Tsukumodo:Volume 1 Statue - Revision history

EusthEnoptEron at 16:15, 1 September 2014

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	"Tch, just a fake," flicked a woman as she appeared as though she had been watching the whole time.		"Tch, just a fake," flicked a woman as she appeared as though she had been watching the whole time.

	It was the owner of this shop as well as my employer, Towako ~~Setsutsu~~.		It was the owner of this shop as well as my employer, Towako Settsu.

	She was probably best described as a cool beauty. Well-formed eyebrows adorned her face, a strong will shone in her eyes, and smooth black hair of a brilliant luster reached down to her waist. She had a slender build and was a wee bit taller than me, whose body size was equal to that of the average high-schooler, making her appearance quite provocative. The same could be said for her clothes: she wore a skin-tight shirt with a jacket and slim leather pants<!-- using this because I'm German and I find it funny to find this word in my dictionary. :D leather trousers--><!-- Hmmm - not sure I'm buying this -ss --><!-- Let's keep it English, then. -EEE --> that accentuated her long legs.		She was probably best described as a cool beauty. Well-formed eyebrows adorned her face, a strong will shone in her eyes, and smooth black hair of a brilliant luster reached down to her waist. She had a slender build and was a wee bit taller than me, whose body size was equal to that of the average high-schooler, making her appearance quite provocative. The same could be said for her clothes: she wore a skin-tight shirt with a jacket and slim leather pants<!-- using this because I'm German and I find it funny to find this word in my dictionary. :D leather trousers--><!-- Hmmm - not sure I'm buying this -ss --><!-- Let's keep it English, then. -EEE --> that accentuated her long legs.

EusthEnoptEron at 14:52, 23 May 2014

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	Not antiques or objects of art, but tools with special abilities created by mighty ancients or magicians, or objects that have absorbed their owners' grudges or natural spiritual powers.		Not antiques or objects of art, but tools with special abilities created by mighty ancients or magicians, or objects that have absorbed their owners' grudges or natural spiritual powers.

	In tales and legends, there are often tools that ~~contained power.~~		In tales and legends, there are often tools that have special powers; for instance, a stone that brings good luck, a doll whose hair grows night after night, a mirror that shows your future appearance, a sword that brings ruin to anyone who draws it.

	~~For~~ instance, a stone that brings good luck, a doll whose hair grows night after night, a mirror that shows your future appearance, a sword that brings ruin to anyone who draws it.

	Everybody has most likely heard of their existence.		Everybody has most likely heard of their existence.
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	"Oh come on, it's not like that'd be the end of the world."		"Oh come on, it's not like that'd be the end of the world."

	''But it is! ~~At least for the listener.~~ I sure lost a few years of my lifespan ~~from the~~ thing...''		''But it is! Quite literally! I'm sure I lost a few years of my lifespan because of that thing...''

	"By the way, when did you come back?"		"By the way, when did you come back?"
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	"What else did you buy?"		"What else did you buy?"

	"Ah, ~~in truth~~, I made a nice find this time."		"Ah, actually, I made a nice find this time."

	She quickly erased the sales history from her mind and told me about her find.		She quickly erased the sales history from her mind and told me about her find.

	"It's a statue ~~that was retrieved~~ from a village that was deserted about a hundred years ago, you know? But boy does that thing look grotesque~~. And yet the statue is~~ said to cure any illness ~~by touching~~ it."		"It's a statue from a village that was deserted about a hundred years ago, you know? But boy does that thing look grotesque, even though it's said to cure any illness if you touch it."

	"Is it true?"		"Is it true?"

	"Apparently, nobody ~~has~~ ever tried."		"Apparently, nobody ever tried."

	"That sounds ''damn'' fishy if you ask me."		"That sounds ''damn'' fishy if you ask me."
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	"Well, can't deny that."		"Well, can't deny that."

	"So I got ahold of some documents and research materials, which I'll be perusing starting today. The shop's in your hands," she blurted out and turned round. "Ah, not to forget!" she suddenly added, "Be absolutely sure not to touch the statue directly until we know what effect it has! ~~When~~ you touch it, do it with gloves. Otherwise I take no responsibility if you die."		"So I got ahold of some documents and research materials, which I'll be perusing starting today. The shop's in your hands," she blurted out and turned round. "Ah, not to forget!" she suddenly added, "Be absolutely sure not to touch the statue directly until we know what effect it has! <i>If</i> you touch it, touch it with gloves. Otherwise I'll take no responsibility if you die."

	"Got it."		"Got it."
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	His mysterious power did not only bring blessings, but also doubt and fear.		His mysterious power did not only bring blessings, but also doubt and fear.

	The more people he saved, the more his power was ~~doubted~~ to be some sort of a curse, and it wasn't uncommon for him to be driven away under the fear that he was a demon under the guise of a human.		The more people he saved, the more his power was suspected to be some sort of a curse, and it wasn't uncommon for him to be driven away under the fear that he was a demon under the guise of a human.

	If he were to be driven away from this place as well, I was going to follow him like I had done so far.		If he were to be driven away from this place as well, I was going to follow him like I had done so far.
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	Its shape, however, was the greatest riddle to me. It looked like neither the figure of the Buddha, nor the figure of a devil. Looking as abstract as it did, it gave off an eerie impression, much like seeing faces in trees or walls.		Its shape, however, was the greatest riddle to me. It looked like neither the figure of the Buddha, nor the figure of a devil. Looking as abstract as it did, it gave off an eerie impression, much like seeing faces in trees or walls.


	For the time being, we placed the statue, which could not be less fit as an objet d'art to accessorize one's room, in a glass case for dolls in the living room.		For the time being, we placed the statue, which could not be less fit as an objet d'art to accessorize one's room, in a glass case for dolls in the living room.

	As for Saki, who had touched the statue ~~I had been told not~~ :~~<!-- huh? - ss -->~~		As for Saki, who had touched the statue despite Towako-san's warning: "Welcome-kachoo. Can I help you-kachoo? Thanks for visiting-kachoo!"<!-- I looked hard at the onomatopoeia of sneezes in English and I just couldn't bring myself to leave it 'kushun.' That's just not how native speakers think of a sneeze (even a cute girl sneeze) sounding. But I have heard assorted cute girl sneezes over the years, and went with something close to the original. -ss -->

	"Welcome-kachoo. Can I help you-kachoo? Thanks for visiting-kachoo!"<!-- I looked hard at the onomatopoeia of sneezes in English and I just couldn't bring myself to leave it 'kushun.' That's just not how native speakers think of a sneeze (even a cute girl sneeze) sounding. But I have heard assorted cute girl sneezes over the years, and went with something close to the original. -ss -->

	She was working her shift just like always, but while sneezing all the time, being a little sickish. By the way, that customer just now had realized that he made a mistake the moment he opened the door and turned around on the spot. The attendance time of that day's first customer was one second.		She was working her shift just like always, but while sneezing all the time, being a little sickish. By the way, that customer just now had realized that he made a mistake the moment he opened the door and turned around on the spot. The attendance time of that day's first customer was one second.
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	''A cough? Didn't she sneeze until just now?''		''A cough? Didn't she sneeze until just now?''

	"Saki, you~~'re~~ okay?"		"Saki, are you okay?"

	"I'm fine," she replied as bluntly as ever, but coughed right after.		"I'm fine," she replied as bluntly as ever, but coughed right after.
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	She sat up and greedily drank some water to satisfy her thirst.		She sat up and greedily drank some water to satisfy her thirst.

	Then, I noticed somewhat surprised what she was dressed like.		Then, I noticed, somewhat surprised, what she was dressed like.

	"What?"		"What?"

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	It was the owner of this shop as well as my employer, Towako Setsutsu.		It was the owner of this shop as well as my employer, Towako Setsutsu.

	She was probably best described as a cool beauty. Well-formed eyebrows adorned her face, a strong will shone in her eyes, and smooth black hair of a brilliant luster reached down to her waist. She had a slender build and a wee bit taller than me, whose body size was equal to that of the average high-schooler, making her appearance quite provocative. The same could be said for her clothes: she wore a skin-tight shirt with a jacket and slim leather pants<!-- using this because I'm German and I find it funny to find this word in my dictionary. :D leather trousers--><!-- Hmmm - not sure I'm buying this -ss --><!-- Let's keep it English, then. -EEE --> that accentuated her long legs.		She was probably best described as a cool beauty. Well-formed eyebrows adorned her face, a strong will shone in her eyes, and smooth black hair of a brilliant luster reached down to her waist. She had a slender build and was a wee bit taller than me, whose body size was equal to that of the average high-schooler, making her appearance quite provocative. The same could be said for her clothes: she wore a skin-tight shirt with a jacket and slim leather pants<!-- using this because I'm German and I find it funny to find this word in my dictionary. :D leather trousers--><!-- Hmmm - not sure I'm buying this -ss --><!-- Let's keep it English, then. -EEE --> that accentuated her long legs.

	However, her behavior was far removed from her looks.		However, her behavior was far removed from her looks.
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	That said, it was not like she collected those oddities just for a hobby.		That said, it was not like she collected those oddities just for a hobby.

	In fact, what she collected ~~was~~ known as ''Relics''.		In fact, what she collected were known as ''Relics''.

	Not antiques or objects of art, but tools with special abilities created by mighty ancients or magicians, or objects that have absorbed their ~~owner~~'~~s grudge~~ or natural spiritual powers.		Not antiques or objects of art, but tools with special abilities created by mighty ancients or magicians, or objects that have absorbed their owners' grudges or natural spiritual powers.

	In tales and legends, there are often tools that contained power.		In tales and legends, there are often tools that contained power.
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	Similar to the coughs of the villagers that visited him for a cure.		Similar to the coughs of the villagers that visited him for a cure.

	When I told him to cure himself with his right hand, he only laughed and said that I ~~were~~ right.		When I told him to cure himself with his right hand, he only laughed and said that I was right.
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	"Saki, you're okay?"		"Saki, you're okay?"

	"I'm fine," she replied as ~~blunt~~ as ever, but coughed right after.		"I'm fine," she replied as bluntly as ever, but coughed right after.

	It seems like her freshly-caught cold has gotten serious.		It seems like her freshly-caught cold has gotten serious.

EusthEnoptEron at 21:14, 21 July 2013

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	"You'll die."		"You'll die."

	My excuses stayed in my throat when I sensed the weight of her words. ~~God knows if~~ I ~~wouldn~~'t have ~~moved my hands away and~~ Towako-san ~~didn~~'~~t stopped me and "~~Vision~~" didn't shown anything to me~~.		My excuses stayed in my throat when I sensed the weight of her words. I couldn't honestly tell if my hand would have stopped without Towako-san's intervention or a warning by a Vision.

	"Any new discoveries?" I asked her.		"Any new discoveries?" I asked her.

EusthEnoptEron at 20:36, 4 January 2013

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	They forgot the favors Juan-sama had done to them and started to spread rumors as they liked.		They forgot the favors Juan-sama had done to them and started to spread rumors as they liked.

	I decided to ~~sealing~~ Juan-sama off from the villagers even more.		I decided to seal Juan-sama off from the villagers even more.

	He was all I cared about.		He was all I cared about.

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	As I couldn't read, I asked the old woman to read it to me.		As I couldn't read, I asked the old woman to read it to me.

	Upon learning that his thoughts hadn't been the same as mine, I ~~bursted~~ into tears.		Upon learning that his thoughts hadn't been the same as mine, I burst into tears.

	On that day, I lost my sight.		On that day, I lost my sight.

EusthEnoptEron at 21:25, 22 December 2012

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	"For not working. I have taken three days off so far, after all."		"For not working. I have taken three days off so far, after all."

	~~''Do colds weaken~~ the ~~heart? That sounded quite commendable!''~~		Maybe because the cold had softened her up, she apologized rather politely.

	"Don't mention it. There's nothing to do anyway."		"Don't mention it. There's nothing to do anyway."

EusthEnoptEron at 20:33, 22 December 2012

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	If that was true, I had to have him heal himself first all the more.		If that was true, I had to have him heal himself first all the more.

	"No matter what you say, I will not let me treat me before yourself."		"No matter what you say, I will not let you treat me before you treat yourself."

	Upon realizing that my decision was unshakable, he finally told me.		Upon realizing that my decision was unshakable, he finally told me.

EusthEnoptEron at 22:46, 4 December 2012

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	"Long ago when a god still ~~indwelt~~ this region, there was a man who slayed that god. Soaked in the godly blood of a deity, the sword gained a mysterious power and that dull man, who had been unable to maintain his weapon properly, suddenly won fame in battle. But one day, an outlaw broke into his house. The man drew his sword in order to protect his family, but his sword could not cut his opponent. Of splendid sharpness on the battlefield, the sword could now not even cut a burglar, no, not even into his skin. The man and his family were slayed in the outlaw's place.		"Long ago when a god still dwelt in this region, there was a man who slayed that god. Soaked in the godly blood of a deity, the sword gained a mysterious power and that dull man, who had been unable to maintain his weapon properly, suddenly won fame in battle. But one day, an outlaw broke into his house. The man drew his sword in order to protect his family, but his sword could not cut his opponent. Of splendid sharpness on the battlefield, the sword could now not even cut a burglar, no, not even into his skin. The man and his family were slayed in the outlaw's place.

	The godly blood gave power to the sword. But the god did not for a second forget his wrath against the man who slayed him. It was divine punishment. The moment he wanted to protect the ones most dear to him—the moment the sword had to cut better than ever—the sword betrayed him and lost its sharpness.		The godly blood gave power to the sword. But the god did not for a second forget his wrath against the man who slayed him. It was divine punishment. The moment he wanted to protect the ones most dear to him—the moment the sword had to cut better than ever—the sword betrayed him and lost its sharpness.