Talk:Tabi ni Deyou:Dream - Revision history

EusthEnoptEron at 16:47, 22 September 2014

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Idiffer at 16:39, 21 September 2014

2014-09-21T16:39:57Z

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1) their tools consisted of just spanner and box-end wrenches

(so first, "spanner" is a general term. there are several variations of it, including "box-end wrench". so it's kind of like saying "they had animals and a bear". which type of spanner is the first one? secondly, the construction of this sentence implies that they have several wrenches of both kinds. can you check this pls? because if the first one is an adjustable spanner, then they wouldn't need several of them.)

2)she stirred herself and sat up

(there are 3 meanings of "stir": a) move or cause to move slightly. b) rise or wake from sleep. c) begin or cause to begin to be active or to develop. Which one is it?)

3) The Super Cub was ideal for new riders because was designed to be simple to operate...

(is this just a normal sentence or a commercial slogan? it kinda sounds like one...)

4) However, the served barley tea was made with fresh spring water and so chilly that the surface of their cups fogged.

(mmm, how can it be chilly if it was just made? maybe you meant "hot"?)

5) The secretary watched his back while he was getting the water, fanning himself due to the heat, with a somewhat meaningful look and muttered,

(it was definitely the boy who was fanning himself? not the secretary?)

6) The mouth of the girl was quickly covered.

(is it the secretary who covered her mouth?)

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	(so first, "spanner" is a general term. there are several variations of it, including "box-end wrench". so it's kind of like saying "they had animals and a bear". which type of spanner is the first one? secondly, the construction of this sentence implies that they have several wrenches of both kinds. can you check this pls? because if the first one is an adjustable spanner, then they wouldn't need several of them.)		(so first, "spanner" is a general term. there are several variations of it, including "box-end wrench". so it's kind of like saying "they had animals and a bear". which type of spanner is the first one? secondly, the construction of this sentence implies that they have several wrenches of both kinds. can you check this pls? because if the first one is an adjustable spanner, then they wouldn't need several of them.)
			: "box-end wrench" should be replaced by "hex key" or whatever you want to call them. If that's not enough of a distinction, I've read that in Japanese "spanners" are considered double-sided while "wrenches" tend to be one-sided.
	2)'''she stirred herself and sat up'''		2)'''she stirred herself and sat up'''

	(there are 3 meanings of "stir": a) move or cause to move slightly. b) rise or wake from sleep. c) begin or cause to begin to be active or to develop. Which one is it?)		(there are 3 meanings of "stir": a) move or cause to move slightly. b) rise or wake from sleep. c) begin or cause to begin to be active or to develop. Which one is it?)
			: Think of it as leisurely, slowly, lazily, whatever.
	3) '''The Super Cub was ideal for new riders because was designed to be simple to operate...'''		3) '''The Super Cub was ideal for new riders because was designed to be simple to operate...'''

	(is this just a normal sentence or a commercial slogan? it kinda sounds like one...)		(is this just a normal sentence or a commercial slogan? it kinda sounds like one...)
			: It's a normal narrative. There's no point putting it in italics, though. I also changed the wording slightly.
	4) '''However, the served barley tea was made with fresh spring water and so chilly that the surface of their cups fogged.'''		4) '''However, the served barley tea was made with fresh spring water and so chilly that the surface of their cups fogged.'''

	(mmm, how can it be chilly if it was just made? maybe you meant "hot"?)		(mmm, how can it be chilly if it was just made? maybe you meant "hot"?)
			: No, certainly not hot. It's a translation mistake. The tea was not made with fresh spring water, but cooled down in it.

	5) '''The secretary watched his back while he was getting the water, fanning himself due to the heat, with a somewhat meaningful look and muttered,'''		5) '''The secretary watched his back while he was getting the water, fanning himself due to the heat, with a somewhat meaningful look and muttered,'''

	(it was definitely the boy who was fanning himself? not the secretary?)		(it was definitely the boy who was fanning himself? not the secretary?)
			: It was the boy, yes.
	6) '''The mouth of the girl was quickly covered.'''		6) '''The mouth of the girl was quickly covered.'''

	(is it the secretary who covered her mouth?)		(is it the secretary who covered her mouth?)
			: Yup.
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	1) their tools consisted of just spanner and box-end wrenches		1) '''their tools consisted of just spanner and box-end wrenches'''

	(so first, "spanner" is a general term. there are several variations of it, including "box-end wrench". so it's kind of like saying "they had animals and a bear". which type of spanner is the first one? secondly, the construction of this sentence implies that they have several wrenches of both kinds. can you check this pls? because if the first one is an adjustable spanner, then they wouldn't need several of them.)		(so first, "spanner" is a general term. there are several variations of it, including "box-end wrench". so it's kind of like saying "they had animals and a bear". which type of spanner is the first one? secondly, the construction of this sentence implies that they have several wrenches of both kinds. can you check this pls? because if the first one is an adjustable spanner, then they wouldn't need several of them.)

	2)she stirred herself and sat up		2)'''she stirred herself and sat up'''

	(there are 3 meanings of "stir": a) move or cause to move slightly. b) rise or wake from sleep. c) begin or cause to begin to be active or to develop. Which one is it?)		(there are 3 meanings of "stir": a) move or cause to move slightly. b) rise or wake from sleep. c) begin or cause to begin to be active or to develop. Which one is it?)

	3) The Super Cub was ideal for new riders because was designed to be simple to operate...		3) '''The Super Cub was ideal for new riders because was designed to be simple to operate...'''

	(is this just a normal sentence or a commercial slogan? it kinda sounds like one...)		(is this just a normal sentence or a commercial slogan? it kinda sounds like one...)

	4) However, the served barley tea was made with fresh spring water and so chilly that the surface of their cups fogged.		4) '''However, the served barley tea was made with fresh spring water and so chilly that the surface of their cups fogged.'''

	(mmm, how can it be chilly if it was just made? maybe you meant "hot"?)		(mmm, how can it be chilly if it was just made? maybe you meant "hot"?)

	5) The secretary watched his back while he was getting the water, fanning himself due to the heat, with a somewhat meaningful look and muttered,		5) '''The secretary watched his back while he was getting the water, fanning himself due to the heat, with a somewhat meaningful look and muttered,'''

	(it was definitely the boy who was fanning himself? not the secretary?)		(it was definitely the boy who was fanning himself? not the secretary?)

	6) The mouth of the girl was quickly covered.		6) '''The mouth of the girl was quickly covered.'''

	(is it the secretary who covered her mouth?)		(is it the secretary who covered her mouth?)

			--[[User:idiffer\|<span style="color:darkred;font:bold 10pt kristen itc">idif</span>]][[User talk:idiffer\|<span style="color:darkblack;font:bold 10pt kristen itc">fer</span>]] 11:39, 21 September 2014 (CDT)