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	Louise gritted her teeth to the degree where she could rip her handkerchief into shreds. What was this! This was like a conversation between a newlywed couples! Who exactly did he want to live with<nowiki>~~~~</nowiki>?!		Louise gritted her teeth to the degree where she could rip her handkerchief into shreds. What was this! This was like a conversation between a newlywed couples! Who exactly did he want to live with<nowiki>~~~~</nowiki>?!
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	Feeling as if she lost very badly, Louise began to fight. After searching around herself, Louise discovered an excellent item.		Feeling as if she lost very badly, Louise began to fight. After searching around herself, Louise discovered an excellent item.

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	"Her majesty requests me. Immediately, at the palace."		"Her majesty requests me. Immediately, at the palace."

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Retry2: More grammar and tense fixes, a few sentences had to be rewritten slightly. Tried to keep with the intent of the original.

2012-08-15T19:37:47Z

More grammar and tense fixes, a few sentences had to be rewritten slightly. Tried to keep with the intent of the original.

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Retry2: Mostly past/present tense mismatches again, some other grammar changes.

2012-08-15T19:10:19Z

Mostly past/present tense mismatches again, some other grammar changes.

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	The black haired actor with a sword was facing a dummy dragon and actors dressed up as nobles.		The black haired actor with a sword was facing a dummy dragon and actors dressed up as nobles.

	"There are 70,000 enemies! I am alone! But God and Founder Brimir will never abandon ~~Tristan~~!"		"There are 70,000 enemies! I am alone! But God and Founder Brimir will never abandon Tristain!"

	Saito muttered quietly		Saito muttered quietly
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	Scarron calmly replied.		Scarron calmly replied.

	"To save our kingdom, our dearest Queen sent me here! Swordsman of the wind, Hiraha ~~Siago~~!"		"To save our kingdom, our dearest Queen sent me here! Swordsman of the wind, Hiraha Saigo!"

	"Swordsman of the wind"		"Swordsman of the wind"
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	"Sh-shut up!"		"Sh-shut up!"

	More and more citizens began to gather. Unfortunately, Guiche is the kind of teen ~~who~~ excitement grows with the size of his audience. A 100% match. Still not knowing how Saito's legends is already ~~widespread~~, he began his speech, waving his hands exaggeratedly		More and more citizens began to gather. Unfortunately, Guiche was the kind of teen whose excitement grows with the size of his audience. A 100% match. Still not knowing how widespread Saito's legends already were, he began his speech, waving his hands exaggeratedly
	"Not only that! He ~~singled~~ handedly fought on the Lelion river! The first to come forth was the so-called undefeatable '''Duke Socarton'''! But Saito couldn't care less! Easily chasing Duke '''Socarton''' all over the place, beautifully slicing his staff in two!"		"Not only that! He single-handedly fought on the Lelion river! The first to come forth was the so-called undefeatable '''Duke Socarton'''! But Saito couldn't care less! Easily chasing Duke '''Socarton''' all over the place, beautifully slicing his staff in two!"

	The crowd began to heat up. Mistakenly believing that their reaction was because of his charisma, he puffed up his voice		The crowd began to heat up. Mistakenly believing that their reaction was because of his charisma, he puffed up his voice
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	"Huh? What's wrong! How's it bad to talk about that guy's achievements!"		"Huh? What's wrong! How's it bad to talk about that guy's achievements!"

	That's right that's right, the crowd booed. Just as Siesta, Scarron and Jessica ~~was~~ about to bring Saito away from these dangerous grounds..... an amazingly sharp-sighted Malicorne found the hidden Saito.		That's right that's right, the crowd booed. Just as Siesta, Scarron and Jessica were about to bring Saito away from these dangerous grounds..... an amazingly sharp-sighted Malicorne found the hidden Saito.

	"Oh heey! You were here all along Saito! Why hide your face? Such a weird fellow!"		"Oh heey! You were here all along Saito! Why hide your face? Such a weird fellow!"
	Then ran ~~next~~ to Saito, unwrapping his carefully concealed face. The gathered crowd turned wild like a thunderstorm.		Then he ran to Saito, unwrapping his carefully concealed face. The gathered crowd turned wild like a thunderstorm.

	"Th-this gentleman, is the co-captain of the Water Spirit Ondine Knights, Hiraha Saigo?"		"Th-this gentleman, is the co-captain of the Water Spirit Ondine Knights, Hiraha Saigo?"

	"Right you are"		"Right you are," Malicorne nodded. The people crammed towards Saito like a flash flood. The disturbance caused in the "Charming Fairies'" Inn was incomparable to this one.
	Malicorne nodded. The people crammed towards Saito like a flash flood. The disturbance caused in the "Charming Fairies'" Inn was incomparable to this one.

	"Pl-please bless us!"		"Pl-please bless us!"
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	"Please touch my hand!"		"Please touch my hand!"

	"What's going on?"		"What's going on?" asked Guiche, still completely clueless about Saito being popular to the degree where they have made him into an opera. Saito was engulfed by the incoming wave of civilians.

	~~What's going on~~, ~~asked the~~ still completely clueless about Saito popular to the degree where they have made him into an opera~~, Guiche~~. Saito was engulfed by the incoming wave of civilians.

	"Oi! Where, where are you touching! Stop!"		"Oi! Where, where are you touching! Stop!"
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	"Wait.... I earned that......oof! Waah!"		"Wait.... I earned that......oof! Waah!"

	Trapped in between the castle-hungry Water Spirit Knights and the "Hiraha" chanting crowd, Saito situation ~~has become~~ too difficult for anyone to save. Things ~~already so~~, no one ~~will~~ be able to stop it. It~~'s as if~~ being dragged into a tsunami.		Trapped in between the castle-hungry Water Spirit Knights and the "Hiraha" chanting crowd, Saito's situation became too difficult for anyone to save. Things the way they were, no one would be able to stop it. It was like being dragged into a tsunami.

	Louise watched this scene, shocked; Siesta watched with fascination; Jessica and Scarron stood by chuckling to themselves.		Louise watched this scene, shocked; Siesta watched with fascination; Jessica and Scarron stood by chuckling to themselves.

	"Hey! What's with the disturbance! Disband yourselves at once!"		"Hey! What's with the disturbance! Disband yourselves at once!" Cried out a team of cavalry from the other end of the street.
	~~Crying~~ out ~~so was~~ a team of cavalry from the other end of the street.

	"Or what! You should back off!"		"Or what! You should back off!"

	"Say what?"		"Say what?" The leading female knight drew her sword.
	The leading female knight drew her sword.
	"We are her highness' Musketeer Corps! Disobey and I'll have you all arrested!"		"We are her highness' Musketeer Corps! Disobey and I'll have you all arrested!"

	Just the mention of her highness' personal Musketeer corps was enough to quiet even a crying baby.		Just the mention of her highness' personal Musketeer corps was enough to quiet even a crying baby.

	~~Because~~ their members were made up entirely of young females, none of them ~~feels~~ that they should be looked down upon. Due to their ferocity, they became widely known almost instantly.		Even though their members were made up entirely of young females, none of them felt that they should be looked down upon. Due to their ferocity, they became widely known almost instantly.

	"Good! Take them all to the '''Shelbourne''' jail!"		"Good! Take them all to the '''Shelbourne''' jail!"

75.185.249.236: The past/present tense issues were bugging me, so I fixed a few of them, I will probably do more later. - Retry2

2012-08-15T18:54:19Z

The past/present tense issues were bugging me, so I fixed a few of them, I will probably do more later. - Retry2

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	At the countryside Tristania of the Kingdom of Tristain......, a corner past the ~~'''~~Rosroll~~'''forest~~.		At the countryside Tristania of the Kingdom of Tristain......, a corner past the Rosroll Forest.

	Wales was an estate agent running a business in Tristania, his customers all either rich entrepreneurs or nobles. Today, he was scratching his head in frustration. Though he dealt with nobles, the estates he handles were not "territories" and had nothing to do with titles. They were mere "lands" any rich merchant and aristocrat could purchase, which very much explains why when today's customers appeared, he was overjoyed. However one looked at it, these customers must be one of the top nobles of this country.		Wales was an estate agent running a business in Tristania, his customers all either rich entrepreneurs or nobles. Today, he was scratching his head in frustration. Though he dealt with nobles, the estates he handles were not "territories" and had nothing to do with titles. They were mere "lands" any rich merchant and aristocrat could purchase, which very much explains why when today's customers appeared, he was overjoyed. However one looked at it, these customers must be one of the top nobles of this country.
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	"A storage room, I guess?"		"A storage room, I guess?"

	"Possible. Say, Saito, shall we take a look around?		"Possible. Say, Saito, shall we take a look around?"

	"Nah," Saito swiftly rejected, soon turning back to Siesta's presentations. With the choice completely in the other's hands, Louise was out of ideas and snuck into that storage room, sitting down and hugging her knees.		"Nah," Saito swiftly rejected, soon turning back to Siesta's presentations. With the choice completely in the other's hands, Louise was out of ideas and snuck into that storage room, sitting down and hugging her knees.
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	"Then, in the end you didn't find a single thing?"		"Then, in the end you didn't find a single thing?"
	The shopkeeper Scarron sighed. After Wales ~~have~~ completely given up, to clear up their gloomy emotions, Louise and the rest came to Tristainia's "Charming Fairies" inn.		The shopkeeper Scarron sighed. After Wales had completely given up, to clear up their gloomy emotions, Louise and the rest came to Tristainia's "Charming Fairies" inn.

	"That's what happened, all because of her, saying only selfish things. In addition, even magic was used. Just the repair bill alone was 200 Ecu," Saito complained grumpily.		"That's what happened, all because of her, saying only selfish things. In addition, even magic was used. Just the repair bill alone was 200 Ecu," Saito complained grumpily.
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	"In short, Louise feels uncomfortable living with Siesta, right?"		"In short, Louise feels uncomfortable living with Siesta, right?"

	Instantly the atmosphere froze. Well that was to be expected. Realizing so, Saito couldn't help but turn pale. It felt as if the thing he feels most guilty about has been placed under the spotlight.		Instantly the atmosphere froze. Well, that was to be expected. Realizing so, Saito couldn't help but turn pale. It felt as if the thing he feels most guilty about has been placed under the spotlight.

	On the other hand......, he had always felt that Louise and Siesta had an understanding on this. After all, the one he likes is Louise. Plus, even after clarifying it with Siesta, Siesta was still willing to be a maid..... Siesta completely sees his charming points, the way she feels for him has already surpassed love.....		On the other hand......, he had always felt that Louise and Siesta had an understanding on this. After all, the one he likes is Louise. Plus, even after clarifying it with Siesta, Siesta was still willing to be a maid..... Siesta completely sees his charming points, the way she feels for him has already surpassed love.....

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	At the countryside Tristania of the Kingdom of Tristain......, a corner past the '''Rosroll'''forest.		At the countryside Tristania of the Kingdom of Tristain......, a corner past the '''Rosroll'''forest.

	Wales was an estate agent running a business in Tristania, his customers either rich entrepreneurs or nobles. Today, he was scratching his head in frustration. Though he deals with nobles, the estate he handles are not "territories" and has nothing to do with title. They are mere "lands" any rich merchant and ~~aristocrats~~ can purchase.		Wales was an estate agent running a business in Tristania, his customers either rich entrepreneurs or nobles. Today, he was scratching his head in frustration. Though he deals with nobles, the estate he handles are not "territories" and has nothing to do with title. They are mere "lands" any rich merchant and aristocrat can purchase, which very much explains why when today's customers appeared, he was overjoyed. However one looks at it, these customers must be one of the top nobles of this country.

	~~Which~~ very much explains why when today's ~~customer's~~ appeared, he was overjoyed. However one looks at it, these customers must be one of the top nobles of this country.

	If someone as famed as them becomes his customers, sooner or later his shop will also rise to fame accordingly.		If someone as famed as them becomes his customers, sooner or later his shop will also rise to fame accordingly.
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	The actor portraying Saito waved the sword in his hand, using it to block the attacks of the dummy dragon and the enemy actors, then defeating them one by one.		The actor portraying Saito waved the sword in his hand, using it to block the attacks of the dummy dragon and the enemy actors, then defeating them one by one.

	For each enemy defeated, the audience ~~will~~ burst into wild cheers. On closer inspection, must of the audience were commoners.		For each enemy defeated, the audience burst into wild cheers. On closer inspection, must of the audience were commoners.

	During this process, a basket carrying the diva slowly descended from above, singing the song of praise about the swordsman		During this process, a basket carrying the diva slowly descended from above, singing the song of praise about the swordsman
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	"Although this play has been under heavy criticism from critics, it is very popular in the hearts of us citizens"		"Although this play has been under heavy criticism from critics, it is very popular in the hearts of us citizens"

	Even this kind of lame story content ~~cannot~~ stop the wild cheers from the audience.		Even this kind of lame story content could not stop the wild cheers from the audience.

	Everyone was chanting "Swordsmen Hiraha" in unison.		Everyone was chanting "Swordsmen Hiraha" in unison.

	Saito buried his face deep into his scarf. Without his sword and with his black hair hidden, no one would recognize that this is the real Saito.		Saito buried his face deep into his scarf. Without his sword and with his black hair hidden, no one would recognize that this was the real Saito.

	Siesta looked at the play, then looked at Saito, her face full of admiration.		Siesta looked at the play, then looked at Saito, her face full of admiration.
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	Siesta took no notice of Saito's words, deeply mesmerized in the play.		Siesta took no notice of Saito's words, deeply mesmerized in the play.

	On the stage, swordsman Hiraha finally defeated the enemy captain. Seeing this, the heated audience all stood up whooping.		On the stage, swordsman Hiraha finally defeated the enemy captain. Seeing this, the heated audience all stood up, whooping.

	"Bravo--! Swordsman Hiraha! Bravo--!" echoed throughout the theatre. Usually, stories about achievements of a swordsman wouldn't be allowed to be on a stage as large as this, only performed on small puppet theaters or plays on the streets. Most likely, this only passed the test since this swordsman Hiraha is based on a national hero.		"Bravo--! Swordsman Hiraha! Bravo--!" echoed throughout the theatre. Usually, stories about achievements of a swordsman wouldn't be allowed to be on a stage as large as this, only performed on small puppet theaters or plays on the streets. Most likely, this only passed the test since this swordsman "Hiraha" is based on a national hero.

	Overwhelmed by the audience's enthusiasm, Louise muttered simply		Overwhelmed by the audience's enthusiasm, Louise muttered simply
	"In-incredible....."		"In-incredible....."

	It was as if he was as popular as the Pope himself. In fact, in the eyes of a peasant, Saito's fame ~~precedes~~ even the king himself.		It was as if he was as popular as the Pope himself. In fact, in the eyes of a peasant, Saito's fame preceded even the king himself.

	"Hey, take a look on that side"		"Hey, take a look on that side"
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	Right where Scarron indicated with his head, was the balcony seats on the second floor reserved usually for grand nobles enjoying operas.		Right where Scarron indicated with his head, was the balcony seats on the second floor reserved usually for grand nobles enjoying operas.

	From the gaps of the curtains, one ~~can~~ see how unpleasant the noble's face looked. As a noble, watching how a knight of a commoner's background defeated a noble, even if enemy, must be painfully boring.		From the gaps of the curtains, one could see how unpleasant the noble's face looked. As a noble, watching how a knight of a commoner's background defeated a noble, even if enemy, must be painfully boring.

	Louise couldn't help but laugh.		Louise couldn't help but laugh.
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	Louise finally understood the reason why Scarron insisted they hire Siesta.		Louise finally understood the reason why Scarron insisted they hire Siesta.

	True. As admirers increase, so do enemies. From now on, Saito and Louise ~~can~~'t let their guard down while defending themselves against these enemies.		True. As admirers increase, so do enemies. From now on, Saito and Louise couldn't let their guard down while defending themselves against these enemies.

	"Shopkeeper Scarron is right"		"Shopkeeper Scarron is right"
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	Drawing death just because of some stupid jealousy would be a hell of a way to die. Thinking so while watching the Siesta crying out hysterically along with the rest of the crowd, Louise suddenly felt how important this ally is. If it's her, no matter under whatever circumstances, she would never betray Saito.		Drawing death just because of some stupid jealousy would be a hell of a way to die. Thinking so while watching the Siesta crying out hysterically along with the rest of the crowd, Louise suddenly felt how important this ally is. If it's her, no matter under whatever circumstances, she would never betray Saito.

	While Louise kept adjusting her thoughts, she could almost read ~~the~~ thoughts ~~of the Saito~~ on this play modeled after him.		While Louise kept adjusting her thoughts, she could almost read Saito's thoughts on this play modeled after him.

	''Wow, I'm slowly becoming famous.... I wonder what would my family and friends on Earth would say if they saw this?		''Wow, I'm slowly becoming famous.... I wonder what would my family and friends on Earth would say if they saw this?

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	Saito expressed his thoughts in sorrow.		Saito expressed his thoughts in sorrow.

	"Although this play has been under heavy ~~critism~~ from critics, it is very popular in the hearts of us citizens"		"Although this play has been under heavy criticism from critics, it is very popular in the hearts of us citizens"

	Even this kind of lame story content cannot stop the wild cheers from the audience.		Even this kind of lame story content cannot stop the wild cheers from the audience.
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	Everyone was chanting "Swordsmen Hiraha" in unison.		Everyone was chanting "Swordsmen Hiraha" in unison.

	Saito buried his face deep into his scarf. Without his sword and with his black hair hidden, no one would ~~recgonize~~ that this is the real Saito.		Saito buried his face deep into his scarf. Without his sword and with his black hair hidden, no one would recognize that this is the real Saito.

	Siesta looked at the play, then looked at Saito, her face full of ~~admire~~.		Siesta looked at the play, then looked at Saito, her face full of admiration.

	"There's Mister Saito! Look, look look. Ohh...... my Saito, finally appeared on stage!"		"There's Mister Saito! Look, look look. Ohh...... my Saito, finally appeared on stage!"
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	"In-incredible....."		"In-incredible....."

	It was as if as popular as the Pope himself. In fact, in the eyes of a peasant, Saito's fame precedes even the king himself.		It was as if he was as popular as the Pope himself. In fact, in the eyes of a peasant, Saito's fame precedes even the king himself.

	"Hey, take a look on that side"		"Hey, take a look on that side"
	Scarron pointed to a corner of the audience. There, a large ~~amount~~ of females stood blushing. Their excited voices could be heard all the way to Louise and the others.		Scarron pointed to a corner of the audience. There, a large number of females stood blushing. Their excited voices could be heard all the way to Louise and the others.

	"Incredible...., a mere swordsman being able to take down the enemy captain. Too bad it's only a story"		"Incredible...., a mere swordsman being able to take down the enemy captain. Too bad it's only a story."

	"What are you talking about! The hero for this story actually exists. Thanks to him, the army of Tristain was ~~true~~"		"What are you talking about! The hero for this story actually exists. Thanks to him, the army of Tristain was saved."

	"I even heard that he ~~made~~ a medal this time in Gallia"		"I even heard that he received a medal this time in Gallia."

	Really ~~want~~ to be with that kind of person, the girls all nodded dreamily.		Really wanting to be with that kind of person, the girls all nodded dreamily.

	Louise shivered. No..... she ~~unconsiously~~ acknowledges Saito's achievements at Albion and Gallia. Only after seeing it happen in person does she realise how she ~~have~~ ignored these things.		Louise shivered. No..... she unconsciously acknowledges Saito's achievements at Albion and Gallia. Only after seeing it happen in person does she realise how she had ignored these things.

	"Do you understand now? Whether or not you hire a maid, nothing will change. Nowadays, the number of ladies ~~having~~ their eyes on Saito are as uncountable as flies around a pie. He did, after all, make all of these things happen, he even became the co-captain of a squadron"		"Do you understand now? Whether or not you hire a maid, nothing will change. Nowadays, the number of ladies who have their eyes on Saito are as uncountable as flies around a pie. He did, after all, make all of these things happen, he even became the co-captain of a squadron."
	Afterwards, Scarron tuned down to a low voice		Afterwards, Scarron tuned down to a low voice
	"Not only so"		"Not only so."

	"Eh?"		"Eh?"

	"Look over there"		"Look over there."

	Right where Scarron indicated with his head, was the balcony seats on the second floor reserved usually for grand nobles enjoying operas.		Right where Scarron indicated with his head, was the balcony seats on the second floor reserved usually for grand nobles enjoying operas.
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	Louise couldn't help but laugh.		Louise couldn't help but laugh.

	"I know, right? Do you understand? Popularity also brings unhappy people like them. Randomly hiring an unknown person, who knows what will ~~he mix~~ into your food. That's how the brother of the Gallian king died, in case you forgot. That Earl Oscar died from a poisoned bread. For someone like Saito, a trusty maid like little Siesta is definitely needed. What you need is a true friend who can report to you any suspicious ~~activies~~ from the people you've hired."		"I know, right? Do you understand? Popularity also brings unhappy people like them. Randomly hiring an unknown person, who knows what will be mixed into your food. That's how the brother of the Gallian king died, in case you forgot. That Earl Oscar died from poisoned bread. For someone like Saito, a trusty maid like little Siesta is definitely needed. What you need is a true friend who can report to you any suspicious activities from the people you've hired."

	Louise finally understood the reason why Scarron insisted ~~them~~ hire Siesta.		Louise finally understood the reason why Scarron insisted they hire Siesta.

	True. As admirers increase, so ~~does~~ enemies. From now on, Saito and Louise can't let their guard down while defending themselves against these enemies.		True. As admirers increase, so do enemies. From now on, Saito and Louise can't let their guard down while defending themselves against these enemies.

	"Shopkeep Scarron is right"		"Shopkeep Scarron is right"
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	Drawing death just because of some stupid jealousy would be a hell of a way to die. Thinking so while watching the Siesta crying out hysterically along with the rest of the crowd, Louise suddenly felt how important this ally is. If it's her, no matter under whatever circumstances, she would never betray Saito.		Drawing death just because of some stupid jealousy would be a hell of a way to die. Thinking so while watching the Siesta crying out hysterically along with the rest of the crowd, Louise suddenly felt how important this ally is. If it's her, no matter under whatever circumstances, she would never betray Saito.

	While Louise kept adjusting her thoughts, she could almost read the thoughts of the Saito on this play ~~modelled~~ after him.		While Louise kept adjusting her thoughts, she could almost read the thoughts of the Saito on this play modeled after him.

	''Wow, I'm slowly becoming famous.... I wonder what would my family and friends on Earth would say if they saw this?		''Wow, I'm slowly becoming famous.... I wonder what would my family and friends on Earth would say if they saw this?
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	"Oh my! If it isn't Louise!"		"Oh my! If it isn't Louise!"
	A familiar voice called out. Turning their heads around, they instantly ~~regonised~~ Guiche in his brand new Chevalier cape. Beside him were the rest of the Water Spirit Ondine knights.		A familiar voice called out. Turning their heads around, they instantly recogonised Guiche in his brand new Chevalier cape. Beside him were the rest of the Water Spirit Ondine knights.

	Best not to make a fuss around here. Just as she was about to push Saito and leave this dangerous area, Guiche closed the distance between them, smiling		Best not to make a fuss around here. Just as she was about to push Saito and leave this dangerous area, Guiche closed the distance between them, smiling
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	"Oh heey! You were here all along Saito! Why hide your face? Such a weird fellow!"		"Oh heey! You were here all along Saito! Why hide your face? Such a weird fellow!"
	Then ran next to Saito, unwrapping his carefully ~~concealled~~ face. The gathered crowd turned wild like a thunderstorm.		Then ran next to Saito, unwrapping his carefully concealed face. The gathered crowd turned wild like a thunderstorm.

	"Th-this gentleman, is the co-captain of the Water Spirit Ondine Knights, Hiraha Saigo?"		"Th-this gentleman, is the co-captain of the Water Spirit Ondine Knights, Hiraha Saigo?"
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	"What's going on?"		"What's going on?"

	What's going on, asked the still completely clueless about Saito popular to the degree where they have made him into an opera Guiche. Saito was engulfed by the incoming wave of civilians.		What's going on, asked the still completely clueless about Saito popular to the degree where they have made him into an opera, Guiche. Saito was engulfed by the incoming wave of civilians.

	"Oi! Where, where are you touching! Stop!"		"Oi! Where, where are you touching! Stop!"
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	"Don't want those kind of castles! Besides, I already split the money with you guys!"		"Don't want those kind of castles! Besides, I already split the money with you guys!"

	"It's only 2,000 ecus! Tell you ~~waht~~, take your wallet out!"		"It's only 2,000 ecus! Tell you what, take your wallet out!"

	"Wait.... I earned that......oof! Waah!"		"Wait.... I earned that......oof! Waah!"
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	"Hey! What's with the disturbance! Disband yourselves at once!"		"Hey! What's with the disturbance! Disband yourselves at once!"
	Crying out so was a team of ~~calvary~~ from the other end of the street.		Crying out so was a team of cavalry from the other end of the street.

	"Or what! You should back off!"		"Or what! You should back off!"