Talk:Rakudai Kishi no Eiyuutan:Volume1 Chapter 1 - Revision history

KLSymph: issues resolved

2015-01-01T07:51:17Z

issues resolved

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	~~== Proposed edits ==~~

	~~(Previously proposed edits have been resolved.) -- [[User:KLSymph\|KLSymph]] ([[User talk:KLSymph\|talk]]) 11:27, 20 May 2014 (CDT)~~

KLSymph: edits have been resolved, formatting discussion moved to main page guideline section

2014-05-20T16:27:06Z

edits have been resolved, formatting discussion moved to main page guideline section

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	== Proposed edits ==		== Proposed edits ==

	~~Line 560~~~		(Previously proposed edits have been resolved.) -- [[User:KLSymph\|KLSymph]] ([[User talk:KLSymph\|talk]]) 11:27, 20 May 2014 (CDT)

	~~"... stamina and strength directly, and vowed to the man in front of her.~~

	~~―――I’ll crush you.~~

	~~Talent cannot be defeated. A genius is a special existence.~~

	~~Words of empty self-deception like that, with an absolute force, I’ll definitely crush them."~~

	to

	~~"... stamina and strength directly, and vowed to the man in front of her:~~

	~~「―――I’ll crush you.」~~

	~~「Talent cannot be defeated. A genius is a special existence.」~~

	~~「Words of empty self-deception like that, with an absolute force, I’ll definitely crush them.」~~
	"

	As it currently is, having the vow seperate from action of vowing makes the sentence awkward. As for the difference in quote styles, I'm unsure if this is an internal vow, or said out loud. Since we don't have ~~quotes on it in current form, I'm assuming it's an internal vow, and since there isn't a set style to convey internal quotes for this series yet...~~

	~~[[Special:Contributions/65.32.145.234\|65.32.145.234]] 12:41, 26 April 2014 (CDT)~~

	~~I think the half-square brackets are used for newspaper, and parentheses are used for internal quotes?~~

	~~[[User:KLSymph\|KLSymph]] ([[User talk:KLSymph\|talk]]) 14:02, 28 April 2014 (CDT)~~

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	~~Line 584~~~

	~~"In that instant, <Laevateinn> violently struck the arena floor and――――caused a violent earthquake that quivered the entire arena."~~

	~~" earthquake that caused the entire arena to quiver"~~

	~~[[Special:Contributions/65.32.145.234\|65.32.145.234]]~~

	~~I support this change, or changing "quivered the entire arena" to "shook the entire arena". The manga makes it look more like shaking than quivering, at least.~~

	~~[[User:KLSymph\|KLSymph]] ([[User talk:KLSymph\|talk]]) 19:01, 26 April 2014 (CDT)~~

	~~== Formatting consistency ==~~

	~~Referring to a character as "Rank A" (Rank F, etc.) is probably good formatting as a proper title, but should we go:~~

	* A-rank (which the translator's rendering)
	* A-Rank (which I've been ~~going changing everything to)~~
	* A Rank (can be grammatically ambiguous)
	* A rank (definitely ambiguous)
	* A-ranked

	~~Or something else? My choice is due to the context often being a sentence like "Stella is an A-Rank~~."

	~~[[User:KLSymph\|KLSymph]] ([[User talk:KLSymph\|talk]]) 19:01, 26 April 2014 (CDT)~~

	~~----~~

	~~For the formal title, should we go:~~

	* Mage-knight (the current form)
	* Mage-Knight (might be better as a title, compare Knight Bachelor)
	* mage-~~knight (not a proper noun, doesn't quite sound like a formal title)~~
	* mage knight? mage-~~knight?~~
	* magic knight?

	[[User:KLSymph\|KLSymph]] ([[User talk:KLSymph\|talk]]) 19:01, ~~26 April~~ 2014 (CDT)

	~~----~~

KLSymph at 19:02, 28 April 2014

2014-04-28T19:02:20Z

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			I think the half-square brackets are used for newspaper, and parentheses are used for internal quotes?

			[[User:KLSymph\|KLSymph]] ([[User talk:KLSymph\|talk]]) 14:02, 28 April 2014 (CDT)

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	~~----~~		== Formatting consistency ==

	Formatting consistency:

	Referring to a character as "Rank A" (Rank F, etc.) is probably good formatting as a proper title, but should we go:		Referring to a character as "Rank A" (Rank F, etc.) is probably good formatting as a proper title, but should we go:

KLSymph at 00:01, 27 April 2014

2014-04-27T00:01:03Z

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65.32.145.234 at 17:59, 26 April 2014

2014-04-26T17:59:06Z

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	" earthquake that caused the entire arena to quiver"		" earthquake that caused the entire arena to quiver"

	~~Tense change for consistency - quivered is past tense form. The whole fight scene is a tense change to present tense to convey action.~~

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65.32.145.234 at 17:57, 26 April 2014

2014-04-26T17:57:30Z

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			"In that instant, <Laevateinn> violently struck the arena floor and――――caused a violent earthquake that quivered the entire arena."

			" earthquake that caused the entire arena to quiver"

			Tense change for consistency - quivered is past tense form. The whole fight scene is a tense change to present tense to convey action.

			[[Special:Contributions/65.32.145.234\|65.32.145.234]]

65.32.145.234 at 17:45, 26 April 2014

2014-04-26T17:45:56Z

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	"... stamina and strength directly, and vowed to the man in front of her.		"... stamina and strength directly, and vowed to the man in front of her.

	―――I’ll crush you."		―――I’ll crush you.

			Talent cannot be defeated. A genius is a special existence.

			Words of empty self-deception like that, with an absolute force, I’ll definitely crush them."

	to		to

	"... stamina and strength directly, and vowed to the man in front of her 「―――I’ll crush you.」"		"... stamina and strength directly, and vowed to the man in front of her:

			「―――I’ll crush you.」

			「Talent cannot be defeated. A genius is a special existence.」

			「Words of empty self-deception like that, with an absolute force, I’ll definitely crush them.」
			"

	As it currently is, having the vow seperate from action of vowing makes the sentence awkward. As for the difference in quote styles, I'm unsure if this is an internal vow, or said out loud. Since we don't have quotes on it in current form, I'm assuming it's an internal vow, and since there isn't a set style to convey internal quotes for this series yet...		As it currently is, having the vow seperate from action of vowing makes the sentence awkward. As for the difference in quote styles, I'm unsure if this is an internal vow, or said out loud. Since we don't have quotes on it in current form, I'm assuming it's an internal vow, and since there isn't a set style to convey internal quotes for this series yet...

	[[Special:Contributions/65.32.145.234\|65.32.145.234]] 12:41, 26 April 2014 (CDT)		[[Special:Contributions/65.32.145.234\|65.32.145.234]] 12:41, 26 April 2014 (CDT)

65.32.145.234 at 17:42, 26 April 2014

2014-04-26T17:42:57Z

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	"... stamina and strength directly, and vowed to the man in front of her 「―――I’ll crush you.」"		"... stamina and strength directly, and vowed to the man in front of her 「―――I’ll crush you.」"

	As it currently is, having the vow seperate from action of vowing makes the sentence awkward. As for the difference in quote styles, I'm unsure if this is an internal vow, or said out loud. Since we don't have quotes on it in current form, i'm assuming it's an internal vow, and since there isn't a set style to convey internal quotes for this series yet...		As it currently is, having the vow seperate from action of vowing makes the sentence awkward. As for the difference in quote styles, I'm unsure if this is an internal vow, or said out loud. Since we don't have quotes on it in current form, I'm assuming it's an internal vow, and since there isn't a set style to convey internal quotes for this series yet...

	[[Special:Contributions/65.32.145.234\|65.32.145.234]] 12:41, 26 April 2014 (CDT)		[[Special:Contributions/65.32.145.234\|65.32.145.234]] 12:41, 26 April 2014 (CDT)

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2014-04-26T17:41:55Z

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"... stamina and strength directly, and vowed to the man in front of her.

―――I’ll crush you."

to

"... stamina and strength directly, and vowed to the man in front of her 「―――I’ll crush you.」"

As it currently is, having the vow seperate from action of vowing makes the sentence awkward. As for the difference in quote styles, I'm unsure if this is an internal vow, or said out loud. Since we don't have quotes on it in current form, i'm assuming it's an internal vow, and since there isn't a set style to convey internal quotes for this series yet...

[[Special:Contributions/65.32.145.234|65.32.145.234]] 12:41, 26 April 2014 (CDT)