Zero no Tsukaima:Volume2 Chapter5 - Revision history

Veritatis cupitor at 17:45, 6 October 2015

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	“WOAH!” Saito shouted. Louise turned her head around, and to her surprise, something appeared that swallowed the moon, and it was nowhere to be seen.		“WOAH!” Saito shouted. Louise turned her head around, and to her surprise, something appeared that swallowed the moon, and it was nowhere to be seen.

	Beneath the moon’s shadow, there appeared to be a giant. ~~If we~~ looked at it closely, the huge shadow turned out to be a golem made of stone. The person controlling the golem turned out to be…		Beneath the moon’s shadow, there appeared to be a giant. When they looked at it closely, the huge shadow turned out to be a golem made of stone. The person controlling the golem turned out to be…

	“Fouquet!” Saito and Louise shouted in unison. The figure above them sat on the golem’s shoulder, cheerfully answered, “Oh, it is such an honor to be remembered!”		“Fouquet!” Saito and Louise shouted in unison. The figure above them sat on the golem’s shoulder, cheerfully answered, “Oh, it is such an honor to be remembered!”

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	Kirche replied triumphantly.		Kirche replied triumphantly.

	In an instant Louise’s foot flew in their direction, Kirche ducked then climbed on to the wall, so the shorter girl’s foot connected straight with Saito’s face, sending him flying.		In an instant Louise’s foot flew in their direction. Kirche ducked then climbed on to the wall, so the shorter girl’s foot instead connected straight with Saito’s face, sending him flying.

	Luckily Saito had the sword in his hand, and thrust it into the wall to stop his falling. Then he howled in rage:		Luckily Saito had the sword in his hand, and thrust it into the wall to stop his falling. Then he howled in rage:

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	Saito with his sword in one hand, another clutching the window frames. At the same time Kirche, with her legs around his shoulders, clung closely to him as if getting some weird piggyback ride.		Saito with his sword in one hand, another clutching the window frames. At the same time Kirche, with her legs around his shoulders, clung closely to him as if getting some weird piggyback ride.

	Without a question - this looked suspicious, but pretty amazing too.		Without question - this looked suspicious, but pretty amazing too.

	“Can’t understand it even after you see it? This is a date.”		“Can’t understand it even after you see it? This is a date.”

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	The two tried to wriggle their ways out when suddenly the window slammed open. Saito remained frozen in place and hugging the wall like a cockroach.		The two tried to wriggle their ways out when suddenly the window slammed open. Saito remained frozen in place and hugging the wall like a cockroach.

	One look and we can see Louise with her hands placed on her hips. But, her lovely face twisted into a demonic mask, staring at Kirche and Saito.		One look and we can see Louise with her hands placed on her hips. But, her lovely face had twisted into a demonic mask, staring at Kirche and Saito.

	“WHAT ARE YOU DOING NEXT TO MY WINDOW????”		“WHAT ARE YOU DOING NEXT TO MY WINDOW????”

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	“We will carry it out right now.”		“We will carry it out right now.”

	“Just ~~liked~~ we planned a while ago, go from the backdoor.”		“Just like we planned a while ago, go from the backdoor.”

	“Ah? AH!” Saito and Louise shouted out in surprise.		“Ah? AH!” Saito and Louise shouted out in surprise.

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	Yet, even if this was true, Saito said nothing. <!--Previous translation said Saito could not say anything, however, the actual text indicates Saito kept silence not because he was not able to say any words but because he chose so himself, making it all more dramatic and painful.Darknemo2000-->		Yet, even if this was true, Saito said nothing. <!--Previous translation said Saito could not say anything, however, the actual text indicates Saito kept silence not because he was not able to say any words but because he chose so himself, making it all more dramatic and painful.Darknemo2000-->

	“Losing in front the girl you have a crush on is truly a despicable event. But don’t look so down, or I will cry as well... Hey, I remember something, what was it? It happened a long time ago… Oh that! Wait!”		“Losing in front of the girl you have a crush on is truly a despicable event. But don’t look so down, or I will cry as well... Hey, I remember something, what was it? It happened a long time ago… Oh that! Wait!”

	Saito put Derflinger back to his sheath, silencing it in the process. Dusting off his pants, the boy took a heavy step forward.		Saito put Derflinger back to his sheath, silencing it in the process. Dusting off his pants, the boy took a heavy step forward.

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	“You are really fast; no one can mistake you for a commoner, truly the familiar of the legends.” Blocking Saito’s blow, Wardes used his wand and swung at the back of Saito’s head. With his brain and nose on fire, the Japanese boy collapsed on the ground with a thud.		“You are really fast; no one can mistake you for a commoner, truly the familiar of the legends.” Blocking Saito’s blow, Wardes used his wand and swung at the back of Saito’s head. With his brain and nose on fire, the Japanese boy collapsed on the ground with a thud.

	“But this is it, you are fast, but your ~~the~~ movements are those of an amateur, you cannot beat a real mage with this.”		“But this is it, you are fast, but your movements are those of an amateur, you cannot beat a real mage with this.”

	Saito leapt forward like a bullet and released a brand new assault.		Saito leapt forward like a bullet and released a brand new assault.

205.208.7.103 at 00:14, 3 December 2012

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	"Legendary?"		"Legendary?"

	"Yes, those runes belong to the legendary familiar ~~Gandalfr~~. The familiar that once belonged to Founder Brimir." Wardes' eyes shone with admiration.		"Yes, those runes belong to the legendary familiar Gandálfr. The familiar that once belonged to Founder Brimir." Wardes' eyes shone with admiration.

	Louise asked, "~~Gandalfr~~?"		Louise asked, "Gandálfr?"

	"Not just anyone can control ~~Gandalfr~~. You have the magic to control him."		"Not just anyone can control Gandálfr. You have the magic to control him."

	"That's hard to believe." Louise tilted her head and thought that Wardes was joking around.<!--This is where original translation ends-->		"That's hard to believe." Louise tilted her head and thought that Wardes was joking around.<!--This is where original translation ends-->
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	Wardes only smiled faintly.		Wardes only smiled faintly.

	“Are you the ~~Gandalfr~~ of the legend?”		“Are you the Gandálfr of the legend?”

	“AH.”		“AH.”
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	Saito stared at Wardes in a stunned expression.		Saito stared at Wardes in a stunned expression.

	Wardes was trying to clear something<!--(This is a really garbled sentence)-->, and bent his head and said, “That case with Fouquet, I hold a great interest in you. I asked Louise earlier, I heard you are from another world and I also heard you are the legendary ~~Gandalfr~~.”		Wardes was trying to clear something<!--(This is a really garbled sentence)-->, and bent his head and said, “That case with Fouquet, I hold a great interest in you. I asked Louise earlier, I heard you are from another world and I also heard you are the legendary Gandálfr.”

	“Ha.” <!--(Some kind of expression)-->		“Ha.” <!--(Some kind of expression)-->

	Who talked about ~~Gandalfr~~ anyway? Old Osman shouldn’t have talked about this.		Who talked about Gandálfr anyway? Old Osman shouldn’t have talked about this.

	“I find history and warfare extremely interesting. When Fouquet was captured, I became very interested in you. Then I did some research in the Imperial Library. The result of that research is my discovery that you are the legendary familiar ~~Gandalfr~~.”		“I find history and warfare extremely interesting. When Fouquet was captured, I became very interested in you. Then I did some research in the Imperial Library. The result of that research is my discovery that you are the legendary familiar Gandálfr.”

	"Oh, is that so. You are really a scholar."		"Oh, is that so. You are really a scholar."
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	Wardes and Saito smiled together. Taking one look at the still sleeping Guiche, the Japanese boy thought ''I am not sure just how strong Wardes is anyway, but I have beaten Guiche already and captured Fouquet. He is the Captain of the Magic Knights, and looks like he has some abilities too. But I shouldn’t be so far behind.''		Wardes and Saito smiled together. Taking one look at the still sleeping Guiche, the Japanese boy thought ''I am not sure just how strong Wardes is anyway, but I have beaten Guiche already and captured Fouquet. He is the Captain of the Magic Knights, and looks like he has some abilities too. But I shouldn’t be so far behind.''

	''Let's show Louise’s fiancé what ~~Gandalfr~~ is capable of'' Saito thought.		''Let's show Louise’s fiancé what Gandálfr is capable of'' Saito thought.

	“Where do you want to duel?”		“Where do you want to duel?”
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	Derflinger mumbled in response, “You can’t make it, he is looking down on you.”		Derflinger mumbled in response, “You can’t make it, he is looking down on you.”

	Saito’s heart burst in fury. ''Wardes that bastard, he can have the same speed as me with the ~~Gandalfr~~ runes glowing''. With only one exchange, Saito could tell the difference between Guiche and Wardes.		Saito’s heart burst in fury. ''Wardes that bastard, he can have the same speed as me with the Gandálfr runes glowing''. With only one exchange, Saito could tell the difference between Guiche and Wardes.

	“A Magic Knight isn’t someone who only chants magic.” Wardes answered with a tip of his hat.		“A Magic Knight isn’t someone who only chants magic.” Wardes answered with a tip of his hat.

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	''I don’t understand why, but I constantly feel this is wrong. If it was a crow or owl type of familiar it wouldn’t be so troublesome. If no one takes care of this idiot from another world, what will happen to him?''		''I don’t understand why, but I constantly feel this is wrong. If it was a crow or owl type of familiar it wouldn’t be so troublesome. If no one takes care of this idiot from another world, what will happen to him?''

	Kirche or… Saito ~~doesn’t~~ know Louise ~~knows,~~ the maid from the kitchen who often fed him… They will take care of him right?		Kirche or… Saito didn’t know that Louise knew the maid from the kitchen who often fed him… They will take care of him right?

	''I don’t understand why but this is extremely annoying''. Louise thought, just a ~~like~~ small girl she wanted to have Saito all to herself. ''Although Saito is an idiot, and often makes me mad, ~~but~~ I don’t want him to become someone else’s property. He is mine.''		''I don’t understand why but this is extremely annoying''. Louise thought, just like a small girl she wanted to have Saito all to herself. ''Although Saito is an idiot and often makes me mad, I don’t want him to become someone else’s property. He is mine.''

	Louise raised her head.		Louise raised her head.
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	''Why, even though Wardes is so gentle, handsome and strong, even though I longed for him for such a long time.... Yet, I am not even happy when I am being proposed to.''		''Why, even though Wardes is so gentle, handsome and strong, even though I longed for him for such a long time.... Yet, I am not even happy when I am being proposed to.''

	Someone else already caught her heart. But Louise's mind refused to think about the one that caught it.		Someone else had already caught her heart. But Louise's mind refused to think about the one that caught it.


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	“Can’t understand it even after you see it? This is a date.”		“Can’t understand it even after you see it? This is a date.”

	Saito tried to say something, but his lips were covered by Kirche’s hands, making him look puzzled. Louise’s shoulders ~~start~~ to quake in fury.		Saito tried to say something, but his lips were covered by Kirche’s hands, making him look puzzled. Louise’s shoulders started to quake in fury.

	“Go, go, go, go have romance somewhere else. You, you, you two stray dogs!”		“Go, go, go, go have romance somewhere else. You, you, you two stray dogs!”
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	“Good morning, familiar.”		“Good morning, familiar.”

	~~With~~ Louise’s fiancé calling him like this made Saito angry		Louise’s fiancé calling him like this made Saito angry

	Saito replied, “Morning, but the departure date is tomorrow right? Do you have anything important to say this morning? I've been riding a horse all day yesterday, I still want to sleep.”		Saito replied, “Morning, but the departure date is tomorrow right? Do you have anything important to say this morning? I've been riding a horse all day yesterday, I still want to sleep.”
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	“Exactly.”		“Exactly.”

	Wardes and Saito smiled together. Taking one look at the still sleeping Guiche, the Japanese boy thought ''I am not sure just how strong Wardes is anyway, but I have beaten Guiche already and captured Fouquet. ~~Although he~~ is the Captain of the Magic Knights, and looks like he has some abilities too. But I shouldn’t be so far behind.''		Wardes and Saito smiled together. Taking one look at the still sleeping Guiche, the Japanese boy thought ''I am not sure just how strong Wardes is anyway, but I have beaten Guiche already and captured Fouquet. He is the Captain of the Magic Knights, and looks like he has some abilities too. But I shouldn’t be so far behind.''

	''Let's show Louise’s fiancé what Gandalfr is capable of'' Saito thought.		''Let's show Louise’s fiancé what Gandalfr is capable of'' Saito thought.
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	Saito did not reply, only stared at Wardes.		Saito did not reply, only stared at Wardes.

	“What? Really?” <!--(an exact Chinese translation don’t fit here, since this ~~phase~~ is often used as sort of a whine when someone is denied of something, especially by children --- Perhaps something like "Hey...listen to me.." might be better? ~Dan)-->		“What? Really?” <!--(an exact Chinese translation don’t fit here, since this phrase is often used as sort of a whine when someone is denied of something, especially by children --- Perhaps something like "Hey...listen to me.." might be better? ~Dan)-->

	“Since the witness is here, let us begin."		“Since the witness is here, let us begin."
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	“…Just because you lost does not mean you should cry, that is unbecoming.”		“…Just because you lost does not mean you should cry, that is unbecoming.”

	The boy in response wiped his face, no wanting Louise to see his tears.		The boy in response wiped his face, not wanting Louise to see his tears.

	“That's not right.”		“That's not right.”
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	Saito thought really deeply, “Then why is it really this way?”		Saito thought really deeply, “Then why is it really this way?”

	He finally understood, why he had been staring at the moon every night until tonight, yet never thinking about going home.		He finally understood why he had been staring at the moon every night until tonight, yet never thinking about going home.

	But, he really hated wanting to admit this reason.		But, he really hated wanting to admit this reason.

209.193.56.72: It said "dong" seriously.

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It said "dong" seriously.

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	Saito lowered his body, charged to Kirche’s shield-table wall, letting her know Fouquet was above them and attacking, but the giant’s huge feet were already visible, so there was no need to tell them.		Saito lowered his body, charged to Kirche’s shield-table wall, letting her know Fouquet was above them and attacking, but the giant’s huge feet were already visible, so there was no need to tell them.

	The other nobles and guests were hiding under the counter and shaking in fear. The fat innkeeper called out to the soldiers, “What are you ~~dong~~ to my establishment??” But one arrow slammed into his shoulder, leaving him slumped on the ground.		The other nobles and guests were hiding under the counter and shaking in fear. The fat innkeeper called out to the soldiers, “What are you doing to my establishment??” But one arrow slammed into his shoulder, leaving him slumped on the ground.

	“This is really troublesome.” Listening to Wardes’ words, Kirche nodded.		“This is really troublesome.” Listening to Wardes’ words, Kirche nodded.