Unlimited Fafnir:Volume 6 Chapter 3 - Revision history

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	But if possible, I wanted to press the advance to settle things.		But if possible, I wanted to press the advance to settle things.

	'Neun—Authority—Must have... Self-preservation... ~~Counter~~, desired—'		'Neun—Authority—Must have... Self-preservation... Antibody, counter, desired—'

	I could already hear Yggdrasil's voice clearly in my mind.		I could already hear Yggdrasil's voice clearly in my mind.

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	But if possible, I wanted to press the advance to settle things.		But if possible, I wanted to press the advance to settle things.

	'Neun—Authority—Must have... Self-preservation... ~~Antibodies~~, desired—'		'Neun—Authority—Must have... Self-preservation... Counter, desired—'

	I could already hear Yggdrasil's voice clearly in my mind.		I could already hear Yggdrasil's voice clearly in my mind.

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	I still nodded even though I felt troubled by Kili's sudden question.		I still nodded even though I felt troubled by Kili's sudden question.

	"Due to forsaking me, Mother lost her relay with Hekatonkheir. What follows is only my speculation. Forced into a corner, Mother created a new Hekatonkheir in an attempt to eliminate her ~~nemesis~~ Yggdrasil."		"Due to forsaking me, Mother lost her relay with Hekatonkheir. What follows is only my speculation. Forced into a corner, Mother created a new Hekatonkheir in an attempt to eliminate her natural predator, Yggdrasil."

	"You're talking about Hekatonkheir attacking Yggdrasil in a suicide bombing?"		"You're talking about Hekatonkheir attacking Yggdrasil in a suicide bombing?"

Entropy: why are you deleting quotation marks when there is a quote within a quote, making them mismatched? "when time comes" is quite a common construction; generic mass nouns do not need articles

2015-08-02T01:33:15Z

why are you deleting quotation marks when there is a quote within a quote, making them mismatched? "when time comes" is quite a common construction; generic mass nouns do not need articles

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	Tia answered quietly and nodded.		Tia answered quietly and nodded.

	Lisa sighed, then reminded her, "It's a promise for sure, okay?"		Lisa sighed then reminded her, "It's a promise for sure, okay?"

	"Well then, the night is getting late. Let us adjourn today."		"Well then, the night is getting late. Let us adjourn today."
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	"I see, hmm... I guess that's for the best. How did Ren-chan react?"		"I see, hmm... I guess that's for the best. How did Ren-chan react?"

	"Although angry, she was more worried about me. She said: 'Now isn't the time to be having fun in this kind of place. Hurry and go back to practice dark matter transfer."		"Although angry, she was more worried about me. She said: 'Now isn't the time to be having fun in this kind of place. Hurry and go back to practice dark matter transfer.'"

	"Ren-chan really is so kind."		"Ren-chan really is so kind."
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	Iris agreed while listening to me.		Iris agreed while listening to me.

	"Also, once the battle begins, your Catastrophe will be a major force in the battle. Mitsuki and Shinomiya-sensei's battle plan will probably take your power into consideration. When ~~the~~ time comes for the decisive battle, the principal will probably permit you to use Catastrophe, then even if you didn't want to, Iris, you'll probably realize ''it'' too."		"Also, once the battle begins, your Catastrophe will be a major force in the battle. Mitsuki and Shinomiya-sensei's battle plan will probably take your power into consideration. When time comes for the decisive battle, the principal will probably permit you to use Catastrophe, then even if you didn't want to, Iris, you'll probably realize ''it'' too."

	"Realize what?"		"Realize what?"
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	"—Yeah, goodnight."		"—Yeah, goodnight."

	Iris waved and I said goodnight to her ~~too, then hurried~~ back to my room.		Iris waved and I said goodnight to her before hurrying back to my room.

	The portable terminal kept ringing. The caller ID read unknown.		The portable terminal kept ringing. The caller ID read unknown.
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	But I was surprised when I saw his face.		But I was surprised when I saw his face.

	With widened ~~eyes~~, he was in such rapture that his entire body was shaking.		With eyes widened, he was in such rapture that his entire body was shaking.

	"Ahhh... Rena, Rena... I knew our inferences were correct. Mononobe-kun, could you increase the density of Ether Wind? I'd like to see if it's possible to communicate with the manifested soul!"		"Ahhh... Rena, Rena... I knew our inferences were correct. Mononobe-kun, could you increase the density of Ether Wind? I'd like to see if it's possible to communicate with the manifested soul!"
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	Ren was glaring at her father directly. Feeling the gaze of those intense eyes, Miyazawa Kenya smiled.		Ren was glaring at her father directly. Feeling the gaze of those intense eyes, Miyazawa Kenya smiled.

	For some reason, I could sense ~~the~~ relief in his smile.		For some reason, I could sense relief in his smile.

	"Very well. Hate me. Go find love away from me. That way, Ren, you'll surely obtain happiness."		"Very well. Hate me. Go find love away from me. That way, Ren, you'll surely obtain happiness."
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	Then Shinomiya-sensei continued to issue orders.		Then Shinomiya-sensei continued to issue orders.

	"Each team should follow this division of roles. One person will generate lighting while the other attacks the branches by targeting visually. To prevent ~~the remains~~ from falling on urban areas, I hope you will avoid using crushing and slashing attacks. Incineration or annihilation techniques will be the safest bet. If any ~~remains fall down~~, the one in charge of lighting should immediately provide cover."		"Each team should follow this division of roles. One person will generate lighting while the other attacks the branches by targeting visually. To prevent debris from falling on urban areas, I hope you will avoid using crushing and slashing attacks. Incineration or annihilation techniques will be the safest bet. If any debris falls, the one in charge of lighting should immediately provide cover."

	"—Yes ma'am!"		"—Yes ma'am!"
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	"Good work."		"Good work."

	I greeted them, only to see ~~the~~ surprise on Lisa's face. She probably expected everyone to be asleep. Tia went "Yeah... So tired" and smiled without energy.		I greeted them, only to see surprise on Lisa's face. She probably expected everyone to be asleep. Tia went "Yeah... So tired" and smiled without energy.

	"Mitsuki-san, Firill-san, rise and shine. It's your shift now."		"Mitsuki-san, Firill-san, rise and shine. It's your shift now."
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	Hence, Lisa and I got off the van and looked up at the night sky where the battle was taking place.		Hence, Lisa and I got off the van and looked up at the night sky where the battle was taking place.

	The flares were very bright. The moon and stars could not be seen. Explosions were annihilating Yggdrasil's branches. ~~The warm~~ wind brushed against our cheeks.		The flares were very bright. The moon and stars could not be seen. Explosions were annihilating Yggdrasil's branches. Warm wind brushed against our cheeks.

	The area consisted of rural roads without pedestrians. No cars passed by either. Selecting open roads had apparently brought us quite far from urban areas. A giant mountain silhouette resembling Mount Fuji could be seen in the distance, but Yggdrasil's appearance was still indiscernible.		The area consisted of rural roads without pedestrians. No cars passed by either. Selecting open roads had apparently brought us quite far from urban areas. A giant mountain silhouette resembling Mount Fuji could be seen in the distance, but Yggdrasil's appearance was still indiscernible.

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	The instant Mitsuki's voice shook my eardrums, my mind went blank.		The instant Mitsuki's voice shook my eardrums, my mind went blank.

	I turned my head back in trepidation, only to see Mitsuki staring at me with a ~~shaking~~ gaze.		I turned my head back in trepidation, only to see Mitsuki staring at me with a quivering gaze.
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	I turned my head back in trepidation, only to see Mitsuki staring at me with a shaking gaze.		I turned my head back in trepidation, only to see Mitsuki staring at me with a shaking gaze.
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Belatkuro: was definitely not Ren who picked up the phone

2015-04-26T09:16:44Z

was definitely not Ren who picked up the phone

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	Ren and I stopped and looked around.		Ren and I stopped and looked around.

	Miyazawa ~~Ren~~ ran over to the desk and picked up the internal phone.		Miyazawa Kenya ran over to the desk and picked up the internal phone.

	"What happened?"		"What happened?"