Talk:Kikou Shoujo wa Kizutsukanai:Volume 3 Chapter 1 - Revision history

Zero2001 at 04:57, 1 November 2012

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	Unless and until the text doesn't show the effect of producing a sound there's no need to put for an SFX --[[User:Chancs\|Chancs]] ([[User talk:Chancs\|talk]]) 23:34, 31 October 2012 (CDT)		Unless and until the text doesn't show the effect of producing a sound there's no need to put for an SFX --[[User:Chancs\|Chancs]] ([[User talk:Chancs\|talk]]) 23:34, 31 October 2012 (CDT)

	[http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GOG7n8peuFA OK it's not a SFX, got it.] [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 23:44, 31 October 2012 (CDT)		[http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GOG7n8peuFA OK it's not an SFX, got it.] [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 23:44, 31 October 2012 (CDT)

Zero2001 at 04:44, 1 November 2012

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	Unless and until the text doesn't show the effect of producing a sound there's no need to put for an SFX --[[User:Chancs\|Chancs]] ([[User talk:Chancs\|talk]]) 23:34, 31 October 2012 (CDT)		Unless and until the text doesn't show the effect of producing a sound there's no need to put for an SFX --[[User:Chancs\|Chancs]] ([[User talk:Chancs\|talk]]) 23:34, 31 October 2012 (CDT)

			[http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GOG7n8peuFA OK it's not a SFX, got it.] [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 23:44, 31 October 2012 (CDT)

Chancs at 04:34, 1 November 2012

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	--[[User:Hayashi s\|Hayashi s]] ([[User talk:Hayashi s\|talk]]) 22:56, 31 October 2012 (CDT)		--[[User:Hayashi s\|Hayashi s]] ([[User talk:Hayashi s\|talk]]) 22:56, 31 October 2012 (CDT)

			Unless and until the text doesn't show the effect of producing a sound there's no need to put for an SFX --[[User:Chancs\|Chancs]] ([[User talk:Chancs\|talk]]) 23:34, 31 October 2012 (CDT)

Hayashi s at 03:59, 1 November 2012

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	http://dictionary.cambridge.org/dictionary/british/false-move		http://dictionary.cambridge.org/dictionary/british/false-move

	In English, Henriette would be Henrietta.		In English, Henriette would be Henrietta.<br>
	Bolding the last letter would be more jarring then helpful. And I don't think it is a difference readers would miss, given how the whole point of the short sentence is to draw emphasise to it.		Bolding the last letter would be more jarring then helpful. And I don't think it is a difference readers would miss, given how the whole point of the short sentence is to draw emphasise to it.

	In SFXing the bobble, depends on the character I guess, if you are drawing attention to something like a hat. Otherwise it just seems to be used in place of ''nod, nod or nodding'' in this line --[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 15:58, 31 October 2012 (CDT)		In SFXing the bobble, depends on the character I guess, if you are drawing attention to something like a hat. Otherwise it just seems to be used in place of ''nod, nod or nodding'' in this line --[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 15:58, 31 October 2012 (CDT)

			:Point 1: OK got it.
			:Point 2: OK.
			:Point 3: Nodding with head is commonly an SFX in japanese anime and manga. That's why I think ''bobble'' should be an SFX here.
			:[[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 19:41, 31 October 2012 (CDT)

	With regards to "false moves":		With regards to "false moves":

Hayashi s at 03:56, 1 November 2012

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	http://dictionary.cambridge.org/dictionary/british/false-move		http://dictionary.cambridge.org/dictionary/british/false-move

	In English, Henriette would be Henrietta.~~<br>~~		In English, Henriette would be Henrietta.
	Bolding the last letter would be more jarring then helpful. And I don't think it is a difference readers would miss, given how the whole point of the short sentence is to draw emphasise to it.		Bolding the last letter would be more jarring then helpful. And I don't think it is a difference readers would miss, given how the whole point of the short sentence is to draw emphasise to it.

	In SFXing the bobble, depends on the character I guess, if you are drawing attention to something like a hat. Otherwise it just seems to be used in place of ''nod, nod or nodding'' in this line --[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 15:58, 31 October 2012 (CDT)		In SFXing the bobble, depends on the character I guess, if you are drawing attention to something like a hat. Otherwise it just seems to be used in place of ''nod, nod or nodding'' in this line --[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 15:58, 31 October 2012 (CDT)

	:~~Point 1~~: ~~OK got it~~.
	:~~Point 2~~: OK.		With regards to "false moves":
	~~:Point 3: Nodding with head~~ is ~~commonly an~~ SFX in ~~japanese anime~~ and ~~manga~~. ~~That's why~~ I ~~think~~ ''~~bobble~~'~~' should be an~~ ~~SFX~~ ~~here~~.		*http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/false+move - an act or action that can cause trouble or damage; mistake: If the bus driver had made one false move, we would have skidded off the icy road.
	:[[User:~~Zero2001~~\|~~Zero2001~~]] - [[~~User_talk~~:~~Zero2001~~\|~~Talk~~]] ~~- 19~~:41, 31 October 2012 (CDT)		*http://dictionary.cambridge.org/dictionary/british/false-move - an unwise action which is likely to have an unpleasant or dangerous effect
			*http://www.collinsdictionary.com/dictionary/english/one-false-move-and#one-false-move-and_1 - You use one false move to introduce the very bad or serious consequences which will result if someone makes a mistake, even a very small one. ⇒ "One false move and I knew Sarah would be dead."

			If the original Japanese text emphasised the difference on the "e" and the "a", I would have reflected it. It didn't, so you don't have to. If you aren't able to see the difference between Henriette and Henrietta I'd have to declare you legally blind.

			Bobble is not a goddamned SFX. You bobble for apples, something bobbles up and down. There is nothing in the English language that can be used to inform someone that your head makes a sound when it nods, short of saying "her head made a sound as it nodded up and down". If you know what a bobble sounds like, please tell me, I'm dying to know.

			Compare the following:
			*let's go to Smithsonian.
			*let's go to the Smithsonian.
			*Did you catch Superbowl last night?!
			*Did you catch the Superbowl last night!?
			*I went down to Japanese Embassy last night to submit my application form
			*I went down to the Japanese Embassy last night to submit my application form.

			--[[User:Hayashi s\|Hayashi s]] ([[User talk:Hayashi s\|talk]]) 22:56, 31 October 2012 (CDT)

Zero2001 at 00:41, 1 November 2012

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	In English, Henriette would be Henrietta.		In English, Henriette would be Henrietta.<br>
	Bolding the last letter would be more jarring then helpful. And I don't think it is a difference readers would miss, given how the whole point of the short sentence is to draw emphasise to it.		Bolding the last letter would be more jarring then helpful. And I don't think it is a difference readers would miss, given how the whole point of the short sentence is to draw emphasise to it.

	In SFXing the bobble, depends on the character I guess, if you are drawing attention to something like a hat. Otherwise it just seems to be used in place of ''nod, nod or nodding'' in this line --[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 15:58, 31 October 2012 (CDT)		In SFXing the bobble, depends on the character I guess, if you are drawing attention to something like a hat. Otherwise it just seems to be used in place of ''nod, nod or nodding'' in this line --[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 15:58, 31 October 2012 (CDT)

			:Point 1: OK got it.
			:Point 2: OK.
			:Point 3: Nodding with head is commonly an SFX in japanese anime and manga. That's why I think ''bobble'' should be an SFX here.
			:[[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 19:41, 31 October 2012 (CDT)

Drowzycow: double negatives blah

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double negatives blah

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	In English, Henriette would be Henrietta.		In English, Henriette would be Henrietta.
	Bolding the last letter would be more jarring then helpful. And I don't think it is a difference readers ~~wouldn't~~ miss, given how the whole point of the short sentence is to draw emphasise to it.		Bolding the last letter would be more jarring then helpful. And I don't think it is a difference readers would miss, given how the whole point of the short sentence is to draw emphasise to it.

	In SFXing the bobble, depends on the character I guess, if you are drawing attention to something like a hat. Otherwise it just seems to be used in place of ''nod, nod or nodding'' in this line --[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 15:58, 31 October 2012 (CDT)		In SFXing the bobble, depends on the character I guess, if you are drawing attention to something like a hat. Otherwise it just seems to be used in place of ''nod, nod or nodding'' in this line --[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 15:58, 31 October 2012 (CDT)

Drowzycow at 20:58, 31 October 2012

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	In English, Henriette would be Henrietta.		In English, Henriette would be Henrietta.
	Bolding the last letter would be more jarring then helpful. And I don't think it is a difference readers ~~would~~ miss, given how the whole point of the short sentence is to draw emphasise to it.		Bolding the last letter would be more jarring then helpful. And I don't think it is a difference readers wouldn't miss, given how the whole point of the short sentence is to draw emphasise to it.

	In SFXing the bobble, depends on the character I guess, if you are drawing attention to something like a hat. Otherwise it just seems to be used in place of ''nod, nod or nodding'' in this line --[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 15:58, 31 October 2012 (CDT)		In SFXing the bobble, depends on the character I guess, if you are drawing attention to something like a hat. Otherwise it just seems to be used in place of ''nod, nod or nodding'' in this line --[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 15:58, 31 October 2012 (CDT)

Drowzycow: just my 2 cents on the matter

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just my 2 cents on the matter

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	''Gryphon dorm'' not ''the Gryphon dorm'' is more correct here, in my opinion. You don't need the ''the'' if the name is Title Cased. And you rollbacked when you should have undid my edit. Thus changing my other edits (punctuation and <nowiki><noinclude></noinclude></nowiki>) as well. I'll fix that. Rollback: reverts all consecutive edits made by the last editor. Undo: reverts only the edit in question. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 13:29, 31 October 2012 (CDT)		''Gryphon dorm'' not ''the Gryphon dorm'' is more correct here, in my opinion. You don't need the ''the'' if the name is Title Cased. And you rollbacked when you should have undid my edit. Thus changing my other edits (punctuation and <nowiki><noinclude></noinclude></nowiki>) as well. I'll fix that. Rollback: reverts all consecutive edits made by the last editor. Undo: reverts only the edit in question. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 13:29, 31 October 2012 (CDT)

			I don't see what is wrong with using ''false move'' -it's commonly used to mean avoiding "an unwise action which is likely to have an unpleasant or dangerous effect"
			http://dictionary.cambridge.org/dictionary/british/false-move

			In English, Henriette would be Henrietta.
			Bolding the last letter would be more jarring then helpful. And I don't think it is a difference readers would miss, given how the whole point of the short sentence is to draw emphasise to it.

			In SFXing the bobble, depends on the character I guess, if you are drawing attention to something like a hat. Otherwise it just seems to be used in place of ''nod, nod or nodding'' in this line --[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 15:58, 31 October 2012 (CDT)

Zero2001 at 18:34, 31 October 2012

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	When written like that ''bobble'' sounds like an SFX. I know the characters are not bolded, I just did it to make it easier for the readers to understand (A single letter is easy to overlook unless set apart in some way). ''False moves'' is incorrect in such circumstance no matter how you look it; in English, the correct term should be ''wrong moves''. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 13:23, 31 October 2012 (CDT)		When written like that ''bobble'' sounds like an SFX. I know the characters are not bolded, I just did it to make it easier for the readers to understand (A single letter is easy to overlook unless set apart in some way). ''False moves'' is incorrect in such circumstance no matter how you look it; in English, the correct term should be ''wrong moves''. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 13:23, 31 October 2012 (CDT)

	''Gryphon dorm'' not ''the Gryphon dorm'' is more correct here. You don't need the ''the'' if the name is Title Cased. And you rollbacked when you should have undid my edit. Thus changing my other edits (punctuation and <nowiki><noinclude></noinclude></nowiki>) as well. I'll fix that. Rollback: reverts all consecutive edits made by the last editor. Undo: reverts only the edit in question. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 13:29, 31 October 2012 (CDT)		''Gryphon dorm'' not ''the Gryphon dorm'' is more correct here, in my opinion. You don't need the ''the'' if the name is Title Cased. And you rollbacked when you should have undid my edit. Thus changing my other edits (punctuation and <nowiki><noinclude></noinclude></nowiki>) as well. I'll fix that. Rollback: reverts all consecutive edits made by the last editor. Undo: reverts only the edit in question. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 13:29, 31 October 2012 (CDT)