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Veritatis cupitor at 08:08, 4 October 2015

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	Louise was about to take her whip again when Saito stopped, dove on his straw bed, and wrapped himself in the blanket. He looked at the inscriptions in his left hand.		Louise was about to take her whip again when Saito stopped, dove on his straw bed, and wrapped himself in the blanket. He looked at the inscriptions in his left hand.

	''~~For~~ lighting up, this thing helped me defeat Guiche, got Kirche head over heels for me, and got Louise to buy a sword for me. What else is this thing going to bring me?'' As he thought, drowsiness attacked him. ''What a long day...'' as he thought it, Saito fell fast asleep.		''By lighting up, this thing helped me defeat Guiche, got Kirche head over heels for me, and got Louise to buy a sword for me. What else is this thing going to bring me?'' As he thought, drowsiness attacked him. ''What a long day...'' as he thought it, Saito fell fast asleep.
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Veritatis cupitor at 08:05, 4 October 2015

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	“But... I’m sure you’ll forgive me.”		“But... I’m sure you’ll forgive me.”

	Kirche looked at Saito with moist, watery eyes. Any man would show his most primitive instincts after looking at ~~these~~ eyes.		Kirche looked at Saito with moist, watery eyes. Any man would show his most primitive instincts after looking at those eyes.

	“For-forgive what?”		“For-forgive what?”
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	“Yeah, that’s sudden all right!” Saito’s mind was a mess. ''She must be joking.'' Despite that thought, Kirche’s face looked serious.		“Yeah, that’s sudden all right!” Saito’s mind was a mess. ''She must be joking.'' Despite that thought, Kirche’s face looked serious.

	“Your grandeur in defeating Guiche is... just... so cool... like a hero of the legends. Me... when I saw you right that moment I was in love. Can you believe it? I was attracted to you just like that! Passion! Oh, this is a passionate love!”		“Your grandeur in defeating Guiche was... just... so cool... like a hero of the legends. Me... when I saw you right that moment I was in love. Can you believe it? I was attracted to you just like that! Passion! Oh, this is a passionate love!”

	“Pa-passion, huh? Uh...”		“Pa-passion, huh? Uh...”

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	“......ahhh....ohhh.......” Saito went on his knees, his body covered in cold sweat. ''Oh...that hurt. I think I’m going to die. That REALLY hurt.''		“......ahhh....ohhh.......” Saito went on his knees, his body covered in cold sweat. ''Oh...that hurt. I think I’m going to die. That REALLY hurt.''

	“Like? I...~~do what~~...to you?” Louise angrily stepped on his head.		“Like? Why...would I...like you?” Louise angrily stepped on his head.

	“Did...did I get that wrong?”		“Did...did I get that wrong?”

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	Back in her room, she closed the door with a deadly silence, and faced Saito. Forcefully biting her lip, she sent him a murderous glare.		Back in her room, she closed the door with a deadly silence, and faced Saito. Forcefully biting her lip, she sent him a murderous glare.

	“Like some stray dog in heat...” her voice was quivering. Louise’s hands ~~move~~ faster than her mouth, and her feet ~~move~~ faster than her hands. ~~It looked like her~~ voice ~~would get shakier soon. Anger~~ filled her face.		“Like some stray dog in heat...” her voice was quivering. Louise’s hands moved faster than her mouth, and her feet moved faster than her hands. Her voice was getting shaky, and anger filled her face.

	“W-what now?”		“W-what now?”

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	However, Saito pushed Kirche’s shoulders away. ~~Because he~~ felt like something bad ~~will~~ happen otherwise.		However, Saito pushed Kirche’s shoulders away. He felt like something bad would happen otherwise.
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	Kirche mildly eyed Louise, and kept her lips locked with Saito’s.		Kirche mildly eyed Louise, and kept her lips locked with Saito’s.

	Louise murderously moved towards Saito and Kirche, knocking down a few lamps in the process. Louise’s hands moved faster than her mouth. More impressively ~~is that~~ her legs moved faster than her hands.		Louise murderously moved towards Saito and Kirche, knocking down a few lamps in the process. Louise’s hands moved faster than her mouth. More impressively, her legs moved faster than her hands.

	“KIRCHE!” Louise howled towards Kirche’s general direction. Kirche acted like she just noticed her presence, and slowly removed herself from Saito, while waving her hand indignantly.		“KIRCHE!” Louise howled towards Kirche’s general direction. Kirche acted like she just noticed her presence, and slowly removed herself from Saito, while waving her hand indignantly.

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	“Okay, whatever...so basically, this is all because your family lost a lover to Kirche’s family?”		“Okay, whatever...so basically, this is all because your family lost a lover to Kirche’s family?”

	“Not just that. We've lost count on how many family members we've lost from the wars.”		“Not just that. We've lost count of how many family members we've lost from the wars.”

	“I’m just a lowly little familiar...it’s not like I’m worth being stolen.”		“I’m just a lowly little familiar...it’s not like I’m worth being stolen.”

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	“Are you...” Saito bore into Louise. Brown eyes stared back. Up close, one can see an irresistible face.		“Are you...” Saito bore into Louise. Brown eyes stared back. Up close, one can see an irresistible face.

	''Cute. Kirche is a beauty, quite sexy. But Louise is like an empty canvas. Not a single speck of dirt...a clean canvas. It’s just that her character is a bit...'' No matter how Saito said it, he liked Louise better. His heart started beating in sixteenth notes. ''Is she jealous? Does she have a crush on me?'' In Saito’s eyes, thinking like this ~~makes~~ Louise look even cuter. All things considered, Saito is as weak as Kirche in romance.		''Cute. Kirche is a beauty, quite sexy. But Louise is like an empty canvas. Not a single speck of dirt...a clean canvas. It’s just that her character is a bit...'' No matter how Saito said it, he liked Louise better. His heart started beating in sixteenth notes. ''Is she jealous? Does she have a crush on me?'' In Saito’s eyes, thinking like this made Louise look even cuter. All things considered, Saito was as weak as Kirche in romance.

	“Are you jealous? Do you like me?” said Saito. “Were you angry because I didn’t sleep with you and went off with Kirche doing all that? Oh, I didn’t notice. I am sorry.” He lowered his head, and raised Louise’s chin.		“Are you jealous? Do you like me?” said Saito. “Were you angry because I didn’t sleep with you and went off with Kirche doing all that? Oh, I didn’t notice. I am sorry.” He lowered his head, and raised Louise’s chin.

Vaelis at 12:08, 21 April 2012

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	=== Chapter ~~Five~~: Kirche the Ardent ===		=== Chapter Two: Kirche the Ardent ===

	The night after Saito thoroughly shamed Louise in class with his sleep-talking, Louise unceremoniously threw his pile of hay into the hallway.		The night after Saito thoroughly shamed Louise in class with his sleep-talking, Louise unceremoniously threw his pile of hay into the hallway.