Talk:Toradora!:Volume2 Chapter2 - Revision history

Akirasav: If you give gardener a pair of hedge clippers, he's going to trim hedges. If you give an editor a wiki...

2008-09-25T15:27:55Z

If you give gardener a pair of hedge clippers, he's going to trim hedges. If you give an editor a wiki...

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			You're right Lysanther, now that I look at it, no change should be made. Thanks for your help and sorry for the trouble.

			[[User:Akirasav\|Akirasav]] 8:13, 25 September 2008 (PDT)

2008-09-25T05:49:13Z

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	[[User:Akirasav\|Akirasav]] 7:22, 24 September 2008 (PDT)		[[User:Akirasav\|Akirasav]] 7:22, 24 September 2008 (PDT)

			It shouldn't be a seperated paragraph. The topic doesn't change in between. At most it might be neccissary to seperate the line as "Ryuuji's headache too had become absolute" as a single line paragraph. However using Similarly/incidently makes the sentence more related to the larger paragraph by being a comparison to the prior sentences. It seems like you're overediting this a bit. There have been some quite drastic changes in the way this paragraph is being conveyed. The original line didn't really need to be changed all that much. The most I can see wrong with the sentence is that maybe it needs to be punctuated to "Ryujii's headache too, had become absolute." With the possibility of seperating that line to be on its own to make it more prominant. However the line is still coherent even without those changes.

			- Lysanther

2008-09-24T14:30:55Z

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			Lol, now that I read it like this:

			"Ami was the absolute epitome of beauty, almost to the point of obscuring his sense of reality. Ryuuji’s headache too had become absolute."

			It makes a lot more sense. Thanks Lysanther!

			I separated the paragraph to make the play on words more obvious, let me know what you think. Thanks.

			[[User:Akirasav\|Akirasav]] 7:22, 24 September 2008 (PDT)

2008-09-24T04:04:42Z

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	[[User:Akirasav\|Akirasav]] 13:53, 23 September 2008 (PDT)		[[User:Akirasav\|Akirasav]] 13:53, 23 September 2008 (PDT)

	Its a play on words. The prior text is talking about how absolutely beautiful Ami is. The usage like that links the severity of his headache to the immaculate level of beauty Ami possesses (saying her beauty is the cause of the headache aswell as his headache is as immense as she is beautiful). I "Ryuuji's headache too had become absolute" is better than what has been edited in. It may not be ~~prefectly~~ usage but the pun sounds alot better as the orignal, the editted version "Incidently, Ryuuji’s headache was absolutely horrible." is much more clumsy sounding.		Its a play on words. The prior text is talking about how absolutely beautiful Ami is. The usage like that links the severity of his headache to the immaculate level of beauty Ami possesses (saying her beauty is the cause of the headache aswell as his headache is as immense as she is beautiful). I think "Ryuuji's headache too had become absolute" is better than what has been edited in. It may not be prefect usage but the pun sounds alot better as the orignal, the editted version "Incidently, Ryuuji’s headache was absolutely horrible." is much more clumsy sounding.

	- Lysanther		- Lysanther

2008-09-24T04:03:28Z

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	[[User:Akirasav\|Akirasav]] 13:53, 23 September 2008 (PDT)		[[User:Akirasav\|Akirasav]] 13:53, 23 September 2008 (PDT)

			Its a play on words. The prior text is talking about how absolutely beautiful Ami is. The usage like that links the severity of his headache to the immaculate level of beauty Ami possesses (saying her beauty is the cause of the headache aswell as his headache is as immense as she is beautiful). I "Ryuuji's headache too had become absolute" is better than what has been edited in. It may not be prefectly usage but the pun sounds alot better as the orignal, the editted version "Incidently, Ryuuji’s headache was absolutely horrible." is much more clumsy sounding.

			- Lysanther

2008-09-23T21:06:43Z

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Not sure what this sentence means:

"Ryuuji’s headache too had become absolute."

[[User:Akirasav|Akirasav]] 13:53, 23 September 2008 (PDT)