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==Daybreak on Hyperion== |
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I like your story, keep up the good work, would love to read more. In the last chapter it got a bit confusing tho, first Keade got shot and then sends a message via telepathy. What has happened in between? How did the other mage get on the roof, and so on ? [[Special:Contributions/93.223.35.150|93.223.35.150]] 04:38, 4 January 2014 (CST) |
I like your story, keep up the good work, would love to read more. In the last chapter it got a bit confusing tho, first Keade got shot and then sends a message via telepathy. What has happened in between? How did the other mage get on the roof, and so on ? [[Special:Contributions/93.223.35.150|93.223.35.150]] 04:38, 4 January 2014 (CST) |
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| + | Thanks. As for what happened, Ariadne implied at the beginning of her part (section 5) that Kaede was faking the unconsciousness. Being the airborne one, she had no problem receiving direct line-of-sight telepathy from Kaede. Because of how fragmented the fight is in ch11, the continuously switching POVs makes it bit hard to read. Sorry about that ^^ - Aorii |
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Rinkan no Madoushi
So far its leaning towards a seinen fantasy story with a female protagonist. :) Stellarroze 14:29, 9 April 2012 (CDT)
can you please do black bullet??--101.99.160.176 05:42, 6 December 2012 (CST)
Daybreak on Hyperion
I like your story, keep up the good work, would love to read more. In the last chapter it got a bit confusing tho, first Keade got shot and then sends a message via telepathy. What has happened in between? How did the other mage get on the roof, and so on ? 93.223.35.150 04:38, 4 January 2014 (CST)
Thanks. As for what happened, Ariadne implied at the beginning of her part (section 5) that Kaede was faking the unconsciousness. Being the airborne one, she had no problem receiving direct line-of-sight telepathy from Kaede. Because of how fragmented the fight is in ch11, the continuously switching POVs makes it bit hard to read. Sorry about that ^^ - Aorii
