Editing Kino no Tabi:Volume16 Author's Notes (section)

==Afterword —Preface—==

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"Whoa, I got it! I got it!" (Editorial Department Revision: Starting with dialogue is a good choice.)

At that time, I was deeply moved.

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The white disk broke, right in front of me with a pow.

The shattered disk, fell to pieces, like powdered snow.

I'm sure you've already figured it out (Editorial Department Revision: No, I think the vast majority of people won't understand), but currently, I am clay target shooting.

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That's right.

I, Sigsawa Keiichi, 40 years old, am holding a gun, in Japan, legally. I was issued a license to own.

In March of this year, I went to the police, to a psychiatric hospital, to town hall to provide proof that I wasn't bankrupt, and to the local gun store. Got a ton of paperwork (Editorial Department Revision: Standardize your writing style, please).<ref>Here, Sigsawa used the plain form "-ta" form instead of the more polite "-mashita" form, which he had been using earlier in the afterword, until just now.</ref>

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So now, having obtained a real shotgun, I'm shooting clay targets down, pa pow.

"Down" and "pa pow" rhyme.<ref>The Japanese word for a clay target is "enban," and the sound Sigsawa used was "ban ban"</ref> That's really funny, I think. (Editorial Department Revision: Don't say that about your own writing, please)

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Right now, my skill, is still low.

You know, if I had 5000 yen, for every time, I missed a target with my gun, I'd be a rich man. (Editorial Department Revision: Standardize your style. Also, I don't think young people will get a joke from "Harley ◯ ◯ vidson and The Marlbo◯ ◯  Man") <ref>Here, Sigsawa uses the casual "da ze" to end his sentence. Also, I don't think the whole "if I had a nickel" thing actually originates from that movie.</ref>

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But, I'll polish my skills, and in the future, I'll go to Nationals, and then someday, to the Golympics. (Editorial Department Revision: Either "Go-Rin" or "Olympics," not both)<ref>"Go-Rin" literally means "Five Rings," so it's a common term for the Olympics.</ref>

I don't know what to say, when I, win the gold medal, but it's making me excited. I'm so nervous, I can't focus on my work. (Editorial Department Revision: Please focus. Actually, just focus, without the "please." Also, are you aware of the proverb "counting your chickens before they hatch"?)<ref>The Japanese phrase is "counting tanuki skins you haven't caught."</ref>

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If you're wondering, why I had such a big, change of heart, when I used to think, "I can shoot, overseas, so it's okay, if I can't in Japan," the reason, is that, last year, something big, happened. (Editorial Department Revision: This sentence is too long)

I think the people that read, the last volume of "Meg and Seron," know what I mean. Last year, near the end, of the autumn, I had a huge, injury.

I was very lucky, I had several bone fractures, so I spent several hours, under anesthesia, while they performed surgery, and only a week-long, hospitalization. (Editorial Department Revision: No, your injuries were quite serious)

And so, on the hospital bed, you know, while I ate, the hospital's pudding, it came to my mind. (Editorial Department Revision: Your writing style here suddenly turned way too soft) <ref>Sigsawa uses a lot of filler words that sound childish/girlish here.</ref>

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"In life, one never knows what the future holds. Enjoy life while you have it, and really, what is it that you enjoy?" (Editorial Department Revision: Now it's too stiff) <ref>Here, Sigsawa uses archaic filler particles/conjugations.</ref>

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That's what went, through my mind, as I ate my third pudding (Editorial Department Revision: That's too much).

I thought, "From now on, I'm going to try, lots of things I want to try."

"If I fail, then I fail, but I'm going to stop, assuming I'll fail, before I try."

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It's best, to decide, whether it's impossible, and whether, to continue, or not, after trying.

And, even if you fail, isn't that okay?

As long as, you look, for something new, that's okay.

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I am thinking, about what, my next dream will be, and how to live from now on.

Iesu, ai, keepu, on, doriimingu (Editorial Department Revision: Why English?).<ref>Sigsawa writes this in transliterated English, and the Editor writes in actual Latin characters.</ref>

Thank you, very much, for reading to the end.

Heisei Era 24, November 10th	Sigsawa Keiichi

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P.S.

My dream, of writing an afterword, that's entirely hiragana, has come true.

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P.P.S.

What, is your, dream?

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