Zero no Tsukaima:Volume5 Story3 - MTL - Revision history

Veritatis cupitor at 18:58, 14 October 2015

2015-10-14T18:58:18Z

← Older revision		Revision as of 18:58, 14 October 2015
Line 21:		Line 21:
	“Just ignore him!”		“Just ignore him!”

	“I can‘t, for the time being, he is my employer...“		“I can‘t, for the time being, he is my employer...”

	Nagging, Louise urged Saito. ''Aah, I should have saved my head and not come to the date if she was going to be angry like this.''		Nagging, Louise urged Saito. ''Aah, I should have saved my head and not come to the date if she was going to be angry like this.''
Line 27:		Line 27:
	Louise was dressed for the occasion. She was embarrassed, because even though she looked gorgeous, her clothes were still not suitable for a noble… She was dressed in a recent trend, popular among town girls – black beret and black dress with a plunging neckline. The pendant that Saito gave her was hanging on her neck. In these clothes she really looked like a true town girl. As one would expect from a girl in her pubescence, it was hard for Louise to acquire a suitable dress in town.		Louise was dressed for the occasion. She was embarrassed, because even though she looked gorgeous, her clothes were still not suitable for a noble… She was dressed in a recent trend, popular among town girls – black beret and black dress with a plunging neckline. The pendant that Saito gave her was hanging on her neck. In these clothes she really looked like a true town girl. As one would expect from a girl in her pubescence, it was hard for Louise to acquire a suitable dress in town.

	Aah, when silent, she really ~~looks~~ pretty charming. With her arms folded and tilted chin… the young girl looked across the street intently. Her strawberry-blond hair shined vividly in the rays of the sun. Her big hazel eyes were an obvious sign that she was from another world. Aah, his lovely master looked very cute right now, furiously tapping her feet.		Aah, when silent, she really looked pretty charming. With her arms folded and tilted chin… the young girl looked across the street intently. Her strawberry-blond hair shined vividly in the rays of the sun. Her big hazel eyes were an obvious sign that she was from another world. Aah, his lovely master looked very cute right now, furiously tapping her feet.

	“Hey, lets go! Before the play starts.”		“Hey, lets go! Before the play starts.”
Line 93:		Line 93:
	“Jessica told me that today there is a very popular play on stage.”		“Jessica told me that today there is a very popular play on stage.”

	Louise was a girl, after all and fashionable things ~~attract~~ her just like any other.		Louise was a girl after all and fashionable things attracted her just like any other.

	And…		And…
Line 341:		Line 341:
	Henrietta said with painful look in her eyes.		Henrietta said with painful look in her eyes.

	“Yes. In only five minutes, Your Majesty.”		“Yes. In only five minutes, Your Majesty.

	“Once found out, he insisted that it was a coincidence. However, he could not explain from where he had obtained the money…”		“Once found out, he insisted that it was a coincidence. However, he could not explain from where he had obtained the money…”
Line 987:		Line 987:
	Agnes pulled the horse that she was riding on to a stop in front of a certain large residence. It was the Richmon’s residence… here, during the day, she conferred with Henrietta.		Agnes pulled the horse that she was riding on to a stop in front of a certain large residence. It was the Richmon’s residence… here, during the day, she conferred with Henrietta.

	It was the corner of an upscale residential area where often lords ~~reside~~. Agnes looked at a huge and wide two-storied residence and crooked her lips. She knew painfully well that Richmon lived here for 20 years and used any possible method to build this luxurious mansion.		It was the corner of an upscale residential area where often lords resided. Agnes looked at a huge and wide two-storied residence and crooked her lips. She knew painfully well that Richmon lived here for 20 years and used any possible method to build this luxurious mansion.

	She knocked against the gate, loudly announcing her visit. The gate window opened and a page stuck out his head.		She knocked against the gate, loudly announcing her visit. The gate window opened and a page stuck out his head.
Line 1,233:		Line 1,233:
	Simultaneously with Henrietta pushing Saito down to the bed, the soldier, who was trying to break the door knob, kicked the door open.		Simultaneously with Henrietta pushing Saito down to the bed, the soldier, who was trying to break the door knob, kicked the door open.

	What the pair of ~~solders~~ saw… was a young woman, lying on top of a man, intensely kissing his lips. The woman did not pay any attention to the soldiers and kept on going crazy. Sighs of affection were escaping from the opening of the pair of lips.		What the pair of soldiers saw… was a young woman, lying on top of a man, intensely kissing his lips. The woman did not pay any attention to the soldiers and kept on going crazy. Sighs of affection were escaping from the opening of the pair of lips.

	The soldiers watched the spectacle for a while… then one murmured to the other.		The soldiers watched the spectacle for a while… then one murmured to the other.
Line 1,726:		Line 1,726:
	“In the name of the Queen, you are stripped of the title, Royal Palace Judge. Surrender yourself quietly.”		“In the name of the Queen, you are stripped of the title, Royal Palace Judge. Surrender yourself quietly.”

	Richmon didn't move at all. Moreover, he pointed to the stage and declared in a tone as if Henrietta ~~would be~~ a little idiot.		Richmon didn't move at all. Moreover, he pointed to the stage and declared in a tone as if Henrietta was a little idiot.

	“Do not say such an inelegant thing. Let the play continue. It just started. Leaving before the play is over is an impoliteness towards the actors.”		“Do not say such an inelegant thing. Let the play continue. It just started. Leaving before the play is over is an impoliteness towards the actors.”
Line 2,048:		Line 2,048:
	“The Royal Palace Judge was the traitor…”		“The Royal Palace Judge was the traitor…”

	Though Henrietta tried keep it a secret… such secrets always seemed to leak somewhere. Richmon being an Albion spy was already a popular rumor in town.		Though Henrietta tried to keep it a secret… such secrets always seemed to leak somewhere. Richmon being an Albion spy was already a popular rumor in town.

	Louise reared her head.		Louise reared her head.
Line 2,088:		Line 2,088:
	Agnes laughed happily.		Agnes laughed happily.

	Louise blushed more and more. She expected Saito to start making fun ~~from~~ her that she was kissed by a woman. However, he did not laugh.		Louise blushed more and more. She expected Saito to start making fun of her that she was kissed by a woman. However, he did not laugh.

	Somehow awkwardly, he averted his eyes.		Somehow awkwardly, he averted his eyes.

Cthaeh: Cthaeh moved page Zero no Tsukaima:Volume5 Story3 ~Preview~ to Zero no Tsukaima:Volume5 Story3 - MTL without leaving a redirect: Preview -> MTL renaming

2015-07-23T02:38:17Z

Cthaeh moved page Zero no Tsukaima:Volume5 Story3 ~Preview~ to Zero no Tsukaima:Volume5 Story3 - MTL without leaving a redirect: Preview -> MTL renaming

← Older revision		Revision as of 02:38, 23 July 2015
(No difference)

Cthaeh: Preview -> MTL renaming

2015-07-23T02:38:17Z

Preview -> MTL renaming

← Older revision		Revision as of 02:38, 23 July 2015
Line 1:		Line 1:
	<noinclude>{{~~Template:PREVIEW~~}}</noinclude>		<noinclude>{{MTL-old}}</noinclude>

	===Story 3: Tristania's Holiday===		===Story 3: Tristania's Holiday===

Coffeezombie: add article

2015-07-06T22:33:42Z

add article

← Older revision		Revision as of 22:33, 6 July 2015
Line 1,832:		Line 1,832:
	“Though it started a long time ago, Your Majesty…”		“Though it started a long time ago, Your Majesty…”

	When Richmon stood up in the corner of the stage… and Don hit the floor with his foot. Then, just like pitfall, the floor opened.		When Richmon stood up in the corner of the stage… and Don hit the floor with his foot. Then, just like a pitfall, the floor opened.

	“It ends up short here.”		“It ends up short here.”

Coffeezombie: minor fixes

2015-07-06T22:30:53Z

minor fixes

← Older revision		Revision as of 22:30, 6 July 2015
Line 1,662:		Line 1,662:
	“Spectators should watch the play, Richmon-dono.”		“Spectators should watch the play, Richmon-dono.”

	Richmon’s eyes popped out once he recognized the hooded face. It was a person he was sure ~~to have~~ disappeared… Henrietta.		Richmon’s eyes popped out once he recognized the hooded face. It was a person he was sure had disappeared… Henrietta.

	Henrietta, looking straight at the stage, asked Richmon.		Henrietta, looking straight at the stage, asked Richmon.
Line 1,728:		Line 1,728:
	Richmon didn't move at all. Moreover, he pointed to the stage and declared in a tone as if Henrietta would be a little idiot.		Richmon didn't move at all. Moreover, he pointed to the stage and declared in a tone as if Henrietta would be a little idiot.

	“Do not say such ~~inelegancy~~. Let the play continue. It just started. Leaving before the play is over is an impoliteness towards the actors.”		“Do not say such an inelegant thing. Let the play continue. It just started. Leaving before the play is over is an impoliteness towards the actors.”

	Henrietta shook her head.		Henrietta shook her head.
Line 1,758:		Line 1,758:
	Henrietta… muttered quietly.		Henrietta… muttered quietly.

	~~“Actors…~~ were your partners.”		“The actors… were your partners.”

	“Yes. This is not a bluff. They are first class casters.”		“Yes. This is not a bluff. They are first class casters.”

	“And terrible actors as it seems.”		“And terrible actors, it seems.”

	Richmon clasped Henrietta's hand. Henrietta got goosebumps from his repulsive touch.		Richmon clasped Henrietta's hand. Henrietta got goosebumps from his repulsive touch.

Coffeezombie: add preposition

2015-07-06T22:16:52Z

add preposition

← Older revision		Revision as of 22:16, 6 July 2015
Line 1,367:		Line 1,367:
	Omitting going through Chicton Street, the horse disappeared into a secluded alley.		Omitting going through Chicton Street, the horse disappeared into a secluded alley.

	When he disappeared at the entrance of the alley, Agnes descended the horse and looked into the alley.		When he disappeared at the entrance of the alley, Agnes descended from the horse and looked into the alley.

	Leaving the horse at the stables, Agnes turned to the hotel once she made sure that the page entered there. Jumping off the horse, Louise asked while running after her.		Leaving the horse at the stables, Agnes turned to the hotel once she made sure that the page entered there. Jumping off the horse, Louise asked while running after her.

Coffeezombie: minor fixes

2015-07-06T21:58:28Z

minor fixes

← Older revision		Revision as of 21:58, 6 July 2015
Line 752:		Line 752:
	Because night came slowly, the couple went to a hotel for the time being. It was a plain, cheap lodging house. They were led to a worn-out room on the second floor that made even the attic at “Charming Fairies” inn look heavenly.		Because night came slowly, the couple went to a hotel for the time being. It was a plain, cheap lodging house. They were led to a worn-out room on the second floor that made even the attic at “Charming Fairies” inn look heavenly.

	The futon of the bed was strangely damp, it was unclear for how many days it ~~has~~ been left to dry, and a small mushroom was growing in the corner of the room. The lamp, even after wiping off the soot, was still really black.		The futon of the bed was strangely damp, it was unclear for how many days it had been left to dry, and a small mushroom was growing in the corner of the room. The lamp, even after wiping off the soot, was still really black.

	“Well, for so much money, it's not that great a room.”		“Well, for so much money, it's not that great a room.”

Coffeezombie: minor fixes

2015-07-06T21:52:01Z

minor fixes

← Older revision		Revision as of 21:52, 6 July 2015
Line 556:		Line 556:
	“A-anyway, I’ll call Louise.”		“A-anyway, I’ll call Louise.”

	Louise after noticing that Henrietta disappeared would surely go ballistic, but this might help to ease her up a bit. Louise’s behavior was easy to predict. Like always.		Louise after noticing that Henrietta disappeared would surely go ballistic, but this might help to ease her mind a bit. Louise’s behavior was easy to predict. Like always.

	“Don’t.”		“Don’t.”
Line 596:		Line 596:
	“Yes. I know you are good, and I, myself, am almost lonely in the palace. Many people there do not like me as a young queen…”		“Yes. I know you are good, and I, myself, am almost lonely in the palace. Many people there do not like me as a young queen…”

	And after a moment of ~~hasitation~~ added,		And after a moment of hesitation she added,

	“…and as a traitor.”		“…and as a traitor.”

Coffeezombie: grammar fixes

2015-07-06T21:43:44Z

grammar fixes

← Older revision		Revision as of 21:43, 6 July 2015
Line 478:		Line 478:
	“Hey, I wasn’t looking!”		“Hey, I wasn’t looking!”

	''Pardon me. I’m seeing Louise every day. Her sleeping face too. It is love. Aah, master is cute. However, I want you to permit ~~looking~~ at other girls. It is man's nature. You cannot fight it even if looking away. Therefore, it is not necessary to get angry so much…'' Saito misunderstood her anger.		''Pardon me. I’m seeing Louise every day. Her sleeping face too. It is love. Aah, master is cute. However, I want you to permit me to look at other girls. It is a man's nature. You cannot fight it even if looking away. Therefore, it is not necessary to get angry so much…'' Saito misunderstood her anger.

	But, he would never say such an excuse aloud. By now, Saito had learned how to deal with Louise.		But, he would never say such an excuse aloud. By now, Saito had learned how to deal with Louise.

Coffeezombie: make into complete sentence

2015-07-06T21:39:19Z

make into complete sentence

← Older revision		Revision as of 21:39, 6 July 2015
Line 438:		Line 438:
	“Tell me, big brother.”		“Tell me, big brother.”

	Louise still called him big brother. In here, Saito pretended to be Louise’s elder brother. No one believed it as everyone in the inn already knew that Louise was a noble, yet she continued calling him ‘Big Brother’ anyway. ~~Really~~ stubborn character.		Louise still called him big brother. In here, Saito pretended to be Louise’s elder brother. No one believed it as everyone in the inn already knew that Louise was a noble, yet she continued calling him ‘Big Brother’ anyway. She had a really stubborn character.

	“What, little sister?”		“What, little sister?”