Talk:Suzumiya Haruhi:Volume7 Chapter 7 - Revision history

Nutcase: While ----- like a pigeon.

2007-03-06T05:45:11Z

While ----- like a pigeon.

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	:I went with "spent our life force" as an intermediate solution. Removing the "for" still leaves the last phrase a bit awkward, due to the implicit down vs. the explicit up. May sub "as much as two meters deep," eventually.--[[User:Nutcase\|Nutcase]] 04:50, 17 February 2007 (PST)		:I went with "spent our life force" as an intermediate solution. Removing the "for" still leaves the last phrase a bit awkward, due to the implicit down vs. the explicit up. May sub "as much as two meters deep," eventually.--[[User:Nutcase\|Nutcase]] 04:50, 17 February 2007 (PST)

			== While ----- like a pigeon. ==

			I found this as "cooing," changed it to "chuckling" as at least equally descriptive of pigeon sounds and also having a meaning in human terms that could plausibly relate to Koizumi's state of mind. Now I notice that there was an earlier forum thread about "crowing" -- not a pigeon sound -- vs. "cooing."

			A brief web search turns up "cooing" and "crooning" as common representations of pigeon sound, but not "chuckling." But wait! I get hits on "chortling"! And it's even better than better than "chuckling" as a fit to the context, with implications of smug satisfaction.--[[User:Nutcase\|Nutcase]] 21:45, 5 March 2007 (PST)

Nutcase at 12:50, 17 February 2007

2007-02-17T12:50:31Z

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	:There's nothing technically wrong with it, but I'd recommend "wasted ~~out~~ time" in place of "spent our lives" and removing the "for." [[User:Smidge204\|Smidge204]] 11:02, 16 February 2007 (PST)		:There's nothing technically wrong with it, but I'd recommend "wasted our time" in place of "spent our lives" and removing the "for." [[User:Smidge204\|Smidge204]] 11:02, 16 February 2007 (PST)

			:I went with "spent our life force" as an intermediate solution. Removing the "for" still leaves the last phrase a bit awkward, due to the implicit down vs. the explicit up. May sub "as much as two meters deep," eventually.--[[User:Nutcase\|Nutcase]] 04:50, 17 February 2007 (PST)

Smidge204 at 19:02, 16 February 2007

2007-02-16T19:02:58Z

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	"Had spent our lives digging" sounds so wierd. Change?		"Had spent our lives digging" sounds so wierd. Change?
	--[[User:Umiman\|umiman]] 03:23, 16 February 2007 (PST)		--[[User:Umiman\|umiman]] 03:23, 16 February 2007 (PST)

			:There's nothing technically wrong with it, but I'd recommend "wasted out time" in place of "spent our lives" and removing the "for." [[User:Smidge204\|Smidge204]] 11:02, 16 February 2007 (PST)

Umiman: New page: "That was exactly where I and Koizumi '''had spent our lives digging''' for up to two meters." "Had spent our lives digging" sounds so wierd. Change? --~~~~

2007-02-16T11:23:51Z

New page: "That was exactly where I and Koizumi '''had spent our lives digging''' for up to two meters." "Had spent our lives digging" sounds so wierd. Change? --~~~~

New page

"That was exactly where I and Koizumi '''had spent our lives digging''' for up to two meters."

"Had spent our lives digging" sounds so wierd. Change?
--[[User:Umiman|umiman]] 03:23, 16 February 2007 (PST)