Talk:Kokoro Connect:Volume 1 Chapter 8 - Revision history

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	Also, like Chapter 7, I'm gonna do a run through of the entire chapter. I feel somewhat bad doing so, so I suppose I'll upload the big changes onto this discussion page as well once I get the chance. --[[User:Michpig\|Michpig]] ([[User talk:Michpig\|talk]]) 11:18, 19 September 2012 (CDT)		Also, like Chapter 7, I'm gonna do a run through of the entire chapter. I feel somewhat bad doing so, so I suppose I'll upload the big changes onto this discussion page as well once I get the chance. --[[User:Michpig\|Michpig]] ([[User talk:Michpig\|talk]]) 11:18, 19 September 2012 (CDT)

			I don't have permission to edit, but you should know that in the first paragraph after the page break symbol, "the days past" should be "the days passed". -Anonymous

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	As well, the usage of 'companion'. It feels a bit strange in the text. I feel "friend" would generally suffice. Is it a translation of "nakama" into Chinese back into English? --[[User:Michpig\|Michpig]] ([[User talk:Michpig\|talk]]) 10:07, 18 September 2012 (CDT)		As well, the usage of 'companion'. It feels a bit strange in the text. I feel "friend" would generally suffice. Is it a translation of "nakama" into Chinese back into English? --[[User:Michpig\|Michpig]] ([[User talk:Michpig\|talk]]) 10:07, 18 September 2012 (CDT)

	Also, I was wondering whether the original had the narrator (Taichi) skipping back and forth between third and first person. The inconsistency is somewhat glaring and I reaaaally want to correct it.		Also, I was wondering whether the original had the narrator (Taichi) skipping back and forth between third and first person. The inconsistency is somewhat glaring and I reaaaally want to correct it. - edit - apparently the author is just inconsistent.

	Also, like Chapter 7, I'm gonna do a run through of the entire chapter. I feel somewhat bad doing so, so I suppose I'll upload the big changes onto this discussion page as well once I get the chance. --[[User:Michpig\|Michpig]] ([[User talk:Michpig\|talk]]) 11:18, 19 September 2012 (CDT)		Also, like Chapter 7, I'm gonna do a run through of the entire chapter. I feel somewhat bad doing so, so I suppose I'll upload the big changes onto this discussion page as well once I get the chance. --[[User:Michpig\|Michpig]] ([[User talk:Michpig\|talk]]) 11:18, 19 September 2012 (CDT)

Michpig at 16:18, 19 September 2012

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	As well, the usage of 'companion'. It feels a bit strange in the text. I feel "friend" would generally suffice. Is it a translation of "nakama" into Chinese back into English? --[[User:Michpig\|Michpig]] ([[User talk:Michpig\|talk]]) 10:07, 18 September 2012 (CDT)		As well, the usage of 'companion'. It feels a bit strange in the text. I feel "friend" would generally suffice. Is it a translation of "nakama" into Chinese back into English? --[[User:Michpig\|Michpig]] ([[User talk:Michpig\|talk]]) 10:07, 18 September 2012 (CDT)

			Also, I was wondering whether the original had the narrator (Taichi) skipping back and forth between third and first person. The inconsistency is somewhat glaring and I reaaaally want to correct it.

			Also, like Chapter 7, I'm gonna do a run through of the entire chapter. I feel somewhat bad doing so, so I suppose I'll upload the big changes onto this discussion page as well once I get the chance. --[[User:Michpig\|Michpig]] ([[User talk:Michpig\|talk]]) 11:18, 19 September 2012 (CDT)

Michpig at 15:07, 18 September 2012

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	I think "sharp-tongued response" is pretty awkward. If possible, changing them to something else would be preferable. Does anyone have any ideas? It's along the lines of a snarky reply or a sarcastic jab, right?		I think "sharp-tongued response" is pretty awkward. If possible, changing them to something else would be preferable. Does anyone have any ideas? It's along the lines of a snarky reply or a sarcastic jab, right?

	As well, the usage of 'companion'. It feels a bit strange in the text. I feel "friend" would generally suffice. Is it a translation of "nakama" into Chinese back into English?		As well, the usage of 'companion'. It feels a bit strange in the text. I feel "friend" would generally suffice. Is it a translation of "nakama" into Chinese back into English? --[[User:Michpig\|Michpig]] ([[User talk:Michpig\|talk]]) 10:07, 18 September 2012 (CDT)

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Just a few questions.

I think "sharp-tongued response" is pretty awkward. If possible, changing them to something else would be preferable. Does anyone have any ideas? It's along the lines of a snarky reply or a sarcastic jab, right?

As well, the usage of 'companion'. It feels a bit strange in the text. I feel "friend" would generally suffice. Is it a translation of "nakama" into Chinese back into English?