Talk:Seirei Tsukai no Blade Dance:Volume2 Chapter8 - Revision history

Royaloyalz: Question

2013-03-04T01:46:15Z

Question

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	Well, since the translator thinks so in this case. But generally, replacement is better than removal, no? [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 19:14, 13 October 2012 (CDT)		Well, since the translator thinks so in this case. But generally, replacement is better than removal, no? [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 19:14, 13 October 2012 (CDT)

			== Part 1 Question ==
			Hmm, this sentence does not really makes sense, what I thought was "
			Greatly lowering her volume, Fianna clasped ''her hands'' to her breasts, as she muttered. However, after looking through the Chinese translation, what I got was " While Fianna was hugging her greatly diminished breasts, she muttered." Can someone help me look at this translation again? Thanks. -- [[User:Royaloyalz\|Royaloyalz]] ([[User talk:Royaloyalz\|talk]]) 19:46, 3 March 2013 (CST)

			Greatly lowering her volume, Fianna clasped to her breasts, as she muttered.

KuroiHikari: /* part 2 edit */

2012-10-14T00:30:58Z

part 2 edit

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	Replace "like" with "as if" or "as though". It's best to use alternates rather than outright removal. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 12:05, 13 October 2012 (CDT)		Replace "like" with "as if" or "as though". It's best to use alternates rather than outright removal. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 12:05, 13 October 2012 (CDT)

	It's all right, you can remove it. It's more of a lingual difference that I didn't notice. --[[User:KuroiHikari\|KuroiHikari]] ([[User_talk:KuroiHikari\|Talk]] \| ) 18:35, 13 October 2012 (CDT)		It's all right, you can remove it. It's more of a lingual difference between Jp and Eng that I didn't notice. --[[User:KuroiHikari\|KuroiHikari]] ([[User_talk:KuroiHikari\|Talk]] \| ) 18:35, 13 October 2012 (CDT)

	Well, since the translator thinks so in this case. But generally, replacement is better than removal, no? [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 19:14, 13 October 2012 (CDT)		Well, since the translator thinks so in this case. But generally, replacement is better than removal, no? [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 19:14, 13 October 2012 (CDT)

Zero2001: /* part 2 edit */

2012-10-14T00:14:03Z

part 2 edit

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	It's all right, you can remove it. It's more of a lingual difference that I didn't notice. --[[User:KuroiHikari\|KuroiHikari]] ([[User_talk:KuroiHikari\|Talk]] \| ) 18:35, 13 October 2012 (CDT)		It's all right, you can remove it. It's more of a lingual difference that I didn't notice. --[[User:KuroiHikari\|KuroiHikari]] ([[User_talk:KuroiHikari\|Talk]] \| ) 18:35, 13 October 2012 (CDT)

			Well, since the translator thinks so in this case. But generally, replacement is better than removal, no? [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 19:14, 13 October 2012 (CDT)

KuroiHikari: /* part 2 edit */

2012-10-13T23:35:07Z

part 2 edit

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	Replace "like" with "as if" or "as though". It's best to use alternates rather than outright removal. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 12:05, 13 October 2012 (CDT)		Replace "like" with "as if" or "as though". It's best to use alternates rather than outright removal. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 12:05, 13 October 2012 (CDT)

			It's all right, you can remove it. It's more of a lingual difference that I didn't notice. --[[User:KuroiHikari\|KuroiHikari]] ([[User_talk:KuroiHikari\|Talk]] \| ) 18:35, 13 October 2012 (CDT)

Zero2001: /* part 2 edit */

2012-10-13T17:06:05Z

part 2 edit

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	I would remove the "like" here since it's redundant- she is talking in a self-deprecating way/beating herself up. Unless you are making it an adverb for muttered, then self-deprecatingly muttered? --[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 11:09, 13 October 2012 (CDT)		I would remove the "like" here since it's redundant- she is talking in a self-deprecating way/beating herself up. Unless you are making it an adverb for muttered, then self-deprecatingly muttered? --[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 11:09, 13 October 2012 (CDT)

	Replace "like" with "as if" or "as though". [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 12:05, 13 October 2012 (CDT)		Replace "like" with "as if" or "as though". It's best to use alternates rather than outright removal. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 12:05, 13 October 2012 (CDT)

Zero2001: /* part 2 edit */

2012-10-13T17:05:23Z

part 2 edit

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	I would remove the "like" here since it's redundant- she is talking in a self-deprecating way/beating herself up. Unless you are making it an adverb for muttered, then self-deprecatingly muttered? --[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 11:09, 13 October 2012 (CDT)		I would remove the "like" here since it's redundant- she is talking in a self-deprecating way/beating herself up. Unless you are making it an adverb for muttered, then self-deprecatingly muttered? --[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 11:09, 13 October 2012 (CDT)

			Replace "like" with "as if" or "as though". [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 12:05, 13 October 2012 (CDT)

Drowzycow at 16:09, 13 October 2012

2012-10-13T16:09:09Z

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	Fianna looked downwards, and muttered like in self-deprecation.		Fianna looked downwards, and muttered like in self-deprecation.

	I would remove the "like" here since it's redundant- she is talking in a self-deprecating way/beating herself up.		I would remove the "like" here since it's redundant- she is talking in a self-deprecating way/beating herself up. Unless you are making it an adverb for muttered, then self-deprecatingly muttered? --[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 11:09, 13 October 2012 (CDT)

Drowzycow: muttered like in self-deprecation >> muttered in self-deprecation? Is the like really needed there, how has the meaning changed?

2012-10-13T16:01:28Z

muttered like in self-deprecation >> muttered in self-deprecation? Is the like really needed there, how has the meaning changed?

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	Besides, 濃い (koi) can be translated into "stronger", "thicker", "deeper" or "denser" along with "darker" in these circumstances. So it supports. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 10:56, 14 June 2012 (CDT)		Besides, 濃い (koi) can be translated into "stronger", "thicker", "deeper" or "denser" along with "darker" in these circumstances. So it supports. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 10:56, 14 June 2012 (CDT)

			==part 2 edit==

			"A princess maiden, who can't use a contracted spirit, doesn't have the qualifications to be a spirit princess worth serving the elemental lord."

			Fianna looked downwards, and muttered like in self-deprecation.

			I would remove the "like" here since it's redundant- she is talking in a self-deprecating way/beating herself up.

Zero2001: /* Restia's Darkness */

2012-06-14T15:56:25Z

Restia's Darkness

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	I think "'''deeper''' darkness" is a good choice. It's often used to refer to a darker darkness. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 10:49, 14 June 2012 (CDT)		I think "'''deeper''' darkness" is a good choice. It's often used to refer to a darker darkness. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 10:49, 14 June 2012 (CDT)

			Besides, 濃い (koi) can be translated into "stronger", "thicker", "deeper" or "denser" along with "darker" in these circumstances. So it supports. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 10:56, 14 June 2012 (CDT)

Zero2001: /* 「あ、あいつはただの幼馴染みで、べ、べつに友達じゃないわっ!」 */

2012-06-14T15:51:04Z

「あ、あいつはただの幼馴染みで、べ、べつに友達じゃないわっ!」

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	Regarding the line in part 4, I thought it was obvious to people familiar with Japanese anime/manga. Childhood friend in japanese doesn't have the word friend in it. That line is like she's my friend but it's not like she's my friend in English.--[[User:KuroiHikari\|KuroiHikari]] 00:52, 13 June 2012 (CDT)		Regarding the line in part 4, I thought it was obvious to people familiar with Japanese anime/manga. Childhood friend in japanese doesn't have the word friend in it. That line is like she's my friend but it's not like she's my friend in English.--[[User:KuroiHikari\|KuroiHikari]] 00:52, 13 June 2012 (CDT)

	How about "childhood playmate" or just "playmate"? [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 10:47, 14 June 2012 (CDT)		How about "childhood playmate" or just "playmate"? I think this is a good choice. It removes the repetition of the word "friend" and still holds mostly the same meaning. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 10:47, 14 June 2012 (CDT)

	==Restia's Darkness==		==Restia's Darkness==

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	Replace "like" with "as if" or "as though". It's best to use alternates rather than outright removal. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 12:05, 13 October 2012 (CDT)		Replace "like" with "as if" or "as though". It's best to use alternates rather than outright removal. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 12:05, 13 October 2012 (CDT)

	It's all right, you can remove it. It's more of a lingual difference that I didn't notice. --[[User:KuroiHikari\|KuroiHikari]] ([[User_talk:KuroiHikari\|Talk]] \| ) 18:35, 13 October 2012 (CDT)		It's all right, you can remove it. It's more of a lingual difference between Jp and Eng that I didn't notice. --[[User:KuroiHikari\|KuroiHikari]] ([[User_talk:KuroiHikari\|Talk]] \| ) 18:35, 13 October 2012 (CDT)

	Well, since the translator thinks so in this case. But generally, replacement is better than removal, no? [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 19:14, 13 October 2012 (CDT)		Well, since the translator thinks so in this case. But generally, replacement is better than removal, no? [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 19:14, 13 October 2012 (CDT)