John Woodward: /* Mushoku Tensei */ Communicating about chapter edit

2014-08-18T06:44:21Z

Mushoku Tensei: Communicating about chapter edit

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			Hi Phiseca,

			My name is John Woodward, and I am an editor. I did two major edits for Web Chapter 134 - Third Year Student. And I need a translator to check. If you don't have a chance to brief over the changes, I can summarize the main questions I had...


			* In this vicinity, so milk can properly come out, mothers who give birth to a child are given horse milk. --->

			In this region, to properly lactate, mothers who recently give birth to a child are given horse milk.



			(Is that good?)



			* "It's touching. Because Fitts is not standing out, she's the misfortunate type, so if harem increases by three or four more girls, gradually she will be driven toward a window." <!--ED: I added harem as instead of group or party, it feels like the comedic duo would act edgier.-->

			Saying what they like. I don't intend to marry three or four more wives. Even if it happened, I don't intend to drive Sylphy to a window.


			(What, if anything, should be improved?)


			* The class teacher continues his words without regard to us.
			“Though her tribe’s figure looks youthful, even so, her age is around fifty.
			Because there's connection with people in this class, I am the class teacher.

			For a while, she'll be an assistant homeroom teacher, but from next year on, she'll formally be the homeroom teacher, so everyone, too, in that regard-"



			(I am a little confused on the speaker of the connection part and the dialogue's quotation marks... is it the teacher's monologue? Or does Roxy interject in between?)



			*"If she aroused me, and after saying she will be my (third) wife, then I would make a new bloodshed."


			(Is the new bloodshed: a) a nose bleed, b) bloodbath caused by ensuing polygamous wives fight, c) having sex with, and "popping Aisha's cherry" so to say)

			* (During the bath Aisha tells a story, then the following plays... is it in the future, the present, or more of the past story?)

			It was such a trifling story.


			Oh yes, I gave the usual rice seeds to Aisha and asked if she was able to cultivate them.

			She replied reliably, "I'll try to plant it after it becomes a little warmer."

			If it's left to the genius Aisha, she'll let me eat rice eventually.

			I'll look forward to it.


			"I'm back."


			After I get out of the bath, Roxy comes home and is having dinner at her own discretion.

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2014-08-16T15:16:50Z

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== Mushoku Tensei ==

Dear Phiseca,

As long as the chapter is unregistered, you are more than welcomed.

I look forward to reading your contribution on the wiki.

Best Regards,

Onizuka-GTO 10:16, 16 August 2014 (CDT)

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