Tomoyo After:SEEN0702 - Revision history

Taldan: Fixed a lot of errors. Should be complete.

2012-05-19T05:44:51Z

Fixed a lot of errors. Should be complete.

Taldan: Made minor grammatical changes. Will come back later and complete grammar fixes to scene 0702.

2012-05-02T14:39:23Z

Made minor grammatical changes. Will come back later and complete grammar fixes to scene 0702.

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	// <0010> 苦労はしたものの、なんとか一日で終わらせることができた。		// <0010> 苦労はしたものの、なんとか一日で終わらせることができた。
	<0010> I worked ~~well~~, somehow I managed to finish it in one day.		<0010> I worked quickly, somehow I managed to finish it in one day.

	// <0011> そうして実感する。		// <0011> そうして実感する。
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	// <0013> それはなんて頼もしいことなのだろうか、と。		// <0013> それはなんて頼もしいことなのだろうか、と。
	<0013> That somehow, I become more reliable.		<0013> That somehow, I've become more reliable.

	// <0014> でも、まだまだできないことはたくさんある。		// <0014> でも、まだまだできないことはたくさんある。
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	// <0030> \{智代}「私は晩ご飯の支度をする」		// <0030> \{智代}「私は晩ご飯の支度をする」
	<0030> \{Tomoyo}"I'm going to prepare ~~the~~ dinner."		<0030> \{Tomoyo}"I'm going to prepare dinner."

	//H-scene starts		//H-scene starts
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	// <0036> お互いの性器を舐め、味わう行為…そこにどんな意味があるのかわからなかったが、ただひたすら気持ちがよかった。		// <0036> お互いの性器を舐め、味わう行為…そこにどんな意味があるのかわからなかったが、ただひたすら気持ちがよかった。
	<0036> We lick and taste each other ~~genitals~~... Without knowing what it meant, only that it felt good.		<0036> We lick and taste each other... Without knowing what it meant, only that it felt good.

	// litt. "contact juices"		// litt. "contact juices"
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	// <0072> 智代の口からものが抜ける。この室温でも、涼しく感じるほど、それは智代の唾液でふやけきっていた。		// <0072> 智代の口からものが抜ける。この室温でも、涼しく感じるほど、それは智代の唾液でふやけきっていた。
	<0072> My penis flies out of Tomoyo's mouth. It was covered of Tomoyo's saliva, to the point it felt refreshing, even in the room warmth.		<0072> My penis flies out of Tomoyo's mouth. It was covered in Tomoyo's saliva, to the point it felt refreshing, even in the room warmth.

	// <0073> 智代は体をずらして、標的を俺と同じように、肛門に定めた。		// <0073> 智代は体をずらして、標的を俺と同じように、肛門に定めた。

ManiacB: A few (non-h scene) grammatical corrections.

2011-02-28T15:45:50Z

A few (non-h scene) grammatical corrections.

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	// <0006> 親方がチェックを行ったもので、修理する部分は俺も聞いていたやつだ。		// <0006> 親方がチェックを行ったもので、修理する部分は俺も聞いていたやつだ。
	<0006> Since ~~Master~~ is out on patrol, I'm repairing what I can.		<0006> Since the Boss is out on patrol, I'm repairing what I can.

	// <0007> ただ交換部品が多く、かなり手間がかかるため、後回しにしていた。		// <0007> ただ交換部品が多く、かなり手間がかかるため、後回しにしていた。
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	// <0028> \{智代}「もう、エッチなことはしない」		// <0028> \{智代}「もう、エッチなことはしない」
	<0028> \{Tomoyo}"Geez, ~~I'm/We~~'re not going to do it."		<0028> \{Tomoyo}"Geez, we're not going to do it."

	// <0029> \{智代}「しすぎだ」		// <0029> \{智代}「しすぎだ」
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	// <0030> \{智代}「私は晩ご飯の支度をする」		// <0030> \{智代}「私は晩ご飯の支度をする」
	<0030> \{Tomoyo}I'm going to prepare the dinner.		<0030> \{Tomoyo}"I'm going to prepare the dinner."

	//H-scene starts		//H-scene starts
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	// <0235> どーーーーーーーーーーーーーん！		// <0235> どーーーーーーーーーーーーーん！
	<0235> ~~Booooooooooooom~~!		<0235> BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM!

	// <0236> \{朋也}「絶縁か？」		// <0236> \{朋也}「絶縁か？」
	<0236> \{Tomoya}~~「Are~~ you cutting ~~ties？」~~		<0236> \{Tomoya}"Are you cutting ties？"

	// <0237> \{智代}「絶縁だ…」		// <0237> \{智代}「絶縁だ…」
	<0237> \{Tomoyo}「I am...」		<0237> \{Tomoyo}"I am..."

	// <0238> \{朋也}「とりあえず、服着るかしろよ…」		// <0238> \{朋也}「とりあえず、服着るかしろよ…」
	<0238> \{Tomoya}"At least, put on some clothes..."		<0238> \{Tomoya}"At least put on some clothes..."

	// <0239> \{智代}「もう何もかもどうでもいい…」		// <0239> \{智代}「もう何もかもどうでもいい…」
	<0239> \{Tomoyo}"I don't care ~~about it~~ anymore..."		<0239> \{Tomoyo}"I don't care anymore..."

	// <0240> \{朋也}「あ、そ…」		// <0240> \{朋也}「あ、そ…」
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	// <0242> \{鷹文}「ただ驚かせようって思って、隠れてて…」		// <0242> \{鷹文}「ただ驚かせようって思って、隠れてて…」
	<0242> \{Takafumi}"I just wanted to surprise you ~~and~~ I hid there..."		<0242> \{Takafumi}"I just wanted to surprise you, so I hid there..."

	// <0243> \{鷹文}「でもいきなりその…始めるもんだから、出るタイミングがなくなったんだよっ」		// <0243> \{鷹文}「でもいきなりその…始めるもんだから、出るタイミングがなくなったんだよっ」
	<0243> \{Takafumi}"But suddenly, err... ~~You~~ were starting to do it so I lost the timing to go out!"		<0243> \{Takafumi}"But suddenly, err... you were starting to do it so I lost the timing to go out!"

	// <0244> \{智代}「じゃあ、最初から最後まで…」		// <0244> \{智代}「じゃあ、最初から最後まで…」
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	// <0248> \{智代}「おまえは今から記憶喪失になる。よし、いい子だな…」		// <0248> \{智代}「おまえは今から記憶喪失になる。よし、いい子だな…」
	<0248> \{Tomoyo}"You're going to forget ~~avout~~ everything now. Okay, good boy..."		<0248> \{Tomoyo}"You're going to forget about everything now. Okay, good boy..."

	// <0249> \{智代}「はい、スタート」		// <0249> \{智代}「はい、スタート」
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	// <0269> \{智代}「弟にエッチを見せる姉になんてなりたくないっ」		// <0269> \{智代}「弟にエッチを見せる姉になんてなりたくないっ」
	<0269> \{Tomoyo}"I don't want to become a sister who lets her little brother watch her ~~doing~~ sex!"		<0269> \{Tomoyo}"I don't want to become a sister who lets her little brother watch her having sex!"

	// <0270> \{鷹文}「あ、弟って認めてくれた」		// <0270> \{鷹文}「あ、弟って認めてくれた」
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	// <0275> \{朋也}「そうだ、おまえも彼女作れよ、な」		// <0275> \{朋也}「そうだ、おまえも彼女作れよ、な」
	<0275> \{Tomoya}"Right, how about you ~~got~~ a girlfriend too?"		<0275> \{Tomoya}"Right, how about you get a girlfriend too?"

	// <0276> \{鷹文}「彼女ねえ…」		// <0276> \{鷹文}「彼女ねえ…」
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	// <0281> \{鷹文}「おしりまで舐めたいとは思わないけどさ」		// <0281> \{鷹文}「おしりまで舐めたいとは思わないけどさ」
	<0281> \{Takafumi}"But not to the point ~~to want~~ to lick her ass."		<0281> \{Takafumi}"But not to the point of wanting to lick her ass."

	// <0282> \{智代}「うああぁぁああぁぁぁああぁーーーっ！」		// <0282> \{智代}「うああぁぁああぁぁぁああぁーーーっ！」
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	// <0284> \{朋也}「おまえが記憶喪失になるのかよ…」		// <0284> \{朋也}「おまえが記憶喪失になるのかよ…」
	<0284> \{Tomoya}"And you're the one losing her memories, huh~~...~~?"		<0284> \{Tomoya}"And you're the one losing her memories, huh?"

	// <0285> 賑やかな夕食だった。		// <0285> 賑やかな夕食だった。

ShalDengeki: LIne 0019's Tomoyo character tag was not closed properly

2011-02-27T03:40:31Z

LIne 0019's Tomoyo character tag was not closed properly

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	// <0019> \{智代}「おかえり」		// <0019> \{智代}「おかえり」
	<0019> \{Tomoyo"Welcome home."		<0019> \{Tomoyo}"Welcome home."

	// <0020> \{朋也}「ただいま」		// <0020> \{朋也}「ただいま」

AbstractBlueSky: /* Translation */

2010-10-20T20:23:07Z

Translation

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	*[[User:Sekie\|Sekie]](Grammar checking)		*[[User:Sekie\|Sekie]](Grammar checking)
	*[[User:Suppish\|Suppish]](Editing)		*[[User:Suppish\|Suppish]](Editing)

			*[[User:AbstractBlueSky\|AbstractBlueSky]]
			**QC, translation editting.

	== Translation Notes ==		== Translation Notes ==

AbstractBlueSky: /* Text */

2010-10-20T20:20:22Z

Text

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	// <0020> \{朋也}「ただいま」		// <0020> \{朋也}「ただいま」
	<0020> \{Tomoya}"Thanks."		<0020> \{Tomoya}"Thanks."
	//Due to the English language not understanding the "okaeri" and "tadaima" principle, used "thanks" instead, since he's basically thanking her for the welcome. --~~~~~~~~		//Due to the English language not understanding the "okaeri" and "tadaima" principle, used "thanks" instead, since he's basically thanking her for the welcome. --AbstractBlueSky

	// <0021> 智代の両手には買い物袋。それをどさりと床に置く。		// <0021> 智代の両手には買い物袋。それをどさりと床に置く。

AbstractBlueSky: /* Text */

2010-10-20T20:18:45Z

Text

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	// <0019> \{智代}「おかえり」		// <0019> \{智代}「おかえり」
	<0019> \{Tomoyo}"~~I'm back~~."		<0019> \{Tomoyo"Welcome home."

	// <0020> \{朋也}「ただいま」		// <0020> \{朋也}「ただいま」
	<0020> \{Tomoya}"~~Welcome home~~."		<0020> \{Tomoya}"Thanks."
			//Due to the English language not understanding the "okaeri" and "tadaima" principle, used "thanks" instead, since he's basically thanking her for the welcome. --~~~~

	// <0021> 智代の両手には買い物袋。それをどさりと床に置く。		// <0021> 智代の両手には買い物袋。それをどさりと床に置く。

AbstractBlueSky: /* Translation Notes */

2010-10-20T20:16:38Z

Translation Notes

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	**I just noticed some sort of line swap? before it says that Tomoyo arrives after Tomoya and its like that in the translation, but in the japanese text Tomoyo says okaeri and Tomoya tadaima. translation wise it should be the other way around [[User:Kura\|Kura]] 02:00, 25 April 2010 (CET)		**I just noticed some sort of line swap? before it says that Tomoyo arrives after Tomoya and its like that in the translation, but in the japanese text Tomoyo says okaeri and Tomoya tadaima. translation wise it should be the other way around [[User:Kura\|Kura]] 02:00, 25 April 2010 (CET)
	**Nothing is wrong kura, its not meant to meant tomoyo returning and been greeted. It is meant to mean that tomoyo is greeting tomoya returning from work like a dutiful wife, its just a kind of formalities. tomoyo translation should said welcome home and tomoya, Im back -- Anonymous		**Nothing is wrong kura, its not meant to meant tomoyo returning and been greeted. It is meant to mean that tomoyo is greeting tomoya returning from work like a dutiful wife, its just a kind of formalities. tomoyo translation should said welcome home and tomoya, Im back -- Anonymous
	**^ What Anon said. ^ It's meant to be Tomoyo welcoming Tomoya home, even though she came in afterward. Changing it to reflect the correct translation. --~~[[User:AbstractBlueSky\|AbstractBlueSky]]~~[[User:AbstractBlueSky\|AbstractBlueSky]] 20:16, 20 October 2010 (UTC)		**^ What Anon said. ^ It's meant to be Tomoyo welcoming Tomoya home, even though she came in afterward. Changing it to reflect the correct translation. --[[User:AbstractBlueSky\|AbstractBlueSky]]20:16, 20 October 2010 (UTC)
	September 2008 (PDT)		September 2008 (PDT)
	*Lines 38 & similar lines		*Lines 38 & similar lines

AbstractBlueSky: /* Translation Notes */

2010-10-20T20:16:14Z

Translation Notes

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	**I just noticed some sort of line swap? before it says that Tomoyo arrives after Tomoya and its like that in the translation, but in the japanese text Tomoyo says okaeri and Tomoya tadaima. translation wise it should be the other way around [[User:Kura\|Kura]] 02:00, 25 April 2010 (CET)		**I just noticed some sort of line swap? before it says that Tomoyo arrives after Tomoya and its like that in the translation, but in the japanese text Tomoyo says okaeri and Tomoya tadaima. translation wise it should be the other way around [[User:Kura\|Kura]] 02:00, 25 April 2010 (CET)
	**Nothing is wrong kura, its not meant to meant tomoyo returning and been greeted. It is meant to mean that tomoyo is greeting tomoya returning from work like a dutiful wife, its just a kind of formalities. tomoyo translation should said welcome home and tomoya, Im back -- Anonymous		**Nothing is wrong kura, its not meant to meant tomoyo returning and been greeted. It is meant to mean that tomoyo is greeting tomoya returning from work like a dutiful wife, its just a kind of formalities. tomoyo translation should said welcome home and tomoya, Im back -- Anonymous
			**^ What Anon said. ^ It's meant to be Tomoyo welcoming Tomoya home, even though she came in afterward. Changing it to reflect the correct translation. --[[User:AbstractBlueSky\|AbstractBlueSky]][[User:AbstractBlueSky\|AbstractBlueSky]] 20:16, 20 October 2010 (UTC)
	September 2008 (PDT)		September 2008 (PDT)
	*Lines 38 & similar lines		*Lines 38 & similar lines

AbstractBlueSky: /* Text */

2010-10-20T19:22:52Z

Text

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	<0030> \{Tomoyo}I'm going to prepare the dinner.		<0030> \{Tomoyo}I'm going to prepare the dinner.

			//H-scene starts
	// <0031> ぐちゅぐちゅ…		// <0031> ぐちゅぐちゅ…
	<0031> ... ...		<0031> ... ...