I do find myself having significant trouble trying to piece together the overall picture. The immediate environment is described at start, and the descriptions fall in one small piece at a time after that, but I can never seem to paint an overall picture of just what the overall scenery is like, what the MC sees in whole, such and such. It feels like I'm restricted through a rather tight viewing glass, with the rest of the world covered by some hazy fog. Again, this is probably a matter of style and preferences, but just a thought o/
One more thing I'd like to drop is to be careful with the use of capitalization in here. Give that in fantasy, the realm between description terminology and special terminology blurs (this is especially true when adapting more formal styles), and every time a term is capitalized I'm trying to figure out if this is the generic type or something unique to the setting. For example...
It seems to be implying one of multiple ramparts, with only its quality being the highest. So unless 'The Rampart' is a unique name rather than just referring to the 'Skybreaker Rampart' that was just spoken of, it's probably best left not capitalized. It's probably a nitpick, but it left me wondering for a while what specialty 'Rampart' conferred them to, whether to just imagine it as the standard watchtower for now or bestow upon it a more creative outline.Built on the highest Rampart of the Crimson Spires
The same thing happened when I read to 'Dominance' at...
Wondering if that's terminology for a special level of mastery.Most Runesingers do not take apprentices, even after having achieved Dominance in their fields of study.