Talk:Seirei Tsukai no Blade Dance:Volume3 Chapter5 - Revision history

KuroiHikari: /* part 3 edit */

2013-04-13T23:06:36Z

part 3 edit

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	For this part <Est softly pressed her index finger onto Kamito's lips.> is this supposed to be pinky instead since later thers <Kamito entwined his pinky around Est's stretched out pinky and promised.>		For this part <Est softly pressed her index finger onto Kamito's lips.> is this supposed to be pinky instead since later thers <Kamito entwined his pinky around Est's stretched out pinky and promised.>
	--[[User:Monsterbandage\|Monsterbandage]] ([[User talk:Monsterbandage\|talk]]) 15:17, 9 April 2013 (CDT)		--[[User:Monsterbandage\|Monsterbandage]] ([[User talk:Monsterbandage\|talk]]) 15:17, 9 April 2013 (CDT)

			It isn't. The 1st sentence is index finger. The 2nd sentence has a secondary phrase where it indicates that Est stretched out her pinky attached to the word "pinky". Is it unclear? If so, I'll rephrase it. --[[User:KuroiHikari\|KuroiHikari]] ([[User_talk:KuroiHikari\|Talk]] \| ) 18:06, 13 April 2013 (CDT)

Monsterbandage at 20:17, 9 April 2013

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	Just noticed, but for consistancy do you want it to be iron shoes or steel shoes? Since later on "As she made the clacking steel shoe sounds, she left the headquarters building. " --[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 08:55, 15 October 2012 (CDT)		Just noticed, but for consistancy do you want it to be iron shoes or steel shoes? Since later on "As she made the clacking steel shoe sounds, she left the headquarters building. " --[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 08:55, 15 October 2012 (CDT)

			For this part <Est softly pressed her index finger onto Kamito's lips.> is this supposed to be pinky instead since later thers <Kamito entwined his pinky around Est's stretched out pinky and promised.>
			--[[User:Monsterbandage\|Monsterbandage]] ([[User talk:Monsterbandage\|talk]]) 15:17, 9 April 2013 (CDT)

Florza at 03:03, 26 October 2012

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	見覚え (mioboe) translates to "recognition", "recognize", "familiar" and "looks familiar" if by itself. So it's fine since it fits better with the circumstances. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 03:59, 3 August 2012 (CDT)		見覚え (mioboe) translates to "recognition", "recognize", "familiar" and "looks familiar" if by itself. So it's fine since it fits better with the circumstances. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 03:59, 3 August 2012 (CDT)

			Try 'Receiving dozens of blahblah to his body, Kamito was blown blahblah." [[User:Florza\|Florza]] ([[User talk:Florza\|talk]]) 22:03, 25 October 2012 (CDT)
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Drowzycow: /* part 3 edit */ iron vs steel

2012-10-15T13:55:48Z

part 3 edit: iron vs steel

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	The line is exactly what it means, she made the sound. 響かす- to make something resound --[[User:KuroiHikari\|KuroiHikari]] ([[User_talk:KuroiHikari\|Talk]] \| ) 08:20, 15 October 2012 (CDT)		The line is exactly what it means, she made the sound. 響かす- to make something resound --[[User:KuroiHikari\|KuroiHikari]] ([[User_talk:KuroiHikari\|Talk]] \| ) 08:20, 15 October 2012 (CDT)

			Just noticed, but for consistancy do you want it to be iron shoes or steel shoes? Since later on "As she made the clacking steel shoe sounds, she left the headquarters building. " --[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 08:55, 15 October 2012 (CDT)

KuroiHikari: /* part 3 edit */

2012-10-15T13:20:00Z

part 3 edit

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	''The sound of Velsaria's hard iron shoes could be heard as she slowly walked over/ approached.'' --[[User:Chancs\|Chancs]] ([[User talk:Chancs\|talk]]) 06:51, 15 October 2012 (CDT)		''The sound of Velsaria's hard iron shoes could be heard as she slowly walked over/ approached.'' --[[User:Chancs\|Chancs]] ([[User talk:Chancs\|talk]]) 06:51, 15 October 2012 (CDT)

			The line is exactly what it means, she made the sound. 響かす- to make something resound --[[User:KuroiHikari\|KuroiHikari]] ([[User_talk:KuroiHikari\|Talk]] \| ) 08:20, 15 October 2012 (CDT)

Chancs: /* part 3 edit */

2012-10-15T11:51:03Z

part 3 edit

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	--[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 06:08, 15 October 2012 (CDT)		--[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 06:08, 15 October 2012 (CDT)

			''The sound of Velsaria's hard iron shoes could be heard as she slowly walked over/ approached.'' --[[User:Chancs\|Chancs]] ([[User talk:Chancs\|talk]]) 06:51, 15 October 2012 (CDT)

Drowzycow: clarifying a line

2012-10-15T11:08:36Z

clarifying a line

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	見覚え (mioboe) translates to "recognition", "recognize", "familiar" and "looks familiar" if by itself. So it's fine since it fits better with the circumstances. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 03:59, 3 August 2012 (CDT)		見覚え (mioboe) translates to "recognition", "recognize", "familiar" and "looks familiar" if by itself. So it's fine since it fits better with the circumstances. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 03:59, 3 August 2012 (CDT)


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			Velsaria made sound of her hard iron shoes and slowly walked over.

			>> Velsaria made a sound with her hard iron shoes and slowly walked over. (The sort of thing those army types do where they click their feet together before marching?)
			>> The sound of Velsaria's hard iron shoes could be heard as her slowly walked over.

			--[[User:Drowzycow\|Drowzycow]] ([[User talk:Drowzycow\|talk]]) 06:08, 15 October 2012 (CDT)

Zero2001 at 08:59, 3 August 2012

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	The first one's fine, but meaning-wise, it's something like "She remembers/recognizes something about those eyes."--[[User:KuroiHikari\|KuroiHikari]] ([[User_talk:KuroiHikari\|Talk]] \| ) 19:49, 2 August 2012 (CDT)		The first one's fine, but meaning-wise, it's something like "She remembers/recognizes something about those eyes."--[[User:KuroiHikari\|KuroiHikari]] ([[User_talk:KuroiHikari\|Talk]] \| ) 19:49, 2 August 2012 (CDT)

			見覚え (mioboe) translates to "recognition", "recognize", "familiar" and "looks familiar" if by itself. So it's fine since it fits better with the circumstances. [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 03:59, 3 August 2012 (CDT)

KuroiHikari at 00:49, 3 August 2012

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	Hmm. あの目には―見覚えがあった。(Ano me ni wa ― mioboe ga atta). "Within those eyes— existed something familiar." or "The depths of those eyes— seemed familiar." Well that's the closest I can do. Which do you prefer? [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 19:33, 2 August 2012 (CDT)		Hmm. あの目には―見覚えがあった。(Ano me ni wa ― mioboe ga atta). "Within those eyes— existed something familiar." or "The depths of those eyes— seemed familiar." Well that's the closest I can do. Which do you prefer? [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 19:33, 2 August 2012 (CDT)

			The first one's fine, but meaning-wise, it's something like "She remembers/recognizes something about those eyes."--[[User:KuroiHikari\|KuroiHikari]] ([[User_talk:KuroiHikari\|Talk]] \| ) 19:49, 2 August 2012 (CDT)

Zero2001 at 00:33, 3 August 2012

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	I took some liberty and got rid of the dash: あの目には―見覚えがあった。--[[User:KuroiHikari\|KuroiHikari]] ([[User_talk:KuroiHikari\|Talk]] \| ) 18:31, 2 August 2012 (CDT)		I took some liberty and got rid of the dash: あの目には―見覚えがあった。--[[User:KuroiHikari\|KuroiHikari]] ([[User_talk:KuroiHikari\|Talk]] \| ) 18:31, 2 August 2012 (CDT)

			Hmm. あの目には―見覚えがあった。(Ano me ni wa ― mioboe ga atta). "Within those eyes— existed something familiar." or "The depths of those eyes— seemed familiar." Well that's the closest I can do. Which do you prefer? [[User:Zero2001\|Zero2001]] - [[User_talk:Zero2001\|Talk]] - 19:33, 2 August 2012 (CDT)