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	"Then, what is the tear of the Water Spirit?" Guiche asked.		"Then, what is the tear of the Water Spirit?" Guiche asked.

	“The Water Spirit... compared to ~~human lifespans~~, it can live a long, long, long time. It is said to have existed 6,000 years ago, when the Founder Brimir established Halkeginia. Its body, like water, can freely change its shape... and in a sunshine it glistens with seven colors…”		“The Water Spirit... compared to humans, can live a long, long, long time. It is said to have existed 6,000 years ago, when the Founder Brimir established Halkeginia. Its body, like water, can freely change its shape... and in a sunshine it glistens with seven colors…”

	The moment Montmorency said this, the surface of the water began to shine.		The moment Montmorency said this, the surface of the water began to shine.
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	"Oh, it smiled! It must mean it's ok!"		"Oh, it smiled! It must mean it's ok!"

	But, the words that came out its mouth... maybe because it still didn‘t understand how to to speak properly, were completely opposite its expression.		But, the words that came out of its mouth... maybe because it still didn‘t understand how to to speak properly, were completely opposite of its expression.

	"I refuse, human."		"I refuse, human."

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	One hour passed after that then suddenly shadows appeared on the shore. It was from two people. With their hooded robes it was hard to tell if they were men or women.		One hour passed after that, and then suddenly shadows appeared on the shore. It was from two people. With their hooded robes it was hard to tell if they were men or women.

	Saito gripped Derflinger's handle. The rune on his left hand began to shine. However, he hadn’t left the hiding spot. He still could not decide whether it was these people that attacked Water Spirit or not.		Saito gripped Derflinger's handle. The rune on his left hand began to shine. However, he hadn’t left the hiding spot. He still could not decide whether it was these people that attacked Water Spirit or not.
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	Though he frantically tried to rub the pain away, his eyes still hurt since sparks had entered his eyes. Saito became more panicked<!--This sentence doesn't make sense, it "Saito's" is possessive but doesn't have an object in the sentence for what it is he possesses, although from the surrounding text what I'd expect the sentence to be is "Saito became more panicked" ~Lys, changed it'hasty' to panicked-->. ''Crap! Their wands.''		Though he frantically tried to rub the pain away, his eyes still hurt since sparks had entered his eyes. Saito became more panicked<!--This sentence doesn't make sense, it "Saito's" is possessive but doesn't have an object in the sentence for what it is he possesses, although from the surrounding text what I'd expect the sentence to be is "Saito became more panicked" ~Lys, changed it'hasty' to panicked-->. ''Crap! Their wands.''

	He lowered his guard thinking that the enemy would concentrate on Guiche.		He lowered his guard, thinking that the enemy would concentrate on Guiche.

	The enemy was experienced in combat and anticipated an attack from a different direction, not being surprised in the slightest by the ambush. <!-- seperated the sentence since the causation was seemingly different~Evil-->		The enemy was experienced in combat and anticipated an attack from a different direction, not being surprised in the slightest by the ambush. <!-- seperated the sentence since the causation was seemingly different~Evil-->

	Moreover, they worked together skillfully. While one was preparing the spell, the other was releasing it. Though this was a simple tactic ~~but~~ the results were very effective. Anyhow, there was no opening.		Moreover, they worked together skillfully. While one was preparing the spell, the other was releasing it. Though this was a simple tactic, the results were very effective. Anyhow, there was no opening.

	Raging winds snatched the sword out of the hands of the petrified Saito.		Raging winds snatched the sword out of the hands of the petrified Saito.
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	Louise’s scream echoed through the night. It almost made Saito cry. ''Louise helped me. Though she was asleep… but she was probably woken up by all this noise.''		Louise’s scream echoed through the night. It almost made Saito cry. ''Louise helped me. Though she was asleep… but she was probably woken up by all this noise.''

	Louise waited for an attack, but their guard was off now. Thus now ~~he could~~ recover ~~himself~~. Somehow, ~~Saito~~ wrenched his right eye open and picked up Derflinger.		Louise waited for an attack, but their guard was off now. Thus, Saito was now able to recover. Somehow, he wrenched his right eye open and picked up Derflinger.

	He was about to burst into another attack…		He was about to burst into another attack…

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	30 meters away from the shore where Saito and others were standing the water was shining.		30 meters away from the shore where Saito and others were standing, the water was shining.

	The surface of the water was churning non-stop. Then the water swelled up like a rising cake. Saito watched it with an expression of surprise. The water was constantly changing shape so one could not even see hands. It looked like a huge amoeba. Though its flashing lights were beautiful... it made them uncomfortable.		The surface of the water was churning non-stop. Then the water swelled up like a rising cake. Saito watched it with an expression of surprise. The water was constantly changing shape so one could not even see hands. It looked like a huge amoeba. Though its flashing lights were beautiful... it made them uncomfortable.

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	“Sad story? What are you talking about?”		“Sad story? What are you talking about?”

	“Because we need tears of the Water Spirit. How else would we get it if ~~not making~~ it cry?”		“Because we need tears of the Water Spirit. How else would we get them if we don't make it cry?”

	“You really are ignorant. Well, I guess since even non-water element mages don't know it either so it is unreasonable to expect a commoner like you to know. The Tear of the Water Spirit is only a name. It doesn't really shed tears.“		“You really are ignorant. Well, I guess since even non-water element mages don't know it either so it is unreasonable to expect a commoner like you to know. The Tear of the Water Spirit is only a name. It doesn't really shed tears.“

	Saito and Guiche looked at each other. Louise, lonely without Saito’s attention, rubbed her cheek against his back. It was really weird! Though one could die from such a cute Louise, all that mattered now was Montmorency’s story.		Saito and Guiche looked at each other. Louise, lonely without Saito’s attention, rubbed her cheek against his back. It was really weird! Though one could die from such a cute Louise, all that mattered now was Montmorency’s story.

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	“It is not poisonous, I tell you! It is my dear familiar!”		“It is not poisonous, I tell you! It is my dear familiar!”

	Apparently this tiny frog was Montmorency's familiar. Montmorency raised her finger, and ~~ordered~~ her familiar.		Apparently this tiny frog was Montmorency's familiar. Montmorency raised her finger, and gave an order to her familiar.

	“Listen Robin, I want to contact an old friend of yours.”		“Listen Robin, I want to contact an old friend of yours.”

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	One hour passed after that then suddenly shadows appeared on the shore. It was from two people. With their hooded robes it was hard to tell if they were men or women.		One hour passed after that, then suddenly shadows appeared on the shore. It was from two people. With their hooded robes it was hard to tell if they were men or women.

	Saito gripped Derflinger's handle. The rune on his left hand began to shine. However, he hadn’t left the hiding spot. He still could not decide whether it was these people that attacked Water Spirit or not.		Saito gripped Derflinger's handle. The rune on his left hand began to shine. However, he hadn’t left the hiding spot. He still could not decide whether it was these people that attacked the Water Spirit or not.

	Then the pair pulled out their wands while standing at the waterside.		Then the pair pulled out their wands while standing at the waterside.
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	However, the enemy’s reaction was quick. The assailants started muttering spells the same time when the ground was raised. The flame flew out of the end of the wand, burning down the soil that was gripping the pair’s feet. The smaller shadow acted in a surprising manner. Instead of releasing their spell towards Guiche, the person aimed it towards Saito, who wasn't prepared for this.		However, the enemy’s reaction was quick. The assailants started muttering spells the same time when the ground was raised. The flame flew out of the end of the wand, burning down the soil that was gripping the pair’s feet. The smaller shadow acted in a surprising manner. Instead of releasing their spell towards Guiche, the person aimed it towards Saito, who wasn't prepared for this.

	The shadow turned around quickly and then swung the wand. Just like in the fight with Wardes before, an air hammer hit Saito’s body. Saito, who ~~did~~ not ~~expect~~ such attack, took a direct hit and was easily blown away.		The shadow turned around quickly and then swung the wand. Just like in the fight with Wardes before, an air hammer hit Saito’s body. Saito, who had not expected such an attack, took a direct hit and was easily blown away.

	In no time, an ice arrow followed. Saito turned his body and jumped up, dodging it, but the taller mage shot a big fire ball at him. Though Saito tried to dodge that too, the aiming was too accurate since Saito’s movements were anticipated beforehand.		In no time, an ice arrow followed. Saito turned his body and jumped up, dodging it, but the taller mage shot a big fire ball at him. Though Saito tried to dodge that too, the aiming was too accurate since Saito’s movements were anticipated beforehand.
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	“Partner! Raise me!” Derflinger shouted.		“Partner! Raise me!” Derflinger shouted.

	Saito boldly blocked the flame ball with his sword, and yet even though it was absorbed into the sword, it still exploded, scattering around ~~the~~ fragments of fire.		Saito boldly blocked the flame ball with his sword, and yet even though it was absorbed into the sword, it still exploded, scattering around fragments of fire.

	Saito looked confused and was petrified. <!--I'm assuming the sentence describe how saito look and then his status ~Evil-->		Saito looked confused and was petrified. <!--I'm assuming the sentence describe how saito look and then his status ~Evil-->
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	The enemy was experienced in combat and anticipated an attack from a different direction, not being surprised in the slightest by the ambush. <!-- seperated the sentence since the causation was seemingly different~Evil-->		The enemy was experienced in combat and anticipated an attack from a different direction, not being surprised in the slightest by the ambush. <!-- seperated the sentence since the causation was seemingly different~Evil-->

	Moreover, they worked together skillfully. While one was preparing the spell, the other was releasing it. Though this was a simple tactic ~~but~~ the results were very effective. Anyhow, there was no opening.		Moreover, they worked together skillfully. While one was preparing the spell, the other was releasing it. Though this was a simple tactic, the results were very effective. Anyhow, there was no opening.

	Raging winds snatched the sword out of the hands of the petrified Saito.		Raging winds snatched the sword out of the hands of the petrified Saito.
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	Louise’s scream echoed through the night. It almost made Saito cry. ''Louise helped me. Though she was asleep… but she was probably woken up by all this noise.''		Louise’s scream echoed through the night. It almost made Saito cry. ''Louise helped me. Though she was asleep… but she was probably woken up by all this noise.''

	Louise waited for an attack, but their guard was off now. Thus now ~~he could~~ recover ~~himself~~. Somehow, ~~Saito~~ wrenched his right eye open and picked up Derflinger.		Louise waited for an attack, but their guard was off now. Thus, Saito could now recover. Somehow, he wrenched his right eye open and picked up Derflinger.

	He was about to burst into another attack…		He was about to burst into another attack…

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	One hour passed after that~~, and~~ then suddenly shadows appeared on the shore. It was from two people. With their hooded robes it was hard to tell if they were men or women.		One hour passed after that then suddenly shadows appeared on the shore. It was from two people. With their hooded robes it was hard to tell if they were men or women.

	Saito gripped Derflinger's handle. The rune on his left hand began to shine. However, he hadn’t left the hiding spot. He still could not decide whether it was these people that attacked Water Spirit or not.		Saito gripped Derflinger's handle. The rune on his left hand began to shine. However, he hadn’t left the hiding spot. He still could not decide whether it was these people that attacked Water Spirit or not.
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	Though he frantically tried to rub the pain away, his eyes still hurt since sparks had entered his eyes. Saito became more panicked<!--This sentence doesn't make sense, it "Saito's" is possessive but doesn't have an object in the sentence for what it is he possesses, although from the surrounding text what I'd expect the sentence to be is "Saito became more panicked" ~Lys, changed it'hasty' to panicked-->. ''Crap! Their wands.''		Though he frantically tried to rub the pain away, his eyes still hurt since sparks had entered his eyes. Saito became more panicked<!--This sentence doesn't make sense, it "Saito's" is possessive but doesn't have an object in the sentence for what it is he possesses, although from the surrounding text what I'd expect the sentence to be is "Saito became more panicked" ~Lys, changed it'hasty' to panicked-->. ''Crap! Their wands.''

	He lowered his guard, thinking that the enemy would concentrate on Guiche.		He lowered his guard thinking that the enemy would concentrate on Guiche.

	The enemy was experienced in combat and anticipated an attack from a different direction, not being surprised in the slightest by the ambush. <!-- seperated the sentence since the causation was seemingly different~Evil-->		The enemy was experienced in combat and anticipated an attack from a different direction, not being surprised in the slightest by the ambush. <!-- seperated the sentence since the causation was seemingly different~Evil-->

	Moreover, they worked together skillfully. While one was preparing the spell, the other was releasing it. Though this was a simple tactic, the results were very effective. Anyhow, there was no opening.		Moreover, they worked together skillfully. While one was preparing the spell, the other was releasing it. Though this was a simple tactic but the results were very effective. Anyhow, there was no opening.

	Raging winds snatched the sword out of the hands of the petrified Saito.		Raging winds snatched the sword out of the hands of the petrified Saito.
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	Louise’s scream echoed through the night. It almost made Saito cry. ''Louise helped me. Though she was asleep… but she was probably woken up by all this noise.''		Louise’s scream echoed through the night. It almost made Saito cry. ''Louise helped me. Though she was asleep… but she was probably woken up by all this noise.''

	Louise waited for an attack, but their guard was off now. Thus~~, Saito was~~ now ~~able to~~ recover. Somehow, he wrenched his right eye open and picked up Derflinger.		Louise waited for an attack, but their guard was off now. Thus now he could recover himself. Somehow, Saito wrenched his right eye open and picked up Derflinger.

	He was about to burst into another attack…		He was about to burst into another attack…
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	“What?! It was you?!”		“What?! It was you?!”

	Feeling relieved, Saito collapsed on to the ground, ~~exausted~~.		Feeling relieved, Saito collapsed on to the ground, exhausted.

	Surprised, Kirche shouted as well.“You? Why, darling?!”		Surprised, Kirche shouted as well.“You? Why, darling?!”

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	The place where the Water Spirit ~~lives~~ was the very bottom of the lake. Someone, using magic, attacked her there in the middle of the night.		The place where the Water Spirit lived was at the very bottom of the lake. Someone, using magic, had attacked her there in the middle of the night.

	Saito and the others hid themselves in the shade of the tree on the shore at Gallia’s side~~. A~~ place that the Water Spirit ~~showed~~ them and waited quietly for the assailants to come.		Saito and the others hid themselves in the shade of the tree on the shore at Gallia’s side, a place that the Water Spirit had shown them, and then waited quietly for the assailants to come.

	Guiche, to cheer himself up before the battle, took a sip of wine that Saito brought. When all of his anxiety was gone he started to sing. Saito pushed his head aside.		Guiche, to cheer himself up before the battle, took a sip from the wine that Saito had brought. When all of his anxiety was gone he started to sing. Saito pushed his head aside.

	Louise was in an extremely bad mood because Saito was only ~~talking~~ to Montmorency.		Louise was in an extremely bad mood because Saito was talking only to Montmorency.

	''"Why is he nicer with Montmorency than with me? Does he love her? Or maybe he just hates me? waah waah"'' This thought came with an angry cry from Louise.		''"Why is he nicer with Montmorency than with me? Does he love her? Or maybe he just hates me? waah waah"'' This thought came with an angry cry from Louise.
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	“Really… You do not know how scary the Water Spirit can be… Even if for a single moment one lost concentration and the air ball disappeared allowing the water to connect – then it would be dreadful. Water controls the lives of all creatures<!--This may be more appropriate as "Water controls a creature's life"~Lys--><!--"all" an extreme word and the opposite of "a" while having more impact IMO~Evil-->, if you lose the protection of an air ball, then you would enter the Water Spirit’s territory where challenging her is something that even the greatest daredevil would not do.”		“Really… You do not know how scary the Water Spirit can be… Even if for a single moment one lost concentration and the air ball disappeared allowing the water to connect – then it would be dreadful. Water controls the lives of all creatures<!--This may be more appropriate as "Water controls a creature's life"~Lys--><!--"all" an extreme word and the opposite of "a" while having more impact IMO~Evil-->, if you lose the protection of an air ball, then you would enter the Water Spirit’s territory where challenging her is something that even the greatest daredevil would not do.”

	Saito sighed. Really, Halkeginia was filled with creatures that he could not even ~~imagine in the past~~.		Saito sighed. Really, Halkeginia was filled with creatures that in the past he could not have even imagined.

	Two moons were shining high above in the sky. It was midnight.		Two moons were shining high above in the sky. It was midnight.
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	“Guiche, be a decoy.” Guiche nodded red-faced.		“Guiche, be a decoy.” Guiche nodded red-faced.

	Saito took a deep breath. The fighter’s intuition that he gained from experiencing many fights was now telling him that someone was near. His mouth was filled with saliva. ''~~Guess~~ that someone is an enemy? But, will it be all right. I'm the legendary Gandálfr. I should be able to beat mages up. ~~It mattered~~ a lot against the dragon knights that attacked me before?'' <!-- modified the last sentence to show the conceitedness~Evil-->		Saito took a deep breath. The fighter’s intuition that he gained from experiencing many fights was now telling him that someone was near. His mouth was filled with saliva. ''I'm guessing that that someone is an enemy? But, will it be all right? I'm the legendary Gandálfr. I should be able to beat mages up. Did it matter a lot against the dragon knights that attacked me before?'' <!-- modified the last sentence to show the conceitedness~Evil-->

	Unnoticed to himself, Saito ~~became~~ very self-conceited.		Unnoticed to himself, Saito had become very self-conceited.

	He gazed at Louise’s sleeping face and muttered silently ''Wait for me, I will definitely bring you back,''		He gazed at Louise’s sleeping face and muttered silently ''Wait for me, I will definitely bring you back,''