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Chaos: /* Oreimo */

2012-04-30T02:04:52Z

Oreimo

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	Whoops, I knew there was something I forgot [[User:Psieye\|Psieye]] 11:22, 11 July 2011 (UCT)		Whoops, I knew there was something I forgot [[User:Psieye\|Psieye]] 11:22, 11 July 2011 (UCT)

	Excuse me, I am working on OrenoImo vol 4 chap 1 atm, but my editor is unavailable. Can your editor help with my work too, please ?		Excuse me, I am working on OrenoImo vol 4 chap 1 atm, but my editor is unavailable. Can your editor help with my work too, please ?

Chaos: /* Oreimo */

2012-04-30T01:45:32Z

Oreimo

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	Whoops, I knew there was something I forgot [[User:Psieye\|Psieye]] 11:22, 11 July 2011 (UCT)		Whoops, I knew there was something I forgot [[User:Psieye\|Psieye]] 11:22, 11 July 2011 (UCT)
			Excuse me, I am working on OrenoImo vol 4 chap 1 atm, but my editor is unavailable. Can your editor help with my work too, please ?

Psieye: /* Oreimo */ Formatting

2011-07-11T11:23:43Z

Oreimo: Formatting

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	Maybe you could add your name to the project staff? [[User:Kira0802\|Kira]] ([[User_talk:Kira0802\|Talk]]) 11:14, 11 July 2011 (UCT)		Maybe you could add your name to the project staff? [[User:Kira0802\|Kira]] ([[User_talk:Kira0802\|Talk]]) 11:14, 11 July 2011 (UCT)

	Whoops, I knew there was something I forgot [[User:Psieye\|Psieye]] 11:22, 11 July 2011 (UCT)		Whoops, I knew there was something I forgot [[User:Psieye\|Psieye]] 11:22, 11 July 2011 (UCT)

Psieye: /* Oreimo */ Reply

2011-07-11T11:22:52Z

Oreimo: Reply

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	Maybe you could add your name to the project staff? [[User:Kira0802\|Kira]] ([[User_talk:Kira0802\|Talk]]) 11:14, 11 July 2011 (UCT)		Maybe you could add your name to the project staff? [[User:Kira0802\|Kira]] ([[User_talk:Kira0802\|Talk]]) 11:14, 11 July 2011 (UCT)
			Whoops, I knew there was something I forgot [[User:Psieye\|Psieye]] 11:22, 11 July 2011 (UCT)

Kira0802: /* Oreimo */ new section

2011-07-11T11:14:04Z

Oreimo: new section

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	Thanks for going through and highlighting trouble spots that I missed. I don't have the time to run through Chapter 1 again.		Thanks for going through and highlighting trouble spots that I missed. I don't have the time to run through Chapter 1 again.
	-- [[User:Baltakatei\|Baltakatei]] 01:07, 19 April 2006 (PDT)		-- [[User:Baltakatei\|Baltakatei]] 01:07, 19 April 2006 (PDT)

			== Oreimo ==

			Maybe you could add your name to the project staff? [[User:Kira0802\|Kira]] ([[User_talk:Kira0802\|Talk]]) 11:14, 11 July 2011 (UCT)

Psieye: Reply to proofread of my edits

2006-04-19T10:28:59Z

Reply to proofread of my edits

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	: "to discover" doesn't have a tense so it conflicts with the past tense used in the verbs "I came...", "were moved out...", "was going around...", etc. I swithced "to discover" back to "discovered" to be consistent with the past tense.		: "to discover" doesn't have a tense so it conflicts with the past tense used in the verbs "I came...", "were moved out...", "was going around...", etc. I swithced "to discover" back to "discovered" to be consistent with the past tense.

			'''Psieye''': Ah point. I'd meant it to read more as "Once I came to the classroom in the morning to discover all the tables moved out to the corridor" but seems I lost my attention and thought it was done when I came back. Well, "discovered" flows just as well I guess so we'll stay with your version.

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	: I think leaving in the "cut" at the beginning carries more of the shock at Kyon's observation of Haruhi's new haircut.		: I think leaving in the "cut" at the beginning carries more of the shock at Kyon's observation of Haruhi's new haircut.

			'''Psieye''': Fair enough. I knew one "cut" had to be removed but I guess your choice emphasises better.

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	: You'll have to talk to Thelastguardian about whether "kick ass" is consistent with Suzumiya's tone in Japanese. I personally think toning "kick ass" down to "awesome" might be going too far in altering Suzumiya's energetic voice. I'm reverting it back to thelastguardian's original and letting him know what he/she thinks.		: You'll have to talk to Thelastguardian about whether "kick ass" is consistent with Suzumiya's tone in Japanese. I personally think toning "kick ass" down to "awesome" might be going too far in altering Suzumiya's energetic voice. I'm reverting it back to thelastguardian's original and letting him know what he/she thinks.

			'''Psieye''': True, this one needs the original translator's eye on it. "Kick ass" didn't quite seem to fit but "awesome" is toned down... I wonder if there's a re-phrasing that tones up and also fits the flow...

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	: I fixed a tense conflict and sided with the past tense. Again, it's that tense issue.		: I fixed a tense conflict and sided with the past tense. Again, it's that tense issue.

			'''Psieye''': nods yeah I got careless there. Thanks for the correction.

	Thanks for going through and highlighting trouble spots that I missed. I don't have the time to run through Chapter 1 again.		Thanks for going through and highlighting trouble spots that I missed. I don't have the time to run through Chapter 1 again.
	-- [[User:Baltakatei\|Baltakatei]] 01:07, 19 April 2006 (PDT)		-- [[User:Baltakatei\|Baltakatei]] 01:07, 19 April 2006 (PDT)

Baltakatei: /* Proofread of Chapter 1 edits */ fixed formatting to be more readable

2006-04-19T08:14:11Z

Proofread of Chapter 1 edits: fixed formatting to be more readable

Baltakatei: /* Chapter 1 */ Proofread Psieye's edits and commented on changes per request.

2006-04-19T08:07:29Z

Chapter 1: Proofread Psieye's edits and commented on changes per request.

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	== Chapter 1 ==		== Proofread of Chapter 1 edits==

	Good job spotting all those little things. I didn't even think to convert "Fifth class" to "class 1-5". ~~There~~ are a few changes you made that I changed:		Good job spotting all those little things. I didn't even think to convert "Fifth class" to "class 1-5". Since you wanted someone to proofread your edits, here are a few changes you made that I changed/tweaked:

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	''"Once I came to the classroom in the morning and '''to discover''' that all the tables were moved out to the corridor, or printed stars on the school roof; another time she was going around the school pasting curse papers all over the place...you know, those Chinese vampire ones where you paste the paper talisman on a vampire's forehead. I just can't understand her."''		''"Once I came to the classroom in the morning and '''to discover''' that all the tables were moved out to the corridor, or printed stars on the school roof; another time she was going around the school pasting curse papers all over the place...you know, those Chinese vampire ones where you paste the paper talisman on a vampire's forehead. I just can't understand her."''

	"to discover" doesn't have a tense so it conflicts with the past tense used in the verbs "I came...", "were moved out...", "was going around...", etc. I swithced "to discover" back to "discovered" to be consistent with the past tense.		"to discover" doesn't have a tense so it conflicts with the past tense used in the verbs "I came...", "were moved out...", "was going around...", etc. I swithced "to discover" back to "discovered" to be consistent with the past tense.

	[[User:Baltakatei\|Baltakatei]] 00:23, 19 April 2006 (PDT)		'''Line 309''':
			''Taniguchi, long winded as always, boasted how he met some cute girls at his workplace, and how he plans to use the money he saved to go on dates etc... Frankly, topics like what dreams people have, or how amazing or cute someone's pet is '''are''', in my book, are some of the dullest topics in the world.''

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			''Therefore when I came to school the next day and discovered that instead of tying three ponytails, Haruhi had '''cut''' her long and slender hair short, I felt quite depressed.''

			I think leaving in the "cut" at the beginning carries more of the shock at Kyon's observation of Haruhi's new haircut.

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			''"I thought after I graduated to senior high, I would encounter some '''awesome''' club! Sigh, this is like trying to go into the Major League, but then you discover that the school you're attending doesn't even have a baseball team."''

			You'll have to talk to Thelastguardian about whether "kick ass" is consistent with Suzumiya's tone in Japanese. I personally think toning it down to "awesome" might be going too far in altering Suzumiya's energetic voice.

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			''The warm sun made everyone in the classroom sleepy. Just as I was nodding my head and going to sleep, a powerful force '''was''' suddenly exerted on my collar and '''pulled''' me backwards. Because the force was so strong, my head hit the corner of the table behind me. Tears came out of my eyes instantly.''

			I fixed a tense conflict and sided with the past tense. Again, it's that tense issue.

			Thanks for going through and highlighting trouble spots that I missed. I don't have the time to run through Chapter 1 again.
			-- [[User:Baltakatei\|Baltakatei]] 01:07, 19 April 2006 (PDT)

Baltakatei at 07:23, 19 April 2006

2006-04-19T07:23:42Z

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	"to discover" doesn't have a tense so it conflicts with the past tense used in the verbs "I came...", "were moved out...", "was going around...", etc. I swithced "to discover" back to "discovered" to be consistent with the past tense.		"to discover" doesn't have a tense so it conflicts with the past tense used in the verbs "I came...", "were moved out...", "was going around...", etc. I swithced "to discover" back to "discovered" to be consistent with the past tense.

			[[User:Baltakatei\|Baltakatei]] 00:23, 19 April 2006 (PDT)

Baltakatei: Chapter 1

2006-04-19T07:23:22Z

Chapter 1

New page

== Chapter 1 ==

Good job spotting all those little things. I didn't even think to convert "Fifth class" to "class 1-5". There are a few changes you made that I changed:

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''"Once I came to the classroom in the morning and '''to discover''' that all the tables were moved out to the corridor, or printed stars on the school roof; another time she was going around the school pasting curse papers all over the place...you know, those Chinese vampire ones where you paste the paper talisman on a vampire's forehead. I just can't understand her."''

"to discover" doesn't have a tense so it conflicts with the past tense used in the verbs "I came...", "were moved out...", "was going around...", etc. I swithced "to discover" back to "discovered" to be consistent with the past tense.

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	''"Once I came to the classroom in the morning and '''to discover''' that all the tables were moved out to the corridor, or printed stars on the school roof; another time she was going around the school pasting curse papers all over the place...you know, those Chinese vampire ones where you paste the paper talisman on a vampire's forehead. I just can't understand her."''		''"Once I came to the classroom in the morning and '''to discover''' that all the tables were moved out to the corridor, or printed stars on the school roof; another time she was going around the school pasting curse papers all over the place...you know, those Chinese vampire ones where you paste the paper talisman on a vampire's forehead. I just can't understand her."''

	"to discover" doesn't have a tense so it conflicts with the past tense used in the verbs "I came...", "were moved out...", "was going around...", etc. I swithced "to discover" back to "discovered" to be consistent with the past tense.		: "to discover" doesn't have a tense so it conflicts with the past tense used in the verbs "I came...", "were moved out...", "was going around...", etc. I swithced "to discover" back to "discovered" to be consistent with the past tense.

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	''Therefore when I came to school the next day and discovered that instead of tying three ponytails, Haruhi had '''cut''' her long and slender hair short, I felt quite depressed.''		''Therefore when I came to school the next day and discovered that instead of tying three ponytails, Haruhi had '''cut''' her long and slender hair short, I felt quite depressed.''

	I think leaving in the "cut" at the beginning carries more of the shock at Kyon's observation of Haruhi's new haircut.		: I think leaving in the "cut" at the beginning carries more of the shock at Kyon's observation of Haruhi's new haircut.

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	''"I thought after I graduated to senior high, I would encounter some '''awesome''' club! Sigh, this is like trying to go into the Major League, but then you discover that the school you're attending doesn't even have a baseball team."''		''"I thought after I graduated to senior high, I would encounter some '''awesome''' club! Sigh, this is like trying to go into the Major League, but then you discover that the school you're attending doesn't even have a baseball team."''

	You'll have to talk to Thelastguardian about whether "kick ass" is consistent with Suzumiya's tone in Japanese. I personally think toning it down to "awesome" might be going too far in altering Suzumiya's energetic voice.		: You'll have to talk to Thelastguardian about whether "kick ass" is consistent with Suzumiya's tone in Japanese. I personally think toning "kick ass" down to "awesome" might be going too far in altering Suzumiya's energetic voice. I'm reverting it back to thelastguardian's original and letting him know what he/she thinks.

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	''The warm sun made everyone in the classroom sleepy. Just as I was nodding my head and going to sleep, a powerful force '''was''' suddenly exerted on my collar and '''pulled''' me backwards. Because the force was so strong, my head hit the corner of the table behind me. Tears came out of my eyes instantly.''		''The warm sun made everyone in the classroom sleepy. Just as I was nodding my head and going to sleep, a powerful force '''was''' suddenly exerted on my collar and '''pulled''' me backwards. Because the force was so strong, my head hit the corner of the table behind me. Tears came out of my eyes instantly.''

	I fixed a tense conflict and sided with the past tense. Again, it's that tense issue.		: I fixed a tense conflict and sided with the past tense. Again, it's that tense issue.

	Thanks for going through and highlighting trouble spots that I missed. I don't have the time to run through Chapter 1 again.		Thanks for going through and highlighting trouble spots that I missed. I don't have the time to run through Chapter 1 again.
	-- [[User:Baltakatei\|Baltakatei]] 01:07, 19 April 2006 (PDT)		-- [[User:Baltakatei\|Baltakatei]] 01:07, 19 April 2006 (PDT)