Talk:IS:Volume4 Chapter1 - Revision history

Darwen G'wein: /* More Proposed Edits */ new section

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	Just trust me. You can get used to it. And it makes things easier. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 12:56, 13 July 2011 (UCT)		Just trust me. You can get used to it. And it makes things easier. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 12:56, 13 July 2011 (UCT)

			== More Proposed Edits ==

			Just a few big things, really. I won't even pretend to know what the raws look like though.
			*Rin and Ichika's meeting place: from the implied setting later in the chapter and Ichika mentioning that they won't have to wear their school uniform, it feels like the two plan to meet at the entrance to "WaterWorld" rather than the entrance of the academy, as the location is called several times.
			*Yamada Maya's two long paragraphs: I found it really difficult to decipher her reasoning for the trouble caused by Houki Shinonono's IS. I could get the gist that the countries of the world would want to possess the yet-unclaimed IS, but I couldn't quite figure out how they would go about obtaining it from the current text. If anyone could provide details as I plan out a possible rewrite...?
			*The Last Segment's Action Scenes: A little rewording could be useful. For example, when Rin references the "second highest island" to refer to the second island in the competition. If I'm assuming correctly, the islands increase in height above the water as a team gets closer to the goal. The phrase "second highest" however has more of a meaning of being the "second to last", or "right before the end". Fixed simply by removing the word "highest".
			Speaking of rewriting, I have nearly completed a full rewrite of the chapter, but I assumed it would be rather bold of me to post something like that so soon after joining. I was thinking of doing something like what was done with Volume 1, but I am unsure how to set up the formatting. If someone would like to assist, I would appreciate help. [[User:Darwen G'wein\|Darwen G'wein]] ([[User talk:Darwen G'wein\|talk]]) 16:12, 27 March 2014 (CDT)

Zero2001: /* Part subheadings */

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	as agreed. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 11:28, 20 September 2011 (CDT)		as agreed. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 11:28, 20 September 2011 (CDT)

			Oh wait the diamonds are already there I'll just remove the headings then. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 11:30, 20 September 2011 (CDT)

	== References ==		== References ==

Zero2001: /* Part subheadings */

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	Should I delete the 'parts' since it was only made to make some cuts, while there weren't any in the original? [[User:Kira0802\|Kira]] 21:03, 28 June 2011 (UCT)		Should I delete the 'parts' since it was only made to make some cuts, while there weren't any in the original? [[User:Kira0802\|Kira]] 21:03, 28 June 2011 (UCT)

	Is it okay if I replace the Part1, Part2, etc subheadings with:		Is it okay if I replace the Part1, Part2, etc subheadings with:
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	It will conform with the rest of the chapters that way. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 17:03, 11 July 2011 (UCT)		It will conform with the rest of the chapters that way. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 17:03, 11 July 2011 (UCT)


	No, I don't think so, since there's already this in the original novels. Also, separating into parts is made so editing and translating could be more easier, and it won't be too long to load a page and change it. [[User:Kira0802\|Kira]] ([[User_talk:Kira0802\|Talk]]) 17:07, 12 July 2011 (UCT)		No, I don't think so, since there's already this in the original novels. Also, separating into parts is made so editing and translating could be more easier, and it won't be too long to load a page and change it. [[User:Kira0802\|Kira]] ([[User_talk:Kira0802\|Talk]]) 17:07, 12 July 2011 (UCT)

	Oh okay. I was simply concerned it might look weird and out of place in the full text/volume version. Well... as long as the rest of the chapters of this volume follow the same pattern it should be fine. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 17:15, 12 July 2011 (UCT)		Oh okay. I was simply concerned it might look weird and out of place in the full text/volume version. Well... as long as the rest of the chapters of this volume follow the same pattern it should be fine. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 17:15, 12 July 2011 (UCT)

	When the full version will be out, these parts will be taken off. [[User:Kira0802\|Kira]] ([[User_talk:Kira0802\|Talk]]) 17:35, 12 July 2011 (UCT)		When the full version will be out, these parts will be taken off. [[User:Kira0802\|Kira]] ([[User_talk:Kira0802\|Talk]]) 17:35, 12 July 2011 (UCT)

	Okay. That sounds good too. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 17:45, 12 July 2011 (UCT)		Okay. That sounds good too. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 17:45, 12 July 2011 (UCT)

			Full version is out. I shall now replace part headings with
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			as agreed. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 11:28, 20 September 2011 (CDT)

	== References ==		== References ==

Zero2001: /* References */

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	There are two kinds of references. The first is where you link to an already existing webpage on another website like wikipedia or the IS wiki. Second are notes. Do you know why wikipedia got so popular. It was because it allowed unrestrained linking between pages thus creating a huge interrelated database that allowed jumping from interest to interest. I've tried to do the same here. Just trust me. This is actually more benificial. It allows for full information about the word rather than a few lines that might not satisfy the readers thirst for knowledge. Plus you do not need to write down the info again, just link to an already existing source. Writing it afresh is a tedious process I assure you. Also to make a bottom page reference and then have a link from there to the wikipage turns a one step goal to a two step goal. Something that should be done only on rare occasions. Same with separate wiki pages. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 12:49, 13 July 2011 (UCT)		There are two kinds of references. The first is where you link to an already existing webpage on another website like wikipedia or the IS wiki. Second are notes. Do you know why wikipedia got so popular. It was because it allowed unrestrained linking between pages thus creating a huge interrelated database that allowed jumping from interest to interest. I've tried to do the same here. Just trust me. This is actually more benificial. It allows for full information about the word rather than a few lines that might not satisfy the readers thirst for knowledge. Plus you do not need to write down the info again, just link to an already existing source. Writing it afresh is a tedious process I assure you. Also to make a bottom page reference and then have a link from there to the wikipage turns a one step goal to a two step goal. Something that should be done only on rare occasions. Same with separate wiki pages. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 12:49, 13 July 2011 (UCT)

			Just trust me. You can get used to it. And it makes things easier. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 12:56, 13 July 2011 (UCT)

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	Personally, I'd rather user a seperate wiki page, since it does appear in every volume, from what you just said. Or some bottom page references. [[User:Kira0802\|Kira]] ([[User_talk:Kira0802\|Talk]]) 12:05, 13 July 2011 (UCT)		Personally, I'd rather user a seperate wiki page, since it does appear in every volume, from what you just said. Or some bottom page references. [[User:Kira0802\|Kira]] ([[User_talk:Kira0802\|Talk]]) 12:05, 13 July 2011 (UCT)

	There are two kinds of references. The first is where you link to an already existing webpage on another website like wikipedia or the IS wiki. Second are notes. Do you know why wikipedia got so popular. It was because it allowed unrestrained linking between pages thus creating a huge interrelated database that allowed jumping from interest to interest. I've tried to do the same here. Just trust me. This is actually more benificial. It allows for full information about the word rather than a few lines that might not satisfy the readers thirst for knowledge. Plus you do not need to write down the info again, just link to an already existing source. Writing it afresh is a tedious process I assure you. Also to make a bottom page reference and then have a link from there to the wikipage turns a one step goal to a two step goal. Something that should be done only on rare occasions. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 12:49, 13 July 2011 (UCT)		There are two kinds of references. The first is where you link to an already existing webpage on another website like wikipedia or the IS wiki. Second are notes. Do you know why wikipedia got so popular. It was because it allowed unrestrained linking between pages thus creating a huge interrelated database that allowed jumping from interest to interest. I've tried to do the same here. Just trust me. This is actually more benificial. It allows for full information about the word rather than a few lines that might not satisfy the readers thirst for knowledge. Plus you do not need to write down the info again, just link to an already existing source. Writing it afresh is a tedious process I assure you. Also to make a bottom page reference and then have a link from there to the wikipage turns a one step goal to a two step goal. Something that should be done only on rare occasions. Same with separate wiki pages. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 12:49, 13 July 2011 (UCT)

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	Personally, I'd rather user a seperate wiki page, since it does appear in every volume, from what you just said. Or some bottom page references. [[User:Kira0802\|Kira]] ([[User_talk:Kira0802\|Talk]]) 12:05, 13 July 2011 (UCT)		Personally, I'd rather user a seperate wiki page, since it does appear in every volume, from what you just said. Or some bottom page references. [[User:Kira0802\|Kira]] ([[User_talk:Kira0802\|Talk]]) 12:05, 13 July 2011 (UCT)

	There are two kinds of references. The first is where you link to an already existing webpage on another website like wikipedia or the IS wiki. Second are notes. Do you know why wikipedia got so popular. It was because it allowed unrestrained linking between pages thus creating a huge interrelated database that allowed jumping from interest to interest. I've tried to do the same here. Just trust me. This is actually more benificial. It allows for full information about the word rather than a few lines that might not satisfy the readers thirst for knowledge. Plus you do not need to write down the info again, just link to an already existing source. Writing it afresh is a tedious process I assure you. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 12:49, 13 July 2011 (UCT)		There are two kinds of references. The first is where you link to an already existing webpage on another website like wikipedia or the IS wiki. Second are notes. Do you know why wikipedia got so popular. It was because it allowed unrestrained linking between pages thus creating a huge interrelated database that allowed jumping from interest to interest. I've tried to do the same here. Just trust me. This is actually more benificial. It allows for full information about the word rather than a few lines that might not satisfy the readers thirst for knowledge. Plus you do not need to write down the info again, just link to an already existing source. Writing it afresh is a tedious process I assure you. Also to make a bottom page reference and then have a link from there to the wikipage turns a one step goal to a two step goal. Something that should be done only on rare occasions. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 12:49, 13 July 2011 (UCT)

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	Personally, I'd rather user a seperate wiki page, since it does appear in every volume, from what you just said. Or some bottom page references. [[User:Kira0802\|Kira]] ([[User_talk:Kira0802\|Talk]]) 12:05, 13 July 2011 (UCT)		Personally, I'd rather user a seperate wiki page, since it does appear in every volume, from what you just said. Or some bottom page references. [[User:Kira0802\|Kira]] ([[User_talk:Kira0802\|Talk]]) 12:05, 13 July 2011 (UCT)

	There are two kinds of references. The first is where you link to an already existing webpage on another website like wikipedia or the IS wiki. Second are notes. Do you know why wikipedia got so ~~poular~~. It was because it allowed unrestrained linking between pages thus creating a huge interrelated database that allowed jumping from interest to interest. I've tried to do the same here. Just trust me. This is actually more benificial. It allows for full information about the word rather than a few lines that might not satisfy the readers thirst for knowledge. Plus you do not need to write down the info again, just link to an already existing source. Writing it afresh is a tedious process I assure you. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 12:49, 13 July 2011 (UCT)		There are two kinds of references. The first is where you link to an already existing webpage on another website like wikipedia or the IS wiki. Second are notes. Do you know why wikipedia got so popular. It was because it allowed unrestrained linking between pages thus creating a huge interrelated database that allowed jumping from interest to interest. I've tried to do the same here. Just trust me. This is actually more benificial. It allows for full information about the word rather than a few lines that might not satisfy the readers thirst for knowledge. Plus you do not need to write down the info again, just link to an already existing source. Writing it afresh is a tedious process I assure you. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 12:49, 13 July 2011 (UCT)

Zero2001: /* References */

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	Personally, I'd rather user a seperate wiki page, since it does appear in every volume, from what you just said. Or some bottom page references. [[User:Kira0802\|Kira]] ([[User_talk:Kira0802\|Talk]]) 12:05, 13 July 2011 (UCT)		Personally, I'd rather user a seperate wiki page, since it does appear in every volume, from what you just said. Or some bottom page references. [[User:Kira0802\|Kira]] ([[User_talk:Kira0802\|Talk]]) 12:05, 13 July 2011 (UCT)

			There are two kinds of references. The first is where you link to an already existing webpage on another website like wikipedia or the IS wiki. Second are notes. Do you know why wikipedia got so poular. It was because it allowed unrestrained linking between pages thus creating a huge interrelated database that allowed jumping from interest to interest. I've tried to do the same here. Just trust me. This is actually more benificial. It allows for full information about the word rather than a few lines that might not satisfy the readers thirst for knowledge. Plus you do not need to write down the info again, just link to an already existing source. Writing it afresh is a tedious process I assure you. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 12:49, 13 July 2011 (UCT)

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	Which ones? It's the first chapter of this volume so I'm adding references. I'll make sure that a reference made in an earlier chapter of the same volume won't be repeated. But you'd be surprised at what people don't know and what might perk their interest. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 17:50, 12 July 2011 (UCT)		Which ones? It's the first chapter of this volume so I'm adding references. I'll make sure that a reference made in an earlier chapter of the same volume won't be repeated. But you'd be surprised at what people don't know and what might perk their interest. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 17:50, 12 July 2011 (UCT)

			Personally, I'd rather user a seperate wiki page, since it does appear in every volume, from what you just said. Or some bottom page references. [[User:Kira0802\|Kira]] ([[User_talk:Kira0802\|Talk]]) 12:05, 13 July 2011 (UCT)

Zero2001: /* Proposed translation edit */

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	Kira. I'll be going through the page and changing the exclamations to their english counterparts. And making some small changes (fixing punctuation errors and adding reference links, mainly). For the '''(i)'''s I'll add notes/my views so, if you're not busy, could you go over them. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 17:49, 12 July 2011 (UCT)		Kira. I'll be going through the page and changing the exclamations to their english counterparts. And making some small changes (fixing punctuation errors and adding reference links, mainly). For the '''(i)'''s I'll add notes/my views so, if you're not busy, could you go over them. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 17:49, 12 July 2011 (UCT)

			Okay. Done. Kira, could go go through the whole thing and clean up the hidden comments where you feel that they can be cleaned up? I feel that as translator you would have better understanding of what to keep and what to delete. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 19:06, 12 July 2011 (UCT)

	== Translation Change Reasons ==		== Translation Change Reasons ==