Hiyono: Thanks for the suggestions. Added some structure.

2013-02-07T06:36:59Z

Thanks for the suggestions. Added some structure.

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	~~Great happiness at the translation!~~ \| ~~Possible suggestions~~: \| ~~'Sugamo'~~, ~~according to V7C3, is where Kinji's grandparents live. Thus, 'Sugamo no grandparents~~' ~~would be~~ '~~my grandparents in Sugamo~~' ~~rather than~~ '~~Sugamo~~'~~s grandparents~~'. \| For the Anchor, the suggestion 'why don't you fire a few practice rounds?' implies that there isn't just a single bullet in that bag, but rather several. I thus suggest that 'lay a bullet, but definitely no wire? "It seems to be a 9mm Luger?"' be changed to 'lay bullets, but definitely no wire? "They seem to be 9mm Lugers?"' or similar. \| Though this may not be a matter of translation, the instruction to 'follow the blue light' (on the air-resistant part) is puzzling, specifically if imagning oneself falling off a building and wanting to anchor oneself. It could thus warrant checking what's being said to confirm that the interpretation is correct. \| '~~She must just become~~ a ~~millionaire~~' -> '~~She might just become a millionaire~~'~~. \|~~ I suggest that the phrase 'the single most bloodshed' possibly be altered.		Questions from helpful anon, answers from me. --[[User:Hiyono\|Hiyono]] ([[User talk:Hiyono\|talk]]) 00:36, 7 February 2013 (CST)

			'''Q''': Though this may not be a matter of translation, the instruction to 'follow the blue light' (on the air-resistant part) is puzzling, specifically if imagning oneself falling off a building and wanting to anchor oneself. It could thus warrant checking what's being said to confirm that the interpretation is correct.
			'''A''': Yeah, it seemed strange to me too. Could use a TLC on that though, I agree.

			'''Q''': I suggest that the phrase 'the single most bloodshed' possibly be altered.
			'''A''': Any suggestions? What the text says is that it's the single firearm responsible for drawing more blood than any other.

180.43.16.157: Editing suggestions.

2013-02-07T04:54:45Z

Editing suggestions.

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Great happiness at the translation! | Possible suggestions: | 'Sugamo', according to V7C3, is where Kinji's grandparents live. Thus, 'Sugamo no grandparents' would be 'my grandparents in Sugamo' rather than 'Sugamo's grandparents'. | For the Anchor, the suggestion 'why don't you fire a few practice rounds?' implies that there isn't just a single bullet in that bag, but rather several. I thus suggest that 'lay a bullet, but definitely no wire? "It seems to be a 9mm Luger?"' be changed to 'lay bullets, but definitely no wire? "They seem to be 9mm Lugers?"' or similar. | Though this may not be a matter of translation, the instruction to 'follow the blue light' (on the air-resistant part) is puzzling, specifically if imagning oneself falling off a building and wanting to anchor oneself. It could thus warrant checking what's being said to confirm that the interpretation is correct. | 'She must just become a millionaire' -> 'She might just become a millionaire'. | I suggest that the phrase 'the single most bloodshed' possibly be altered.

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Hiyono: Thanks for the suggestions. Added some structure.

180.43.16.157: Editing suggestions.