Zero no Tsukaima:Volume1 Story1 Chapter2 - Revision history

Shadow Walker13: Replaced all triple dots with proper ellipses

2023-10-31T20:49:20Z

Replaced all triple dots with proper ellipses

Shadow Walker13: Minor capitalization, spelling, and punctuation changes; replaced some hyphens with em dashes; changed a usage of "his/her" in dialogue to "their"

2023-10-30T22:25:37Z

Minor capitalization, spelling, and punctuation changes; replaced some hyphens with em dashes; changed a usage of "his/her" in dialogue to "their"

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	"You can at least dress yourself."		"You can at least dress yourself."

	"Right then. As punishment for being a disrespectful familiar: No breakfast,"		"Right then. As punishment for being a disrespectful familiar: no breakfast,"
	Louise declared, raising a finger triumphantly.		Louise declared, raising a finger triumphantly.

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	"Calm down, it's just a summoning."		"Calm down, it's just a summoning."

	"No, it's not! You can determine a mage's true power just by looking at ~~his/her~~ familiar! Why did that idiot get a salamander, while I got you?"		"No, it's not! You can determine a mage's true power just by looking at their familiar! Why did that idiot get a salamander, while I got you?"
	<!-- <Kumichael> when it says, "You can determine a mage's true power just by looking at their familiar," proper english dictates that we use "he/she" instead "their" (in this case, it would be his/her). Feel free to change it back to "their," if you so wish. -->		<!-- <Kumichael> when it says, "You can determine a mage's true power just by looking at their familiar," proper english dictates that we use "he/she" instead "their" (in this case, it would be his/her). Feel free to change it back to "their," if you so wish. -->

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	"Miss Vallière, you have to visualize vividly the metal that you wish to transmute them into."		"Miss Vallière, you have to visualize vividly the metal that you wish to transmute them into."

	Giving a cute little nod, Louise waved her wand. She had never looked as adorable as in that instant when she pursed her lips to begin chanting the incantation - it was almost otherworldly.		Giving a cute little nod, Louise waved her wand. She had never looked as adorable as in that instant when she pursed her lips to begin chanting the incantation — it was almost otherworldly.

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	Even knowing her true personality, Saito was momentarily ~~enamoured~~.		Even knowing her true personality, Saito was momentarily enamored.

	In the morning sunshine streaming in from the window, Louise's strawberry-blonde <!-- (note: originally was 'momoiro', peach-colored)--> hair sparkled enchantingly. Her hazel eyes shown like jewels, and her skin was a flawless white. Her sculpted nose was befitting of nobility.		In the morning sunshine streaming in from the window, Louise's strawberry-blonde <!-- (note: originally was 'momoiro', peach-colored)--> hair sparkled enchantingly. Her hazel eyes shown like jewels, and her skin was a flawless white. Her sculpted nose was befitting of nobility.

	''If only her breasts were more filled out, she'd be perfect - almost too good. But no matter how cute she is, that personality of hers is a real pitfall,'' Saito lamented.		''If only her breasts were more filled out, she'd be perfect — almost too good. But no matter how cute she is, that personality of hers is a real pitfall,'' Saito lamented.

	But as he sat there pondering, the students sitting in front of him had for some reason hidden under their chairs. ''Don't they see how cute Louise is? Still, she doesn't seem to be very popular. Rather, she gets called 'the Zero' and made fun of. Just looking around here, there aren't any girls nearly as cute. Only Kirche rivals her in looks.''		But as he sat there pondering, the students sitting in front of him had for some reason hidden under their chairs. ''Don't they see how cute Louise is? Still, she doesn't seem to be very popular. Rather, she gets called 'the Zero' and made fun of. Just looking around here, there aren't any girls nearly as cute. Only Kirche rivals her in looks.''
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	Of course, that elicited a vehement response from the other students.		Of course, that elicited a vehement response from the other students.

	"That wasn't 'a little!', Louise the Zero!"		"That wasn't 'a little', Louise the Zero!"

	"Your success rate is always ZERO!"		"Your success rate is always ZERO!"
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	<noinclude>		<noinclude>

	==Translator's Notes and References==		==Translator's Notes and References==
	<references/>		<references />

	{{Nav\|{{FULLPAGENAME}}\|{{ZnT List v1}}\|Zero no Tsukaima}}		{{Nav\|{{FULLPAGENAME}}\|{{ZnT List v1}}\|Zero no Tsukaima}}
	</noinclude>		</noinclude>

99.24.182.76: word "blonde" is used in text, not pink or "hot pink." - changed to strawberry blonde

2015-03-23T22:51:22Z

word "blonde" is used in text, not pink or "hot pink." - changed to strawberry blonde

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	"Louise the Zero! Don't go around grabbing random commoners off the street just because you can't summon anything!"		"Louise the Zero! Don't go around grabbing random commoners off the street just because you can't summon anything!"

	Louise's long ~~hot pink~~ hair billowed as she stood up. She raised her cute voice in anger.		Louise's long strawberry blonde hair billowed as she stood up. She raised her cute voice in anger.
	<!-- <the_naming_game> alright, there's no need to kill cute [sic] details like this. [diff=7380&oldid=7312] -->		<!-- <the_naming_game> alright, there's no need to kill cute [sic] details like this. [diff=7380&oldid=7312] -->

Coffeezombie: change to sentence based upon original Japanese text

2015-03-23T21:45:32Z

change to sentence based upon original Japanese text

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	Louise propped her chin on her hands and spoke.		Louise propped her chin on her hands and spoke.

	"You know, familiars are supposed to stay outside. You're only in here because I especially requested it."		"You know, familiars are supposed to stay outside. You're only in here on the floor because I especially requested it."

	Thus, Saito found himself sitting dumbly on the floor, staring at the bowl sitting in front of him. In it were some sorry-looking scraps of meat floating around in a thin soup. On the edge was half a loaf of hard-looking bread.		Thus, Saito found himself sitting dumbly on the floor, staring at the bowl sitting in front of him. In it were some sorry-looking scraps of meat floating around in a thin soup. On the edge was half a loaf of hard-looking bread.

Denormative: Updating references to new style.

2013-02-27T00:09:00Z

Updating references to new style.

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	"Okay..."		"Okay..."

	"Understand? Normally, a commoner like you would never set foot inside the <~~span id="back_to_alviss"~~>[~~[Talk~~:~~Zero_no_Tsukaima:Volume1_Story1_Chapter2#alviss\|~~Alvíss]]</~~span~~> Dining Hall. Be grateful."		"Understand? Normally, a commoner like you would never set foot inside the Alvíss<ref>[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Alv%C3%ADss Alvíss] was a dwarf in Norse mythology who was turned to stone through Thor's trickery.</ref> Dining Hall. Be grateful."

	"Right... Hey, what's an 'Alvíss'?"		"Right... Hey, what's an 'Alvíss'?"
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	Saito finally understood why Louise was called "the Zero."		Saito finally understood why Louise was called "the Zero."

	<noinclude>{{Nav\|{{FULLPAGENAME}}\|{{ZnT List v1}}\|Zero no Tsukaima}}</noinclude>		<noinclude>
			==Translator's Notes and References==
			<references/>

			{{Nav\|{{FULLPAGENAME}}\|{{ZnT List v1}}\|Zero no Tsukaima}}
			</noinclude>

108.205.233.213: /* Chapter Two: Louise the Zero */

2012-12-28T02:25:55Z

Chapter Two: Louise the Zero

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	"Louise the Zero! Don't go around grabbing random commoners off the street just because you can't summon anything!"		"Louise the Zero! Don't go around grabbing random commoners off the street just because you can't summon anything!"

	Louise's long ~~blonde~~ hair billowed as she stood up. She raised her cute voice in anger.		Louise's long hot pink hair billowed as she stood up. She raised her cute voice in anger.
	<!-- <the_naming_game> alright, there's no need to kill cute [sic] details like this. [diff=7380&oldid=7312] -->		<!-- <the_naming_game> alright, there's no need to kill cute [sic] details like this. [diff=7380&oldid=7312] -->

Vaelis at 20:58, 23 April 2012

2012-04-23T20:58:21Z

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	"Okay..."		"Okay..."

	"Understand? Normally, a commoner like you would never set foot inside the <span id="back_to_alviss">[[Talk:Zero_no_Tsukaima:~~Volume1_Chapter2~~#alviss\|Alvíss]]</span> Dining Hall. Be grateful."		"Understand? Normally, a commoner like you would never set foot inside the <span id="back_to_alviss">[[Talk:Zero_no_Tsukaima:Volume1_Story1_Chapter2#alviss\|Alvíss]]</span> Dining Hall. Be grateful."

	"Right... Hey, what's an 'Alvíss'?"		"Right... Hey, what's an 'Alvíss'?"

Vaelis: moved Zero no Tsukaima:Volume1 Chapter2 to Zero no Tsukaima:Volume1 Story1 Chapter2

2012-04-21T12:01:20Z

moved Zero no Tsukaima:Volume1 Chapter2 to Zero no Tsukaima:Volume1 Story1 Chapter2

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Vaelis at 08:30, 20 April 2012

2012-04-20T08:30:57Z

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	[[Image:ZNT-page-051.jpg\|thumb~~\|''"Don't worry. As long as I order it not to, it won't attack. Aren't you the scaredy-cat."''~~]]		[[Image:ZNT-page-051.jpg\|thumb]]
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	<!-- <andiyar> drama++ --><!-- <the_naming_game> can't explain; it feels like it's deliberately spitting out the embers with your sentence, rather than just as a matter of course, because of it being a salamander. [diff=7380&oldid=7312] -->		<!-- <andiyar> drama++ --><!-- <the_naming_game> can't explain; it feels like it's deliberately spitting out the embers with your sentence, rather than just as a matter of course, because of it being a salamander. [diff=7380&oldid=7312] -->

Vaelis at 13:29, 22 December 2011

2011-12-22T13:29:33Z

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	Saito finally understood why Louise was called "the Zero."		Saito finally understood why Louise was called "the Zero."

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