Talk:Date A Live:Volume 5 Chapter 1

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Suggestion that 'is the law' be changed to 'is lawful' or 'is allowed'. -180.43.16.157 09:52, 18 January 2013 (CST)

Captain Ryouko calls Mikie 'Mike' in this one passage. <Hmm---? Yes~. What’s wrong Mike?> is that how she calls her or is it supposed to be Mikie?

<Westcott realized the gang and moved his eyebrows, and the moment he passed Origami’s side, he placed his hands on his shoulder.> is it supposed to be 'her' shoulder? or did he just put his hand on his own shoulder as he talked to origami?

<That is not the problem, Mister. This is a rule problem within the squads> 'rule problem' sounds awkward and lame. It should be changed to something like disciplinary problem or insubordination issue or something. just my opinion

<Whether or not he realized what Origami's state was going through, after Westcott made a smile, he then accompanied his secretary and walked away.> 'what Origami's state was going though' sounds incredibly weird. It should be changed to something like 'state Origami was going through' --Monsterbandage (talk) 23:42, 19 March 2013 (CDT)

<Although Shidou felt that the zombie modes of the other classmates were above than average but, that was also normal.> this sentence kind of confusing. does he mean there were a greater number of students in zombie mode?

<It was no choice if she were to keep quiet now just like that> does he mean it would be hard to continue if she were to keep quiet... i'm not getting this sentence at all

<she gripped his fist hard and lowered his head a little.> for this part was it shidou who lowered his head or origami? if it was shidou then it should be 'he lowered his head' otherwise the 'his' needs to be a 'her' --Monsterbandage (talk) 00:56, 20 March 2013 (CDT)

1.Ryouko calls her Mike.

2.her shoulders.

3.change it to law within the squad

4. in any case. it is related to Origami's condition. if it fits the sentence then it works.

5. yep there are a lot of students in "zombie mode" but not all. and it is only normal. so its just saying the classroom has a bunch of students half-dead after the exam but it is only natural.

6."It can't be helped if she wants to keep quiet like this"

7. its shidou so change it to he. --RikiNutcase (talk) 01:42, 20 March 2013 (CDT)

thx for confirmation so quickly ^^ --Monsterbandage (talk) 19:01, 20 March 2013 (CDT)

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