25:16Z

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	Guess ill leave it as it is for now. And this sentence "Thus…………. Shidou couldn’t continue holding his breath and on his face, from the surface of the milky water he made a good day pose. " having trouble following the sequence of events. So he cant hold his breath anymore, then he makes a good day pose while still underwater? or is it that he surfaced then made the pose? --[[User:MonsterBandage\|MonsterBandage]] 1:09, 3 November 2012 (UTC)		Guess ill leave it as it is for now. And this sentence "Thus…………. Shidou couldn’t continue holding his breath and on his face, from the surface of the milky water he made a good day pose. " having trouble following the sequence of events. So he cant hold his breath anymore, then he makes a good day pose while still underwater? or is it that he surfaced then made the pose? --[[User:MonsterBandage\|MonsterBandage]] 1:09, 3 November 2012 (UTC)

			In this sentence, "While Kotori was wobbling her head like Reine, she once again hit around the area of her bedside." did you mean she literally HIT the area or that she was fumbling around it for her candy?

Monsterbandage: /* Clarify */

2012-11-03T05:09:44Z

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	It seems to change... I personally try to follow whatever the author uses, so when the sentences end with ～した or　～だった have it in past tense, and when it's ～する present tense... but I understand how that could feel a bit weird when reading. I'm all for standardizing the tense, insofar as I can't see any significance behind having the tense a certain way. --[[User:Jonathanasdf\|jonathanasdf]] ([[User talk:Jonathanasdf\|talk]]) 23:31, 2 November 2012 (CDT)		It seems to change... I personally try to follow whatever the author uses, so when the sentences end with ～した or　～だった have it in past tense, and when it's ～する present tense... but I understand how that could feel a bit weird when reading. I'm all for standardizing the tense, insofar as I can't see any significance behind having the tense a certain way. --[[User:Jonathanasdf\|jonathanasdf]] ([[User talk:Jonathanasdf\|talk]]) 23:31, 2 November 2012 (CDT)

	Guess ill leave it as it is for now. And this sentence "Thus…………. Shidou couldn’t continue holding his breath and on his face, from the surface of the milky water he made a good day pose. " having trouble following the sequence of events. So he cant hold his breath anymore, then he makes a good day pose while still underwater?		Guess ill leave it as it is for now. And this sentence "Thus…………. Shidou couldn’t continue holding his breath and on his face, from the surface of the milky water he made a good day pose. " having trouble following the sequence of events. So he cant hold his breath anymore, then he makes a good day pose while still underwater? or is it that he surfaced then made the pose? --[[User:MonsterBandage\|MonsterBandage]] 1:09, 3 November 2012 (UTC)