Talk:Mahouka Koukou no Rettousei:Volume 6 Chapter 5 - Revision history

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2013-02-02T09:59:47Z

Put the items into bullet list

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	(great happiness at the translation!) 'import event' -> 'important event'? \| If possible, I suggest changing one of 'was almost seen to be' and 'was seen as', as it currently presents the contradictory impression of being seen as an important event that's almost pointless. \| Could the 'so high temperature is required for the entire process' sentence be checked? It doesn't seem to serve as an explanation/response for why a low-temperature thing is being used. \| In Chiaki's ranting, she uses 'that guy' and 'that man' several times to refer to Tatsuya, and '"that man"' to refer to a different person. The narration then notes the two listeners not noticing the phrase '"that guy"' in her words, which should be referring to the different person, but which she has only used to refer to Tatsuya. Unless the words used are in fact different, I suggest that those two phrases in double quotes by changed to the same phrase.		(great happiness at the translation!)
			* 'import event' -> 'important event'?
			* If possible, I suggest changing one of 'was almost seen to be' and 'was seen as', as it currently presents the contradictory impression of being seen as an important event that's almost pointless.
	"Without someone Saegusa-senpai's sensory abilities" -- "someone having sensory ability similar to saegusa-sempai's".		* Could the 'so high temperature is required for the entire process' sentence be checked? It doesn't seem to serve as an explanation/response for why a low-temperature thing is being used.
			* In Chiaki's ranting, she uses 'that guy' and 'that man' several times to refer to Tatsuya, and '"that man"' to refer to a different person. The narration then notes the two listeners not noticing the phrase '"that guy"' in her words, which should be referring to the different person, but which she has only used to refer to Tatsuya. Unless the words used are in fact different, I suggest that those two phrases in double quotes by changed to the same phrase.
			* "Without someone Saegusa-senpai's sensory abilities" -- "someone having sensory ability similar to saegusa-sempai's".

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2013-01-16T11:33:10Z

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	(great happiness at the translation!) 'import event' -> 'important event'? \| If possible, I suggest changing one of 'was almost seen to be' and 'was seen as', as it currently presents the contradictory impression of being seen as an important event that's almost pointless. \| Could the 'so high temperature is required for the entire process' sentence be checked? It doesn't seem to serve as an explanation/response for why a low-temperature thing is being used. \| In Chiaki's ranting, she uses 'that guy' and 'that man' several times to refer to Tatsuya, and '"that man"' to refer to a different person. The narration then notes the two listeners not noticing the phrase '"that guy"' in her words, which should be referring to the different person, but which she has only used to refer to Tatsuya. Unless the words used are in fact different, I suggest that those two phrases in double quotes by changed to the same phrase.		(great happiness at the translation!) 'import event' -> 'important event'? \| If possible, I suggest changing one of 'was almost seen to be' and 'was seen as', as it currently presents the contradictory impression of being seen as an important event that's almost pointless. \| Could the 'so high temperature is required for the entire process' sentence be checked? It doesn't seem to serve as an explanation/response for why a low-temperature thing is being used. \| In Chiaki's ranting, she uses 'that guy' and 'that man' several times to refer to Tatsuya, and '"that man"' to refer to a different person. The narration then notes the two listeners not noticing the phrase '"that guy"' in her words, which should be referring to the different person, but which she has only used to refer to Tatsuya. Unless the words used are in fact different, I suggest that those two phrases in double quotes by changed to the same phrase.


			"Without someone Saegusa-senpai's sensory abilities" -- "someone having sensory ability similar to saegusa-sempai's".

180.43.16.157: Minor editing suggestions.

2013-01-16T10:50:16Z

Minor editing suggestions.

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(*great happiness at the translation!*) 'import event' -> 'important event'? | If possible, I suggest changing one of 'was almost seen to be' and 'was seen as', as it currently presents the contradictory impression of being seen as an important event that's almost pointless. | Could the 'so high temperature is required for the entire process' sentence be checked? It doesn't seem to serve as an explanation/response for why a low-temperature thing is being used. | In Chiaki's ranting, she uses 'that guy' and 'that man' several times to refer to Tatsuya, and '"that man"' to refer to a different person. The narration then notes the two listeners not noticing the phrase '"that guy"' in her words, which should be referring to the different person, but which she has only used to refer to Tatsuya. Unless the words used are in fact different, I suggest that those two phrases in double quotes by changed to the same phrase.