Talk:Tasogare-iro no Uta Tsukai:Volume1 Final Play - Revision history

Cres at 11:29, 20 August 2013

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	Evhe only talks in 『』 brackets during her first few lines, right after she's called out. For the rest of the time, she talks in normal 「」 brackets, the same as everyone else. Only Arma continuously talks with 『』. --[[User:Mystrael\|Mystrael]] ([[User talk:Mystrael\|talk]]) 05:06, 24 February 2013 (CST)		Evhe only talks in 『』 brackets during her first few lines, right after she's called out. For the rest of the time, she talks in normal 「」 brackets, the same as everyone else. Only Arma continuously talks with 『』. --[[User:Mystrael\|Mystrael]] ([[User talk:Mystrael\|talk]]) 05:06, 24 February 2013 (CST)

			A few minor edits (a hundred/one hundred, fourty/forty) and one you might want to check: <br>
			“……I’m never accompanying you on flying practices again.” to “……I’ll never accompany you on flying practice again.” <br>
			Could have just removed the 's' from 'practices' but i think this reads more smoothly with no change to the meaning. [[User:Cres\|Cres]] ([[User talk:Cres\|talk]]) 06:29, 20 August 2013 (CDT)

Mystrael at 11:06, 24 February 2013

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	Whenever Evhe talks, should it be in 『』? --[[User:Bilagaana\|Bilagaana]] ([[User talk:Bilagaana\|talk]]) 01:46, 24 February 2013 (CST)		Whenever Evhe talks, should it be in 『』? --[[User:Bilagaana\|Bilagaana]] ([[User talk:Bilagaana\|talk]]) 01:46, 24 February 2013 (CST)

			Evhe only talks in 『』 brackets during her first few lines, right after she's called out. For the rest of the time, she talks in normal 「」 brackets, the same as everyone else. Only Arma continuously talks with 『』. --[[User:Mystrael\|Mystrael]] ([[User talk:Mystrael\|talk]]) 05:06, 24 February 2013 (CST)

Bilagaana at 07:46, 24 February 2013

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	Tense is still an issue --[[User:Bilagaana\|Bilagaana]] ([[User talk:Bilagaana\|talk]]) 14:53, 5 December 2012 (CST)		Tense is still an issue --[[User:Bilagaana\|Bilagaana]] ([[User talk:Bilagaana\|talk]]) 14:53, 5 December 2012 (CST)

			Whenever Evhe talks, should it be in 『』? --[[User:Bilagaana\|Bilagaana]] ([[User talk:Bilagaana\|talk]]) 01:46, 24 February 2013 (CST)

Bilagaana at 20:53, 5 December 2012

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	And awesome job Zeru. What you wrote makes a lot more sense than what I put down.		And awesome job Zeru. What you wrote makes a lot more sense than what I put down.
	[[User:Catahn\|Catahn]] ([[User talk:Catahn\|talk]]) 08:30, 5 December 2012 (CST)		[[User:Catahn\|Catahn]] ([[User talk:Catahn\|talk]]) 08:30, 5 December 2012 (CST)

			Tense is still an issue --[[User:Bilagaana\|Bilagaana]] ([[User talk:Bilagaana\|talk]]) 14:53, 5 December 2012 (CST)

Catahn at 14:30, 5 December 2012

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	Just making the first few sentences make a bit more sense.[[User:Zeru\|Zeru]] ([[User talk:Zeru\|talk]]) 21:13, 4 December 2012 (CST)		Just making the first few sentences make a bit more sense.[[User:Zeru\|Zeru]] ([[User talk:Zeru\|talk]]) 21:13, 4 December 2012 (CST)

			Thank you all! It is starting to look like a decent chapter.

			And awesome job Zeru. What you wrote makes a lot more sense than what I put down.
			[[User:Catahn\|Catahn]] ([[User talk:Catahn\|talk]]) 08:30, 5 December 2012 (CST)

Zeru at 03:13, 5 December 2012

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	I am out of time though so I will fix that when I get back.<br/>		I am out of time though so I will fix that when I get back.<br/>
	[[User:Catahn\|Catahn]] ([[User talk:Catahn\|talk]]) 17:00, 4 December 2012 (CST)		[[User:Catahn\|Catahn]] ([[User talk:Catahn\|talk]]) 17:00, 4 December 2012 (CST)

			Just making the first few sentences make a bit more sense.[[User:Zeru\|Zeru]] ([[User talk:Zeru\|talk]]) 21:13, 4 December 2012 (CST)

Catahn at 23:00, 4 December 2012

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	Doh! You are absolutely right. I failed to check the wiki.		Doh! You are absolutely right. I failed to check the wiki.

	I am out of time though so I will fix that when I get back.		I am out of time though so I will fix that when I get back.<br/>
			[[User:Catahn\|Catahn]] ([[User talk:Catahn\|talk]]) 17:00, 4 December 2012 (CST)

Catahn at 23:00, 4 December 2012

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	So everything is still quite good, just a few minor grammar edits. [[User:Zeru\|Zeru]] ([[User talk:Zeru\|talk]]) 16:38, 4 December 2012 (CST)		So everything is still quite good, just a few minor grammar edits. [[User:Zeru\|Zeru]] ([[User talk:Zeru\|talk]]) 16:38, 4 December 2012 (CST)

			* One-B。</br>
			Changed this to "Classroom 1-B:" above the sentence. Can anyone else think of a better way to represent this?

			* Capitalized Refuge and Classroom were made lower case.</br>
			This is just my weird typing habit. Probably comes from being a programmer.

			Still not sure how to put the Chimera sentence and the girl outside sentence in there better. I did change it to perhaps more accurately reflect the Japanese. And yes there was a sentence about not finding Chimera right there in the middle.

			* I wasn't too worried until you pointed out that it is too big.
			Replaced it with He
			* I much prefer that gate's radiance, it suddenly burst open.
			Great question, and I have no clue. その門が輝きを増し、突如弾けた。
			増し【まし】 (adj-na,n,n-suf) extra, additional, less objectionable, better, preferable, (P)

			I'm changing this to additional / extra concept but making it the verb 増す【ます】(v5s,vi) to increase, to grow, (P). As such I've changed the sentence to The gate's radiance increased and suddenly burst open. which makes more sense to me in English than putting a comma in the sentence.

			* Exhausted, Mio leaned against the railing on the rooftop.
			Is the "I" in the following sentences also Mio?<anon><br>
			Yes. Is there a better way to put that?

			* Kluelu
			This spelling is used in 10 places, "Kluele" in 4; previous chapters use the latter. <anon><br/>
			Doh! You are absolutely right. I failed to check the wiki.

			I am out of time though so I will fix that when I get back.

Zeru at 22:38, 4 December 2012

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	"1-B" would probably be classroom name; according to chapter 1 Ada is in that class. [anon]		"1-B" would probably be classroom name; according to chapter 1 Ada is in that class. [anon]

			So everything is still quite good, just a few minor grammar edits. [[User:Zeru\|Zeru]] ([[User talk:Zeru\|talk]]) 16:38, 4 December 2012 (CST)

80.223.220.209 at 22:21, 4 December 2012

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	Is it me or something is a bit wrong with the second sentence. [[User:Zeru\|Zeru]] ([[User talk:Zeru\|talk]]) 16:17, 4 December 2012 (CST)		Is it me or something is a bit wrong with the second sentence. [[User:Zeru\|Zeru]] ([[User talk:Zeru\|talk]]) 16:17, 4 December 2012 (CST)

			"1-B" would probably be classroom name; according to chapter 1 Ada is in that class. [anon]